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 Posted: Sat Jan 16, 2010 8:05 pm
Shruikan Tenshi @Martin: Finish it please and I'll let you know the results
@Crystal: Amazing rping. Approved, since you incorperated the handsigns and what not. Good job!
SWEET!! ||flies away on a flying magical Hyouton surfboard||
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Posted: Sun Jan 17, 2010 3:13 pm
Shruikan Tenshi @Martin: Finish it please and I'll let you know the results
@Crystal: Amazing rping. Approved, since you incorperated the handsigns and what not. Good job! I'm going to assume you mean my character profile, lol. I'll get right on it.
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Posted: Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:04 pm
Ultima: You are Approved!
...your RP sample could have used some better length, but you've proved that you understand how to use the basic techniques. My only suggestion is to make sure you mention that when using Light abilities, your eyes light up as well.
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Posted: Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:08 pm
dang, I could have used better effort for everything, at least i just made it.
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Shruikan Tenshi Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:19 pm
Martin Spiralwave Name: Martin Spiralwave
RPC's name: Not completed yet
Bloodline Applying for: Rinnegan
Why do you want it: Okay at first I was going to try my hand at the other Doujutsu, just to see what it was like but I was reading through some Literate Naruto Commerce roleplays and found some really awseome inspiration in not just roleplaying but roleplaying with different Doujutsu ^^. So I was looking through my choices thinking I would pick the Sharingan or Byakugan but I noticed that the Rinnegan was open AND I got some really nifty examples of its power!
What will you do with it: I've been entertaining thoughts of becoming some sort of sannin 'wise man', offering information to the youth but at the same time I want to be something like an intelligence officer, gathering information from everywhere and manipulating others in order to create interesting plots.
What you know about it:
The Rinnegan is an ancient bloodline inheritance limit, orginally possessed by the Rokudo Sennin and his Eldest Son. This venerable Doujutsu predates the Byakugan and Sharingan, possibly hinting that the two may be descended from the eye.
The Rinnegan allows the user to see or sense barriers, invisble or not, allowing him to avoid traps or hidden alarms. Whether this is through sensing chakra flow or signature is unknown but it may be hypothesized that the Rinnegan is able to sense chakra, at the very least. Another trait is the ability to see through other Rinnegan, allowing the user to view the same scene from different angles with no mental damage. In truth the user is able to sense through other Rinnegans, such as the senses of a clone.
Finally the Rinnegan allows the user the ability to use and master all six forms of chakra nature manipulation. This can aide them in learning new techniques faster than their peers. They also have unique, but very grotesque and painful jutsu that cost extremely large amounts of chakra such as Peins Rebirth Technique. It is also possible for the Rinnegan user to channel chakra as a signal, allowing them to transmit chakra through some form of receivers, allowing them to 'puppet' a corpse or, if the user is strong enough, 'puppet' a living being under their control.
RP Sample:
Kingu balanced precariously on an upright log, the water slick surface challenging the grip of his bare feet. He was clearly concentrated on keeping dry above the Nakano River, despite the fact he refused to use chakra as an adhesive strip to glue him to the log. He was attempting to better control his own body, using only one foot to keep himself from the strong current. To add more of a challenge he was trying to avoid the well-aimed projectiles his clones were throwing at him, relying only on their eyesight in order to keep aloft.
It was hard, keeping his eyes closed and seeing through the eye of four clones at the same time. Already his forehead was bleeding from a well-aimed rock and he was positive one of the surrounding upright log was damaged from that explosive tag earlier. The syncrhonization was going excellently and Kingu swayed to avoid a kunai then crouched and leapt onto another log as a Fuuma Shruiken split the log he previously stood on.
Still not allowing himself to use chakra Kingu beckoned at one of his clones and it leapt torward him, right arm cocked back for a strong straight. The other clones reached into their pouches in perfect harmony, firing off two kunai each at Kingu's exposed back. With a dark smirk Kingu, half-stepped to the punching clones left side, swaying in order to avoid the blow then planting his foot into the clones back and launching into a high backflip. As he came down from his back flip Tensai heard and sensed the dispersing of the clone as six kunai struck at major organs. The other clones frowned as Kingu smirked darkly at them, prompting one to pick up it's last Fuuma Shruiken and hurl it...but not at Kingu, instead it was aiming for the upright logs.
