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 Posted: Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:03 am
An old a** RP from another guild. I'll send a link to the full RP for those interested. Just for some background: Finn is a Lycan, Ein -played by [orphen]- is a hunter. They hate each other. that's all you really need to know. I post with Dark blue speech and he posts all in green, for the most part. I would recomend reading it if only for the sheer entertainment value of my smart assery Quote: Finn came out of the bike shop, with her helmet under her arm to reveal the striking blue-dyed hair that she had cut short. With a luxurious stretch she moved over to one of the crappy chairs the shop had for those who needed the quick and dirty checkup done, and where waiting for their bike. Lazily she threw her helmet down next to her and started clicking her spark-rings together absentmindedly. The rings where so old now that they hardly made a spark, but that didn't matter since she rarely used fireworks anymore, having traded that habit in for the slightly more dangerous gun. She looked around the place in a board fashion, hardly believing that in this rut of a town she had once had some adventures of a lifetime. She snorted at a particular memory about some stupid hunter who had scared the holy jezus out of her and warranted an M80 firework to the face. And she froze in place as she realized why that particular memory came to mind. That same hunter was looking at her from a few rooftops away. Finn quickly averted her eyes, in hopes that he wouldn't recognize her, or that she would hear him pull back his bow before he actually took a snipe at her. She kept her ears open and sat rigid, ready to pounce should he attempt anything.
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Posted: Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:05 am
I'm sorry ma'am, but I don't think you're quite literate enough to join our squad.
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:: snickers ::
WELCOME BACK!
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:03 am
Arikawa Hikaro wishes ta join! Tell me if I'm dong something wrong. Quote:  Shinji Arikawa Rank 4 Espada Shinji cursed sligtly when he saw the kidou block his attack but, smiled a little when he saw it crack. He then sensed Gato behind him and he turned around, he only noticed when the wind blades rip began cutting him. They started from minor cuts and grew into large slashes on his back. Shinji was breathing heavily and was in alot of pain. He saw Gato turn around and swung his sword he moved his body back in time to make sure he didn't decapitate him but, he landed a large slash across his chest. He used sonido and back away. He waited and let his regenration tend to his wounds. Once it was finished he grabbed his mask again. and began turning it. His reiatsu began growing until it was fully upside down. This was full power.
Two rips appeared in is mask both showed Shinji's mouth. "You surely do surprise me Gatomura-san. Your speed is amazing, the damage potential your sword has is amazing, and your willingness to use it to rip me apart is frightening." He began clapping. "But, this is only Shikai show Bankai." He reached into the mouths and slowly pulled out two axes both equal size and shape. "Or you'll die." He used sonido and began zigzaging toward Gato. He stopped infront of him and began a multitude of slashes at him.This is something from an Roleplay that is curently still going on.
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 11:59 am
Kashiou I can type one up in a bit, but I'm currently working on revamping my OC... sweatdrop It's fine, take your time. ^^
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Posted: Sun Jul 25, 2010 9:35 am
@ Yami: Sorry, but I cannot accept you into the ranks of Squad 1.
Just with reading your rp sample I can tell that you need to work on your punctuation and redundancy. We can understand your character is doing something, so there is no real need to say 'he' so much unless you were making a possessive or were returning to your character when talking about another( in that case it's best to use your character's name as not to confuse who is being talked about).
As for your profile set up, yes, you did follow the template very well for a new member. But, again, your grammar is lacking in the same areas. Your shikai is a blatant take from Ukitake's shikai and Nel's special cero ability. That and, even with the overload limit, I highly doubt the crew would trust you to use it pragmatically. You should just think about redoing it.
And please, for the love of Pete, work out your background a little further. Very bare bones in terms of details. I don't even think that would be good enough to be a quick summary of a children's picture book.
I recommend contacting one of our resident grammar tutors and rp'ing with them. They are very good at what they do and, over time, your writing will improve and communication with others in character will be more productive.
Best of luck!
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Posted: Sun Aug 01, 2010 12:35 pm
Shione NatsukiRP Sample:Shione stared at the darkest alleyway wondering if there was indeed a presence lurking within, using the shadows to steathily pick out the right opportunity to strike at the Shinigami. The streets of Karakura were knitted with places like this, as well as high ground and numerous obstructions someone could exploit to hide or launch a sneaky long-ranged attack from. To add, it did not help that the only light illuminating this scene was from the moonlight and the flickering of a malfuctioning street lamp. Shione was not the type to just sneak around to pick her strike; she would rather fight someone in full view, discerning weaknesses within that person and exploit them quickly with no warning or mercy. She grew tired of this rediculous strategy, using her abilities to sense reiatsu to pinpoint her foe's location and movements. She had to really concentrate, but finally she was able to detect her opponent as they shifted into another area behind her. "Rend flesh and bone from the body, Baizou Tsume no Fukurou." He commanded whilst releasing her tachi from it's sheath. In a continuous movement, she swung the double-scythed mace at the street lamp, smashing through it and forcing what looked to be a shadow from behind it, as there was a little area of the lamp that the light could not shine to. With a flick of her wrist, the deadly flail's chain bowed in the direction of the shadowy figure as the wave of momentum carried itself towards the flail's head. Suddenly whipping into motion, the scythed section clawed a rough line into the building it scraped en route to the fleeing enemy, before it finally began to encircle widely around the figure's shadowed body. "Poor little mouse doesn't realise..." Shione began, crouching lower and readying her wielding hand for something sinister; a glint in her as she jerked the chain back sharply. "My snake is hungry!"
