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 Posted: Sat Nov 25, 2006 12:20 pm
B.C._theanimator ((I've been gone from the guild for a long time and when I returned to redeem myself, I saw alot of changes and things and my profile seems to have run off (Although the clan I made up still exists). THerefore, I will start from a clean slate, as if this is my first day in the guild, If that's ok. I'll start by posting here)) RP sample: Tatianna giggled softly while hunched over by the edge of a small lake surrounded by various forms of plant life and water-dwelling creatures. A muffled croak emitted from the center of her enclosed hands, held in a cupped form, the fingers spread just far enough to allow air to circulate. She lowered her face close to her hands, seemingly trying to peek inbetween the said cracks. Another croak forced through, causing her to lift her head back with full laughter this time. Carefully, she lowered her cupped hands to the squeshy bank of the lake and opened them. A small toad slipped out across her fingers and hopped off to the safety of the water.
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Posted: Sat Nov 25, 2006 12:21 pm
DEYJWON Ok here goes and i mean here goes nothing My ninja: Retzu Zeriua. No village. Retzu was just coming to his clans door when he heard blood crudled screams. He rushed to the source of the sound to see his family being killed one bye one. The attacker had a demonic look in his eyes. He stared at Retzu for only a secound then went back to shredding more people to bits. When something grabbed his leg. he looked down to see it was himself tugging on his leg. It was covered in blood. The thing came back and it said "Time to die my.... little brother!". And with that Retzu let out a big cry and. found himself under a tree. "man i cant belive i had that dream again i just wish i was stronger to stop him." he cried under the tree.
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Posted: Sat Nov 25, 2006 1:07 pm
ivory_vamp Pass. And that's probably the best idea (start from a clean slate). I'm happy you decided to do that. Thanks. I've been really trying to understand this Battle System, but I think I'll get the hang of it once I start Academy in the village, heh.
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Posted: Sat Nov 25, 2006 6:34 pm
lonewarrior666 A loud boom was heard and steam started to rise from one Naomi Yoshi apartment. "Damnit why do I always screw up at the evil genjutsu?" said one confused Yoshi. After a minuite of silance "Maybe I'm thinking of it wrong." Ok, my firends are in danger. The only way i can save them is with this genjutsu. Ok ready Handsigns were made and Naomi said the jutsu. Nothing happened " Did i do the genjutsu correctly?" said Naomi. Three seconds later another large boom was heard and smoke once again came from the apartment but the only difference this time a black Naomi appered too... is this better? Am i so bad that bad that no will help me? crying
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kouri-chan_xx Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Nov 25, 2006 11:37 pm
lonewarrior666 lonewarrior666 A loud boom was heard and steam started to rise from one Naomi Yoshi apartment. "Damnit why do I always screw up at the evil genjutsu?" said one confused Yoshi. After a minuite of silance "Maybe I'm thinking of it wrong." Ok, my firends are in danger. The only way i can save them is with this genjutsu. Ok ready Handsigns were made and Naomi said the jutsu. Nothing happened " Did i do the genjutsu correctly?" said Naomi. Three seconds later another large boom was heard and smoke once again came from the apartment but the only difference this time a black Naomi appered too... is this better? Am i so bad that bad that no will help me? crying no I missed yours, sorry. ^-^; I like it! Pass~
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Posted: Sun Nov 26, 2006 11:31 am
Hi every one im new im going to post a sample but the battle sytem is conpoosing me.
Sample:
Arge was walking home when it cliked in his mind that his swords were still at the smith getting repared. He ran to the black smith and walked in. "HI" he said "I was just checking oon my swords." "Oh" said the smith "hold on." The smith walked to the back and came back with them. "here you go" said the smith as he handed Arge his swords. "Thank you." said Arge. Arge made it home. He opened the door and layed on his bed. "ah" he thought "time to relax"
(i love relaxing) (hope ypu liked it)
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Posted: Sun Nov 26, 2006 8:08 pm
RP sample:
The clouds passed by as lilly sat there watching the sky. The wind tossing her long crimson hair across her face depriving her from the beautiful view of the clouds. She sat ther for what seemed like forever, until a single drop of water hit her on the nose. "Oh"said lilly as blinked and shook her head to rid herself of the unwanted rain drop. She then stood up and started on her way looking for somewhere to find shelter from the rain that had steadily increased.
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Posted: Sun Nov 26, 2006 8:20 pm
Banasilo Hi every one im new im going to post a sample but the battle sytem is conpoosing me. Sample: Arge was walking home when it cliked in his mind that his swords were still at the smith getting repared. He ran to the black smith and walked in. "HI" he said "I was just checking oon my swords." "Oh" said the smith "hold on." The smith walked to the back and came back with them. "here you go" said the smith as he handed Arge his swords. "Thank you." said Arge. Arge made it home. He opened the door and layed on his bed. "ah" he thought "time to relax" (i love relaxing) (hope ypu liked it)
-No Pass-
Hmmm... try to lesson up on saying "---- said" all the time. And then, you can't just say "Arge made it home." Did he walk home? Did he fly on the magical bus home? Otherwise it was good. Post one more for me. ^-^
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Posted: Sun Nov 26, 2006 8:21 pm
lost_leigha RP sample: The clouds passed by as lilly sat there watching the sky. The wind tossing her long crimson hair across her face depriving her from the beautiful view of the clouds. She sat ther for what seemed like forever, until a single drop of water hit her on the nose. "Oh"said lilly as blinked and shook her head to rid herself of the unwanted rain drop. She then stood up and started on her way looking for somewhere to find shelter from the rain that had steadily increased.
