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 Posted: Tue Oct 20, 2009 12:42 pm
Well here's my post. Note that my character's name is cyrus and would like to apply for sunakagure.
When Cyrus's feet left the ground he felt a surge of energy. His first mission was starting and he was pumped. He was thinking very highly of himself and if you could see his face an intense look. This mission depended on his reputation. He could not live with the feeling of failure. Cyrus kept looking around the woods getting frustrated wondering where the objective was. Suddenly he heard a ruffle in the bush. "There!" he thought and lunged. He found what he was looking for. Cyrus was holding a small brown rabitwith big eyes. "Now to give it to the girl." he raced through the woods, but was stopped b a figure. It was a man about 6'5' wearing all black and gauls. "An enemy". He started throwing kunai like a madman. Items were thing. The man disappeared a reappeared behind him. He punched Cyrus with a hard fist to the gut. Cyrus flew off into the woods where he landed with a thud. For a few minutes he just laid there. The he got up and started back to the village. It was getting dark now and he was bleeding and had several wounds. "Ugh, I should have been ready". After walking for hours, He decided to make camp. Cyrus made no fire for fear of awareness. He placed the bunny up in his hood so he didn't escape. Then walked around setting traps like trip wires and blast tags. He made sure he had enough shurikens for defense and laid down. During the night he was woken up with a Boom. Cyrus shot up and saw one of his traps had been activated he started moving quickly away from it. After traveling for a few more hours they finally got to the village. The proctor said "Do you have it?" "Yes" Cyrus replied and held out the bunny. "Good work" the proctor said "Where's your escort, we sent one?". Suddenly the man wearing black and gauls came in and said"right here". Cyrus fell down with exhaustion. He tried too hard.
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 9:47 am
Rein-DeidaraFan Well, as a sample I will just use an old post of mine that I loved, and well, i hope you enjoy reading it. Sample Post Michyo stared her opponent down angrily, the fury clearly visible in the narrow slit of her eyes. Her mind was racing with ideas, and she could feel the evil impulse of her darker side fading in to them. She looked at her opponent once more, however it was in a more savage, sadistic manner. Crawling onto her face was the sly smile known quite well by her family, that marked a quick end arriving. "Say hello to my demon." she spoke darkly, referring to her darker personality as the demon. The victim of her attack turned around in fear rather quickly. To them the sky had turned black and they were frozen in place by an unknown force the moment they turned. Piercing blue eyes gazing at them coldly through the darkness. Slowly they feel the fingers cracking into little fragments as they are snapped and cut at with what feel like claws. This continuing up their arms and legs, allowing her the pleasure of hearing them scream in pain. Finally with one swift blow the watch as the sky clears and a massive human fox like creature run at them blood lust in its eyes as it shoves its hand through the victim and pulls it out. In reality Michyo was laughing hysterically as the person dropped to the ground a look of terror on their face. As she returned to her normal state. Fear instilled itself with in her leaving her knelt beside the now dead victim pleading for forgiveness. Her eyes filling with tears, but a smile visible on her face a mixture of laughter and true sorrow clearly heard in her voice as it fades quieter and quieter. no pass. no examples from somewhere else you have to type it up on the spot.