"Aw shi-"
The dark skinned youth was forced to open his eyes as his three remaining clones shut their own, revealing captivating gray hues rimmed by a concentric circle pattern. The divine eye technique, once thought to be an old fable, witnessed the outcome of it's orginal owners handiwork, the introduction and later perversion of ninshu. As the world morphed from the triplet of vision to a singular reality that offered minor shift in perception with no negative outcome. In a single harmonious movement Kingu leapt torward the Fuuma shruiken, his right hand sliding into the hole at it's center with prodigial accuracy. Gripping the outside edge of the circle with his leather gloved hand as his body sailed over the weapon Kingu threw his body in a seemingly awkward, yet controlled fashion, maintaining the oversized shruikans momentum in addition to his own as he landed on the waters surface. The unexspected turn of events forced the youth to channel chakra into his bare soles, creating buyouancy on the waters surface as he moved the Fuuma shruiken in a wide circle, finally unleashing it toward one of his clones with increased speed.
Boomf!
The weapon bisected the unfortunate mirror image of Kingu and the other two clones opened their eye in shock, once more granting Kingu a triple image viewing of his envrioment with no ill effects. Increasing the flow of chakra to his leg in a subtle manner Kingu ran across the surface of the water, swiftly unsheathed a katana with no hilt and dragging it along the waters surface as his two clones came to meet him. Seeing his self charging towards the two clones, a long arc of water trailing beside him as his katana cut through the current, made Kingu shiver in anticipation. His control of the Rinnegan was steadily increasing, allowing him to sense the surface thoughts of his own determined clones.
"Hah!" he exclaimed, bringing the katana in front of him without letting it leave the water. This movement created a small wall of water between him and his two clones, the unpralled timing granted by his venerable Doujutsu forcing the two clones to crash through the barrier as a crouching Kingu, twisted the katana in his hands and brought it upwards in a diagonal strike. Steel clashed on steel, creating small amber sparks onto the katana edge as it met a kunai. Aware his other clone was drawing it's own katana Kingu lashed out with a foot, nearly catching his clone in the guy before it hopped backwards. Spinning the katana expertly in his right hand Kingu once again dipped his weapon into the current as his clones charged him. His dark smirk turned into a look of utter concentration, his gloomy doujutu focusing on the two images with unfathomed clarity of mind and perception. The three struck in an identical fashion now several feet ahead of their orginal position as the sparks from their swift attack rained down. Again and again they clashed, sparks soaring and steel crying as their weapons slid against each other until finally....
Boomf! Boomf!
Kingu sheathed his katana as his triple perceptionf of reality once again molded into his singular vision, his endless hues closing slowly as his breathing slowed. It was then a thin line split across his left cheek and spurted a steady stream of blood into the air before leaking his lide fluid down his cheek. Kingu slowly came to realize he was exhausted, his body covering in multiple layers of sweat and grime while his limbs screamed for rest. Even his chakra control was wavering, evident by one foot dipping into the cool current as the youth coughed into his hand. The Rinnegan required energy and training for so long without rest was getting to him. He surrendered himself to the current, his body falling into the cool water as it carried him toward Konoha. He would know when to get out and had sufficient enough power to escape the streams grasp but he doubted he would make it home on time. Already the sun was falling closer to the earth and the sky was streaked with orange and yellow through Kingu's Rinnegan. approved
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:44 pm
Bloodline:
Rinnegan
Why do you want it:
I've always wanted to try this genkai, but all the other guild I've been in always had the spots researved for admins.
What will you do with it:
Make a leaf village genin and RP with it.
What you know about it:
Allmost everything there is to know about it.
RP Sample:
Shoshu smiled as he walked through the busy streets of this rather large port village. He was quite happy that no one had noticed who he really was up to this point, which was mostly do to the fact that he had been hiding his face under the hood of his jacket the whole time. As he rounded a corner, Shoshu glanced into a mirror that was hanging in a shop window, and noticed a rather large man dressed quite odd for someone passing through. Quickening his pace, Shoshu rounded another corner into an allyway where he jumped up the wall to the roof of the building where he thought he was sure to get away from anyone who might be following him. As he got to the roof, he realized his efforts were in vain as the tall man stood on the other side of the roof, smiling at Shoshu.
