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 Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2011 7:01 pm
Suit of armor has no weakness that someone with the mental capacity of a grade schooler can find BAM broken.
Bones are beneath skin, which I have quite obviously stated the gloves does not affect BAM fixed.
Gloves can't pulse chakra to coat the surface of an elastic object because it moves BAM fixed.
Barriers make it so that my character who is unable to use jutsu except for univerasal ninjutsu unable to combat the opponent. BAM Broken
Not for one post, for the entirety that he wears the gloves. If he happens to fall asleep in them, he can't recharge his chakra, because the gloves keep sapping it, and destroying bits of dirt, or anything solid that the gloves affect, that he just happens to touch. BAM, Broken on my part. Besides, where did I say that It was for a single post?
Please Deil, in the future don't do the BAM thing, it atleast to me makes you seem childish. I get what it was for, But you are misunderstanding their abilities. It can not break a living thing. It can not destroy bone, since bone is actually quite squishy. It is hardness with a squishy layer inside, I've poked my marrow before, it was actually quite a fun experience.
@ Havik
No, because it can't affect them due to the glove's nature. If you slap jello with a wet rag, what happens? The jello breaks. Therefore, the water in the rag isn't what harmed the jello, it is the impact from the rag. The gloves wouldn't function on soft things because it wouldn't be necessary. I'm meaning on a literal level, The gloves crumble the object. The crumbles are then crumbled even more, and so on and so forth, until the atomic level, then they are split into atoms. It is a chain reaction of chakra surging into an object.
Not really, So it is perfectly fine for a Hyuuga to just hit you with a palm and cause ungodly amounts of internal damage with less than 24 chakra, but I can't destroy a simple barrier at the cost of becoming unable to use my own chakra? I guess that all Hyuuga's are required to have chakra control so they can do their little pinpricks of chakra to attack the Tenketsu.
It isn't augmenting the punch, it is literally attacking the object itself. Nothing adds force to his punch, it is his punch that squeezes the chakra out of the gloves like a rag squeezed of water.
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Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2011 7:07 pm
You know... I just realised that I'm not going to be able to get this passed, since I can never get my point across. I've had that problem all my life, and it isn't going to change. I'm clinically insane, so the way my mind works no one else I have EVER met in the world understands. I'm just going to ask that you deny me, and I'll be on my merry little way. Who knows, I might check myself into the hospital, Or I might just end myself. Living without people understanding you is hell. Honestly, living where people think you're insane because you can't even get the point that "The Dog crossed the Road. " Is terrible. I bid you all farwell, I might come back tomorrow, I might not. If I don't, just assume i ended myself, and remove me from the lists please. O remove me for this, I don't really care. atleast one point in my life will be understood by someone with a grasp of reality.
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Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2011 7:32 pm
Cobra_X -X Duo Yiro X- Special Properties/Abilites: Shinado's Rage: When the user of this weapon is on his/her last leg, he raises his sword in front of him and says "Shinado's Rage", activating a fury of cuts and slashes that last for 5 post while decreasing the stamina loss by half. Rp Sample: I think the ability is pretty self-explanatory.
Are you slashing your opponent?... are you slashing yourself?... does this give you a bonus of some kind?
...what does it mean for slashes to last for five posts (which by the way, is a LONG time for something to last)
...and what does it mean to decrease the stamina cost?... Stamina cost of what? using a technique... or taking cuts and slashes?
Please clarify this in detail.-X Duo Yiro X- Name of Weapon: Dagger Who Owns the Weapon: Goruko Shinado Father's Blessing: When using the dagger, if the user comes to a point where the user has to escape, the dagger's ability is able to cloak the user for three post, while stumping scouts up to Chuunin rank.
I would also note that this needs a cost, as does your previous submission's ability.
Also, the description seems to indicate this is an escape only tactic, so I would ask that rules be put in place on it's use to avoid allowing the user to utilize the blade to gain the upper hand on an opponent.Quote: 1.) I see your point and I agree that I could of clarified it a bit better. Will this work? Shinado's Rage: When the wielder of this weapon is low on stamina, he or she extends the blade forward, reaching it's maximum attack range and says "Shindao's Rage". Converting Chakra into stamina he user then feels a surge of energy and begins hacking and slashing very precisely, lasting for 15 seconds (1, 2, or 3 post?). The user then gains two times as much stamina from the chakra cost. So basically: Cost -2 Chakra = Receive 4 Stamina; and so forth. *Cost 4 Chakra to use. *Can only put an additional 8 Chakra points into the blade at one time. 2.) I'm really not sure, I'll leave that up to you. I wanted to keep it sort of 'small' since the weapon itself has no real effectiveness in battles. As to the rule insert, that's fine, but I do also want to ask, to clarify, because I see it coming and I want to be completely sure that it's ok. Seeing that it says 'user' and not a specific name, will I be allowed to hand it to someone else to escape? Basically stating, is the ability only for me, or can it be for others as well? As for the cost, how does -2 Chakra per post? Another question, what if I increase the chakra cost to -4 and allow it to continue on until one's chakra is gone. It seems kind of OP, but then again it's very taxing, so if caught, your practically dead. Just some minor edits that I saw that might make it a little more useful.
