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long descriptive posts that draw me back for more and totally engulf me to where i start feeling what the chars do. ive been rping online in writing for over a year and rping in rl with other people for well about 5 and im still only average

yeah but im not talking about you i dont know you

crying i feel hurt

can i see what you have so far?

EDIT: Nvmd i'll just go read your application to the squad >_<;;

why i dont pass judgment either good or bad until i actualy know someone

go ahead, help is always wanted and appreciated

Aika crouched down on the roof looking down at the hollow below her. (what is the size of the building your on?) It was of a low level and extremely weak by appearance. (describe the hollow a bit more, Did it have any unusual markings?) She small woman grinned evilly down at the deformed creature, knowing all to well how easily she could kill it.(this is decent but you need a coma where i placed it, as well as the three words i highlighted) The young woman wanted to play with it, make it think it had a chance and then destroy it,(.) but She knew that would not be her brightest idea. (This is slightly a run on sentence that can be broken in two to make it seem better) There had been many hollows reported in this area and she was sent to eradicate them all so she had to move quick.(this is good)
(make sure you do breaks in-between your paragraphs)
Without a second thought she launched herself downward at it, her blade drawn. (again the height of the building could be put here so you could slide down the side of the building and launch at it, or dive bomb from the roof etc, etc.) She held it backwards between her legs, blade help parallel to the building next to her so that the sharp edge would tear through the things head like butter. (where you were holding the blade kinda confused me, then i thought on it and got it) She flipped and landed a few feet away as she felt the blade slice through the hollows head. (how did you flip? where was the blade held as you were doing said flip?) Her face stoic as she walked away knowing the thing would be dead behind her. (could add a little inner monologue here)

When she did not feel it's spiritual power disappear she turned quickly to see that the hollow she had just sliced through was still standing there, unscathed. (Very nice) Surprise flashed across her face and she whipped her body around to face the evil creature just as it lunged at her. (Very good) She stood in a basic stance with her zanpakutou placed firmly in front of her. She waited for the hollow to near her and lunged, plunging the tip of her slim blade deep into the hollow's mask. (Animate the hollow a bit more, Have it roar at you or something, when you do NPCs in your post you have to think of them as another charater, rather than just something to be cut down and forgotten) She watched this time to make sure that it had left the human world.(Good) Satisfied that it was finally gone, she walked away slowly then jumped onto the nearest building on her way to her next victim. (Again building height would be something to add, Maybe a jumping between two buildings to get back up?)

If you want me to shutup after reading this i can. Anyway i have to go for a while but i'll be back eventually