"It's been a long time, Shoshu," the man said as he tooked at Shoshu.
Slowly, Shoshu made a motion to remove his hood, which earned a flinch from the man. As he dropped his hood, he smiled at the mans reaction to Shoshu's eyes. Their breathtaking ripple pattern and their grayish purple color would cause anyone to stare.
"It sure has, hasn't it, Monichi," Shoshu said as he smiled at the man.
"You've come to try and take my eyes again, I see. I suppose there's no avoiding it then," Shoshu said as he stared at Monichi.
"You quess correct. I'm going to have those eyes, one way or another. I don't care how long it takes or how many I have to kill to get them. That power will be mine!" Monichi said as he made an attempt to grab his kunai.
Before Monichi could even grab the kunai, Shoshu appeared behind him, grabbed his arm , and forced it up his back to the point where if either of them twitched, the arm would brake. With his other arm, Shoshu held a kunai to Monichi's neck.
"I suppose this was unavoidable. You are the most stubbern person I have ever met," Shoshu said as he slid the edge of the blade across Monichi's neck, causing his blood to spreay the rooftop they were standing on, as well as Shoshu's kunai.
Shoshu released the now dead body and watched it crash down to the ground of the allyway in which Shoshu had come from. A few moment later, there was a scream as a women who had been taking her children around the town, just happened to be right next the the area the man was going to fall.
Cussing at himself, Shoshu jumped from rooftop to rooftop, headed for the port where a boat was waiting to take him out of the fire country. With an uneasy feeling, Shoshu looked behind him to see seven leaf shinobi were following him.
"Stop!" one of them yelled.
"Hold it!" another yelled.
"For your sake, you better hope I don't need to stop," Shoshu thought as he continued to jump from rooftop to rooftop.
Aa few minutes later, as Shoshu neared his destination, he looked behind him to see that the leaf shinobi had not only not stopped following him, but the number of shinobi following him had more then tripled. There were now twenty normal leaf shinobi following him and ten ANBU. Quickly thinking about his situation, Shoshu soon realized there was only one option open to him. He couldn't let them following him to the boat, because there would be no way to get that boat out on to the ocean before they cought up to him. There was also the possibility of prolonging the chase in hopes that he would lose the, but with ten ANBU on his tail, there was no way he was going to be successful there either, so he did the only thing he felt he could. He stopped.
Slowly, Shoshu turned to face the thirty leaf shinobi that were following him. As soon as they saw his face, three of those shinobi stopped and started running in the opposite direction.Thinking that he couldn't let them go tell someone that he was here, he darted past the other shinobi and appeared in front of the three.
"You know, this is your fault. If you hadn't of chased after me, you wouldn't be in this predicament, and neither would I," Shoshu said as he pulled the same kunai that he had used to kill Monichi. He smiled as he suddenly realized that it was still covered in Monichi's blood,
"We-were not aff-affraid of you!" one of the shinobi studdered as he shakely raised a kunai to his defence.
"Ye-yeah," another said as he too raised a kunai to his defence.
Shoshu smiled at the last man as he just stood there, too affraid to even talk, let alone move.One of the other two nudged the third shinobi with his elbow in an attempt to get him to snap out of his fear, but to no avail.
"I'm sorry, but I'm in a hurry, so I'll make this quick," Monichi said as in one quick motion, he severed all there of the shinobi's carotic arteries, which was only aided by the fact that they were all of the same hight.
Shoshu looked past the now dead bodies of the three shinobi, and noticed that the others were quickly on their way. He dashed past the three, headed for the first of the others as he made a downward slash with his kunai, only to have it blocked by one of the ANBU's swords. Shoshu smiled as his kunai cut right through the weapon, allowing him to make a rather large gash across the ANBU's bodie, ranging from the right of his neck, down to his lower left thigh.
Out of the corner of his left eye, Shoshu saw anothe of the ANBU jab his sword at Shoshu's head. Shoshu managed to knock the blade away with his kunai, and slammed his open palm into the ANBU's face, causing the mask to crack and shatter. Shoshu then sent thousands of volts of electricity into the ANBU's head, killing him instantly.
"Bastered!" one of the ANBU screamed as he began running at Shoshu.
