Zushikatote Taku dodge as fast as he could, the smell of his burnt coal black hair was still in his nose as yet an other fireball race torward him burning everything in its wake. Taku as he preferred to be called had enough of this running stuff, he was going to fight back. He turned on the stop finally seeing his attacker, he worn a black trench coat that covered most of his body except the top of his extremly bald head. Taku's hands moved in a blur of movement as he form the hand signs for the jutsu his father taught him. He finished the last hand sign and placed his hands to the ground "Water style Water Cannon jutsu" (this is one of the jutsu ive made up for my OC), water from the stream next to the mysterious bald ninja took to form for the front of a cannon made of water. Evidently the ninja didn't hear him or he didn't think it worked because as he prepared for his third and final fireball a high volacity ball of water planted its self directly into the side of his head before exploding violently. Taku didn't see his handy work for whento water ball struck the ninja he took off again. All that he was certain of was that the bald ninja didn't follow him the rest of the way to the village.
Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2013 3:56 pm
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Zushikatote Taku dodge as fast as he could, the smell of his burnt coal black hair was still in his nose as yet an other fireball race torward him burning everything in its wake. Taku as he preferred to be called had enough of this running stuff, he was going to fight back. He turned on the stop finally seeing his attacker, he worn a black trench coat that covered most of his body except the top of his extremly bald head. Taku's hands moved in a blur of movement as he form the hand signs for the jutsu his father taught him. He finished the last hand sign and placed his hands to the ground "Water style Water Cannon jutsu" (this is one of the jutsu ive made up for my OC), water from the stream next to the mysterious bald ninja took to form for the front of a cannon made of water. Evidently the ninja didn't hear him or he didn't think it worked because as he prepared for his third and final fireball a high volacity ball of water planted its self directly into the side of his head before exploding violently. Taku didn't see his handy work for whento water ball struck the ninja he took off again. All that he was certain of was that the bald ninja didn't follow him the rest of the way to the village.
Pass.
Try to divide up spacing in a post more next time though. XD
Yooo!!! glad i made it into the guild ;D now for da next step! note: this is totally unrelated to my character i will actually be RP'ing. i think. ._.
-"CHIN-CHIN!! Come back!' hollered Jimmy, chasing after his pig. Jimmy's pig had run away after his cat had scratched Chin-Chin's nose. This had happened on several occasions before and Jimmy had hoped that Chin-Chin would have learned his lesson by now. Jimmy knew exactly where his pig was going and he raced out after the little baby swine, but not before slipping on a patch of its dung. "OOF!" Jimmy fell face first and looked down to see what he thought at first was mud, but in fact was Chin-Chin's poop. "Wreeeee! Wree Wree!" squealed Chin-Chin. She was about 5 yards away from Jimmy and sitting in her usual spot just squealing at Jimmy's mishap.
Posted: Sat Feb 23, 2013 2:44 pm
AdiMonster
Yooo!!! glad i made it into the guild ;D now for da next step! note: this is totally unrelated to my character i will actually be RP'ing. i think. ._.
-"CHIN-CHIN!! Come back!' hollered Jimmy, chasing after his pig. Jimmy's pig had run away after his cat had scratched Chin-Chin's nose. This had happened on several occasions before and Jimmy had hoped that Chin-Chin would have learned his lesson by now. Jimmy knew exactly where his pig was going and he raced out after the little baby swine, but not before slipping on a patch of its dung. "OOF!" Jimmy fell face first and looked down to see what he thought at first was mud, but in fact was Chin-Chin's poop. "Wreeeee! Wree Wree!" squealed Chin-Chin. She was about 5 yards away from Jimmy and sitting in her usual spot just squealing at Jimmy's mishap.
o.0 Honestly... this is the first of its kind that I have seen lol I don't see any mistakes, and I pass you.
suns rays shine down upon greezn, as he awakens. he slowly begin regain focus on what just happen he begin seeing all the area surrounding him, "where am i"... * look arounds * "what the hell happened" headaches occurs and begin coughing try covering his mouth but notice that half his right hand has been blown off "ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" begin freaking out trying to remain calm but the pain begin hitting him hard as blood drips from his blown off hand.. looking for something to cover it up, he check his back pouch find that he has wraps "this should help me till i get to a nearby medical place" begin wrapping his blown off hand *tightens and twist* *loops and knots* wrapping begin changing color to red as it look bloody "cant perform seals or anything with this one hand what the hell happened..." uses other hand reaches down into his side pocket and pull a little case "this should help me " open it, reveal 3 food pills (green, yellow, and blue) pops the blue pill and begin cracking down on it *crunch crunch* "hope this painkiller last now time to get moving" *look around to see where he at to try get a good view of where he might need to be heading. notice smoke in the sky*0 "that should be my target then" begins walking
Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 9:10 am
Rin stood in the center of the stone floor, facing one of the cold walls. Her stance was relaxed, yet stable, and she held herself as though she were about to throw a disc or something similar. Which wasn’t far off. Her left arm was cocked, curled in front of her, and in her grasp, were 3 shuriken, held even between her fingers.
