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 Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 9:11 am
Draken and Sauvie seem like a good duo in this story.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 12:13 pm
Meta_Fish Draken and Sauvie Sauvie and Drakenseem like a good duo in this story. Fixed 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 12:37 pm
@Mune - XD Thanks I think.
@Sauvie - I know who they are!
@Godstone - THank you, and your wishes have been answered I am happily writing again.
@Fish - My favorite characters.
@Sauvie again - xd xd xd
Chapter Ten Added
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 12:44 pm
Good chapter, I am a good guy yet again... kind of, nice use of backstory, it really flows and it seems that it worked quite well in this chapter, one monir thing, I felt it got a bit hard to follow near the end, but it may just be me.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 12:51 pm
Nice. The only real grammatical things I can think of for you are to:
-Add commas more often.
-Learn your "to"s. You got "two," "to," and "too" mixed up.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 1:15 pm
They have switched sides! =o
And I agree with what Fish said.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 1:22 pm
What is the deal with people pointing out grammar flaws, the story is supposed to be all about entertainment. Sure you want to help the author but still every time a new chapter comes out there is a risk of Grammar school
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 1:28 pm
@Sauvie - Or are you? Naw you are. Thanks for the feedback.
Anyone else agree with the end?
@Fish - Yeah I have a problem with that, ^_^; So what did you think of the chapter though?
@Mune -XD Oh no. For the rest ^
@Sauvie - It is cool, I dont mind I need to get better
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:28 pm
Capn Tats xd
Ownage.
I had to read a few parts over to get what was going on, but over all, nice chapters.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:29 pm
Tatsuman Capn Tats xd
Ownage.
I had to read a few parts over to get what was going on, but over all, nice chapters. Capn Tats could so be a new york Tattoo parlor 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:33 pm
Sauvie Tatsuman Capn Tats xd
Ownage.
I had to read a few parts over to get what was going on, but over all, nice chapters. Capn Tats could so be a new york Tattoo parlor 3nodding
"Got a little Tats in ya?" wink xd
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:34 pm
Tatsuman Sauvie Tatsuman Capn Tats xd
Ownage.
I had to read a few parts over to get what was going on, but over all, nice chapters. Capn Tats could so be a new york Tattoo parlor 3nodding
"Got a little Tats in ya?" wink xd ... I cant even think of a counter, you win this round xd
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:40 pm
Sauvie Tatsuman Sauvie Tatsuman Capn Tats xd
Ownage.
I had to read a few parts over to get what was going on, but over all, nice chapters. Capn Tats could so be a new york Tattoo parlor 3nodding
"Got a little Tats in ya?" wink xd ... I cant even think of a counter, you win this round xd
*victory dance*
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Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 6:00 am
I loved the chapter , action and suspense. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 8:56 am
@Tats - Glad you like your name XD. Damn I guess I wasnt clear enough ~plots to work better at that~
@Ms. G - Glad you liked it. You are making an appearance very soon.
I am going to try and have a new chapter up today. Not enitrely sure when XD
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