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 Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 7:08 am
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 7:12 am
ok i think this is better i have tryed the entire length of sausage party. i think i'm good i had everything then had to restart because gaia logged me off
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 7:14 am
Living Eternally lavandra hellmoon once you go taco you never go backo S-sorry, does that mean your profile's ready for re-evaluation?^^;
-Magic: Don't forget to include your character's School of Magic and do know that your character has spells in various different Schools. The more Schools a Mage practices in, the less effective their spells. For more information about Schools of Magic, check out the Lore and World Book.
-History: You've yet to make any clarifications or additions to your character's history. I'm really sorry, but we can't accept something like "a lot of dead people" with a clean conscience.
-Outfits: As I've stated before, the current level of technology in Nevermore: A Tale of Knights would not allow for something so advanced as a tech suit.
Please let us know when you've made the appropriate changes, and we'll look over your profile again at that point. [/quote done]
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 12:15 pm
Couple more things, but they're little meow~ ^w^
-Ranks: Jump Boost feels like a C rather than A, and Pressure Ice is at most an A.
-Dislikes: I didn't notice this before, but your character profile is missing its Dislikes.
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 11:34 pm
Living Eternally Couple more things, but they're little meow~ ^w^
-Ranks: Jump Boost feels like a C rather than A, and Pressure Ice is at most an A.
-Dislikes: I didn't notice this before, but your character profile is missing its Dislikes. question: what should my ss be?
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 11:44 pm
Living Eternally Couple more things, but they're little meow~ ^w^
-Ranks: Jump Boost feels like a C rather than A, and Pressure Ice is at most an A.
-Dislikes: I didn't notice this before, but your character profile is missing its Dislikes. i had my dislikes under likes i guess
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 1:15 pm
lavandra hellmoon question: what should my ss be? You aren't required a spell within each rank. Those are just possible ranks that a spell might have. SS are essentially "game breaking" and therefore are difficult to make. I'd simply keep your Pressure Ice and change it to an A. You don't need a spell ranked SS.
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 4:11 pm
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 6:59 pm
Username: LeaderOfFallen
Name: Artair Maxwell
Nickname: The Disgraced Noble, The Maxwell heir
Race: Human
Ethnicity: White
Gender: Male
Orientation: Heterosexual
Alignment: Lawful Netural
Affinity: Earth
Age: 21
Birthday: July 4th
Height: 5'9
Weapon: Long Sword
Mage: [None yet]
Natural Abilities: [Name and Rank]
❖ Blank Slate {Passive}Rank C : Born with the natural ability to nullify mind, sightseeing , and foreseeing abilities. Though a crippling ability for mind readers continual assaults wears him down and causes painful migraines.
❖ Earth ShatterRank A:Artair slams his sword into the ground, The attack travels in a line as well as in an X-radius area around him.The spires can knock up, impale, or trap those in front of him
❖Stone WallRank B: Digging his blade into the ground a massive stone wall can be created. Moving the blade causes the wall to move with it so long as it touches the ground or it will disperse . The wall is strong enough to repel explosive magic [Less then or equal to 10 pounds of C4 equivalent]
Magus Abilities: (Name and Rank)
❖ {the following will be made when he is partnered with a mage.}
❖^^
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Unison Abilities: (Include Description and Rank)
❖ ^^
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Relationships:
❖ Arthur Maxwell- (Deceased)
❖ Iris Maxwell - (Deceased)
❖Celestine Maxwell- (Deceased)
❖ Thoul Maxwell (Deceased)
❖ Cathrine Maxwell (Unknown)
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Strengths:
✔Artair is incredibly talented and trained in the art of long sword fighting
✔Artair is proud of his ability to make friends and contacts throughout the world
✔ Artair is Loyal to his friends and loved ones. He will never let them fall behind and will help push them to be the best that they can possibly be.
Weaknesses:
✘ Artair has a dislike for large bodies of water and naturally freaks out around anything bigger then a small lake.
✘ Should the mention of a man or the Day of Blue roses ever be mentioned in his presence by a person that doesn't know him then he will begin an interrogation session to pull that the man knows and if physical violence is needed then so be it.
✘ Crushing Sorrow and the need to repent for the death of his family is Artairs biggest weakness as he views he should let another tend to his wounds as his family suffered more in their death then he has by being alive.
