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 Posted: Fri Sep 30, 2005 12:55 pm
Gooboo142 I've decided to post some of my poetry here so you guys can read it if you want and so that i have somewhere to put it. I just got out of a writers block so if you have any suggestions it would be appreciated. smile UntitledThe piano plays quietly Filling up the background As the world around Plays to its soothing beats People talking amongst themselves As their heart beats to the song Rhythm flowing throw their veins Living out their own separate song Songs filled with passion Some containing joy While others scream of sorrow Or of pure fear and secret The music of the piano Mixed with new faces and adventure Brings in a false sense of hope A blanket against the reality The night filled with chances Some to be taken While others are to be forgotten Leading us down a path of sadness and regret New found lovers Become mere faces in the crowd Or long lost enemies Turn into lasting friendships Then the piano man starts to end As he plays his one last song Each note telling its story Where an old one ends a new one begins The building gets cleared As the sound dies down Dwindling away in the emptiness Only to welcome another nights tale Another Untitled one: Lying down On the grass Watching the world Quietly pass Time ticking Without a care In a world With nothing to bare A cool wind Whistling by Sending a cold shiver Down my spine Birds chirping Singing loud Flying high Over the clouds Sun shining Overhead As I fall asleep On this green grassy bed Dreaming of nothing Leaving no trace Of being here In this lonely place Feiry_Phoenix13 wow, that's really good. I can't do poems, so I'm a little jealous. Gooboo142 Thanks ^_^ I have more on the way, only problem is Im suffering from writers block. alianorastar When I have writer's block I just put on some soothing music (Usually the soundtrack to the TV show Twin Peaks. Fabulous mood music.) and read other people's writings. Somehow reading what other people write gets me going again. RebelNovelist Wow, nice poems smile I'd offer some advice on getting over writer's block, but I've never had a problem with it, and I've been writing for years. I guess maybe some music could help, though. Try that. Gooboo142 Thanks both of you. I will try the music thing to somtime.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 10:49 am
The Dark City,
The sun has set,
The night swallowing the city,
The houses that once had light, were now somber,
The street lights dimmed,
The plants, trees, bushes invisible,
Wind drifting through the city,
Not only was the city dark, but it had a spectral look,
Everything still and tranquil...
The Dark City
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 1:17 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:48 pm
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 11:36 am
NizukaSalem DECEIVED
It was hate you whispered in my ear,
Disguised as love to vanish in a tear.
It was poison I tasted in your kiss,
Masked as passion in your mist.
A disease you gave me hidden in your touch,
The magic sensation I craved so much.
It was a curse you bit into my neck,
Hidden as pleasure to call at beck.
Scars are what you scratched into my skin;
Still I followed your deceiving sin.
I never meant to add more pain,
That?s fine I?ll just scratch another vein.
Now watch me lay dieing in the sand,
Who will still my betraying hands?
They call to me covered in blood,
Screaming your name; I wait for the flood?
You gave me love. Sweet_Forgotten That's really cool and beautiful in a way. I like it to. Akiralta It's a nice poem, but the rhyme seems a little forced. Maybe you should try not rhyming? A like what the poem says, though. Wonderful imagery. alianorastar While the sentiment isn't really my thing, I like the rhythm of the poem. It flows well, though I do agree with the person above about the rhyming. I usually don't enjoy rhyming poetry because it feels forced frequently. One suggestion: you might want to consider if you meant "mist" in the fourth line or actually "midst." I think the word "midst" might work better. Ryenon Beautiful crying I thnk the rhymes were seriously forced, but it still flows biggrin great job! ShanksesLilDevil Wow... that was awesome... I'm in love... ur really good.
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 11:45 am
NizukaSalem DISAPPEAR
I?m in the mood to leave it all behind.
All the sanity has left my mind.
This wall of crystal has enclosed me;
And now I am consumed.
I do not see how I can resume.
I?d spell out all my heart,
But I?m trapped in the dark.
