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alright a couple things

1. is the user limited to less elements?

2. what exactly would having a LOT of chakra mean, can you give me an example using the chakra system we already have in place?

3. how does the uncontrollable chakra thing work, as in how many posts can the user use their element or whatever it is that you're trying to say before their chakra lashes out at them

4. You say they have a lot of or they have great chakra control, so I assume they get to choose, what exactly would the greater chakra control mean in terms of mechanics using our chakra system

1. when you say advanced element do you mean combination releases?

2. that doesn't really answer my question, how about it works something like this:

AS: +10 chakra points
Genin: +15
Chuunin: +20
Jounin: +25
Sannin/Kage: +30

3. So basically when the guard, or whatever it is, is removed the countdown starts? What exactly is the effect of the chakra lashing out at you?

4. It can stay at -3 and -2, but that's it, the benefit will not increase as you grow stronger

the combination releases are reserved for other clans/bloodlines, though there are combination jutsus you could learn. Anyway, make the necessary changes to the bloodline and re-submit it and I'll look to see if it's ready to go

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Name:Moukogawa Clan

Description: The Moukogawa Clan originally hailed from Kirigakure no sato. Prior to the bloodline massacre, The Moukogawa clan were well known for their skills with swords. Although they did not have a bloodline limit, they possessed a capability to master any kenjutsu technique with contemptuous ease. During the Bloodline Massacre and the following attack by the Kaguya clan, the Mizukage used the clan as the front of his forces. Seeing the way his clan members were being used as cannon fodder without any relief, the clan head, Moukogawa Shin, protested to the mizukage for what he believed to be an unjust and improper use of his clan.
The Mizukage promptly had him executed and ordered that the Moukogawa clan be driven out for their insubordination. Left to fend for themselves with no home to return to, what little remained of the once mighty and proud clan, became common mercenaries for a time. During this time the son of the former clan head rose to prominence and took control of the clan, his name was Moukogawa Kenshi. During the few encounters he had met Konoha ninja, he had come to realize that they cherished life as well as were able to perform their missions. He then made the decision to find a home for his clan within the leaf. At first the Hokage was a bit hesitant to allow a clan accused of insubordination join konoha, but when faced with the tale of what had occurred in kirigakure, the hokage gladly welcomed the clan in.
That was three generations ago. Now is the time for the clan to rise up and once again make a name for themselves, this time in Konohagakure no sato.

Rules: 1. At chunin level you are required to create a minimum of one technique to add to the clan's roster of jutsu.
2. You must use a sword of some sort regardless of size or amount.
3. Clan head is always right in interpretation of techniques.
4. I reserve the right for whatever reason to decline an application.
5. The clan is based in Konoha. This means that during war time conditions, if you are in an opposing village you may be limited in what you may learn from the clan techniques.

Strengths: Masters of Kenjutsu, they are known for their ability to widely vary in the forms they choose.

Weaknesses:achieve 2nd element at Jounin and third at Sanin, some jutsu require a source of water even if it is provided by the user. No long range clan techniques.

Ability:Innate Kenjutsu Mastery= -3 to posts learning Kenjutsu, -2 Chakra/to minimum of 1 cost reduction for kenjutsu techniques, Speed and Strength increased by 1 rank

Ability downside: Because Moukogawa members have primarily a suiton affinity, all other elemental jutsu are -1 rank and +2 Chakra cost.

Notes: In the following section, clan jutsu, certain techniques are labeled as kenjutsu/Suiton Ninjutsu, though these techniques are primarily kenjutsu they require Chakra of an equivalent rank but in return are given bonuses(and Penalties) of Suiton Ninjutsu.
Bloodline/Clan Jutsus:

Name of Jutsu: Shigure Soen Ryu:Shibuku no mouten (Shigure soen style: Blinding spray)
Rank of Jutsu:E-rank
Range of Jutsu: short
Jutsu's Element:kenjutsu/suiton
Description: Gathering water on the tip of the blade, the user flicks his wrists sending the water into the opponents eyes. Can Blur opponents vision.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Shinten Shuuhaken (Shigure Soen style: Extension wave blade)
Rank of Jutsu:E-rank
Range of Jutsu: short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: Water forms onto the blade it causing to grow in width and length by a foot.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Yarazu no Ame (Shigure Soen style: last minute rain)
Rank of Jutsu: E-rank
Range of Jutsu: short-mid
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: Dropping the sword, the user kicks the hilt sending the blade forward in a Thrusting motion.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Wana Uzamaki(Shigure Soen style: whirlpool trap)
Rank of Jutsu:d-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: Spinning the Blade around in front of the user, the user creates a minature vortex fo water that deflects projectiles to the side. Does not affect techniques of c-rank or above.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Shajiku no Ame (Shigure Soen style: Axle of Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:d-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: The user covers himself in a half circle of highly viscous water starting at the tip of the blade and charges forward thrusting at the opponent. Can pierce through Katon jutsu of C-rank or lower.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Shibuki Ame (Shigure Soen style: Splashing Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:c-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user holds the blade in a reverse grip and spins it creating a whirlwind like shield. can Reflect Projectiles of D-rank and lower back at the opponent