Grey eyes narrowed, and chakra began to build in her hand, pooling from her center and flowing along her arm. Suddenly, as though some unheard signal had been given, the kunoichi’s arm flashing lightning fast, and as it reached the apex of the throw, the built chakra exploded from her hand, sending the shuriken flying faster than the eye could even see. Three solid “thunks” sounded immediately after, and her mask of concentration melted into a smirk.
For in the cavern wall, all three stars had embedded themselves almost halfway into the rock face. Every day, she trained, and every day, the weapons dug a little further into the stone. This was her favorite ground, for whatever reason, and all the walls were pockmarked with scratches and slices, thin slits where she had pulled her weapons out again.
Wiping the sweat from her brow, her armwraps soaking up the moisture, her long silver braid swished back and forth as she went to retrieve her shuriken, and repeat the process over again.
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Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 1:58 pm
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suns rays shine down upon greezn, as he awakens. he slowly begin regain focus on what just happen he begin seeing all the area surrounding him, "where am i"... * look arounds * "what the hell happened" headaches occurs and begin coughing try covering his mouth but notice that half his right hand has been blown off "ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" begin freaking out trying to remain calm but the pain begin hitting him hard as blood drips from his blown off hand.. looking for something to cover it up, he check his back pouch find that he has wraps "this should help me till i get to a nearby medical place" begin wrapping his blown off hand *tightens and twist* *loops and knots* wrapping begin changing color to red as it look bloody "cant perform seals or anything with this one hand what the hell happened..." uses other hand reaches down into his side pocket and pull a little case "this should help me " open it, reveal 3 food pills (green, yellow, and blue) pops the blue pill and begin cracking down on it *crunch crunch* "hope this painkiller last now time to get moving" *look around to see where he at to try get a good view of where he might need to be heading. notice smoke in the sky*0 "that should be my target then" begins walking
Ok man, you seem to be on the right track, but you're a little off haha. You need to work on your grammar, capitalization mostly. Also, we do not use * or - to signify action, and it needs to be in the third person perspective. Such as when he went for the food pills, it should be more along the lines of:
He opened the case, revealing three pills. Grabbing the blue pill he popped it into his mouth, and could already begin feeling the painkiller taking effect. "This should last long enough for me to get moving." He said to himself.
Do you see what we're looking for?
Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 2:02 pm
KytanaTheThief
Rin stood in the center of the stone floor, facing one of the cold walls. Her stance was relaxed, yet stable, and she held herself as though she were about to throw a disc or something similar. Which wasn’t far off. Her left arm was cocked, curled in front of her, and in her grasp, were 3 shuriken, held even between her fingers.
Grey eyes narrowed, and chakra began to build in her hand, pooling from her center and flowing along her arm. Suddenly, as though some unheard signal had been given, the kunoichi’s arm flashing lightning fast, and as it reached the apex of the throw, the built chakra exploded from her hand, sending the shuriken flying faster than the eye could even see. Three solid “thunks” sounded immediately after, and her mask of concentration melted into a smirk.
For in the cavern wall, all three stars had embedded themselves almost halfway into the rock face. Every day, she trained, and every day, the weapons dug a little further into the stone. This was her favorite ground, for whatever reason, and all the walls were pockmarked with scratches and slices, thin slits where she had pulled her weapons out again.
Wiping the sweat from her brow, her armwraps soaking up the moisture, her long silver braid swished back and forth as she went to retrieve her shuriken, and repeat the process over again.
Looks pretty good.
By the way, are you in the DnD guild? Your avatar looks familiar.
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Posted: Mon Mar 11, 2013 2:11 pm
Haha, yes, I am, have been since '10, roughly. Don't join too many campaigns anymore, though; they die off too quickly >>
I recognize your name; didn't realize you were crew here lol.
