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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 10:56 am
everchanginggirl Alright, my character's name is Kimiko Michiyo, my favorite of all the characters I've ever used in my roleplays with Naruto. Her first name means child without equal, her last name means three-thousand generations. There is a very thick history to her clan, and I can post that information in necessary. I am aiming to enter the Land of Fire, so I'm writing here as if she's already living there. (I usually write first person, so third person is a little wierd to me, but not unpracticed.) RP Example: Kimiko takes a lingering glance at the picture of her family on the dresser before pulling her tank-top-style hoodie on and hurrying out the door. She tromps down the stairs of the apartment complex and steps out into the fresh morning air, taking a look around at the dawn sky. There aren't many people out at this time of the morning, so the streets are clear. She takes a step to the left and starts a slow jog. Morning excercizes were routine; she needed to be strong and in-shape if she was ever going to finish the demons who destroyed her family. As she ran, taking in the the light twitter of waking birds, her mind began to wander. Her thoughts drifted to a memory of brother, from years before. Her twin had been her best friend until he disappeared. Kimiko shakes her head, dispelling the saddening thought. Fear brought about vulnerability, and that was one thing she didn't need. pass. nobody likes suna crying
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 12:45 pm
Then someone now shall!!! *Sending Suna Application*
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 6:28 pm
My character is Lana Taylor, going to get into Suna biggrin
Lana ran out the door, shouting a "Goodbye!" over her shoulder to her mother. As she ran to the academy, she stopped abruptly at a small alleyway and ran down the narrow street, taking the shortcut she had discovered to the academy. She had slowed to a walk once she had walked into the doors of the academy and she could barely keep her excitement bottled up inside of her as she opened the door to her classroom.
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 6:38 pm
my characters name is Kuoru Sinnata.
Kuoru awoke with a start as visions of his past blow by. Standing up and shacking off the bad thoughts he walked to his fridge fro some milk. "Better drink the rest today." looking at the date he saw that it expired today. downing a glass he took a quick shower and got dressed in his day to day getup. jumping out his window he started making his way to the school. "today is the day I become a ninja, nothing is gonna get in my way!"
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 8:20 pm
Anivla01 My character is Lana Taylor, going to get into Suna biggrin Lana ran out the door, shouting a "Goodbye!" over her shoulder to her mother. As she ran to the academy, she stopped abruptly at a small alleyway and ran down the narrow street, taking the shortcut she had discovered to the academy. She had slowed to a walk once she had walked into the doors of the academy and she could barely keep her excitement bottled up inside of her as she opened the door to her classroom. pass. yay more suna applicants whee
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 8:21 pm
lord Lykouleon my characters name is Kuoru Sinnata. Kuoru awoke with a start as visions of his past blow by. Standing up and shacking off the bad thoughts he walked to his fridge fro some milk. "Better drink the rest today." looking at the date he saw that it expired today. downing a glass he took a quick shower and got dressed in his day to day getup. jumping out his window he started making his way to the school. "today is the day I become a ninja, nothing is gonna get in my way!"pass. rofl it reminds me of when naruto drank the expired milk rofl
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 9:53 pm
My character's name is Kiro Yinagami. I,m currently making his story and all his stats and stuff, so i wont include much info here.
My rp example:
Kiro had traveled for many days, but he was finally there. He had at long last reached the village of Konoha. "I'm finally here....." he sighed, then grinned as he looked at the faces of the hokages. " After all this travelling, I've finally found Konoha" Kiro said, as he sat down to admire the great village. " I have a feeling I'm gonna have lot's of oportunities here" He got up from the tall grass, and walked towards the village as the wind moved his hair. Kiro was beggining his journey through life.
Done ^^. Hope that was good enough, and im actually gonna aply for the sand village. So yeah, I hope this works, and I hope I can be a part of this greatly made roleplay ^^. Thank You.