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Samidare(Shigure Soen style: Summer Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:c-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user Slashes diagonally but in midway drops the blade catching it in the other hand and continuing the attack horizontally. Can catch opponent off guard.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Sakamaku Ame(Shigure Soen style: Rolling Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:c-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description:The user lifts a Wave of water up forming a shield and kneels down placing the sword in front of him protectively. Can Absorb Jutsu of equal rank or lower except for Raiton and Doton techniques, which bypass it completely.
Prerequisite: Shigure soen Ryu: Shibuki Ame

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Shinotsuku Ame (Shigure Soen style razz elting rain)
Rank of Jutsu:c-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user Swiftly strikes all around the bearer with the blade. Can hit multiple opponents and can deflect Projectiles of D-rank or lower

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Ooame (Shigure Soen style: Heavy Rainfall)
Rank of Jutsu:B-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user strikes at six different angles through rapid change of hands. Increased chance of Catching opponent off guard.
Prerequisite: Shigure soen Ryu: Samidare

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Gofuu Juu (Shigure Soen style: May Wind, October Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:B-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user synchronizes his breathing with his opponent, allowing him to sense the flow of the attack direct towards him. Drasticly increases the chance to dodge a Kenjutsu or Taijutsu of C-rank or Below.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Utsushi Ame (Shigure Soen style: Duplicate Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:B-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: The user creates a wave of water and while his opponent is distracted by the users reflection in it, the user attacks from above. Decreases the opponent's chance to dodge.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Sansai Ame (Shigure Soen style: Torrential Rainfall)
Rank of Jutsu:A-rank
Range of Jutsu:short
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description:The user strikes from 18 different angles through an ever increasing rate of swift hand changes. Drastic Increase of catching opponent off guard. Because of the speed at which the user must perform this technique it costs chakra equal to it's rank.
Prerequisite: Shigure Soen Ryu: Ooame

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Hikisaku Ame (Shigure Soen style: Splitting Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:A-rank
Range of Jutsu:Mid
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: Rapidly Swings the sword sending Crescents of Razor sharp water at the the Opponent/s. May target multiple opponents.
Prerequisite: Shigure soen Ryu: Shinotsuku Ame

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Ouzu matoi no jutsu (Shigure Soen style: Great whirlpool enfolding technique)
Rank of Jutsu:A-rank
Range of Jutsu:short- mid
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: The user creates a giant vortex of water around the blade before jumping in the air and smashing the opponent with it.

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu: Kansui Ame (Shigure Soen style: Flooding Rainfall)
Rank of Jutsu:S-rank
Range of Jutsu:Short-mid
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu
Description: The user strikes the opponent 54 times at a god-like speed via shifting hands. Because of the speed at which the user must perform this technique it costs chakra equal to it's rank.
prerequisite: Shigure Soen Ryu: Sansai Ame

Name of Jutsu: Shigure soen Ryu:Setsudan Ame (Shigure Soen style: Dismembering or amputating Rain)
Rank of Jutsu:S-rank
Range of Jutsu:mid
Jutsu's Element: kenjutsu/suiton
Description: The users smashes his blade into a body of water sending himself rocketing up on a Large wave of water. then Turns the wave into countless cresent shaped water blades before sending them at the opponent with a sweep of his sword. May strike multiple opponents.
Prerequisite: Shigure Soen Ryu: Hikisaku Ame

Eh, not really. It has some similarities, but I doubt it's an attempted rip of my idea. It seems more specialized towards elemental control then the Konaga Clan's raw chakra concept and it can't be used to augment the body the way Konaga Clan members can.

ok, just a few issues, sorry I didn't catch them when you pm'd the clan to me:

1. the increase of both strength and speed by 1 rank ( I assume you mean rank rather than point) seems like it might be a bit much considering it doesn't really have much of a drawback, you either need to pick one or you need to come up with some other drawback, such as all ninjutsu and genjutsu being weaker than normal by maybe -1 rank

2. For all the jutsus could you go in and say which are ninjutsu and which are taijutsu so that it's more clear, I ask because taijutsu techniques don't actually cost chakra, so people will need to know what does and does not cost chakra

3. Shigure soen Ryu:Shibuki Ame (Shigure Soen style: Splashing Rain)- this should be a C-ranked technique since it actually reflects techniques back at opponents

4. Shigure soen Ryu: Sakamaku Ame(Shigure Soen style: Rolling Rain)- just make this technique more clear in what it does, I know that it seems fairly obvious, but needs to be blatantly obvious to anyone that reads the description will be able to figure it out

5. Both Shigure soen Ryu: Sansai Ame (Shigure Soen style: Torrential Rainfall) and Shigure soen Ryu: Kansui Ame (Shigure Soen style: Flooding Rainfall) should cost chakra even if they are taijutsu techniques simply because it would require sending chakra to your limbs to pull off that kind of maneuver


so that's what I see, please make any necessary corrections, but I just wanted to let you know that this seems like a very cool clan