Likes:
✔ Artair has a fondness for horses and enjoys being around them.
✔ He enjoys watching duels between people and will even give advice to the loser on how to approve
✔ He enjoys telling stories of other people and the world around him.
✔ Artair really likes to walk the long roads of the world and explore new areas and ideas
Dislikes:
✘ Artair hates the nobles of Eldrin's government
✘ He dislikes the smell of cooked fish
✘ He hates having to sneak around and will avoid it
✘ He hates people who are stuck up and believe they are mightier them those around them.
Personality:
❖Artair is a very kind hearten soul as well as a noble one.He values loyalty and honesty above all else. He is also known to go out of his way to help others even if it ties him up for a while from his own life goal. While he is a cheerful person to be around, the man holds a lot of self regret and sorrow that very few have seen. He hates himself for what has happened and feels like he could have done something during his families death.
History:
❖ Born to a very powerful family, Artair knew the power of money and the greed it could sew within a mans heart. Growing up, he loved his parents and siblings. His parents where the owners of a massive and successful business that invented and provided military arms to Eldrin's goverment. His siblings in their own rights were the product of favorable noble birth. His eldest sister Celestine was a mage In study of Evocation magic. Yet for the destructive power she wielded she was a kind and caring person. She was the person Artair would go to when he had problems of his own. His older brother,Thoul who was a year younger then Celestine bullied Artair when he was young. Artair though did respect his brother for he held a distinguished service record and served with honor for the Aldrin military. Yet it wouldn't be until after the accident that the Boy would learn that Thoul did this to strengthen him to be the best he could be. Finally his younger sister Cathrine was his best friend. She had taken to the pen at an early age and thus began to work for the family's accountant. Each of his siblings was a coming prodigious in their own right. Yet Artair seemed to was always seeking a happiness that seemed just out of his reach.
When the young noble reached the age of six and was able to hold his first wooden sword, that is when his training began. Waves of sword masters and duelist came invited to the Maxwell home. Here they trained the young heir in the many different styles of swordsmanship. He was taught the forms of Bloßfechten*, Harnischfechten*, French and Italian fencing styles*. Quickly the young man began to master the sword. While he trained in swordsman ship the boy also attended school by several private tutors including his youngest sister. Here he prospered in the educational field yet not to the degree of his youngest sister.By the age of thirteen the young man had mastered each of the sword styles taught to him. Soon no more invites where sent to masters and duelist for the young man had beaten many of them and they refused to return due to such a dishonor of being beaten by a child. Yet only one would still spare with the young man and that was his brother Thoul. His skill with the sword earned his brothers respect and admiration as they both seemed on an equal level of skill.
During his sixteenth birthday the day now known as the day of Blue Roses would fall upon the Maxwell family. The ball was in full swing with military officials, Noble families aligned with the Maxwell line, and numerous important people found they where not safe during such a grand time. A coup set up by a rival house interrupted the family as hostile mages and knights stormed the house and began to slaughter the guests. Artair's Brother Thoul and Sister Celestine where the first cut down by the group sent to massacre the party. Soon a battle erupted within the halls. His father and mother joined in the battle but a last they too where cut down, but not before Artairs mother opened a passage way biding farewell to her child before scumming to her wounds. Scared and grief struck the young heir followed the passage way. Time past with what felt like hours before the child exited the darkness that had enveloped him.The tunnel had exited him outside of the city and way from the men that had killed his family.Grief stricken he sought out family friend that lived in the city of Carmillion. The mans name was Titus and was a local black smith. Scared and freighted the man took the child in to which he would raise the child for the next few years.
During some time after his twentieth birthday Artair left Titus to seek out his own path. One of revenge that would carve his families name back into the heart of Aldrin and take his rightful place as Heir to his family line and business. Artair has sworn that he will not rest until the men responsible for his family's death are paid in full with their own blood. Now Artair walks the roads as a knight for hire. No mage to call his own he uses his advanced bladesmanship to help make himself a living as he pushes forward on his quest.
