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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 3:56 am
greendragon4444 Character: Gin Shuriyama On this day, Gin was running the trail through the woods that leads to the academy. Having an overactive imagination, he kept imagining the trees being an obstacle course and he began diving and weaving between them. Other then being his daily exercise, it was also his way of having fun. However, he was too distracted in his state of play, that he did not notice that he was being followed. Suddenly a figure jumped out of the trees and grabbed him. Being only 12, he did not have enough strength to hold off his attacker who was full grown. After his futile attempt to defend himself, he was dropped to the ground. Looking up at his attackers face, Gin almost fell into a state of shock when he recognized his teacher wearing a very mischievous grin on his face. Sensei Matsuu waived his brush around, showing Gin the weapon was just used against him before leaping back into the woods laughing heartily. Gin quickly pulled out a polished kunai to see "DUNCE" written across his forehead. Apparently, their game of pranking each other was in full swing again now that school had begun. Gin whispered to himself, "I can't wait till he gets to school and sees what I did to his office." Gin then pulls out his canteen and starts trying to wash the ink off his face before he gets to class. "This year is going to be interesting" Gin mused to himself.
Love it. Pass biggrin
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 3:57 am
The Injured Pixel kouri-chan_xx Tryone_Riday_ANBU Qyp Both of you need more to your samples... like some action! Also, keep an eye on your grammar and spelling... I see only one word wrong, but, eh... Like, another paragraph at least... and you both have the same kind of sample... waking up from under a tree... GET ORIGINAL DAMN IT! Also, joining a village. You have to pass the academy thread (here) first and then ask the Kage (leader) of the village to join. not my fault copied me XD XD Well Qyp still speaks the truth. Could you get to improving the sample please? xd You have a few spelling and grammar errors.
@The Injured Pixel (Tappy?): I like it smile Could you develop it a bit more? Then it would be perfect smile Sure thing. And sorry, I tried to make it like it is because I didn't want to really make it seem like the person appeared out of thin air, even thought they sort of are, I think I'm just trying to hard. I'll give it another go smile RP Sample"Come back here!" the old man yelled as Renshi ran away. Sweat ran down his face as he tried to run faster and faster. He just had to step on that cat's tail.. and it just HAD to be the one cat that would go berserk. Renshi stopped, put his hands on his knees, and breathed heavily. He tried to let out a pathetic sigh, but failed. He'd never be allowed to that fruit stand again, after what that freak cat did to those innocent bystanders. He fell back, his chest heaving, but slowing each time. He looked back. The old man wasn't following him anymore. CRASHRenshi jumped up in shock. He saw the old man, still terribly angry. He had tried to throw a flower pot at him! "Yikes!" Renshi yelled, as he continued to run down the market street, finally crashing onto the grass when he saw he was no longer being followed. Correction, he thought. I'm never being allowed back to any fruit stand.
Hehe.... poor Renshi! Pass smile
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 22, 2010 7:50 am
kouri-chan_xx pirate_king999 Location: Shogun's Castle Time: 1:00 am Mission: Capture Documents, Kill the Shogun Ruuko sits in a tree a few yards away from the samurai guards on duty. he takes out his composite bow and loads it with a anbu level paper bomb warped around a arrow. it silently is pulled back as he aim's for the door between the two samurai. the arrow hit with deadly accuracy. hearing the arrow hit the door the samurai looked at it wondering where it came from. Ruuko ran swiftly to the back of the castle so he would not be in range for the boom. like planned the paper bomb basically destroyed the front door. every guard in the place rushed to the front thinking at it was a frontal assult. while they abandoned their post's, Ruuko snuck inside and made his way to the shoguns room. of course the shogun was awake so he just let himself in. "hello there shogun-sama. i have a offer for you." he took out the documents he was meant to steal. "i'll give you this back if you let me work with you." the shogun was very stupid and said anything to get his papers back. he agreed to the terms and Ruuko set them on his bed. he took out a cigar and handed to the shogun. "to good business." the shogun lit the cigar and began to smoke it. to bad he never got to finish it. a few second's after it was lit it blew up in his face. Ruuko loved using the exploding cigar. he took back the documents and made his way out of the castle and back to his village. the shogun was found dead the next day.