Shoshu was able to notice that the ANBU's left arm was incased in a strong chakra and not wanting to take any chances, Shochu kicked off the rooftop he was on with such force, it crushed a few shingles under his feet. While in the air, Shoshu made a series of hand seals which resulted in a strong get of water to spew from his mouth, hitting the ANBU square in the chest, causing him to be jetted backward, hitting three other shinobi as he was flung. However, the jet of water soon turned into a giant wave of water which knocked away another thirteen of the shinobi.
It was soon apparent to Shoshu that none of these leaf shinobi were a matched for him as he stared at the remaining sever, who were incidently ANBU. Quickly, Shoshu charged at the first of the ANBU, making a downward slash with his kunai, only to have it knocked away by what appeared to be a flock of birds. Looking more closely, Shoshu realized that those weren't normal birds, they were ink birds.
"I only know of one shinobi able to manipulate ink in that manor, ain't that right, Sai," Shoshu said as he stared at the ANBU that had used the ink technique toe deflect his attack.
Slowly, the ANBU stood to his full hight, and reached for his mask. Shoshu could tell that the other ANBU were confused by the way they all looked at the other ANBU, as ANBU weren't allowed to take off their masks for any reason while on a mission, but this ANBU apparently didn't care right now.
As the mask was removed, Shoshu sighed as he saw the same fake smile that Sai always had whenever he has seen him.
"It's been a long time, Shoshu san," Sai said as he dropped the hand that had been holding the mask to his side, allowing it to slip from his hand.
"Yes us has," Shoshu said as he lowered his kunai.
Seeing his lose of focuse, the other six ANBU rushed Shoshu as he lowered his kunai, all with their swords drawn and all with intent to kill. As the ANBU got withen two feet of Shoshu, he exploded with such force, the six ANBU were blown to pieces.
"I knew that wasn't you. You always let your clones do all the fighting, Shoshu san," Sai said as he brushed a chuck of one of the ANBU off of his shoulder, smiling while he did so.
"Hay! I don't always use clones. Only when the situation calls for it," Shoshu said as he rose from a puddle of water left over from his earlier attack.
The two stared at eachother for what seemed like hourse, when in reality it was only around a minute.
"Well, aren't you going to attack me?" Shoshu asked Sai as the wind caused both their hair to flutter in the wind.
As if on que, there was a sharp whisteling sound coming from above Shoshu, causing him to look up. What he saw as the flock of birds that had deflected his origional blow coming back for a second round. As the first bird got withen striking distance of Shoshu, he jumped back, expecting the bird to spash onto the roof. However, when the bird collided with the roof, Shoshu was astounded to see that the bird smashed right through.
"Can't get hit by those," Shoshu thought as he slashed as the second bird that divebombed him, causing it to splatter across the roof and cover his kunai.
As the ink spread across his kunai, Shoshu noticed that the ink began eating through the metel, causing Shoshu to drop the kunai.
"It seems you've learned a few new tricks," Shoshu said as he turned to Sai.He then turned back to the Kunai saying, "that was my favorite kunai".
Suddenly, there was a crash right in front of him that made Shoshu focue again, and he noticed that the rest of the flock was withen striking distance of him. Quickly, Shoshu jumped back, naroly avoiding being slammed by one of the birds. He continued to jump away as the birds crashed into the roof and smashed through the ceiling.
Getting tired, Shoshu formed a single hand seal, causing wind to cover his whole body. This wind was moving so fast and so violently, that he started to destroy the roof that Sai and Shoshu were fighting on. Shoshu raised his hand to the flock of birds as they began to make another dive toward him. Quickly, a barrier of wind formed around the birds, not allowing them to dive anylonger an well as causing them to explode inside the barrier because of all the fast moving wind.
With one quick motion, Shoshu turned to Sai and threw the ball full of his acidic ink at him, causing him to jump out of the way before losing his fake smile. While in the air, Shoshu appeared behind Sai and stabbed his hand into the his back. Given that his had was covered in a wind blade, it pieced through Sai quite easily. Shoshu sighed as Sai's body turned into a buddle of ink. He quickly looked in every direction, but was unable to detect any sign of Sai's chakra. After a few minutes, Shoshu released the wind barrier he had around his body. Taking one last look around, Shoshu replaced the hood that had protected his eyes from being recognized and slowly began jumping from rooftop to rooftop, heading for the harper where a boat waited to take him out of the fire country.