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Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2011 10:33 pm
I understood you fine, and denied you because effecting something on a atomic level is not getting passed through, not easily anyway. That, and you don't seem to have a grip on the idea of breaking something down in that manner would work.
You wanted a second opinion Deil gave it, and seems to agree with it being denied.
Augmenting a punch, + your rpc's strength rank will pretty much give you the ability to punch through walls, and other defense jutsu, which seems to be all you want, you just went about it in a complex way you don't fully understand, and you were denied because of it.
There are plenty of other way to give your Rpc the ability to take out defense jutsu, even with out a custom weapon. This idea however, is a bust. I am sorry, and hope you can come up with something more defined, and well thought out.
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Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 5:55 am
-X Duo Yiro X- 1.) I see your point and I agree that I could of clarified it a bit better. Will this work? Shinado's Rage: When the wielder of this weapon is low on stamina, he or she extends the blade forward, reaching it's maximum attack range and says "Shindao's Rage". Converting Chakra into stamina he user then feels a surge of energy and begins hacking and slashing very precisely, lasting for 15 seconds (1, 2, or 3 post?). The user then gains two times as much stamina from the chakra cost. So basically: Cost -2 Chakra = Receive 4 Stamina; and so forth. *Cost 4 Chakra to use. *Can only put an additional 8 Chakra points into the blade at one time.
If I were to allow such a thing, I would have to consider it for everyone, but in the case of a Samurai Class user, it would become VASTLY overpowered, as the cycle you stated above would lead to infinite energy.
So, sorry... but I'm denying anything that lets you convert chakra to Stamina. (Also, it makes no sense that a flurry of blows would INCREASE your stamina... especially one lasting several posts)-X Duo Yiro X- 2.) I'm really not sure, I'll leave that up to you. I wanted to keep it sort of 'small' since the weapon itself has no real effectiveness in battles. As to the rule insert, that's fine, but I do also want to ask, to clarify, because I see it coming and I want to be completely sure that it's ok. Seeing that it says 'user' and not a specific name, will I be allowed to hand it to someone else to escape? Basically stating, is the ability only for me, or can it be for others as well? As for the cost, how does -2 Chakra per post? Another question, what if I increase the chakra cost to -4 and allow it to continue on until one's chakra is gone. It seems kind of OP, but then again it's very taxing, so if caught, your practically dead. Just some minor edits that I saw that might make it a little more useful.
As to handing it to someone else, I suppose it could work, as long as you instructed them as to how to use it...
And sure, the cost seems fine, but no to increasing the cost to make it last longer. It has to have a maximum post length and a cooldown effect.
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Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 6:41 pm
Name of Weapon: Sand Breakthrough
Who Owns the Weapon: Dogou Teikiatsu
Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? Found in an underground cavern that flooded with water in the desert known as the Land of Wind, Dogou's Uncle, who left sunagakure to find the treasures of the world gave these to him on the condition he only use them when absolutely necessary, inorder to preserv them as well as they could possibly be preserved.
Range: Fist range
Weakness: Unable to affect anything not earthy, such as water, fire, metal, or anything desides dirt, stone, and wood.
Unable to directly affect the human body.
Absorbs the user's chakra except for one point when worn, and if slept in, causes chakra and stamina to not regenerate due to the constant drain it places on the body.
Any trauma to the gaunltels, not caused by the wearer harms the gauntlets, if they are damaged 20 times without using the Sand reform technique, then they will break, and will be unable to use the sand reform technique to repair themselves.
They are unable to tell their owner from anyone else, and can be used against their owner if taken from him.