Somebody take this pain,
Or I fear I?ll go insane.
Oh, please just take this pain away,
So I can put my death at bay.
I need to lick my wounds,
To stall my final doom.
My time has come it?s now or never,
Please still my hand so I won?t sever.
I won?t be able to fix this call,
My body will soon fall,
And these walls will disappear.
Only time will heal this sorrow,
Disputing how I will see tomorrow.
In life or death, tell me this,
I stayed for one last kiss. Tosho maiko - san That was so awsome. i really can relate to it Rainy Zero It keeps on flowing, nice. Ryenon Very good, I liked the rhyming! The stanza's could flow a little better, but over all it was great ShanksesLilDevil Wow... thats awesome... Good Job. biggrin Haha I like it. ShanksesLilDevil ShanksesLilDevil Wow... thats awesome... Good Job. biggrin Haha I like it.
I still think it's good.
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 11:57 am
Invisible, is what I am,
People pass by without a single glance,
I stare out my window,
The publicity, my foe,
Can one single touch change it all?
Or will one single touch make me fall?
Either I'm invisble,
Or not there at all....
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Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 12:22 pm
Tears
One million tears I've cried,
I feel dead inside,
No one there...
No one there to care,
Many depressing deaths,
Inside, they are kept,
Too deep...
Drowning out my screams,
The Tears,
My Fear
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Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 3:48 am
This is a sonnet, or maybe, like, a song.
I sat there and I waited for a chance.
You caught me at first glance.
I'm only going to let this wait 'til Saturday.
Then I'll take my opportunity.
I can only wait so long.
This is where I must belong.
I sat next to you and saw you there,
I can't waste another chance.
I can only say through tried and true,
And black and blue,
I can only see that I love you,
And this is why I'm waiting for Saturday.
I'm waiting for Saturday,
I'm waiting for Saturday,
I can't stand it no longer,
I can't go on without you,
So I'm waiting for Saturday.
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Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 4:13 pm
Is this any good? It's called Fallen Angel.
When you look at me
You see who I pretend to be
You look in to my eyes
But don't see the real me that's inside
Hollow and empty is the way you make me feel
Will I ever find the person who makes life seem real
Somewhere along the way
I forgot what I was so sure of
Now I can't even remember what it is
Feels like I'm wasting away
In a life I'm so unsure of
But that's just the way life is
Have you ever met a fallen angel
Who came down from the stars
Sometimes I feel like a fallen angel
Wondering where you are
There are times when I realize
Just what I want out of life
Then I think of you
And wonder if these dreams will ever come true
Somewhere down the line
If we meet again somewhere in time
I'll show the things I've kept inside
Everything I used to hide
Though nothing ever stays the same
The way I feel will never change
I know there are things you keep inside
If only I could see into your eyes
And see the part of you others don't see
See through what you pretend to be
I've met a fallen angel
Who came down from the stars
Sometimes I feel like a fallen angel
Wondering where you are
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:30 am
I don't read whole poems, but yours looked pretty good. The second rhyme seemed a bit forced, but it was for good or for awesome all the way.
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:12 pm
Trapped
I once was free,
Now trapped between life or death,
Things that used to be visible, I cannot see,
Oh, how badly I'm beginning to fret,
My childish fears forced upon me,
Writhing in my trap,
Sobbing and screaming,
Everything fading to black,
Then I realize, I am forever trapped
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Posted: Wed Oct 05, 2005 4:09 am
Ooh! That was a good 'un.
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Posted: Wed Oct 05, 2005 6:29 am
Jehosaphat Ooh! That was a good 'un.
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Posted: Wed Oct 05, 2005 6:31 am
My Nightmare
Running down an endless hallway,
Only to find that it leads to darkness,
The next thing I know, I'm falling,
Deeper and deeper and deeper..
Whispers are heard while I fall,
I yell for help, but no one answers,
Alone, I am, falling for eternity,
I yell louder, but silence is all that I hear,
Fear suffocating me, giving me no air,
My Nightmare
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