Posted: Fri Mar 22, 2013 6:29 pm
Seji woke up with a loud yawn. Rising from his bed, he scratched at the base of his feathered black hair, blinking his eyes into focus. He had never been a morning person and his drowsiness was known to stick with him for hours. With another softer yawn he glanced over to the clock to see how long he would have to make breakfast. The moment his eyes met the timepiece's ticking hands, his stomach clenched and a cold feeling creeped up his spine. He was late! Snatching his old clothes from the day before off the floor, he scrambled down the stairs. He had made it to the door without seriously harming himself, though one bump had already started to bruise, but he was clothed. Running out the door, he called back to his parents, "No time for food, I'm already late. I'll see you at the ceremony!"
Seji woke up with a loud yawn. Rising from his bed, he scratched at the base of his feathered black hair, blinking his eyes into focus. He had never been a morning person and his drowsiness was known to stick with him for hours. With another softer yawn he glanced over to the clock to see how long he would have to make breakfast. The moment his eyes met the timepiece's ticking hands, his stomach clenched and a cold feeling creeped up his spine. He was late! Snatching his old clothes from the day before off the floor, he scrambled down the stairs. He had made it to the door without seriously harming himself, though one bump had already started to bruise, but he was clothed. Running out the door, he called back to his parents, "No time for food, I'm already late. I'll see you at the ceremony!"
Pass.
Posted: Tue Dec 17, 2013 3:55 am
Hello. emotion_kirakira Thank you for the accept. I hope this is okay.
"Kana! Why haven't you left yet?!" A thunderous voice ricocheted off the walls of the marginally small house. Kana was jolted from her sleep, having convinced herself that she had witnessed a small earthquake. She leapt from her bed and darted for the closet, determined not to fall victim to her mother's fury. She sloughed off her nightclothes and replaced them with her usual attire before disappearing into the confines of the bathroom. "My first day meeting my new team and I'm late! How could this happen? I didn't even hear my alarm go off!" Kana thought to herself, whilst dragging her toothbrush through her hair. She growled at her mistake and took the small brush out of her hair.
When Kana finally emerged from the bathroom looking less than presentable with her hair severely pulled back from her face. She bustled back into her room to attached her shuriken thigh holster and glimpsed the little clock by her bed. Kana stopped in her tracks. Her hands clenched and unclenched nervously. Kana stormed down the hall toward the kitchen.
"KAA-SAN!! I am not late! I'm early!" her voice was shrill, her expression was that of exasperation. Kana's mother was seated at the dining table calmly sorting through a large stack of papers, her expression was passive as she gazed at her daughter. "I didn't say you were late. I asked 'why haven't you left yet?'." A smile crept across her lips. "The correct answer would be, 'Because I still have time, mother'." The smile grew wider until pearly white teeth shone in the morning light. Kana stood still, her only movement was the exaggerated inhale and exhale of oxygen. Of course her mother had finished her work early, and of course she wanted to play a prank on her only daughter. It was plausible and she had felt for it completely. Kana turned to slump away, but was stopped by her mother's calloused hand holding her back. Her mother's hand shook with soft laughter and, despite being drained by this morning's escapade, Kana couldn't help but smile. "Come here. I'll fix your hair."
OCC: Hahaha, um. I might've gotten carried away. Sorry. I hope this is still okay. Sometimes I have trouble making paragraphs. sweatdrop
yo, I haven't made a RPC yet but when I do his name will be Jak Strider
RP Sample
Jak slightly opens his eyes and is quickly blinded by then suns rays. Jak would then roll over in bed trying to block the rays of the sun from his eyes when he suddenly remembered it wasn't the weekend. He would then throw the covers off of him and jump out of his bed landing on the cold floor. He would then quickly walk over to his closet and grab hi normal clothes that he goes to school in and throws them on the bed and quickly starts taking off his PJs, and replaces them with his school clothes. He then walks over to his dresser and grabs his ninja pouch that was on top of it and would wrap it around his right leg. He didn't have any tools in it yet but he thought it made him look cool. Jak would then run out of his room and feel his foot hit something on the way out. He then heard a whistling sound and his reflexes took hold as he jumped back to see three kunai land in the spot he was standing. Jak would then hear someone clapping and turn to see his grandpa was the one clapping. "not to shabby, but your going to be late for school if you don hurt." Jaks grandpa would say with a grin on his fac. Jak didn't have time to argue as he ran to his houses window and slid it open and jumped out, heading for school. (sorry if its long I got caught up in the moment)
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