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Posted: Tue Jan 19, 2010 7:08 am
Neji:
Alright, so first off, this is very nice RP sample!... it didn't need to be anywhere near this long, but that's okay, I'm sure you had fun.
HOWEVER, can you point to any aspect of this RP Sample that displays powers which are specific to the Rinnegan? I didn't see any mention of seeing through clones, or sensing the enemy's chakra, or of using multiple elements. (The only jutsu I saw you use was Wind)
[Also, just a minor note, we are based in the Naruto universe, but none of the actual Naruto characters exist anymore.]
Sorry but I'm going to have to ask you to redo it to show that you understand what the Rinnegan itself does for your character and is capable of. (don't go crazy though, because I'm sure you put a TON of time into that RP post)
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 5:54 am
Name:Miss Whoopie
RPC's name:Aika Hakatui
Bloodline Applying for:Ranmaru Bloodline
Why do you want it: I've never had it before, so that would be a new experience for me, also by the explanations given here it makes the Bloodline more interesting than in the Anime.
What will you do with it: I would say that I would protect my Village, because I really will, but since it isn't allowed, I'll say just Have Fun and fight with it.
What you know about it: That the Bloodline, when activated, will increase the sight of the user, and so the user can see through Solid stuff. Like shown in the Anime, when the bloodline is activated, the user's eyes glow in a light red.I also know other things that you may notice while reading the RP Sample.
RP Sample:
Aika could hear her heart beats, her sight was starting to get dense as she was nearly loosing. She took a deep breath, and closed her eyes. She opened them, and they glowed a bright red. She turned her head at her sides, looking for the enemy's hiding spot, it wasn't that the nemy was scared, but he was planning another jutsu. She analyzed the man as calmly as she could, then understood what jutsu he was planning to use next. She looked down at the ground beneath her feet and then flashed a series of Hand signs, signifying clearly what jutsu she was going to use, a Raiton Jutsu. "Heki no Jutsu (Burst Technique)"she whispered in a low and soft voice to herself. Her eyes moved again and looked at the former hiding spot of the man, he was gone. The man was originally in the ground sailing through it to move beneath Aika. When the man was beneath her, his hands rose up and broke through the ground,catching the feet of Aika, but he soon let go as the Eletricity went through her body. She used Reddo Ichimei Kyouyou Bakemon (Red Life Force Phantom) , a Technique of her Bloodline. She created the Phantom's which held the man's hands before he was able to escape, the phantoms pulled the man, aiming to throw him towards the tree's. Even though with some difficultness, they threw him towards a tree, and Aika performed hand seals. She used Raiton: Raikou Boruto no Jutsu (Lightning Release: Lightning Bolt Technique), and threw a lightning bolt towards the man, while he was still in mid-air, it didn't hit him. But Aika ran in front of the tree, as the man fell on the ground, she used Dendou Kariyou no Jutsu (Electric Overdose Technique) and touched the man's chest, he got paralyzed. Aika sighed and walked away, not wanting to kill the man.
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 6:10 am
Name: SinnerXion
RPC's name: Shoketsu Koumei
Bloodline Applying for: Crystal Release
Why do you want it: Well I love Doton techniques and crystal release is like a earth based Kekkei Genkai, plus it fits my character.
What will you do with it: I would use its power from my own benefits
What you know about it: I made it so I know plenty about it. At the moment its in the Create Kekkei Genkai Forum (It was approved.).
RP Sample:
Shoketsu ran through the forest as he was chased by three jounin from a different village. Sho knew that they wouldn't give up easily, after all he had just killed someone from their village. Sho spotted a clearing and headed for it, the jounin right at his heels. When he got to the clearing he turned to face them and made a sing handsign. Shōton: Suishō Kyō (Crystal Release: Jade Crystal Mirror) and a snowflake crystal mirror formed from the ground in front of him. He then made another handsign as four images of himself came out of the mirror and attacked the jounin. Even though Sho was still a genin he knew he could win. The jounin struggled for a few moments but they defeated the crystal clones, as the fell apart into many small crystals. Sho smiled as the jounin closed in as he made a quick handsign Shōton: Kesshō Senbon (Crystal Release: Crystal Needles) and the chrystals that made the clones launched from the ground and into the jounin's back. One jounin managed to evade this attack but the other two weren't so lucky as the needles pierced their vital organs and their heart. The one jounin thought of his options and decided to run and get more help but it was too late as crystal started to form around his legs and creeped up his body, imprisoning him. Sho walked over to the imprisoned Jounin and a crystal blade formed in his arm. Sho smiled at the jounin as he thrust the crystal blade into his crystal prison and through his heart, killing him. As Sho left the crystals that he used disinagrated into tiny particles and blew away in the wind.