Outfits:
❖ Plate mail [Above}
❖ Noble Cloths
Items:
❖ A suit of Plate mail armor
❖ A signet ring that bears his family's Crest
❖ A long sword with a black blade
❖A pack full of traveling gear
❖A book "Swords and Sheaths"
❖A wheat stone for sharpening
❖Water Flask
❖Bed Roll
❖Net of bells
❖5x days worth of food
❖ A dagger
Other:
❖ He enjoys Romance books
❖ He enjoys laying in meadows and napping
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: The Life of Exile
❖ Battle Theme: [https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b11-37Me_a4]We are One
❖ Emotional Theme: Ezio's Family
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 7:05 pm
No, you're not.
Now, since I actually had a look at your profile and I feel Living is being too lenient in terms of character creation, I'm going to judge your magic section and only the section that involves your magic. I'm also going to ask that you fix all these inconsistencies as they relate to other aspects of your profile.
1. Why would a 12-year-old know SS-level magic when that is literally, as Livnig said, game-breaking stuff? It's debatable whether a 40-year-old would know something like that, much less a child that is barely even a teenager. Note that I won't accept because you put "I'm a bit powerful" in her strengths. Having something like that at the age of 12 is more like "I'm a god."
2. You have like four schools of magic in your spells. I see enchantments, abjuration, evocation, and illusion. That is not okay.
3. Your ranks make very little sense. As is explained in the post, they are based on versatility. All of your spells are simply ranked however without any real regard towards what they actually do or how they can be used. I will not rank them for you or suggest ranking them until you put them in a clear order that falls in line with what is suggested for ranking spells and abilities.
That is all for now, address the issues and reply to Living, not me.
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 7:58 pm
DESPITE BEING A CITIZEN, ONE CAN MAKE A KNIGHT/MAGE PACT WITH HIM. HE HAS MANA AND IS CAPABLE. HE JUST IS NOT A MAGE IN THE TRADITIONAL SENSE.
Username: Rengato
Name: Sōji Hashimoto
Nickname: SO, Ha-kun, Okita-san, Fake Mage
Race: Human
Ethnicity: Japanese
Gender: Male
Orientation: Heterosexual
Alignment: LN
Occupation: Grad Student
Age: 21
Birthday: June 21
Height: 5’7”
Relationships:
❖ Minami - Fellow Dimension Hopper (Location Currently Unknown)
Strengths:
✔He has a lot of potential mana with him, so much that it seems impossible that he could live without knowing how to use magic.
✔He has a habit of being able to figure out puzzles if left alone with them for too long.
✔Solving mysteries is second nature to him. He can easily figure something out if given enough time to observe it from all angles.
✔He is very good with words and is very cunning, usually using wordplay to get out of situations.
✔He has a mind for politics, allowing him to negotiate rather well and haggle with people on a level beyond most others.
✔He does not seem to be useful at first glance, granting him the fake ability to “mask” his presence. In other words, he is so lackluster that he can easily go unnoticed in almost any situation, which can be used to his advantage.
✔He has perfect vision in both of his eyes, allowing him the best available perception for a human being.
✔He is an expert strategist, one of the brightest minds one could come across.
✔He is very capable when it comes to performing comedy skits or gags.
✔His extreme dedication to any task and unrelenting nature make him a formidable adversary.
Weaknesses:
✘ He is the epitome of a human, all the way to his lackluster fighting capabilities.
✘He lacks stamina, meaning that he easily gets tired out after exerting himself for too long.
✘Despite his massive amount of mana, to such levels that he surpasses some magical creatures, he cannot cast magic due to his other weakness.
✘ He lacks natural talent, making him completely useless in any situation that involves physical ability or latent talent.
✘He is horrid at housework, messing things up terribly most of the time.
✘Because he is generally unnoticed, he does not get much attention for his actual accomplishments, simply watching as people pass him by to praise someone else.
✘ Physical combat is completely out of the question.
✘His lackadaisical personality causes many to ignore him and see him as worthless.
✘He has a distinct “scent”to his mana which connects him to the witches that started attacking.
Likes:
✔ Coffee
✔ Vegetables
✔ Kobe Beef
✔ Various Breads
✔ Junk Food
✔ Canned Coffee
✔ Winter
✔ Scarves
✔ The Sea
✔ Sitting around doing nothing.