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 9:48 am
Demonicloud9 Well here's my post. Note that my character's name is cyrus and would like to apply for sunakagure. When Cyrus's feet left the ground he felt a surge of energy. His first mission was starting and he was pumped. He was thinking very highly of himself and if you could see his face an intense look. This mission depended on his reputation. He could not live with the feeling of failure. Cyrus kept looking around the woods getting frustrated wondering where the objective was. Suddenly he heard a ruffle in the bush. "There!" he thought and lunged. He found what he was looking for. Cyrus was holding a small brown rabitwith big eyes. "Now to give it to the girl." he raced through the woods, but was stopped b a figure. It was a man about 6'5' wearing all black and gauls. "An enemy". He started throwing kunai like a madman. Items were thing. The man disappeared a reappeared behind him. He punched Cyrus with a hard fist to the gut. Cyrus flew off into the woods where he landed with a thud. For a few minutes he just laid there. The he got up and started back to the village. It was getting dark now and he was bleeding and had several wounds. "Ugh, I should have been ready". After walking for hours, He decided to make camp. Cyrus made no fire for fear of awareness. He placed the bunny up in his hood so he didn't escape. Then walked around setting traps like trip wires and blast tags. He made sure he had enough shurikens for defense and laid down. During the night he was woken up with a Boom. Cyrus shot up and saw one of his traps had been activated he started moving quickly away from it. After traveling for a few more hours they finally got to the village. The proctor said "Do you have it?" "Yes" Cyrus replied and held out the bunny. "Good work" the proctor said "Where's your escort, we sent one?". Suddenly the man wearing black and gauls came in and said"right here". Cyrus fell down with exhaustion. He tried too hard. pass
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 9:58 am
-Alright ,sorry just give me a minute and I will have a newly typed one up x.x-
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 11:38 am
Well, here goes nothing. My RPC is named Shizuku and I would like to apply for the Hidden Village in the Sand.
Ok, so Shizuku wasn't the sharpest tool in the shed, and he was tactically smart like most shinobi. To be perfectly honest, he wasn't very good at most of the fighting styles or things the teachers taught back at the academy, but this was no time for complaining; Shizuku had to pass this graduation exam, and quickly.
It was a wonder how he survived this long, considering his mission was to find a rose, while avoid damaging said target. It was bad enough he was being hunted by a proctor, but he had to chose to wear the weights on his ankles today. Shizuku managed to not damage the rose so far, but could only block most of the shuriken and kunai that was heading toward him with one hand, and with one of the swords strapped to his back.
'I picked a bad time to go heavy on the outfit, and Mom had to make such a fuss over my clothes...' Shizuku was an only child to a widow. His father died in battle protecting them, who carried two swords like Shizuku did now.
He was near his destination, he could feel the joy of passing slowly become within his reach, but that feeling was disturbed when more shuriken and kunai were thrown at him. "I will not fail this exam!" Shizuku blocked more of the weapons thrown at him, and hurried to a safe area.
Shizuku couldn't feel the surge of chakra from the proctor, and took only one course of action left: Running. He was fast enough to outrun the proctor, but no where near powerful enough to beat him, not without damaging the target. Leaving the forest that the exam took place, this cloak-clad ninja returned to the exam proctor and gave him the rose.
"So... how did I do?" This blonde ninja-to-be wanted to pass so badly, and was expecting to be failed, based upon his performence in the exam.
"Nicely done, Shizuku. You knew your strengths and used them in the exam. You knew as well that you couldn't beat the enemy, and evaded him." The proctor smiled on Shizuku, who was relieved to have done a good job.
((This... is the longest post... I have ever typed up.))
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 11:43 pm
RasenganImpact Well, here goes nothing. My RPC is named Shizuku and I would like to apply for the Hidden Village in the Sand. Ok, so Shizuku wasn't the sharpest tool in the shed, and he was tactically smart like most shinobi. To be perfectly honest, he wasn't very good at most of the fighting styles or things the teachers taught back at the academy, but this was no time for complaining; Shizuku had to pass this graduation exam, and quickly. It was a wonder how he survived this long, considering his mission was to find a rose, while avoid damaging said target. It was bad enough he was being hunted by a proctor, but he had to chose to wear the weights on his ankles today. Shizuku managed to not damage the rose so far, but could only block most of the shuriken and kunai that was heading toward him with one hand, and with one of the swords strapped to his back. 'I picked a bad time to go heavy on the outfit, and Mom had to make such a fuss over my clothes...' Shizuku was an only child to a widow. His father died in battle protecting them, who carried two swords like Shizuku did now. He was near his destination, he could feel the joy of passing slowly become within his reach, but that feeling was disturbed when more shuriken and kunai were thrown at him. "I will not fail this exam!" Shizuku blocked more of the weapons thrown at him, and hurried to a safe area. Shizuku couldn't feel the surge of chakra from the proctor, and took only one course of action left: Running. He was fast enough to outrun the proctor, but no where near powerful enough to beat him, not without damaging the target. Leaving the forest that the exam took place, this cloak-clad ninja returned to the exam proctor and gave him the rose. "So... how did I do?" This blonde ninja-to-be wanted to pass so badly, and was expecting to be failed, based upon his performence in the exam. "Nicely done, Shizuku. You knew your strengths and used them in the exam. You knew as well that you couldn't beat the enemy, and evaded him." The proctor smiled on Shizuku, who was relieved to have done a good job. ((This... is the longest post... I have ever typed up.)) pass. the example only needs to be 4 lines long people. stop breaking your backs over it.