Drains all but one point of chakra from the user, this process takes 5 stamina from the user, and goes up by five every rank. ( I.e. genin takes 5, chunnin takes 10, and so forth. )
Weapon Description: The gauntlets consist of a metal peice, about two inches thick that covers the back of the hand, going lightly over the knuckles. The part on the knuckles is only an inch thick, but the excess is placed ontop of the knuckles themselves, and form spikes for greater damage when they contact a body. The back of the gauntlet is covered with etchings and marking, apparetly made by the nomadic tribe that archeologists have found remnants of scattered around the land of Wind. The etchings are incomprehensible, but symbols still used today are found. One is a symbol for chakra, although very very different. it is a combination of the symbol for chakra, and the symbol for magic. The gauntlet is held on by three leather straps, one over the fingers, just below the knuckels to make sure the gloves don't bend away from the fingers, and two cross hatching on the hand, making the gloes resistant to slipping off of the hand. The straps are made of a stretchable fiber, that once on the hand hardens to a leather type consistency, and tightens to the shape of the hand, causing it to be nearly unremovable. The straps are also adorned with an array of symbols, and metal studs connecting to the skin with small needle p***k spikes that attach somehow to the tenketsu of the palm. this is how the gauntlets take the chakra from the body, and use it for their technique.
Special Properties/Abilites:
Sand Blast Conversion -
The chakra within the Gauntlet surges into an inanimate object and breaks it down into small peices, much like sand. The force of the punch then forces the grains of the newly destroyed object at the speed of a sand blaster directly in a straight line for three feet, and in a declining line that reaches about one foot after that, finishing in a line of sand. The force of this blast is enough to rip small amounts of flesh from the body at point blank range ( One foot behind the barrier, but who after making the barrier stands there? ), capable of popping eyes and giving the equivalent of bad road rash at medium range ( two feet ), and capable of giving a painful rash equal to that of placing a sander on your skin for two seconds with a pressure of about one kilogram. Any distance beyond that you get rug burn, which is painful, but not beyond ignoring. This ability is only obtainable by the gauntlets making contact with the object.
Sand Reform -
By using Satetsu, the gloves can repair themselves, but at the cost of 50 chakra, and 50 stamina. The gloves can not be worn to enact this effect. This property only furthers the thought that the Tribe that used this item thought chakra as nothing more than magic. The satetsu must be natural, and can not have ever once been manipulated, nor infused with chakra. The etchings on the back of the gauntlet will have to be redone by someone who can scribe seals, and can veiw the original seal that was on the gauntlet. If for any reason the seal isn't perfectly recreated, then the gauntlets will themselves turn to sand and force themselves in a spread formation at the wearer, likely causing the loss of a limb, possibly even death.
Rp Sample:
Dogou stood there, breathing heavily as his opponent shook vigerously, obviously afraid of the power he was facing. Dogou had taken a severe beating of doton jutsu, which should have left him a bloody mess. " It isn't kind to attempt to harm someone else's village without a proper reason. " Dogou said, standing to his full height of 3 meters, He was a full grown adult, and as such he wasn't going to let someone just attack his village. Dogou began running at his opponent, his long strides closing the gap quickly between him and his opponent. He stood above his opponent faster than the chunnin could think. The chunnin thinking quickly crouched down and made some handsigns, covering his head and yelling the name of a jutsu, the earth around him created a dome of rock. Dogou's gauntlet clad fist hit the appex of the dome, directly above the chunnin's head. Suddenly the dome dispersed into tiny granulets that hung suspended in the air for a second, then shot downwards with tremendous speed, rending the flesh from the first foot of the boy's body, and horribly scratching the rest of it. Dogou stood up to his full height and attempted to turn, stumbling and cursing as he looked at his foot that had been ontop of the dome when his fist had connected. The shoe was destroyed, and the foot had terrible road rash, and was bleeding quite well. dogou cursed his stupidity, he should have remembered to not place any part of his body on the barrier he had attempted to destroy. Dogou laid on the sand, elevating his injured foot that he had wrapped in his shirt after using a fourth of his canteen's water to clean. He sighed and shook his head thinking to himself until help arrived.
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Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 7:19 pm
This weapon is a remake of your last weapon, with the addition of sand. So it is denied, for the following reasons.
1. Suna is not a cave, so "found deep in Suna" does not make sense.
2. Incorporeal refers to things like mist, smoke, or the hazy images that make up what people call "ghosts". Things like water, cloth, and other soft, flimsy items are still corporeal, so that would need to be taken out of your description since it is wrong. Simple saying "The ability of the gloves is only activated by solid objects." Would suffice, and be easier to understand.
3. All your chakra but one is drained away, fine, but how many time after that can you activate the gloves? What is the cost for USING the ability.
