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 Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 11:53 am
They're lying. crying
I never said such things. emo
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 11:56 am
But that kid in zen said so....
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 12:21 pm
That kid knows nothing. talk2hand
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 4:27 pm
Current Obsession|| Disgaea Afternoon of Darkness
Had a presentation about bras in marketing today. cool
All the guys in class squirmed, the girls participated and the teacher seemed eerily quiet. Panic when a marketing teacher is silent. But I enjoyed it!
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 7:41 pm
I want cookies.... Just sayin'
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 1:08 am
MARMOT! *glomps*
and that weird Yanike.... why bras? why not something less sex specific... like video games?
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 4:15 am
Marmot42 I want cookies.... Just sayin' Go get some. talk2hand
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 12:41 pm
peoplers MARMOT! *glomps* and that weird Yanike.... why bras? why not something less sex specific... like video games? Current Obsession|| Disgaea Afternoon of Darkness
It was a presentation based upon three products in a market and the girl chose bras. Can't say much because right after her was a guy talkin' tighty-whities. And I could argue some video games are very sex specific...
But where were you when I was was working on this?! I shoulda picked video games for my comparison. emo
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 12:49 pm
sikh-91 Marmot42 I want cookies.... Just sayin' Go get some. talk2hand says no.
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 9:05 am
What do you think of this?i need opinions and constructive criticisms!
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 11:17 pm
•○♣☼♣○•Nicely done. I enjoyed the build up. Just a quick thought, with editing it helps if you read it out loud and note where you pause to take a breath. Doing so just helps you spot where a comma would help things flow such as in Quote: She is the reaper , or rather one of them now. Also there was things such as Quote: The large oak doors open for her as she walks closer towards them.Where the part in bold could simply be replaced by a word which gathers that feeling succinctly such as 'approaches'.
Letting the reader flow through the words and not get stuck in excessive wordiness.
However those are just bits of fine tuning. It's the nuts and bolts which makes the story interesting.
Good Job ^^
I hope that helped a little!
<3
•○♣☼♣○•
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Posted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 1:16 am
Miss Perfection you are wonderful! thanks for that! My friends are useless at constructive criticism and i just get, "that's wonderful."
and Yanike i was most likely in bed or at university... being the 2 places i reside most now
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Posted: Mon Mar 15, 2010 4:42 pm
HAPPY BIRTHDAY SAXOPHONE HERO!!!! I know it's a bit early but here it's only like 20 minutes early so i thought it would be ok! you know! get everyone excited for you!
So what would you like for your birthday Sax?
And i hope you have a GREAT DAY! I'ma go to bed soon so yeh...
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Posted: Mon Mar 15, 2010 4:48 pm
<33333333333333333
Oh, you guys don;t have to get me a gift. heart cheapthingsonmywishlist?
Thanks for the great birthday wishes~ Imma be** 18 tomorrow. /old
**inb4 Imma be, Imma be, Imma Imma Imma be
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Posted: Mon Mar 15, 2010 4:49 pm
YAY! 18 is fun times! it makes you legal to do lots of fun thingS! like voting and drinking (in the UK anyway) have a fun fun DAY!
EDIT : i did not sneak onto your wishlist... and i did not get you multiple presents... no that wasn't peoplers...
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