I saw lots of grammatical errors including
-capitals -apostrophes being not where they're supposed to be
But. I do like it!! XD
Just note that the shoguns in this guild will be NOWHERE near as stupid wink
Just make the grammar changes and you're good to go.Location: Shogun's Castle Time: 1:00 am Mission: Capture Documents, Kill the Shogun Ruuko sits in a tree a few yards away from the samurai guards on duty. He takes out his composite bow and loads it with a anbu level paper bomb warped around a arrow. It silently is pulled back as he aim's for the door between the two samurai. The arrow hit with deadly accuracy. Hearing the arrow hit the door the samurai looked at it wondering where it came from. Ruuko ran swiftly to the back of the castle so he would not be in range for the boom. Like planned the paper bomb basically destroyed the front door. Every guard in the place rushed to the front thinking at it was a frontal assault. While they abandoned their post's, Ruuko snuck inside and made his way to the shoguns room. Of course the shogun was wide awake so he just let himself in. "Hello there shogun-sama. i have a offer for you." he said taking out of his jacket the documents he was meant to steal. "I'll give you this back if you let me work with you." The shogun was very stupid and would said anything to get his papers back. He agreed to the terms and Ruuko set them on his bed. He took out a cigar and handed to the shogun. "To good business." The shogun lit the cigar and began to smoke it. To bad he never got to finish it. A few second's after it was lit it blew up in his face. Ruuko loved using the exploding cigar. He took back the documents and made his way out of the castle and back to his village. The shogun was found dead the next day. better at all
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Posted: Sat Jul 24, 2010 11:41 am
I haven't decided on a character yet, so I'm gonna make this one anonymous. Hope that's okay. smile
RP Sample
Rain fell and branches swished, creating a beautiful music that the girl loved with all of her heart. Water soaked her hair and clothes and made the branches she grasped slippery, but that had never stopped her before, and it didn't stop her now. In fact, she reveled in the sensation of wetness, feeling the drops slide off her skin to fall to the forest floor far below.
The girl swung her leg over a broad branch and leaned back against the enormous tree's trunk. She listened to the gentle roll of thunder as she caught her breath. The sound had always reminded her of laughter, she could never understand how others saw malice in the resonance. Her breath back, the girl began to stand up.
For the first time in fourteen years, her foot slipped.
The girl tumbled off the limb, falling through leaves, twigs, and branches. Her ankle hit a bough, and she heard something crack. The girl tried to twist her body into a more advantageous position, but her muscles screamed in protest, and she wasn't quick enough. The girl hit the ground with a resounding crack! Her arm was twisted into an unnatural position, her ankle felt like it was on fire, her vision swam, and a dull roar echoed in her ears.
"Ouch."
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 4:54 am
pirate_king999 kouri-chan_xx pirate_king999 Location: Shogun's Castle Time: 1:00 am Mission: Capture Documents, Kill the Shogun Ruuko sits in a tree a few yards away from the samurai guards on duty. he takes out his composite bow and loads it with a anbu level paper bomb warped around a arrow. it silently is pulled back as he aim's for the door between the two samurai. the arrow hit with deadly accuracy. hearing the arrow hit the door the samurai looked at it wondering where it came from. Ruuko ran swiftly to the back of the castle so he would not be in range for the boom. like planned the paper bomb basically destroyed the front door. every guard in the place rushed to the front thinking at it was a frontal assult. while they abandoned their post's, Ruuko snuck inside and made his way to the shoguns room. of course the shogun was awake so he just let himself in. "hello there shogun-sama. i have a offer for you." he took out the documents he was meant to steal. "i'll give you this back if you let me work with you." the shogun was very stupid and said anything to get his papers back. he agreed to the terms and Ruuko set them on his bed. he took out a cigar and handed to the shogun. "to good business." the shogun lit the cigar and began to smoke it. to bad he never got to finish it. a few second's after it was lit it blew up in his face. Ruuko loved using the exploding cigar. he took back the documents and made his way out of the castle and back to his village. the shogun was found dead the next day.