4. This give you the ability to auto destroy to many things, creating a light saber type weapon, which is not aloud. Yes you are drained of chakra, but as a taijutsu Rpc with no element, that is not a big draw back for you, and it give you the ability to destroy defense jutsu which cost chakra, and stam, and you only pay chakra, that is broken.
5. Your back story about the nomadic tribe doesn't really make sense. Before the 5 path sage appeared chakra had never been tapped into, so a nomadic tribe that existed before ninja would not have been able to forge such a weapon. Also, some one just giving that weapon away... Not likely.
The main reason this is rejected is because it is a simple remake of the weapon that was just denied, and for many of the same reasons. A weapon that auto breaks down things will not be aloud, the "No light saber rule" covers that.
There are several other routes you can take for being able to break down defenses, I suggest you explore a alternative because if you re summit the same basic weapon design, I am afraid it will be rejected.
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Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 7:35 pm
Lance Fulgurant (Couldn't really find a good image) Name of Weapon: Woe
Who Owns the Weapon: Atsureki Hyuuga
Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? In the center of a small village found in the land of Water, there grew a Great Yew Tree which the villager's believed housed a spirit of bounty. As years passed and the villager's left offerings at the base of the tree, the village prospered, and the villager's grew wealthy from the bounty. But it did not take long for others to covet this wealth. In the dead of night, a group of bandits attacked the village, hoping to steal the wealth that the villagers had worked so hard for. But no matter where they looked they could not find the wealth of the small village.
Infuriated, the bandits rounded the villagers that they had not slaughtered to the center of the village and tied them to the trunk of the tree. They threatened the villagers with death if they did not give them the gold that they sought. But what the bandits did not know is that the villagers had offered much of the bounty of their harvest to the tree of Yew, and the spirit which had blessed them. When the villagers tried to explain this, the leader of the bandits howled with rage before taking a torch and throwing it into the boughs of the tree, setting the whole tree ablaze, along with the villagers that were tied to it. As the anguished screams of the villagers filled the air, the spirit which dwelt within the tree became a twisted perversion of what it once was.
Though the tree was a charred skeleton of what it once was, the spirit within lived on, dreaming of the day it could take its revenge upon those that had tainted it. Years passed, and the village remained abandoned, the taint of the Yew driving away any that thought to bring prosperity to the land once more. And then the day came when a young hunter happened upon the tree, its charred remains strangely hypnotizing to the man. Seeing its opportunity, the spirit reached out to the man, promising to make him the most renowned shot in all the world if he would help the spirit in its quest for revenge. The man agreed happily, and before his very eyes a single charred branch began to shift and take a new form.
A bow, black as night, a great eye carved just above the grip, the anguished faces of the murdered villagers carve into its lower limb, and five smaller eyes dotting its upper limb. Taking the bow in his hands, the man heard the voice of the spirit once more, this time resonating from the bow itself. "I am Suffering and Despair, Affliction and Torment,, the spirit cried within the man's mind, its words filled with venomous hate, "I am Woe, and I shall see the ones who made me suffer, as I have suffered!"Though it has been many centuries since Woe's creation, stories of those that have wielded it can be heard in almost any of the great nations. Though its whereabouts are yet unknown, Woe is no doubt in the hands of another, promised glory in return for the revenge Woe still craves.
Range: Base maximum range of 200 feet, roughly 66 yds
Weakness: Having an intelligence of its own, Woe can feel emotions, and one of the strongest of its emotions is Fear.
[Fear]: Woe has an uncontrollable fear of fire, and will refuse to allow its wielder to utilize any of its abilities, drawn from the kenjutsu style The Cry of Anguished Souls, if within thirty feet of an open flame. In addition if Woe is near a flame, it will scream within its wielders head. While this is simply annoying out of combat, this can be detrimentally distracting in combat (wielder suffers a -1 to evasion until at least thirty feet away from the flame).
Weapon Description: A bow of blackened yew, a great eye carved just above the grip, the anguished faces of the murdered villagers carved into its lower limb, and dozens of smaller eyes dotting its upper limb. The bow is a Yumi bow, so it is quite large compared to western bows, with a length of roughly 6 and a half feet.
Special Properties/Abilites: Aside from granting access to the Kenjutsu Style The Cry of Anguished Souls, Woe has an innate ability to draw upon the power of one of its most powerful emotions, Hate.
[Hate]: Though the bandits which tainted Woe are long dead, Woe will sometimes mistake those which threaten it as one of those it swore revenge upon.