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 7:12 am
Xion: You are Approved for the Bloodline naturally... HOWEVER, there are one note of consequence I would make to your sample:
1. I'm not sure why, but for both the Crystal Prison and the Crystal Blade techniques, you didn't mention the name of the jutsu used, or even make an indication of hand seals.
...very nicely done, it shows a good use of the techniques and how they can be used. Possibly, it could have included a bit more of crystallization of a wood or earth technique, and not a fire one... but hey, it doesn't have to be perfect.
Happy RPing!
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 9:36 am
Name: Metaphorically Insane
RPC's name: Yasukawa Zenko
Bloodline Applying for: Konaga Clan
Why do you want it: This clan/bloodline, whatever you wish to call it, will augment the abilities of my RPC beyond belief of the normal ninja. And, doesn't it seem like a fitting ability for an insane person to hold?
What will you do with it: Me? I'll do nothing. However, my RPC is going to use it as a fear factor upon many people, and something to rig his ability far beyond those in at his visual level. Who doesn't fear an insane person with unlimited chakra?
What you know about it: Basically, this clan has unlimited chakra, but not without it's weakness. Most of the children in the clan don't even survive, due to the extreme effects of the massive amount given to them. Those that do, are forced to learn to control the chakra to survive. This gives them apt skills with chakra control. The affect of the massive amount of chakra however is that it dulls the sense of touch to a degree, disallowing some things to be felt.
Excessive use can cause "The Burn" which renders the limb useless until the carrier goes into a meditative state. The meditative state is the only way a Konaga member could accomplish anything close to so-called sleep, and heal their wounds. Need I say more?
RP Sample:
A stifled yawn echoed throughout the wooden shack, several rustles following as Zenko sat up. She previously in a laid down meditation position which provided more comfort, and fooled enemies if they tend to stray near. It indeed helped as well when the occasional roaming pervert happen to come across her poor home. The bad habit which has kept itself with her throughout her life came forth, forcing an optic closed. Half-hearted concentration was put into the open eye and chakra surged into it, activating the chakra sight technique which she learned from her father before he died.
The world turned into shades and lengths of chakra. All inanimate objects that held no chakra disappeared from sight, and anything with an ounce of it appeared. A figure with a larger than average chakra signature seemed to be approaching her shack. That's unusual... She thought. In an instant she realized that the only clothing she had on was her underwear, and quickly shot up, snatching random pieces and putting them on. They turned out to be her ever so predominant skirt, and one of her favorite shirts. Of course the pair was worn frequently, keeping true to the partial female stereotype and cleaning them regularly.
Creaking sounds screamed from the boards of the old shack as a surprising force of wind knocked itself against its poor architecture. Soon enough, the shack began to shiver as if showing it was about to collapse. Without taking time to think about it, Zenko ran out of the building before it could eventually fall. The poor attention span that had held her earlier disappeared, and the gust of wind was identified as a jutsu. Lovely, hostile already.
"They sent me to kill you? A harmless little girl?" The figure mocked, a crude laugh bursting forth from his lips. "This'll be too easy... best to have some fun with you first though." He began to approach with a suggestive smile spreading across his face.
"Oh noo~ Please don't hurt me." Zenko pleaded, playing along. As soon as the male came within range, chakra burst into her small, augmenting it. Before he could react, she thrust her fist forward directly into his chest. The blow made a direct hit and tossed his figure in a rag doll movement several yards away. After the attack the chakra sight which had previously been in her eye faded, and along with it the added glow which had appeared with stealth.
