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 Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 2:38 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2012 10:34 am
Donut, were you drunk? That's not exactly the proper way to assist someone with weapon creation... nor argumentative situations... We've also got a Custom Weapon Review thread for a reason... *Scratches head*
Hmph... Let's see what we can do...
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 1:34 pm
Name: Even if it's not truly relevant, you should probably still name your bag.
Weapon Dimensions: If it's 19"x11", why is the pouch itself only 8"? Unless I'm picturing it wrong in my head, the fabric would be pretty dang thick... Umm. I'd say something along the lines of 19"x12" and 10" deep makes more sense.
Weapon Weight: Could probably read something like "Anywhere from 5 to 40 pounds depending on contents."
Description: Umm... I'm not too sure about using your basement... as, I don't really know that you have a house, or anything. You could probably ask the Hokage about making a den or cave in Fire Country in order to store your materials; if not something under the Hokage's office. Haji's a pretty approachable guy, so long as you're imaginative and engaging with stuff.
Ability Summary: This is where the base of your mechanics should be flattened out, and stuff. I can give you a hand with it when I get back if you need it, but you should be able to figure out what to do just by looking at past entries.
Gotta go, but I'll be back in like an hour or so!
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 1:50 pm
I probably could have handled that better. So I guess I should apologize for being a jerk.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 2:02 pm
Character: Kurai Satetsu
Link to profile: Profile
Weapon Name: Okui
Weapon Type: Bag
Weapon Height: 20” length
12” height
8" width
10" depth
Weapon Weight: Five to Forty pounds depending on the amount of sand within it.
Description: Within this bag is a seal that Kurai got by paying a sealing shinobi. There is a seal within the bag and at her home within the secret basement is a seal as well. In her secret basement resides gold dust and the seals are connected to each other. Once she is close to emptying the bag of gold dust it instantly refills due to how the seals work with each other. The seal is also able to devour the sand and place it back within her secret basement outside of battle for the small cost of ten chakra. Also outside of battle she is able to switch metals that are within her basement for twenty chakra.
Ability Summary:
• Seal summoning
- Because there is a seal within the bag and a seal where the sand is located it's able to transfer sand into the bag when empty or close to being empty instantly.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 2:03 pm
Merp~ Mist did ask me, though to make a home within the village. I said Mist could have a first floor apartment with access to a basement. If you ask that Mist still have a physical basement that can be entered/exited. I know of a certain mansion in the Fire Country that could be of some usefulness.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:28 pm
Yes, I'd prefer something like that, thank you.Bloop. Okay, I'm back.
Weapon Weight: Just tag on "...amount and type of sand..."
Description: This section doesn't really need the number details of stuff, but I suppose it's fine. You might need to mention something about there being different allotted seals, or something. Different "tunnels" that connect to different piles of sand.
Ability Summary: This is where numbers and stuff should be explained. The section really needs to be renamed and junk... Umm, so, here;
• Summoning seal lined inner, connected to outsourced supply.
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {10} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated, and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, the technique can be sustained until dismissed.
• Sand Swap: At the cost of {30} chakra and a moment of concentration, the active seals switch, allowing different sand to be supplied to Okui. This technique only costs {10} chakra outside of combat.
How's that sound?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:33 pm
Shinsua Yes, I'd prefer something like that, thank you.Bloop. Okay, I'm back.
Weapon Weight: Just tag on "...amount and type of sand..."
Description: This section doesn't really need the number details of stuff, but I suppose it's fine. You might need to mention something about there being different allotted seals, or something. Different "tunnels" that connect to different piles of sand.
Ability Summary: This is where numbers and stuff should be explained. The section really needs to be renamed and junk... Umm, so, here;
• Summoning seal lined inner, connected to outsourced supply.
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {10} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated, and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, the technique can be sustained until dismissed.
• Sand Swap: At the cost of {30} chakra and a moment of concentration, the active seals switch, allowing different sand to be supplied to Okui. This technique only costs {10} chakra outside of combat.
How's that sound? Well the issue with that is the fact that how am I going to keep track of how much sand is used and such. Even then is it going to cost me 10 chakra per post to use?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:35 pm
Oh, hmm... Gotcha... Theeeen;
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {15} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated for a moderate period (3 posts), and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, this technique can be sustained until dismissed.
How about that?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:50 pm
Shinsua Oh, hmm... Gotcha... Theeeen;
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {15} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated for a moderate period (3 posts), and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, this technique can be sustained until dismissed.
How about that? 50 to keep it open until the battle ends?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:54 pm
The Monster of the Mist Shinsua Oh, hmm... Gotcha... Theeeen;
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {15} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated for a moderate period (3 posts), and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, this technique can be sustained until dismissed.
How about that? 50 to keep it open until the battle ends?
I'd rather not have it be something indefinite... 20 for 6 posts?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:55 pm
Shinsua The Monster of the Mist Shinsua Oh, hmm... Gotcha... Theeeen;
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {15} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated for a moderate period (3 posts), and sand immediately fills Okui, or is replaced to Kurai's supply. If used outside of combat, this technique can be sustained until dismissed.
How about that? 50 to keep it open until the battle ends?
I'd rather not have it be something indefinite... 20 for 6 posts?
Deal. Once the battle is over how much to seal all the sand back?
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 3:58 pm
Character: Kurai Satetsu
Link to profile: Profile
Weapon Name: Okui
Weapon Type: Bag
Weapon Height: 20” length
12” height
8" width
10" depth
Weapon Weight: Five to Forty pounds depending on the amount of sand within it.
Description: Within this bag is a seal that allows the transportation of objects. Kurai paid off a seal specialist to make it specifically for her sand and dust. Depending on what she wants she'll focus her chakra into the seal and change it to one of the many other seals. Each is aligned with a different metal. An unknown location holds many different types of sand and dust, each with a different seal underneath the enormous piles of sand and dust.
Ability Summary:
• Summoning seal lined inner, connected to outsourced supply.
• Sand Summoning: At the cost of {20} chakra, the seals at both ends are activated, and sand immediately fills Okui and constantly replaces the missing sand for six posts. If used outside of combat, the technique can be sustained until dismissed.
• Sand Swap: At the cost of {30} chakra and a moment of concentration, the active seals switch, allowing different sand to be supplied to Okui. This technique only costs {10} chakra outside of combat.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 4:00 pm
If you're fine with 20 during and outside of combat, then you're good to go. Umm... but, clean up the grammar in the description.
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 4:06 pm
Shinsua If you're fine with 20 during and outside of combat, then you're good to go. Umm... but, clean up the grammar in the description. Better?
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