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 Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:22 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:31 pm
Hahahaha. ARGH! Someone needs to approve my demon application so I can finish my profile. D;
It will probably get declined though. I only spent 15 minutes on it. >>
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:05 pm
Pretty long for fifteen minutes. I started reading it, but kinda gave up a few sentences in cause I hate walls of text. Paragraph moar!
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:08 pm
I type really fast. xD
It would have been more details on the attacking and such, but I just wasn't feeling the RP coming on today. o3o
Which is why I only spent 15 minutes on it. xD
Ah, sorry. I'm terrible at paragraphing. In fact, it had no paragraphs when I first posted it up, but then I was like "Nah, they wont even read it" so I added in a few random paragraphs. xD
I just never know where to put them. @_@
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:13 pm
I usually split mine up whenever there's a break in subject, or if the paragraph is getting just plain too thick.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:24 pm
Thats what I'm always told, but its never helped me much. xD
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:30 pm
Well, one prime place to make a new paragraph is when a different character is acting or being referenced. I usually tend to keep a paragraph of my character's impressions, and then a paragraph or three of his actions. Just, whenever subjects seem to shift, you make a new paragraph to match. It's like a long pause really. Paragraph where the camera position would change in a movie I suppose.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:31 pm
I suppose. xD
Hmmm... but yeah, what do you think of my sample? I wanna see if I could improve on to much before its looked at. O:
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:34 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:35 pm
Ah, I'd look, but I need to be someplace five minutes ago. Latah.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:36 pm
Cya Hinote! o3o
@Hark: Not only would I give that guy a hug. I WANT TO GIVE HIM A HUG... Like... Right now.
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:38 pm
I'm back... Since no one was on I spent two hours straightening my room. Then I WENT to play Fallout: New Vegas, but then my girlfriend came up and started playing, then didn't want to play anymore, but instead of giving me the controller to play like I had wanted, she wanted to play Call of Duty,then I got bored with not playing so I came back down here.....
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:40 pm
Dude, be happy you have a girlfriend cool enough to play videogames with you. xD
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:42 pm
minty got nuzzled by harky-kun >w<
wood- what girl wouldn't like video games?!
enchanted- do you have call of duty: black ops?
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Posted: Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:43 pm
@Mint: The majority of them? xD
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