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 Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 10:38 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 10:40 pm
WylrPnufh l-Kathulu-l wtfhax. Wylr tagged himself in like, 20 of my facebook pics. And somehow I tagged myself in a few as well
No dude, I tagged myself in like... 2
I tagged you in like... 20
As random s**t like.. Arceus. and... A Gorilla's n****e... and.... A cutout of a black guy
BUT THEN YOU WERE A d**k AND DELETED THEM.SO YOU ADMIT IT HA. and oh god im gonna go to sleep and wake up dead tagged
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:00 pm
RIP Kath
Gonna go play Monster Hunter Tri! 4laugh
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:03 pm
Lol, have fun. Tomorrow I might be able to join you. I borrowed a Wii, and I'm gonna rent MH tomorrow on my way home.
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problematic briefcase Crew
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:08 pm
blaugh
Poem with some parts taken out, words changed, and I was able to fit them into lyrics for the song I've been working on for a bit.
Chorus is a bit dull, I plan on shortening it. >:3 But still, I feel happy, because I LIKE it.
They aren't kidding when they say that you are your biggest critic.
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:12 pm
Want some help/criticism? I always thought I was decent in poetry
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problematic briefcase Crew
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:24 pm
l-Kathulu-l Want some help/criticism? I always thought I was decent in poetry
Mah, you kinda already gave your critic on the poem. I think it was something about going all over town. >:3 It's the one in my birthday thread. I sort of just took some things out to shorten it a bit.Quote:
Verse 1
I want to paint a picture of you
Using only the color black
Absence of color to say
What it is I think you lack
Your heart is missing
Your hate ******** off slut." I heard you say
I started running, you turned away
then I started to crawl back
You grew soon to hate my voice
cringe when I begin to talk
The best that I can do for you
Without cutting out my heart
Chorus 1
Infect your mind, you can't leave me
I'll never let you go
You couldn't make me any better
so you just made me much worse
So you say, that you hate me
I'll find the good in you
even if you die inside
Verse 2
Despise me when I walk with you
Disgust for when I choose to wait
Spite me for being me
Hate me for being fake
I can never please you can I
without losing me
What is it you want from me
Are you happy if I die?
[insert 3/3 of 2nd Verse]
Chorus 2
I'm a failure in your eyes
Everything I do is wrong
I know that you depend on me
You can't get rid of me for long
even if you hide
I'll find you and love you
even if you die inside
It's a bit weird. I KNOW it's in e female perspective, but I sing it in a deeper voice, and intentionally go off key = raspy voice, for the fourth line of every section of the verse. Oh well, I still like it.
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:34 pm
Hmm, interesting. I could talk about music forever, so anything related to it I'll be all over it. To me, each stanza in music should have 4 lines. So when I see 5 or 6 it throws me off. Then again, I don't know how the chorus goes or melodies. I'd even get into the key of the song and instrumentation. I'm music like that, lol. I like how the story works, when you add the 3rd stanza to the second verse you could either add on more, or just ******** it up more.
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:37 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 21, 2010 11:44 pm
l-Kathulu-l Hmm, interesting. I could talk about music forever, so anything related to it I'll be all over it. To me, each stanza in music should have 4 lines. So when I see 5 or 6 it throws me off. Then again, I don't know how the chorus goes or melodies. I'd even get into the key of the song and instrumentation. I'm music like that, lol. I like how the story works, when you add the 3rd stanza to the second verse you could either add on more, or just ******** it up more.
-nod-
The second stanza is kinda messed. p: It fits like the first, I just made a new sentence. xD It can be fixed.
Uhm, hard to describe how the music goes. o 3o It's six different chords, really eight as I hammer on from Em to Emadd9 and something else. Chorus is four barre chords, while the last line of the chorus has two different chords.
So three chords for two lines = six for each stanza.
For the third stanza of the second verse, I'm not too sure if I DO want to keep in line, or add in an extra stanza, so from three to four for verse 2.
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problematic briefcase Crew
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:17 am
Gotta... EAT...SOMETHING... evil
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:27 am
D:
*hides*
*waves to Zeph* c:
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:30 am
Hobo Scruffy D:
*hides*
*waves to Zeph* c: *waves back* J, are you all right?
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:34 am
Zephyrkitty Hobo Scruffy D:
*hides*
*waves to Zeph* c: *waves back* J, are you all right? I... HAVE TO FEED.
DONT GET BLOOD ON MY DRESS. evil
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:38 am
J of The Wind Zephyrkitty Hobo Scruffy D:
*hides*
*waves to Zeph* c: *waves back* J, are you all right? I... HAVE TO FEED.
DONT GET BLOOD ON MY DRESS. evil *points to refrigerator*
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