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Posted: Thu Oct 22, 2009 3:23 am
Heres my Example ^_^ My name shall be Fen Catsematzu, and I would like to join the Iwagakure ((Village hidden In The Stone))
It was a nice sunny day, the breeze was soft with the smell of food which would incite the senses, Fen did love his food. So as Fen sat at the ramen counter waiting for his food he would take a quicky look around him. To his left was an old man eating some pork Ramen...Fens favourite, so Fen would lean over and take a big stiff! Fen would then relax back into his seat, being only twelve Fen didn't really have much of a sense of right and wrong, maybe sniffing someones food while they were eating it was a bit rude, but he didn't care! So when Fen's Ramen got here he would pick up his bowl and shove it into his face, and before the people knew it is was all gone. Fen would then raise his hand up, as if he was answering a question, and say "Thanks! I'm off now!" And then fen would spin upon his seat and get off, then he would think to himself 'Hmm Just where am I going?' Then it came to him, so he would jog down the street, speed wasn't really his thing.
Now Fen was no normal kid, at the age of Twelve he had arms the size of an adult, but Muscle was his Way Of The Ninja, so everyday he would train. Fen tried to make the people around him call him the 'Muscle Ninja' but considering he wasn't a ninja yet it was turning out to be a problem. So Fen would wait until he could prove himself at School thathe could be a ninja! Then he would be Fen Catsematzu The Muscle Ninja! His thick Black vest which he left open at the front and his small black shorts were the only clothes which Fen wore, well except for his shoes of course, which were thin sandels, also black.
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Posted: Thu Oct 22, 2009 4:38 am
lurrrggg Heres my Example ^_^ My name shall be Fen Catsematzu, and I would like to join the Iwagakure ((Village hidden In The Stone)) It was a nice sunny day, the breeze was soft with the smell of food which would incite the senses, Fen did love his food. So as Fen sat at the ramen counter waiting for his food he would take a quicky look around him. To his left was an old man eating some pork Ramen...Fens favourite, so Fen would lean over and take a big stiff! Fen would then relax back into his seat, being only twelve Fen didn't really have much of a sense of right and wrong, maybe sniffing someones food while they were eating it was a bit rude, but he didn't care! So when Fen's Ramen got here he would pick up his bowl and shove it into his face, and before the people knew it is was all gone. Fen would then raise his hand up, as if he was answering a question, and say "Thanks! I'm off now!" And then fen would spin upon his seat and get off, then he would think to himself 'Hmm Just where am I going?' Then it came to him, so he would jog down the street, speed wasn't really his thing.
Now Fen was no normal kid, at the age of Twelve he had arms the size of an adult, but Muscle was his Way Of The Ninja, so everyday he would train. Fen tried to make the people around him call him the 'Muscle Ninja' but considering he wasn't a ninja yet it was turning out to be a problem. So Fen would wait until he could prove himself at School thathe could be a ninja! Then he would be Fen Catsematzu The Muscle Ninja! His thick Black vest which he left open at the front and his small black shorts were the only clothes which Fen wore, well except for his shoes of course, which were thin sandels, also black.pass. did you not listen to what i just said.