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Posted: Thu Aug 12, 2010 11:30 am
@ Shione: I'm a little skeptical of your credentials right now, so I've been waiting and watching you in the tourney as of late.
I'll make things clearer as round 1 ends.
Sound fair?
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Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 2:13 pm
That sounds fair enough, COVrock. I'll adhere to that. heart
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2010 11:35 am
Accepted, Shione.
Go ahead and post your profile in the profiles thread and join in on the festivities!
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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 12:48 pm
I would like to join Squad One pl0x [Link to Profile]Rp Example: Delta had been late for morning briefings. Damn girlfriend. He was late for gearing up. Damn her... They left without him. His Squad left without their Squad leader. Damn them! Though he wasn't totally left behind. The NCO had squeezed into one of the last Blackhawk's to take off with an unknown squad of men. They didn't seem to mind, however. In fact, they welcomed him with open arms. It seemed that everyone in Air Cavalry, at least, had heard of Delta. They heard of him to be one helluva leader, a well liked guy...and a complete psychopath. Even the Squad leader seemed enthusiastic about having him onboard. The stories he told on the flight over didn't help none either. He impressed them all with his stories, and taught the Squad's Gunner a few tricks. Cracked a few jokes, and shared cigarettes with the rest of the men. It was as if they were old friends and were catching up. But they were Pessimistic. Knew it was short lived. That once on the ground Delta would part ways with them and find his own Squad. ...If they lived. Delta didn't even think nor did he have time to. The Blackhawk lurched forward as an RPG took out the tail rotor. All the men inside fell off their seats and onto the floor or on top of each other. The Squad Leader of the nameless Squad wasn't so lucky. The young Sergeant had gotten up from his fall, just as the Helicopter started to rotate out of control and he lost his footing. He fell out the door with everyone staring in shock. Amongst the chaos of everyone trying to hold onto something, a few, Delta included, saw the Squad leader hit the corner of a building and practically explode into a red mess. Not wanting to suffer the same fate, the others managed to slam both doors closed with extreme difficulty...just as the Blackhawk slammed into a building and skidded to a halt within. (Yeah, I know...not a Bleach example but you guys are the first Bleach guild, much less first Bleach RP I'm trying to do...despite the fact that I'm still on ep. 77 >.>)
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Posted: Fri Oct 29, 2010 7:27 pm
You've got the go ahead. Come on in and join the fun!
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 3:10 pm
I realize it may not happen for one reason or another but here goes. My new character is Durzin de Treilo and I would like to know if he could join the First Squad. I'm a decent RPer, I work hard, I'm quite active, and here is an RP sample. I have been a member of this guild for almost a year now and I have improved significantly from my first RP experience. Good luck to moi. Oh, and here is my Profile.
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Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 12:52 am
Hey Mitch smile
The Captain might take a while to (dis)approve you, so just give it some time.
However if it was up to me I would say this:
You should rework your shikai and bankai since it seems a bit easy to godmod, but other then that it seems fine to me. If you get accepted let me be the first to say welcome.
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Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 5:19 am
I wouldn't do that and I've made sure to mention many times that things imbued with large amounts of reiatsu can resist the effect. I've also made sure to mention that the blades of those who are Captain level and that much more distant from him reiatsu wise will have even more resistance. And lastly it only devours what comes into contact with it. While the damage if cut by it is slightly worse than a normal cut you still need to be hit by it, which depends on his own skill with a blade. Mirouni pointed out his problems with it and I fixed it. So I think It'll be fine. But thanks smile I hope I make it as well.
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Posted: Mon Nov 22, 2010 1:05 am
Alright, then. Sorry about the wait. ^^;;
Mitch, welcome to the squad. Just want to get a couple of thing out of the way, and we'll be good to go. Firstly, I took a look at your zanpokuto, and after talking with Mirouni, we decided that a couple of minor changes are needed. You don't have to change the zanpokuto at all, except for the fact that it would be best if soul steel, the stuff zanpokuto are made of, was resistant to the devouring effect, and instead of being completely 100% invisible, there should be a slight coloration or something similar to indicate the blade in a slight, hard to notice way.
Sound good?
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