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 10:45 pm
darkjoh223 My character's name is Kiro Yinagami. I,m currently making his story and all his stats and stuff, so i wont include much info here. My rp example: Kiro had traveled for many days, but he was finally there. He had at long last reached the village of Konoha. "I'm finally here....." he sighed, then grinned as he looked at the faces of the hokages. " After all this travelling, I've finally found Konoha" Kiro said, as he sat down to admire the great village. " I have a feeling I'm gonna have lot's of oportunities here" He got up from the tall grass, and walked towards the village as the wind moved his hair. Kiro was beggining his journey through life. Done ^^. Hope that was good enough, and im actually gonna aply for the sand village. So yeah, I hope this works, and I hope I can be a part of this greatly made roleplay ^^. Thank You. pass. yay more active members for suna XD
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 11:57 pm
My characters name is Kisuke kuna
Kisuke had been sitting in the same chair for the past three years, taking this class, learning how to become an effective RPer. He had been studying every chance he could. He was a smart kid, classes didn't worry him at all. In fact, he liked to learn, so it saddened him to be leaving these hallowed halls. He almost did not want to leave; but he knew he had to. He took his final exam and immediately took it to the teacher, a person of whom Kisuke had great respect for. "Ma'am, I have finished the exam, I hope I will be seeing you again soon."
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Posted: Tue Aug 11, 2009 12:41 am
Kisuke_Kuna My characters name is Kisuke kuna Kisuke had been sitting in the same chair for the past three years, taking this class, learning how to become an effective RPer. He had been studying every chance he could. He was a smart kid, classes didn't worry him at all. In fact, he liked to learn, so it saddened him to be leaving these hallowed halls. He almost did not want to leave; but he knew he had to. He took his final exam and immediately took it to the teacher, a person of whom Kisuke had great respect for. "Ma'am, I have finished the exam, I hope I will be seeing you again soon." pass
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Posted: Thu Aug 13, 2009 1:19 am
My characters name is Netrell Hollows.
Netrell was practicing Taijutsu at the training room at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Left punch! Right punch! Left kick! Right punch! Roundhouse kick! Left punch! Jump kick! Side kick! Left punch! Netrell was sweating horribly, then he decided he would train his Kunai skills. Then he went to the aim boards, he tossed up a Kunai from his right pouch, caught it with his left hand, and then cut to the left, tossed the Kunai into his right, stabbed the heart, jumped backwards about 30 yards, threw it, and, WHAM! it hit the center dead target. "This is too easy.. why do I even bother training? I train 10 hours a day, go to the Academy for 4, I eat breakfast and dinner, leaving me an hour with my friends.." and then he took another 5 Kunai out of his pouch, one on each finger, threw them all at once, and all 5 surrounded the one that was already at the center. Then he took 4 Shuriken out of his pouch, 2 in each hand, then he threw all 4 at a time, and they all landed around the Kunai like a box. Then Netrell got bored of training, he still had half an hour left, so he went and grabbed his tools, and then walked his way over to the wooden dummies, took out his Katana, and in 2 seconds, had cut off both arms, both legs, and the head. Then he yelled "Will someone please talk to me while I train!?!" and he got so mad, he just dropped his Katana, took a Kunai, and threw at the aim boards from 75 yards, and, BAM! it hit dead center, and then he ran over there, grabbed it out, and put it in his pouch. Then he ran back to his Katana, picked it up, and ran full speed at a wooden dummy, and then jumped, did a somersault in the air, and slashed the body in half. "Piece of cake.." Netrell said. He had always liked training, but today, he hated it.. all he ever wanted was a couple of friends that he could hang out with all day, but no.. his dad insisted that he trained to become a Chunin. Netrell was sick of this stupid day-to-day training, that's all he ever did! TRAIN! It was 30 minutes when Netrell was done. He ran home, and when he got there, "Where have you been? You are 2 minutes late!" his dads face was red, and then Netrell said "I was training, and I'm sick of this schedule! I'm done, I'll train everyday, but not for 10 hours straight!" and then Netrell ate his dinner, Steak with gravy, bread, and some milk. Then he went to bed, and in minutes he was asleep.