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Posted: Thu Oct 22, 2009 6:09 am
Quote: pass. did you not listen to what i just said. I can't do four liners XD Thats short for me. Thanks ^_^
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Posted: Thu Oct 22, 2009 8:32 am
My character is Sorakaze Yorushin. He wishes to join Konohagakure. Here's my example:
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Yorushin looked at the clock hands. They ticked by, the rhythmic sound echoing loudly. He resisted the urge to put his hands over his ears. He knew it wasn't really that loud, but it was getting annoying. He tapped his foot impatiently. When would sensei return? The academy student looked out the window at the birds flying outside with envy reflecting in his eyes.
"I want to be free, too," he whispered.
Yorushin perked up slightly as his sensei re-entered the room. He leaned onto his elbows, watching sharply as the man shuffled a few papers in his hands.
Would he pass, or would he fail?
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(What do I do next after I get accepted? I don't remember...)
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Posted: Thu Oct 22, 2009 11:49 pm
Takagawa Yan My character is Sorakaze Yorushin. He wishes to join Konohagakure. Here's my example: - Yorushin looked at the clock hands. They ticked by, the rhythmic sound echoing loudly. He resisted the urge to put his hands over his ears. He knew it wasn't really that loud, but it was getting annoying. He tapped his foot impatiently. When would sensei return? The academy student looked out the window at the birds flying outside with envy reflecting in his eyes. "I want to be free, too," he whispered. Yorushin perked up slightly as his sensei re-entered the room. He leaned onto his elbows, watching sharply as the man shuffled a few papers in his hands. Would he pass, or would he fail? - (What do I do next after I get accepted? I don't remember...) pass. it depends on what village you want to join.
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 2:08 am
Arokhian My character is Xarokh Henka, and she wants to join Iwagakure (( Village hidden in the Stone )) It was a fairly sunny day, Xarokh looked around, she was running, the sun baeting down on on her face, she embraced the warmness of it, as she was running by, she smelt the sweet yet meaty smell of beef ramen, as it filled up her nostrils, she smiled, ''Mhm..... god wouldnt i fancy a bowl of that, but not today, not now''She grinned as she spoke to herself, then accidently tripped up on a rock, and then was falling down to the brown, dusty ground. no pass. sorry i felt like i was reading an old telegram. try getting rid of some of the commas and instead of, "It was a fairly sunny day, Xarokh looked around, she was running, the sun baeting down on on her face, she embraced the warmness of it, as she was running by, she smelt the sweet yet meaty smell of beef ramen, as it filled up her nostrils, she smiled, ''Mhm..... god wouldnt i fancy a bowl of that, but not today, not now'' She grinned as she spoke to herself, then accidently tripped up on a rock, and then was falling down to the brown, dusty ground." try something like. "the sun was beating down upon the face of Xaroh on this fairly sunny day. as she was running she felt the warmth wrap her body. She smiled as the sweet smell of beef ramen wafted through the gentle breeze. "Mhm..... god wouldn't i fancy a bowl of that, but not today, not now'' She grinned as she spoke to herself, to distracted by the scent of the ramen she tripped on a rock in her pathway which caused her to tumble down to the brown, dusty ground. or something along those lines.
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 3:50 am
Oh, i see what you mean xD, sorry about that - Im just used to using alot of commas ^.^
Lemme Try again, X.x
The sun shone dont upon Xarokhs face. she was running through the paths of the city, darting in and out of them - she was in a rush, as she was running she came by a Ramen Stand, the meaty smell of beef ramen filled the air and her nostrils.
''Mhm... God would I mind a bowl of that, but not here, not right now...''
she closed her eyes and lost all track of what she was doing... Being distracted by this, she tripped over a small round pebble, and was tumbling towards the brown, dusty path.
That better? if not, im'a have to take a break :l
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 9:09 pm
lol if you have to take a break after 2 posts you might not want to pass XD. pass
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