I saw lots of grammatical errors including
-capitals -apostrophes being not where they're supposed to be
But. I do like it!! XD
Just note that the shoguns in this guild will be NOWHERE near as stupid wink
Just make the grammar changes and you're good to go.Location: Shogun's Castle Time: 1:00 am Mission: Capture Documents, Kill the Shogun Ruuko sits in a tree a few yards away from the samurai guards on duty. He takes out his composite bow and loads it with a anbu level paper bomb warped around a arrow. It silently is pulled back as he aim's for the door between the two samurai. The arrow hit with deadly accuracy. Hearing the arrow hit the door the samurai looked at it wondering where it came from. Ruuko ran swiftly to the back of the castle so he would not be in range for the boom. Like planned the paper bomb basically destroyed the front door. Every guard in the place rushed to the front thinking at it was a frontal assault. While they abandoned their post's, Ruuko snuck inside and made his way to the shoguns room. Of course the shogun was wide awake so he just let himself in. "Hello there shogun-sama. i have a offer for you." he said taking out of his jacket the documents he was meant to steal. "I'll give you this back if you let me work with you." The shogun was very stupid and would said anything to get his papers back. He agreed to the terms and Ruuko set them on his bed. He took out a cigar and handed to the shogun. "To good business." The shogun lit the cigar and began to smoke it. To bad he never got to finish it. A few second's after it was lit it blew up in his face. Ruuko loved using the exploding cigar. He took back the documents and made his way out of the castle and back to his village. The shogun was found dead the next day. better at all Dimi Deiod approves of your roleplaying! Passed.
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 4:55 am
NotQueenYet137 I haven't decided on a character yet, so I'm gonna make this one anonymous. Hope that's okay. smile RP SampleRain fell and branches swished, creating a beautiful music that the girl loved with all of her heart. Water soaked her hair and clothes and made the branches she grasped slippery, but that had never stopped her before, and it didn't stop her now. In fact, she reveled in the sensation of wetness, feeling the drops slide off her skin to fall to the forest floor far below. The girl swung her leg over a broad branch and leaned back against the enormous tree's trunk. She listened to the gentle roll of thunder as she caught her breath. The sound had always reminded her of laughter, she could never understand how others saw malice in the resonance. Her breath back, the girl began to stand up. For the first time in fourteen years, her foot slipped. The girl tumbled off the limb, falling through leaves, twigs, and branches. Her ankle hit a bough, and she heard something crack. The girl tried to twist her body into a more advantageous position, but her muscles screamed in protest, and she wasn't quick enough. The girl hit the ground with a resounding crack! Her arm was twisted into an unnatural position, her ankle felt like it was on fire, her vision swam, and a dull roar echoed in her ears. "Ouch." Dimi Deiod approves of your roleplaying! Passed.
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 7:09 am
(still thinking about village, and my character) Role play sample
Clovanos walked slowly to the door of the little shop on the corner of the street. Clovanos opened the door, and walked in casually. He looked around at all the items stacked up on the walls. Mostly useless junk, but then it caught his eye. A single sword in on the wall mounted. Clovanos briskly walked to the front of the store to where the store owner was. "How much is the sword over there on the wall" Clovanos said pointing to where the wonderfully crafted blade was.
The shop keeper replied " It is not for sale, that is the great legendary sword of the Third Hokage."Clovanos frowned, he really wanted that sword. Clovanos walked out of the store, and down the street to a weapon smiths shop. Clovanos walked in, and was suddenly shocked by what he has seen. The black smith had been murdered, and his assailant was still here.
" water style water prism jutsu" Clovanos said as the enemy ninja was absorbed into the sphere of liquid. Clovanos pulled out a kunai, and threw it into the prism piercing the ninjas heart, because it couldn't move. " I must quickly tell the kage" Clovanos said bolting out of the shop.
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 7:31 am
Cyanide is the cure (still thinking about village, and my character) Role play sampleClovanos walked slowly to the door of the little shop on the corner of the street. Clovanos opened the door, and walked in casually. He looked around at all the items stacked up on the walls. Mostly useless junk, but then it caught his eye. A single sword in on the wall mounted. Clovanos briskly walked to the front of the store to where the store owner was. "How much is the sword over there on the wall" Clovanos said pointing to where the wonderfully crafted blade was. The shop keeper replied " It is not for sale, that is the great legendary sword of the Third Hokage."Clovanos frowned, he really wanted that sword. Clovanos walked out of the store, and down the street to a weapon smiths shop. Clovanos walked in, and was suddenly shocked by what he has seen. The black smith had been murdered, and his assailant was still here. " water style water prism jutsu" Clovanos said as the enemy ninja was absorbed into the sphere of liquid. Clovanos pulled out a kunai, and threw it into the prism piercing the ninjas heart, because it couldn't move. " I must quickly tell the kage" Clovanos said bolting out of the shop. Dimi Deiod approves of your roleplaying! Passed. Also, did the third hokage own a blade? eek Must have missed that part.