(At the beginning of combat, the wielder of Woe will roll a D10 for each opponent, each roll corresponding to a specific opponent, chosen before the roll is made. If a 1 or a 10 is rolled for an opponent, that target will become a target of Woe's ire, increasing the power of any technique from the style The Cry of Anguished Souls used against that opponent by 1 rank for the duration of combat.)
Rp Sample: (most of Woes abilities will come from the Kenjutsu style, so do I still need to do this? )
reposting, not sure if it ever got looked at
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 3:10 pm
 Name of Weapon:Yukai Kamereon Yaiba (Phantom Chameleon blade) Who Owns the Weapon: Nero Hyouton Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? There was once a ninja, who had techniques of every element. He could bring forth any element at will, and was seen as one of the most dangerous opponents one could ever face. He had chakra of each element stored in the hilt for future use in combat, but was ambushed while meditating by a pond. Rather than simply falling into the water and being lost, the elemental chakra's in the blade, unable to be controlled at once without a user, reacted, combusting in the pond, releasing a powerful wave of elemental chakra, wiping out all life in the small pond, including algae, fish, and any other life in the pond. Because of this, the water in the pond was turned eerily clear, and the sword, while visible from the top of the pond due to the clearness, was never moved, or touched, as the pond was in such a remote area. It was found by Nero, who got lost and wandered off to where the pond was by accident on a rainy day. He realized there was a larger body of water, and simply followed it, hoping to find the source, hoping to find life, but ironically, was led offtrack by a current jutting out from the pond. The current was blocked from reaching the pond by rocks, so only very small amounts of water leaked into the lake. Nero saw it, and found the sword at the bottom. Range: 3 feet (39 inches) Weakness: The hilt is able to store chakra based on the user's abilities. Each element has a weakness, and therefore the blade itself shares that same weakness. Any Katon technique capable of dehydrating anything, upon making contact with the blade, will disable the blades use of any chakra, if the Kamereon is weilded by a Suiton user. In addition to this, should the blade take damage from 3 ninjutsu/kenjutsu 2 ranks higher than the user, the blade will break (though the blade is replaceable). If the user is a jounin or higher, damage from 3 S rank ninjutsu/kenjutsu/taijutsu will break it. In addition to all of this, the blade makes use of the users chakra to work properly. Should the user not channel any chakra through the weapon for 10 posts, the blade will simply reject the users chakra completely until the user puts 30 points of chakra into it. So if the user does not use chakra for 10 posts in a fight, and only has 10 chakra left, the user will be unable to use the blade, as they will not have the required chakra to re-activate it. This blade however will only accept stable chakra, therefore the unstable chakra of the Konaga will not be accepted by the blade at all. Weapon Description: It's color varies, and the blade is simply a metallic color. With the exception of the blade, it looks like every other regular Katana, such as one able to be bought at a weapon shop. However, the hilt, which is made up of fibers able to store the users chakra, changes color with the chakra the user is infusing with the blade. (Blue for suiton jutsu, yellow for Raiton, white for Fuuton, red for Katon). Special Properties/Abilites: Being able to put chakra into the blade, allows the blade to be a conductor of certain jutsu (which must be below the rank of A, no exceptions.), which in turn allows the user to project lower level jutsu through the blade. After making the necessary hand seals, the user can put the chakra required into the blade, therefore allowing the user to cast the jutsu without handseals, instantly channeling the required chakra through the blade, where the jutsu would be performed normally, except without the use of hands or limbs needed. This does not apply to jutsu used from the mouth. Any jutsu where one spits or projects anything from the mouth cannot be performed through the blade. The user can also put a certain amount of chakra into the blade, being able to freely use jutsu, until that chakra has been used up. This chakra lasts up to a maximum of 6 posts before it dissipates and cannot be retrieved or used. Chakra put into the blade cannot be taken back by the user. The blade can be used to make clones of the user, however the clones will not have any chakra, and cannot perform any jutsu. Any clones with chakra, must be created by the user themselves, without use of the weapon. In addition to all of this, the blade itself will become attached to the users chakra (much the same as Samehada worked, developing what could almost be considered a preference for the users chakra, and the punishments for not giving the blade chakra, much like Samehada, are quite harsh.) Because of this, should the user of this weapon be disarmed in combat, the blade would return to the familiar source of chakra, AKA the user. However, should the user be killed, the blade would lose the user's chakra trace, and a new user could be accepted. Also, the