The loss of chakra sight blurred her vision and disoriented her, seemingly converting the chakra into pain and tossing it into her mind. All that was felt was a headache, but it was one immense, and for a second it seemed to cover her entire body. Something that had saved her skin many times in situations like these, was that fact that she had been born ambidextrous. Since the loss of vision only affected the vision in her right eye, more concentration was put into the left to see. A slow walk was put forth, allowing her form to approach the male in a seemingly menacing way.
Groans and moans were all that came from the man as he struggled to get up, disorientation overwhelming his mind. He hadn't been expecting such a strong blow from the girl, and payed a dear price for it. A surprise came before his eyes that made him scared of the girl. She was walking towards him with a glare that defied her looks, seeming intent on killing him.
Although it took awhile to get to the man, the disorientation effect was not lost. Zenko grabbed a hold of the mans hair, pulling on it forcefully to bring him up right. Fear was stricken in his eyes, and even more so as a blade made out of pure chakra began forming in her left hand. The concentration needed for it took her mind off of the man for a second, but it was quickly returned once the blade reached its full one-foot length. Waves of pain spread throughout her body as it become complete.
"You're going to die. Is that what you set out to do?" She asked, already knowing the answer to his question. Without giving him a chance to reply, a short blood curdling scream was brought forth as she quickly decapitated the man. His lifeless body falling forward onto the ground with a thud. All that was life that showed life was the blood spattered across her clothes, the nearby surroundings, and the tormented face that was kept before death. Nothing but a smile came from her pale face, her hand tossing the head into the distance. Zenko no longer needed the blade which was still present in her hand, letting it fade after its immediate use. Even if it had been utilized for mere seconds, a painful burn effect overcame her hand. It was ignored.
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 9:59 am
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 10:38 am
Where's the PAIN? ... where is the AGONY of simply existing with this bloodline? Konaga clan members are in pain 24/7, but their body suppresses it, or rather is numbed to the pain itself, which disconnects them from the world in a strange way. Whenever a technique is used, the body reacts, reminding the clan member of their pain and sends out a wave of pain, which is increasingly evermore present as they compound their techniques (the 3rd and 4th uses are more painful then the 1st and 2nd)
...so much of what balances this bloodline is the after effect of utilizing its abilities and the ever present force within them that punishes the user for the temporary power it gives them. When you use chakra sight...it's not just a temporary blurring of vision when it fades... it lasts for 2 posts, as if your vision goes cloudy and you can only see vague blurs. Not only that, but I would imagine the wave of pain gives an annoying little surge of a headache just following as well.
Try to incorporate that in there.
(and Yeah, I'm a little tougher when it comes to my bloodline. heart )
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 10:41 am
Cobra_X Where's the PAIN? ... where is the AGONY of simply existing with this bloodline? Konaga clan members are in pain 24/7, but their body suppresses it, or rather is numbed to the pain itself, which disconnects them from the world in a strange way. Whenever a technique is used, the body reacts, reminding the clan member of their pain and sends out a wave of pain, which is increasingly evermore present as they compound their techniques (the 3rd and 4th uses are more painful then the 1st and 2nd)
...so much of what balances this bloodline is the after effect of utilizing its abilities and the ever present force within them that punishes the user for the temporary power it gives them. When you use chakra sight...it's not just a temporary blurring of vision when it fades... it lasts for 2 posts, as if your vision goes cloudy and you can only see vague blurs. Not only that, but I would imagine the wave of pain gives an annoying little surge of a headache just following as well.
Try to incorporate that in there.
(and Yeah, I'm a little tougher when it comes to my bloodline. heart ) As expected. :3 That's why I respect you. Down to the point, blunt, and tells us what we need to hear.
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Posted: Wed Jan 20, 2010 12:02 pm
Metaphorically Insane Name: Metaphorically Insane
RPC's name: Yasukawa Zenko
Bloodline Applying for: Konaga Clan
Why do you want it: This clan/bloodline, whatever you wish to call it, will augment the abilities of my RPC beyond belief of the normal ninja. And, doesn't it seem like a fitting ability for an insane person to hold?
What will you do with it: Me? I'll do nothing. However, my RPC is going to use it as a fear factor upon many people, and something to rig his ability far beyond those in at his visual level. Who doesn't fear an insane person with unlimited chakra?