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Posted: Thu Aug 13, 2009 1:23 am
[Sorry for making it so long, I feel bad for making you read so much. =( ]
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Posted: Thu Aug 13, 2009 6:58 am
Netrell My characters name is Netrell Hollows. Netrell was practicing Taijutsu at the training room at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Left punch! Right punch! Left kick! Right punch! Roundhouse kick! Left punch! Jump kick! Side kick! Left punch! Netrell was sweating horribly, then he decided he would train his Kunai skills. Then he went to the aim boards, he tossed up a Kunai from his right pouch, caught it with his left hand, and then cut to the left, tossed the Kunai into his right, stabbed the heart, jumped backwards about 30 yards, threw it, and, WHAM! it hit the center dead target. "This is too easy.. why do I even bother training? I train 10 hours a day, go to the Academy for 4, I eat breakfast and dinner, leaving me an hour with my friends.." and then he took another 5 Kunai out of his pouch, one on each finger, threw them all at once, and all 5 surrounded the one that was already at the center. Then he took 4 Shuriken out of his pouch, 2 in each hand, then he threw all 4 at a time, and they all landed around the Kunai like a box. Then Netrell got bored of training, he still had half an hour left, so he went and grabbed his tools, and then walked his way over to the wooden dummies, took out his Katana, and in 2 seconds, had cut off both arms, both legs, and the head. Then he yelled "Will someone please talk to me while I train!?!" and he got so mad, he just dropped his Katana, took a Kunai, and threw at the aim boards from 75 yards, and, BAM! it hit dead center, and then he ran over there, grabbed it out, and put it in his pouch. Then he ran back to his Katana, picked it up, and ran full speed at a wooden dummy, and then jumped, did a somersault in the air, and slashed the body in half. "Piece of cake.." Netrell said. He had always liked training, but today, he hated it.. all he ever wanted was a couple of friends that he could hang out with all day, but no.. his dad insisted that he trained to become a Chunin. Netrell was sick of this stupid day-to-day training, that's all he ever did! TRAIN! It was 30 minutes when Netrell was done. He ran home, and when he got there, "Where have you been? You are 2 minutes late!" his dads face was red, and then Netrell said "I was training, and I'm sick of this schedule! I'm done, I'll train everyday, but not for 10 hours straight!" and then Netrell ate his dinner, Steak with gravy, bread, and some milk. Then he went to bed, and in minutes he was asleep. Ono. Long posts are fine. xD But try breaking it up more into paragraphs...because some of us do not have that great of an attention span... xP This sort of...well...encourages skimming through, you know? Hmn...as far as writing style goes...try to break up sentences more too. There's quite a lot of commas...and a bit of rough transitions...so it's a bit hard to follow your line of thoughts. So maybe try more transition words and incorporating more conjunctions?
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Posted: Thu Aug 13, 2009 12:06 pm
Heimowarwei stood on the hot sand of the desert not far from his home village. covered in in airy white cloth to keep him cool and protect his body from the sun. He assumed his fighting stance and began the chant he always used to help him focus in his Taijutsu training. "I am like the swift wind..." He made a strong jab forward with an open palm. "Flowing and ever changing..." He made a mock imitation of the 'clincher' hands cupped as if holding to he back of a head his knee coming up a loud smack his hands hitting his knee as he had gone forward getting a few inches of lift from the action. "I give comfort to those I favor..." He kicks up high holding it there for a moment. "And ruin to my enemies... " He does a heel drop making a pretty good indention in the sand. "I am always present even in peace." He stopped as he had always been told to contemplate his little chant the wind stirred around him bringing a warm breeze to his face. He took that as his single to continue training muttering the chant to himself as he continued his shadowboxing.
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Posted: Thu Aug 13, 2009 9:04 pm
Hugo159 Heimowarwei stood on the hot sand of the desert not far from his home village. covered in in airy white cloth to keep him cool and protect his body from the sun. He assumed his fighting stance and began the chant he always used to help him focus in his Taijutsu training. "I am like the swift wind..." He made a strong jab forward with an open palm. "Flowing and ever changing..." He made a mock imitation of the 'clincher' hands cupped as if holding to he back of a head his knee coming up a loud smack his hands hitting his knee as he had gone forward getting a few inches of lift from the action. "I give comfort to those I favor..." He kicks up high holding it there for a moment. "And ruin to my enemies... " He does a heel drop making a pretty good indention in the sand. "I am always present even in peace." He stopped as he had always been told to contemplate his little chant the wind stirred around him bringing a warm breeze to his face. He took that as his single to continue training muttering the chant to himself as he continued his shadowboxing. pass
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