✔ Solving Puzzles
✔ Solving Mysteries
✔ Corning a person in a battle of wits
✔ Politics
✔ Strategy games (such as RISK)
✔ Chess
Dislikes:
✘ Manga
✘ Fantasies
✘ A lack of logic
✘ People who rely solely on luck
✘ Pigs (The animal)
✘ Exerting himself physically
✘ Summer
✘ Running away
✘ Beings separated from his family
✘ Not understanding what’s going on.
Personality:
❖ From an outside perspective, Sōji is a rather bland person that does not have much interest in anything. With his apathetic eyes and generally blank expression, most people see him as a worthless, no-good slacker that does care to physically exert himself. This, for the most part, is actually fairly true in regards to his personality. He does not like to exert himself, and he would rather sit around and study instead. That is where the misconceptions about him begin. Sōji seems completely dedicated to studying, learning, and battles of the mind. His entire existence seems to be based around solving puzzles and trying to figure out mysteries that perplex most other people. That is because he is trying to make up for his lack of physical ability by trying his best to outshine others in mental capacity. It is somewhat sad, yet it is the only way that he can define himself as a human being. Otherwise he is nothing but a creature that is relying on others to do all of his work for him.
Despite the focus on his mental abilities, Sōji lacks a very important characteristic that is needed to be a person, social skills. Because of his absolute dedication to his practices and studies, he forsook everything about the world and the people in it. He pushed people away, ignored others, and dedicated his entire existence to being the best he could possibly be in regards to grades and debates. This caused many to hate him, and he slowly developed an anti-social personality that is geared towards pushing others away rather than trying to embrace them and become friendly with them. It is not as if he sees having friends as a weakness… but he truly believes that he is better off trying to better himself than worry about his social life. That is why he has no relationships with anyone, why even his family seemed to care so little for him. He turned his back on all the people in his life just so that they would look at him with some sort of respect, as he could not gain anything by just being him.
One interesting part of his personality, however, is his extreme love of pulling gags on people to the point of setting up his gag weeks ahead of time. He is dedicated to pulling off apathy-related gags that drive people up walls, often leading to hilarious outcomes while remaining as stoic as possible. This emotionless personality of his only emphasizes the hilarity of the situations he puts people in, often leading many to find him somewhat amusing despite the fact that he tries his best to hide his emotions during his gags. Underneath all that false apathy, however, he is dying of laughter on the inside and dedicating every fiber of his being into preventing his face from showing such emotions. This is a stark contrast to the rest of his personality, which may lead some to believe that if Sōji were to be himself all the time, he would probably be a rather funny fellow rather than some useless human being. Sōji, however, does not see life this way, and he would never allow himself to show this love of skits to other people. Instead, he merely tries his best to subject them to such skits.
Sōji’s extreme dedication is also attributed to his personality. He is a man that would dedicate all of his being into a singular goal, one tiny glimmer of hope for something. To better himself, to better his life, he dedicated an entire existence, fifteen years, to becoming a genius, and that is how he succeeded in his eyes. That dedication, however, does not solely apply to that aspect of his personality. If he were to find something else, anything else to dedicate himself too, Sōji would undoubtedly be able to commit himself to such a thing until he was the best at it, or at least phenomenal in a way. One might say that his dedication could have made him physically capable had he not focused solely on his studies instead. Or he could have become a very popular person if he had decided to focus on his social skills instead. Now, however, his dedication has wavered and is left in the wind, unable to be directed towards anything. Without anything to dedicate himself to, the young man sometimes feels himself withering away.
This leads to the final aspect of Sōji’s personality. He needs to have a point to his existence, proof of why he should even be alive and breathing. Without that proof, he feels useless and incapable of motivating himself at all. Despite being great when it comes to debates and having an excellent mind, that does not matter at all to Sōji unless he can see the benefits that he attains from having such things. Otherwise, he slowly becomes consumed with this idea that living is pointless and there is no meaning to himself. This constant need for self-assurance leads many to simply walk away from him and not deal with the young man, despite this personality trait stemming from a lack of social ability. By detaching himself from others, he essentially made himself incapable of realizing his own self-worth. Thus, he pushes others away while constantly seeking their approval, their assurance that he is doing well. Without their kind words, there is no reason for him to be good at anything. That is the mentality of Sōji Hashimoto.