hilt, which is able to channel and conduct chakra of all elements (elemental bloodlines included) is almost indestructible. The only way to break it, theoretically, would be to throw it into a volcano, where the blade will simply be destroyed naturally. The sword cannot conduct or accept unstable, non elemental chakra. A list of specific bloodlines/jutsu that cannot be used in conjunction with the blades special properties are as follows: Bloodline Techniques that can't be used through the blade:-Explosive Release Techniques -Konaga Raw Chakra Releases (chakra force/chakra blade/etc.) -Kamisama Bloodline Techniques -Ato Sakura -Kiseru -Supekutoru Annaiyaku -Mayu Techniques -Vibrating Heart -Crystal Release -Light and Dark Clan Techniques -Wangetsu Techniques -Soul Eater Techniques Rp Sample: Nero grinned. The genjutsu was complete, and the enemy had no idea what had happened. Drawing his blade, he made the handsigns for his puddle creation jutsu, running at his enemy. He swung at the man, creating the puddle behind him, and the man had no idea at all. He then made the handsigns for his water clone, which was capable of using chakra. He charged at the man. He created a water clone, while almost simultaneously transporting himself to the puddle behind the man, swinging at him. He sliced him in the back, causing him to fall forward. The clone then struck the man, creating another clone. The water clone disappeared shortly after, the regular clone taking its place. The regular clone then struck the man, and Nero attacked again. Due to the mist genjutsu, the man was not able to react to the movements of the clones or Nero as fast as he would usually be able to, and Nero took the opportunity to push the man forward, creating another puddle in front of him. He teleported to that puddle, striking the man from the front. And creating another clone, repeated the same technique. And the man, finally realizing the genjutsu, had released it, but by that time, he was too wounded to even put up much of a fight.
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 3:59 pm
Kagetsukiko Well, not sure if this will pass since it's kind of like a lightsaber the way chakra is used to make a completely different weapon out of it. I don't know, figured that I might as well try sweatdrop ? By the way, we can modify our weapons as we rank up, right?  Name of Weapon: Loki (separately, they're Luki and Noki) Who Owns the Weapon: Setsuna Watanuki Where it Was Found?/ Who Made it? Setsuna created it herself as something useful that she could fiddle with whenever she was alone. It's taken her several years to make and even now she keeps on adding on to it. Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m ~ 10m), Far (10m ~ 20m) Weakness: The yo-yos are made almost completely out of metal so until Setsuna builds up a resistance to electricity, their ability to conduct electricity makes it easy for raiton users to shock her. Likewise, but to a much lesser effect, they also conduct heat so katon users might also have a bit of an advantage until Setsuna builds up resistance to heat. Weapon Description: Loki is a pair of coal-black yo-yos called Luki and Noki when they're referred to separately. Obviously, as weapons, they're made out of a light, durable metal that is much tougher than the plastic that most toy yo-yos are made out of and even the usual normal string is replaced by 20m of metal wires instead. To add to their usefulness as weapons, Luki and Noki also have a pair of slightly curved blades attached to opposite ends of each of them, one blade on each disk. The blades are sharp on the inside of the curve but dull on the outside, allowing Setsuna to control whether or not the yo-yos cut or simply attack bluntly. Luki and Loki can also be used as tops thanks to the conical extensions sprouting from the center of each of the two sides of each yo-yo. Special Properties/Abilites: To sum up the special properties and abilities of this weapon, Loki is able to conduct Setsuna's chakra to either extend its reach or offer precise control. Furthermore, it's ability to conduct heat and electricity could also prove to be a strength once Setsuna has grown skilled enough. Name: Chakram Form Chakra Cost: 5 points Stamina Cost: n/a Description: By channeling chakra through and away from Loki and then solidifying the chakra, the user can create a dual set of white chakrams with Luki and Noki as the center of each. The chakra used to form this weapon is the same pale blue as Setsuna's chakra color and extends outwards like flames before solidifying and turning even paler into the white of the completed form. The full change takes one post to complete during which the chakra segments can cut but not defend. While changing, the user must have both yo-yos held directly in their hands (indirect contact through the string is not enough) partially because the Loki does not have any strings hanging off from it after the change and partially because the direct contact is needed to successfully channel the needed chakra . Because the chakra solidifies into a metal-like material, extra chakra is not needed to maintain its form. To return Loki to its original form, Setsuna has to simply hold the chakrams in her hand and disrupt the solidified chakra. Disrupting the chakra requires no additional chakra and causes the solidified chakra that had coated Loki to fall down like a waterfall of white ash. These