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 7:36 am
( It was a guess the third hokage that's the old man, I made it up but he did have the monkey staff thing smile )
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 8:43 am
(character: Adachike Last name: N/A // Still thinking about my and village srry)
Sample
His blade was steady and his determination was fortified; the young ninja brought such a feeling of power that his comrades felt pressured by only his appearance. As soon as the alarm went off all the young ninja`s began to disperse in every direction, however it was to late in the far off distance you could hear battles cries which filled the ears of the young and untrained ninja`s who were about to experience their first legitimate ninja battle.
Adachike was nervous of course but camouflaged it with his high determination, from the sounds of two metallic objects colliding with every second passing it was obvious that the battle would soon reach the youngsters.
It was if the enemy was hiding in Adachike`s very shadow for the young ninja did not notice, see or even hear the enemy behind him. Not a word was uttered during the seconds that passed. All words that were exchanged were said by each others deadly gaze.
Adachike, leaped a good amount of distance which stunned his enemy for Adachike gave no warning that would signal he was about to move, which stunned the ninja for only a second.
"I will have to work fast with this one, but from the way he was able to sneak to my rear its clear his very skilled, and probably has much more chakra then I, so I will have to use a defensive jutsu." Adachike calculated in the short moment.
As Adachike`s fingers weaved together to form multiple hands signs his enemy had already began to leap towards him with a kunai ready at hand. As the last hand sign was completed Adachike looked at his opponent with a smile...
"Blinding Bubbles Jutsu!" As Adachike said those very words a stream of bubbles emerged from his mouth and surrounded the eyes of is opponent then on contact with his enemy`s eyes, the bubbles exploded and released a red powder that blinded the enemy ninja instantly.
The ninja stopped all movement since he had lost one of the most precious senses which was very much needed in battle and so the ninja put his blind eyes on where he thought was Adachike and said. "Good work, now onwards to the second exam"
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 9:01 am
Quote: ( It was a guess the third hokage that's the old man, I made it up but he did have the monkey staff thing ) Got it!Quote: (character: Adachike Last name: N/A // Still thinking about my and village srry) Sample His blade was steady and his determination was fortified; the young ninja brought such a feeling of power that his comrades felt pressured by only his appearance. As soon as the alarm went off all the young ninja`s began to disperse in every direction, however it was to late in the far off distance you could hear battles cries which filled the ears of the young and untrained ninja`s who were about to experience their first legitimate ninja battle. Adachike was nervous of course but camouflaged it with his high determination, from the sounds of two metallic objects colliding with every second passing it was obvious that the battle would soon reach the youngsters. It was if the enemy was hiding in Adachike`s very shadow for the young ninja did not notice, see or even hear the enemy behind him. Not a word was uttered during the seconds that passed. All words that were exchanged were said by each others deadly gaze. Adachike, leaped a good amount of distance which stunned his enemy for Adachike gave no warning that would signal he was about to move, which stunned the ninja for only a second. "I will have to work fast with this one, but from the way he was able to sneak to my rear its clear his very skilled, and probably has much more chakra then I, so I will have to use a defensive jutsu." Adachike calculated in the short moment. As Adachike`s fingers weaved together to form multiple hands signs his enemy had already began to leap towards him with a kunai ready at hand. As the last hand sign was completed Adachike looked at his opponent with a smile... "Blinding Bubbles Jutsu!" As Adachike said those very words a stream of bubbles emerged from his mouth and surrounded the eyes of is opponent then on contact with his enemy`s eyes, the bubbles exploded and released a red powder that blinded the enemy ninja instantly. The ninja stopped all movement since he had lost one of the most precious senses which was very much needed in battle and so the ninja put his blind eyes on where he thought was Adachike and said. "Good work, now onwards to the second exam" You confused me a bit with the part when Aachike leaped and you wrote that he stunned the enemy two times. Other than that it is very well detailed. Pass.