History:
❖ ”Is that all you’re capable of, Sōji?” All of his life, Sōji was only ever good at one thing, tasks that involved he mind. Physically, he was weak, and in terms of spiritual awareness he was lacking. No matter his attempts to better himself, he was simply incapable of improving anything about his physical attributes or innate talents. All he was good at was grades and political debates. His parents, seeing that he could not grant them any joy in anything else, decided it was best to push him to always do his best in his school. They taught him to hate manga, to throw away an amiable attitude. They instructed him to adopt an apathetic approach to life, and they ruined him in terms of social capabilities. By the time he had grown up, the young man was simply a loner who was extremely well-adept at his studies. He could find flaws in any argument and crush anyone’s attempts to defeat him in a debate. His awareness in terms of strategy and problem solving were also amazing, almost as if he was some sort of prodigy. In reality, however, he had simply honed his mind for nearly fifteen years, forsaking every other aspect of life.
Thus, by the time he became a grad student, Sōji Hashimoto realized that there was not meaning to his existence. Even if he had grades and was at the top in terms of academics, he was useless to society. He could not interact with people. Almost everyone seemed to dislike him because of his blank stare and inability to actually feel the emotions they were trying to convey to him. Even in his debates, judges begrudgingly gave him victories because they saw that, despite him making persuasive arguments, he held no passion for what he was debating. There was no meaning to his existence at all, and everyone around him was aware of this. Thus, Sōji began to dislike living, to dislike almost everyone around him. It was not until one day when he was defeated in a debate by a woman who was passionate about the topic of living expenses in lower economic areas that Sōji realized just how worthless he could truly become. Even the life he clung to do dearly was ripped out from underneath him.
After such a crush defeat, Sōji left the campus where the debate was held and simply walked. He walked and walked, wanting to find some reason, some purpose to himself. That was when the woman showed up that had beaten him in his debate, Minami. She revealed that she had done so to wake the man up and see who she was. He had been ignoring everyone, turning away from everyone, and only seeing himself and how he could improve himself. Such a life was not worth living. Thus, she did her best to bring him back to reality, to make him aware of the disastrous life he was living. As she grabbed a hold of him and tried to shake him until he understood, a portal opened up nearby. Without either of them being aware of its existence, the two of them fell backwards and into another world. Sōji came to hours later in the middle of a forest, unaware of his surroundings. Minami was nowhere to be found… but there seemed to be strange creatures about. After a week, he managed to make it out of the forest and towards a nearby village on the edge of Carmillion and Eldrin. An elderly couple took him in and took care of him as long as he promised to work their field for them. While physical labor was not his forte, he was happy to have simply survived.
Outfits:
❖ School Uniform
❖ Fancy Dress Clothes
Items:
❖ He has a bag from his world that had his books and workbooks in it.
❖ A cellphone with limited battery left.
❖ A hand notebook that contains an analysis of all the people he has met.
Other:
❖ As a Knight is the one that forms a pact, he is still capable of forming a pact via the Knight/Mage system despite not being able to cast spells. This is due to him still possessing mana.
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: Itteki no Eikyou (English Ver. By Amalee)/Reason Living (English Ver. By Amalee)
❖ Battle Theme: Identity - Makio Sakai/Core Pride (English Ver. By Nathan Sharp)
❖ Emotional Theme: One Me Two Hearts (English Ver. By Nathan Sharp)
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 8:41 pm
Ohmai, this looks so nice I could cry. TTwTT We only have one suggestion, and that's too a couple of your skills rankings:
-Earth Shatter we think would be more appropriately ranked as A-/A.
-Stone Wall is pretty powerful, so we'd suggest a solid B.
Once you've got those set, let us know, and you should be golden!
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 8:44 pm
Heeheehee~ Was the PSA always there, or had it always been and I just noticed it now?
Either way, you're all set, Company Cat. Accepted!
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 8:49 pm
Living Eternally
Ohmai, this looks so nice I could cry. TTwTT We only have one suggestion, and that's too a couple of your skills rankings:
-Earth Shatter we think would be more appropriately ranked as A-/A.
-Stone Wall is pretty powerful, so we'd suggest a solid B.
Once you've got those set, let us know, and you should be golden!
it is done
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Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 8:56 pm
Beautiful! Accepted!
Don't forget to read and sign the rules before you begin posting! You'll be all set to begin where you'd like at that point^w^
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