minuscule pieces of chakra disappear after a second or so. Returning Loki to its yo-yo form takes only a moment. Name: Kamaitachi Chakra Cost: 1 points/ post Stamina Cost: n/a Description: While in yo-yo mode and in contact with the user (whether it's by keeping hold on to the string(s) or touching the yo-yo(s) directly), Loki's blades can be lengthened by several inches with chakra. The strings (excluding the areas that the user touches) are also sharpened with chakra while this skill is active. These chakra blades are just as strong and as sharp as the original blades. Additionally, they cannot be seen physically. Name: Dance Chakra Cost: 1 point/post Stamina Cost: n/a Description: By charging her chakra through the strings, the user is able to precisely control the movements of both yo-yos independently and at the same time. While Loki is in Chakram Mode, the user does not need strings to control the weapons. Instead, the inherent connection of the user with their solidified chakra allows them to control the chakrams with the same level of precision without needing to be connected through a material like string. Rp Sample:Setsuna sat alone in the trees. Well, almost alone. No one was talking to her and few people seemed to be paying much attention to her but the girl was surrounded by people, as expected seeing how she was in the usual training area. As usual in such a case, Setsuna had a foolish smile on her face. This time, she decided to occupy herself by practicing with her yo-yos. The girl's fingers moved nimbly as she manipulated the string of each yo-yo so that she could manipulate the main body of each yo-yo. If the control the girl managed to exercise over what seemed to be toys wasn't impressive enough, then the speed that she manipulated them with was sure to cause at least a bit of awe, especially considering that the girl had yet to use any of the special properties of this toy. Just then, slashes suddenly appeared in the branches above and below Setsuna. The girl hadn't widened the reach of her yo-yos a bit and up until that point, there was no sign of the yo-yos having so much as touched the branches. However, if a sensor was nearby, they would be able to pinpoint the cause to invisible blades of chakra that had suddenly sprouted from the blades of Loki. Obviously, these supposed toys was not has harmless as they seemed. Then, Setsuna changed the pattern of her maneuver and wrapped the string Luki around the part of the tree trunk that was above her. The girl pulled to tighten the string and, with the Kamaitachi skill still active on her weapons, the strings cut into the tree trunk. Meanwhile, Noki resorted to a basic up and down movement while Setsuna wrapped Luki around the tree trunk. After the trunk was cut, though, the girl maneuvered Loki to the part of the tree trunk above her as well. However, rather than having the top-shaped yo-yo wrap around like its partner, the girl had Noki hit Luki, along the latter to unravel while the former rebounded back. As Loki returned to Setsuna, the girl firmly grasped them and shot her chakra through both of them, extending their reach. When the chakra solidified, Loki had changed into a pair of chakrams. As a bit of a flashy finale, the girl simply let go of her newly changed weapons and allowed them to whiz around in one quick circle before returning to her hand. Once she had firmly grasped both chakrams upon their simultaneous return, Setsuna broke up the solidified chakra that coated her weapon. The chakra fell off the yo-yos looking like a bunch of white ash, disappearing after it had gone only about a couple of feet. Once the process was done, the girl was holding a pair of bladed yo-yos once more.
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HeadlessKoko Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 5:04 pm
-o-Havik-o- This weapon is a remake of your last weapon, with the addition of sand. So it is denied, for the following reasons.
1. Suna is not a cave, so "found deep in Suna" does not make sense.
2. Incorporeal refers to things like mist, smoke, or the hazy images that make up what people call "ghosts". Things like water, cloth, and other soft, flimsy items are still corporeal, so that would need to be taken out of your description since it is wrong. Simple saying "The ability of the gloves is only activated by solid objects." Would suffice, and be easier to understand.
3. All your chakra but one is drained away, fine, but how many time after that can you activate the gloves? What is the cost for USING the ability.
4. This give you the ability to auto destroy to many things, creating a light saber type weapon, which is not aloud. Yes you are drained of chakra, but as a taijutsu Rpc with no element, that is not a big draw back for you, and it give you the ability to destroy defense jutsu which cost chakra, and stam, and you only pay chakra, that is broken.
5. Your back story about the nomadic tribe doesn't really make sense. Before the 5 path sage appeared chakra had never been tapped into, so a nomadic tribe that existed before ninja would not have been able to forge such a weapon. Also, some one just giving that weapon away... Not likely.
The main reason this is rejected is because it is a simple remake of the weapon that was just denied, and for many of the same reasons. A weapon that auto breaks down things will not be aloud, the "No light saber rule" covers that.