((Changes made, as requested: again :]))

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Name: Hiramekarei
Description: This specific Style Comes from the Yamada clan, of the Land of Iron. This Sword and style came fourth to the Yamada clan with the Aquisition of the sword by Yamada Musashi. He was born with a natural affinity to chakra shaping and control, by a recessive gene that had remained inactive until now. At the age of six he could already create the energy katana over his wakazashi. Joining the ranks of the imperial samurai at thirteen, his fame had grown in the area. He went on to separate from the land of iron, and live in a far off country, were he started a clan, and passed his bloodline limit through them. During his travels he ran into the current owner of the Seven mist sword, Hiramekarei. After a long and drawn out fight between two very skilled swordsmen, the victor had shown to be Musashi, But this victory was an eye opening experience. He honored the swordsmans style and power so much, that he kept the sword, For his unborn son, to send him off into the ninja world, to master this sword,and become a master of his greatest rivals own style.
Strengths: The strengths of the Clan are in the users unnatural speed, and chakra control, in combination with their unique ability to cover blades in energy, shaping the weapon of choice for the Samurai, and being able to manipulate that energy to a fine point.This specific variation of the clans techniques come with this specific users weapon, The harimekarei. The hhiramekarei is special in two unique fashions, One, it can split into two swords linked by a chain, and two, it can easily shape energy over it to fight with. Usually shaped as a large hammer.

Weaknesses:Can only master up to 5 genjutsus of any rank,only one can be S rank|Not good at long-range Jutsus|can not master a third element.
Ability:
[all jutsus cost one less point of chakra]
[Speed one rank higher than average]
[Takes -2 posts to learn Kenjutsu]
Bloodline/Clan Jutsus:


Name of Jutsu:Haku[to put on a sword]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:Close
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description: The user concentrates chakra over hiramekarei, Shaping a weapon over it made of pure Chakra. This weapon is always a giant hammer unless changed by Kengata. does make contact with physical weapons, such as other blades. The technique can be used by any rank, costing an amount of chakra depending on your rank. lower ranks can also be chosen, never higher than your rank.
Academy: 3 posts [cannot deal lethal damage]
Genin:5 posts
Chuunin:7 posts
Jonin:9 posts
Sanin:14 posts


Name of Jutsu:Kengata[Sword shape]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:Close
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description: The user manipulates their Chakra over the Energy blade shaping it into the blade style of their choosing, increasing the ability of the sword. The Users rank decides the number of time per battle your sword can switch shape.The technique can be used by any rank, costing an amount of chakra depending on your rank. lower ranks can also be chosen, never higher than your rank.
[Times per battle it can be changed]
Academy: 0
Genin: 1
Chuunin: 3
Jonin: 5
Sannin: 8

|Sword shapes|
Larger Hammer[-1 rank speed/+2 rank power]
Axe blade[-1 rank power/+2 ranks speed]
Hiant two-headed hammer[-2 ranks speed/+3 ranks power](chuunin or higher)
Katzbalger[-2 ranks power/+3 ranks speed](chuunin or higher,Only when the sword is split.)
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Name of Jutsu:Ryoutosukai[Two-sword fencer]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:Close
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description:The user Can fight for a certain length of time with The sword split, using their chakra to slow things down for the user to forcefully induce a trance, that helps them fight better via allowing the user to perceive things at a slower rate, for a certain length of time before the chakra cost takes too much of a toll.The technique can be used by any rank, costing an amount of chakra depending on your rank. lower ranks can also be chosen, never higher than your rank.
[Reaction time/Speed increase]
Academy: 2 posts [Cannot deal lethal damage]
Genin: 3 posts
Chuunin: 4 posts
Jonin: 6 posts
Sannin: 9 posts


Name of Jutsu:Katanakizu [Sword wound]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:Mid-long
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description: The user Slices with the Hiramekarei, releasing a crescent shaped energy slash, that flies straight to their opponent.The technique can be used by any rank, costing an amount of chakra depending on your rank. lower ranks can also be chosen, never higher than your rank.
Academy: 0ft~5ft [non-lethal]
Genin:5ft~10ft
Chuunin:10ft~20ft
Jonin:20ft~35ft
Sannin:35ft~80ft

Name of Jutsu:Tsuba[sword guard]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:close
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description: This ability lets the Samurai stand perfectly still, And feel an oncoming technique through a web of projected chakra, that sets of a reactionary sense that tells the user to slash with blinding speed and reaction time through an oncoming attack. Can only cancel attacks your rank and lower, your sword cannot cancel chakra of the opposing elemental affinity, ex:Fire cutting through water ninjutsu.The technique can be used by any rank, costing an amount of chakra depending on your rank. lower ranks can also be chosen, never higher than your rank.
[one post of standing still to prepare.]

Name of Jutsu:Toukon[Sword scar]
Rank of Jutsu:Academy-Sannin
Range of Jutsu:Close
Jutsu's Element:Variable
Description: The user concentrates double the amount of chakra for a jutsu of their level into a single slash, Dealing higher in damage to the opponent.