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No, that was beautiful! Good job. Pass. It helps to proof-read your posts and actually think about what your typing. I re-state thing within a sentence, which makes it wordy. I usually read through the post again before I submit it. Always helps and saves us from confusion. Good job, again. ^-^ That was the best improvement I've seen, so quickly.

Good luck.

Sean was walking to the acadamy with his hands in his pockets. He stared around,looking at the lifeless roads. Suddenly,a strong wind came blowing through his spiky brown hair."Hmm", he said,"That feels good."The flowing wind went by and Sean just kept on walking.



-seanms

((Oops, forgot I was supposed to post here. Well, now, I have.))

Frey stared up at the sky, fire burning in his eyes. Now, there wasn't any particular reason for it. True, he was rather miffed at the moment, though that didn't explain his curious behavior. He was just sitting there, looking up into the heavens. He was always silent, though this went far beyond simple personality.

Was he perhaps posessed by some otherworldly creature? No. That wasn't it. Maybe he was meditating? Yes, that was a possibility. Nah. He wasn't known for meditating. His family? Yes, but not Frey. He sat down against the wall and began to count. ''One.. Two.. Four.. Seven.. Eight..''

There was no apparent reasoning behind the skips. That was something only Frey could ever know. He got to his feet, shifting his weight over, stretching. Today was a normal, boring day. There was nothing more to it.

((LAMELAMELAME. But.. meh.))

It must be just me, but Frey sounds sexy. o_o;

Pass!

RP Sample:

Suke stood as the wind furiously flew into his face. He squinted into the tunnel, seeing the dark figure walk quickly towards him, he looked around. The figure slowly inched closer and closer, it seemed like it didnt even notice Suke, but as he got closer he came to make out the face. It looked like one of his brothers, Suke waved, but was ignored and the figure walked right through him, what was going on?

Suke looked back twisting his head and then turning it back down the tunnel. He felt his body and walked further down the tunnel. He walked down, meeting ten other shadows, just passing through him. Suke became more worried and worried as each shadow passed through him. Where was he? How was this happening? What are these shadows?

((I've been gone from the guild for a long time and when I returned to redeem myself, I saw alot of changes and things and my profile seems to have run off (Although the clan I made up still exists). THerefore, I will start from a clean slate, as if this is my first day in the guild, If that's ok. I'll start by posting here))

RP sample:

Tatianna giggled softly while hunched over by the edge of a small lake surrounded by various forms of plant life and water-dwelling creatures. A muffled croak emitted from the center of her enclosed hands, held in a cupped form, the fingers spread just far enough to allow air to circulate. She lowered her face close to her hands, seemingly trying to peek inbetween the said cracks. Another croak forced through, causing her to lift her head back with full laughter this time. Carefully, she lowered her cupped hands to the squeshy bank of the lake and opened them. A small toad slipped out across her fingers and hopped off to the safety of the water.