-Pass-
Very nice. Simple, sweet and interesting.
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Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 6:45 pm
ivory_vamp Banasilo Hi every one im new im going to post a sample but the battle sytem is conpoosing me. Sample: Arge was walking home when it cliked in his mind that his swords were still at the smith getting repared. He ran to the black smith and walked in. "HI" he said "I was just checking oon my swords." "Oh" said the smith "hold on." The smith walked to the back and came back with them. "here you go" said the smith as he handed Arge his swords. "Thank you." said Arge. Arge made it home. He opened the door and layed on his bed. "ah" he thought "time to relax" (i love relaxing) (hope ypu liked it)
-No Pass-
Hmmm... try to lesson up on saying "---- said" all the time. And then, you can't just say "Arge made it home." Did he walk home? Did he fly on the magical bus home? Otherwise it was good. Post one more for me. ^-^OMG MAGIC BUS! Sample sad edited) Sample: Arge was walking home when it cliked in his mind that his swords were still at the smith getting repared. He ran to the black smith and walked in. "HI" he said "I was just checking oon my swords." "Oh" said the smith "hold on." The smith walked to the back and came back with them. "here you go" said the smith as he handed Arge his swords. "Thank you." said Arge. Arge walked home with out any interuptoins it was one of the most peaceful walk he had in a long time. He opened the door and layed on his bed. "ah" he thought "time to relax
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Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 8:17 pm
(( Let's go right ahead and give this a shot...)
Miroku sat out in the forest, perched on on of the larger lower limbs of a tree. The branch protruded at close to a ninety degree angle, so he was able to sit comfortably with his back against the trunk. A light rain was falling, and had wetted his hair as he had walked out to the tree, but he didn't really care. In his opinion, playing in the rain was worth catching cold. Now, sitting beneath the shelter of the branches where only a few sparse drops reached him from the canopy, he pushed his wet hair back from his brow and placed the acoustic guitar he had brought with him across his lap, ready to play.
"Sometimes it's good to take a break..." Miroku murmured softly to himself.
He reached up and brought down a guitar pick from where it had been held against his temple by his glasses. Shifting slightly, he gave an experimental strum. Perfect. He had made sure to tune it before he left. He wrapped his other hand around the neck of the guitar, ran his fingertips over the fretboard, and began to strum a brisk tune, loving the sensation of the strings pressing into his fingertips as he held them against the frets.
After a few moments of playing, he couldn't help himself and began to sing into the rain, the words quick and clear.
"Keep quiet,
Nothing comes as easy as you.
Can I lay
in your bed all day?
I'll be your best kept secret
and your biggest mistake.
The hand behind this pen relives a failure every day."
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Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 8:37 pm
Banasilo OMG MAGIC BUS! Sample sad edited) Sample: Arge was walking home when it cliked in his mind that his swords were still at the smith getting repared. He ran to the black smith and walked in. "HI" he said "I was just checking oon my swords." "Oh" said the smith "hold on." The smith walked to the back and came back with them. "here you go" said the smith as he handed Arge his swords. "Thank you." said Arge. Arge walked home with out any interuptoins it was one of the most peaceful walk he had in a long time. He opened the door and layed on his bed. "ah" he thought "time to relax Still need to work on using "said" too much. Find a theasaurus and put it to use. ^^ You don't have bad form but everything is so bland. Find some ways to spice it up. And ivory didn't mention this...but may I suggest putting in some more detail? Not a necessity but nice to have. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 8:38 pm
Miroku Yukidaruna (( Let's go right ahead and give this a shot...) Miroku sat out in the forest, perched on on of the larger lower limbs of a tree. The branch protruded at close to a ninety degree angle, so he was able to sit comfortably with his back against the trunk. A light rain was falling, and had wetted his hair as he had walked out to the tree, but he didn't really care. In his opinion, playing in the rain was worth catching cold. Now, sitting beneath the shelter of the branches where only a few sparse drops reached him from the canopy, he pushed his wet hair back from his brow and placed the acoustic guitar he had brought with him across his lap, ready to play. "Sometimes it's good to take a break..." Miroku murmured softly to himself. He reached up and brought down a guitar pick from where it had been held against his temple by his glasses. Shifting slightly, he gave an experimental strum. Perfect. He had made sure to tune it before he left. He wrapped his other hand around the neck of the guitar, ran his fingertips over the fretboard, and began to strum a brisk tune, loving the sensation of the strings pressing into his fingertips as he held them against the frets. After a few moments of playing, he couldn't help himself and began to sing into the rain, the words quick and clear. "Keep quiet, Nothing comes as easy as you. Can I lay in your bed all day? I'll be your best kept secret and your biggest mistake. The hand behind this pen relives a failure every day." Pass, pass, pass! Lovely, dear. ^^ One of the best I've seen.
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Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 9:01 pm
Whoo, I rock way hardcore. xd
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