There are several other routes you can take for being able to break down defenses, I suggest you explore a alternative because if you re summit the same basic weapon design, I am afraid it will be rejected. Suna means sand... and deserts are known to have underground caverns running through them where water used to reside. Therefore, there could verywell be a cave somewhere in Sunagakure, or in the surrounding areas. I'll fix that by replacing Incorpreal with non solids. Like the one before, The gloves use the amount of chakra used to create the jutsu. not to mention the power of the punch would need to equal that of the defence of the object in question, therefore the gloves only serve the purpose of getting rid of the entire object instead of Dogou's fist going through it, and leaving his 7'6'' body with a 2' hole to attempt to climb through. A simple jutsu gives someone the ability to destroy many things as well. So those jutsu in question are broken, but you won't see it that way because your character still has the ability to use those jutsu more than likely. No, it really does, Nomadic tribes were known for strange rituals, and Chakra has always been there. In the anime, the sage of the 5 paths was the first to discover how to USE chakra, but say the nomadic tribe thought it was majic, and didn't give it a specific name. It is not a remake, the other one destroyed it completely, this one spiderwebs it, and uses manipulation of chakra to force the crumbled bits forward at a fast rate. The last one merely destroyed it on the spot leaving no trace. This one quite obviously does not destroy it, rather changes it. Besides, it has to have minerals. Pure metal wouldn't be affected due to the fact only a few parts of the metal would be minerals. If you had a wall made of cement with Rebar neted through it, only a hole big enough for Dogou would be made in the cement, but the rebar would still be there. This weapon doesn't affect metal. Edit: The only reason you call it a remake is because you only notice the similarities, not the differences. There is quite a bit more difference than just the look of the weapon, the workings of it are much different.
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 6:27 pm
Sunagakure does not have a cavern thread, so no, there isn't. If you were to create one it would have to be approved by Crit, the Kazekage.
All the jutsu my character uses are weak to not only ration Jutsu, but many other things, your weapon Auto destroys almost every ninja tool, or defensive maneuver this guild has, and you do it with very little effort.
The weapon is also a remake no matter how you spin it, the basics are the same, and the basics are what is being denied.(The basics being breaking down solid objects.) Not only can you auto break normal walls, with this, you can break big swords, little swords, chakra reinforced walls, chakra reinforced blades, almost every type of armor, and if someone his wearing a steel chest plate, not only would you break it, but also send a sand barreling into there chest. Any weapon that auto breaks stuff, cuts through anything, or can not be broken will not be accepted.
This is not a matter of you needing to explain your self further, this is a matter of the idea being Op and not aloud into the guild. I understand you completely, but the idea is denied.
P.S. Chakra dose not just randomly work, in the naruto story line the sage of 5 paths discovered Chakra, discovered that the force even existed, so the nomadic tribe, who by nature are not self aware would not of discovered chakra, in any form, and defiantly not to this extent. Not in the Naruto verse anyway.
All other application are being read over now, sorry for the wait.
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Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 4:21 am
-o-Havik-o- Sunagakure does not have a cavern thread, so no, there isn't. If you were to create one it would have to be approved by Crit, the Kazekage.
This won't be necessary if the character in question obtains in the weapon in the past. If he wants to get the weapon in the Present of Future RP, he should be allowed to RP in the Land of Wind discovering the weapon. A seperate thread should only be created if it will be actively used, otherwise it only takes up space.
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Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 5:43 am
To everyone submitting an application where the "How you got it section" includes:
- Was given to him by his father...
OR
- He found it in a cave randomly...
...or any such explanation equally lack luster... IT'S NOT GOOD ENOUGH.
Honestly, can you do no better then to say some random stranger handed you and incredibly specialized weapon?... or that you found this enchanted artifact randomly in some cave just lying around?
You can do better... just put some kind of MINIMAL effort into working something into your backstory. Example: (this is one of Sai's custom weapons)
Who Owns the Weapon: Konaga Sai
Who Made it? The blade was forged by a Kirigakure Master Weaponsmith and was given to Sai. On his last official mission for the Kirigakure, Sai's hunter-nin team was sent to locate and eliminate the man who was forging powerful weapons to be used against the village. Sai tracked the man down and the team infiltrated his location, but before Sai killed him, the man offered him a weapon of his choosing if he allowed him to live. Without a second's hesitation, Sai turned on his comrades and cut them down with a few quick swipes. After disposing of the bodies to leave no trace, Sai was offered a choice of any of the weaponsmith's forged items. After feeling a strange connection with the blade, Sai chose 'Blood Sacrifice' and left the man to continue his work and returned to the Kirigakure.
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