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 6:40 pm
On the porch of an old rusty shack, Hataro sat in a comfortable position leaned up against one of the beams with a long wooden pipe in his mouth. "E-even if you take me out, another assassin will just come to attack your village." Hataro read out loud in a dark voice to imitate the character in the book. "heh, heh, heh." "As long as we live in this cursed shinobi world... There will never be peace" Hataro continued in the dark tone. Hataro stood up to his feet in excitement as he continued to read. "In that case... I'll break the curse." Hataro stated in a new heroic tone. "If there is such a thing as peace, I'll find it! I'm not giving up." he continued. "Wh-who are you?" Hataro questioned out loud in his former dark character. "My name is Naruto!" Hataro answered to himself, quoting the novel's final ending words, in the former heroic tone as he closed the book shut.
"Wow! What an amazing book. I don't think I ever felt so inspired!" Hataro stated to himself as he took a puff of smoke from his pipe and sat back down on the porch. "If only I could have known the author. He must of been such a great man. he must of been a-" Hataro was cut off by a sharp sting to the crown of his head. "Ahhh!!! WHAT THE HECK MOM!?" He yelled turning around only to meet the end of the rolling pin that hit him the first time. "OW!" Hataro howled as he held his face. "Smoking again huh!? What did I tell you about smoking that pipe!? Your not even old enough!" She yelled as she continued to relentlessly hit him with the wooden cooking appliance. "Ow! I was just! Ow! read- Ow! But- Ow! All the other kids! Ow!" "I don't want to hear it!" She harped as he picked up the pipe and snapped it in half and tossed it on the ground which lead her seeing the book next to Hataro. "Oh and reading those books again from that pervert of an author huh!?" She questioned raising the rolling pin up ready to go at Hataro again. Hataro quickly held up his arms in defense, "Wait! No! This was different! It's about a ninja hero! Besides, I saw you reading Make-out Paradise II the other day!" Hataro pointed out in defense. "That's because I'm an adult!" snapping back. "Besides there is nothing more thrilling then the way he captivates the emotions! That burning passion of love between a man and a woman!" Her tone and posture had changed entirely from that of angry mother to an innocence of a young mistress. "It reminds me of how your father and I used to-" "Aw, Mom! That's gross!" Hataro yelled cutting her off.
((I was going to add more before I noticed how long this post got... My intent was to show a little of how Hataro acts and show his love of books. Also to show off a little of my epic Naruto fandom by implementing Jiraiya's book "Tale of a Gutsy Shinobi. Oh and of course to display Hataro's mother Mika who is a key important person to Hataro. I wanted to put off a side that showed she is a motherly figure in her early 30's, who at times still has the mentality and spunk of a teenaged adult
Sorry for making such a long post >.< [If you want to hear more, by all means I will gladly continue! X3]))
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 11:46 pm
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!! rofl heart Pass.
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Posted: Thu Jul 29, 2010 3:15 pm
Still thinking of character so her becoming a Genin is just something fo the sample. Can we make him/her/it any rank? RP sample ------------------- Tsuki stared at the gleaming metal of her headband. Even though the sky was dark and full of gray clouds that one piece of metal and fabric had made a ray of hope shine into her world. I'm a ninja. she repeated to herself over and over again still not getting used to the term. An hour ago she had graduated from the Academy and her sensei had given her this. She traced her fingers over the sign that represented Konoha village. She glanced the other Genin happily showing off their forehead protectors to proud parents. Tsuki had no one to be proud of her, no one to show the headband to, she had nobody. She looked down at the headband again but the happiness she felt before had vanished and was replaced by loneliness. --------------------- Not the best I can RP. Once I figure out me character and stuff it'll be better.
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 29, 2010 7:32 pm
Randomness1207 Still thinking of character so her becoming a Genin is just something fo the sample. Can we make him/her/it any rank? RP sample------------------- Tsuki stared at the gleaming metal of her headband. Even though the sky was dark and full of gray clouds that one piece of metal and fabric had made a ray of hope shine into her world. I'm a ninja. she repeated to herself over and over again still not getting used to the term. An hour ago she had graduated from the Academy and her sensei had given her this. She traced her fingers over the sign that represented Konoha village. She glanced the other Genin happily showing off their forehead protectors to proud parents. Tsuki had no one to be proud of her, no one to show the headband to, she had nobody. She looked down at the headband again but the happiness she felt before had vanished and was replaced by loneliness. --------------------- Not the best I can RP. Once I figure out me character and stuff it'll be better.
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