What you know about it: Basically, this clan has unlimited chakra, but not without it's weakness. Most of the children in the clan don't even survive, due to the extreme effects of the massive amount given to them. Those that do, are forced to learn to control the chakra to survive. This gives them apt skills with chakra control. The affect of the massive amount of chakra however is that it dulls the sense of touch to a degree, disallowing some things to be felt.
Excessive use can cause "The Burn" which renders the limb useless until the carrier goes into a meditative state. The meditative state is the only way a Konaga member could accomplish anything close to so-called sleep, and heal their wounds. Need I say more?
RP Sample:
A stifled yawn echoed throughout the wooden shack, several rustles following as Zenko sat up. She previously in a laid down meditation position which provided more comfort, and fooled enemies if they tend to stray near. It indeed helped as well when the occasional roaming pervert happen to come across her poor home. The bad habit which has kept itself with her throughout her life came forth, forcing an optic closed. Half-hearted concentration was put into the open eye and chakra surged into it, activating the chakra sight technique which she learned from her father before he died.
The world turned into shades and lengths of chakra. All inanimate objects that held no chakra disappeared from sight, and anything with an ounce of it appeared. A figure with a larger than average chakra signature seemed to be approaching her shack. That's unusual... She thought. In an instant she realized that the only clothing she had on was her underwear, and quickly shot up, snatching random pieces and putting them on. They turned out to be her ever so predominant skirt, and one of her favorite shirts. Of course the pair was worn frequently, keeping true to the partial female stereotype and cleaning them regularly.
Creaking sounds screamed from the boards of the old shack as a surprising force of wind knocked itself against its poor architecture. Soon enough, the shack began to shiver as if showing it was about to collapse. Without taking time to think about it, Zenko ran out of the building before it could eventually fall. The poor attention span that had held her earlier disappeared, and the gust of wind was identified as a jutsu. Lovely, hostile already.
"They sent me to kill you? A harmless little girl?" The figure mocked, a crude laugh bursting forth from his lips. "This'll be too easy... best to have some fun with you first though." He began to approach with a suggestive smile spreading across his face.
"Oh noo~ Please don't hurt me." Zenko pleaded, playing along. As soon as the male came within range, chakra burst into her small, augmenting it. Before he could react, she thrust her fist forward directly into his chest. The blow made a direct hit and tossed his figure in a rag doll movement several yards away. After the attack the chakra sight which had previously been in her eye faded, and along with it the added glow which had appeared with stealth.
The loss of chakra sight blurred her vision and disoriented her, seemingly converting the chakra into pain and tossing it into her mind. All that was felt was a headache, but it was one immense, and for a second it seemed to cover her entire body. Something that had saved her skin many times in situations like these, was that fact that she had been born ambidextrous. Since the loss of vision only affected the vision in her right eye, more concentration was put into the left to see. A slow walk was put forth, allowing her form to approach the male in a seemingly menacing way.
Groans and moans were all that came from the man as he struggled to get up, disorientation overwhelming his mind. He hadn't been expecting such a strong blow from the girl, and payed a dear price for it. A surprise came before his eyes that made him scared of the girl. She was walking towards him with a glare that defied her looks, seeming intent on killing him.
Although it took awhile to get to the man, the disorientation effect was not lost. Zenko grabbed a hold of the mans hair, pulling on it forcefully to bring him up right. Fear was stricken in his eyes, and even more so as a blade made out of pure chakra began forming in her left hand. The concentration needed for it took her mind off of the man for a second, but it was quickly returned once the blade reached its full one-foot length. Waves of pain spread throughout her body as it become complete.
"You're going to die. Is that what you set out to do?" She asked, already knowing the answer to his question. Without giving him a chance to reply, a short blood curdling scream was brought forth as she quickly decapitated the man. His lifeless body falling forward onto the ground with a thud. All that was life that showed life was the blood spattered across her clothes, the nearby surroundings, and the tormented face that was kept before death. Nothing but a smile came from her pale face, her hand tossing the head into the distance. Zenko no longer needed the blade which was still present in her hand, letting it fade after its immediate use. Even if it had been utilized for mere seconds, a painful burn effect overcame her hand. It was ignored.
Shoved maybe 3-4 more sentences in there. 0x That good, or do you want me to scrap it and come up with something else?
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