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 Posted: Wed Jun 24, 2009 12:38 am
CRAZYxF3RR3TxP3RSON heh, here it goes. my name is Zamzara Demonarakiazoku Zamzara was walking into is house when suddenly he saw a figure in the shadows. "What was that?" Zamzara took one more step and saw a leg in the corner of his living room. "I got you now" Zamzara through 3 kunais at the figures but he heard them hit the floor. "where did you go?" Suddenly zamzara fell to the floor after being kicked. Zamzara looked around the area of his living room and spotted the figure again. "got you this time!" Zamzara threw a kunai the opposite direction, getting the figures attention going the wrong way. Zamzara leaps at the figure with a kunai in his hand and makes contact. The figure dosen't move as zamzara flicks on a light switch. the figure was a masked person and the kunai was in it's hand which was attached the floor. The person removed his mask, showing that it was...... Zamzara's brother, Zepher. pass. kinda dull and cliche tho but overall it was good
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Posted: Wed Jun 24, 2009 7:11 am
onixdragon CRAZYxF3RR3TxP3RSON heh, here it goes. my name is Zamzara Demonarakiazoku Zamzara was walking into is house when suddenly he saw a figure in the shadows. "What was that?" Zamzara took one more step and saw a leg in the corner of his living room. "I got you now" Zamzara through 3 kunais at the figures but he heard them hit the floor. "where did you go?" Suddenly zamzara fell to the floor after being kicked. Zamzara looked around the area of his living room and spotted the figure again. "got you this time!" Zamzara threw a kunai the opposite direction, getting the figures attention going the wrong way. Zamzara leaps at the figure with a kunai in his hand and makes contact. The figure dosen't move as zamzara flicks on a light switch. the figure was a masked person and the kunai was in it's hand which was attached the floor. The person removed his mask, showing that it was...... Zamzara's brother, Zepher. pass. kinda dull and cliche tho but overall it was good well you did ask for a sample.... i can do a lot better thanks for the pass by the way
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Posted: Wed Jun 24, 2009 12:14 pm
His name... Zann.
After the death of his father he began a journey to the village hidden in the clouds.
It was raining. The tree's cracked and the sky roared its treacherous sound. Lightning struck hard close by. Zann darted through the tree's. rain matted his hair down, and wind forced him to squint his eye's. He knew were he was going, the map his father left had come in handy many times now. He slipped. He fell Slamming his head on several branches. He crashed into the ground hard. His eye's stared at the sky until his aching body finally fell asleep.
He awoke, suddenly. Animals close by scurried away. He jumped up miraculously feeling better than he thought he would. He reached down to his bag. He discovered it was gone, the map, the painting, and everything he had was gone. All except his father's sword, Zann didn't know why whoever stole his things didn't take his sword. He fell to his knee's and scorned himself for letting himself slip.
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Posted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 8:25 pm
Ok, pass, but you need to work on spelling words right and not using homophones. Also, try to mix up your pronouns, you can't use 'he' at the beginning of every sentence. I like the length though.
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Posted: Mon Jun 29, 2009 9:58 am
Yawning, the boy stretched his arms out to both of his sides letting out a large sigh. He stood, giving a glance around his dull and boring house for something to do. Igaki rubbed both of his eyes slowly, moving out of his home. A large crackling sound could be heard around his area, which meant the means of taking precaution. Wind pressed up against his body, his eyes squinted trying to catch a visual of what may have produced the crackling sound. "Its probably nothing.. maybe just the wind?" he asked himself, trying to convince himself there was nothing really dangerous out there. A shrouded figure jumped down from a tree, lurching its claws on Igaki's head. Exclaiming loudly, Igaki ran around in circles trying to throw the figure off, "Get it off! Get it off! Get it off!" Sighing in relief, he managed to throw the figure off of him, sooner realising it was a simple house cat. A leering gaze was set upon Igaki's eyes. Confused and scared, Igaki turned to trip on the root of a tree. He felt humiliated, being scared of a little cat. Sprinting away, he made his way to the Academy to start off his life as a Ninja.
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Posted: Mon Jun 29, 2009 11:26 pm
Fragile Bones Yawning, the boy stretched his arms out to both of his sides letting out a large sigh. He stood, giving a glance around his dull and boring house for something to do. Igaki rubbed both of his eyes slowly, moving out of his home. A large crackling sound could be heard around his area, which meant the means of taking precaution. Wind pressed up against his body, his eyes squinted trying to catch a visual of what may have produced the crackling sound. "Its probably nothing.. maybe just the wind?" he asked himself, trying to convince himself there was nothing really dangerous out there. A shrouded figure jumped down from a tree, lurching its claws on Igaki's head. Exclaiming loudly, Igaki ran around in circles trying to throw the figure off, "Get it off! Get it off! Get it off!" Sighing in relief, he managed to throw the figure off of him, sooner realising it was a simple house cat. A leering gaze was set upon Igaki's eyes. Confused and scared, Igaki turned to trip on the root of a tree. He felt humiliated, being scared of a little cat. Sprinting away, he made his way to the Academy to start off his life as a Ninja. XD. not bad only one little spelling error. pass
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Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 3:41 pm
My characters name is: KC
KC walked into the grocery store casually as he does every Sunday and gave a slight wave to the cashier as he said "hello". He continued walking into the store looking through the many aisles. Then he found the aisle he was looking and started walking down it.
As he was walking through the aisle he started to look for the Fruit Loops that he went there for but as he continued down the aisle he couldn't help but glance at the beautiful blond haired woman looking through all the different kinds of cereal their was. But then he realized he could miss his cereal he was looking for and went back to looking through the aisle. Near the end of the aisle he finally found the Fruit Loops he went there for, so he grabbed the box and started heading toward the cashier.
When he got to the cashier he set down the box and from previous purchases he got out the exact amount from his wallet and handed it to the cashier. The cashier said "thank you" as he grabbed his cereal and walked out of the store.
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Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 8:19 pm
OMG Its A Squirrel My characters name is: KC KC walked into the grocery store casually as he does every Sunday and gave a slight wave to the cashier as he said "hello". He continued walking into the store looking through the many aisles. Then he found the aisle he was looking and started walking down it. As he was walking through the aisle he started to look for the Fruit Loops that he went there for but as he continued down the aisle he couldn't help but glance at the beautiful blond haired woman looking through all the different kinds of cereal their was. But then he realized he could miss his cereal he was looking for and went back to looking through the aisle. Near the end of the aisle he finally found the Fruit Loops he went there for, so he grabbed the box and started heading toward the cashier. When he got to the cashier he set down the box and from previous purchases he got out the exact amount from his wallet and handed it to the cashier. The cashier said "thank you" as he grabbed his cereal and walked out of the store. rofl i love how it has nothing to do with ninja XD. pass
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Posted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 1:11 pm
onixdragon OMG Its A Squirrel My characters name is: KC KC walked into the grocery store casually as he does every Sunday and gave a slight wave to the cashier as he said "hello". He continued walking into the store looking through the many aisles. Then he found the aisle he was looking and started walking down it. As he was walking through the aisle he started to look for the Fruit Loops that he went there for but as he continued down the aisle he couldn't help but glance at the beautiful blond haired woman looking through all the different kinds of cereal their was. But then he realized he could miss his cereal he was looking for and went back to looking through the aisle. Near the end of the aisle he finally found the Fruit Loops he went there for, so he grabbed the box and started heading toward the cashier. When he got to the cashier he set down the box and from previous purchases he got out the exact amount from his wallet and handed it to the cashier. The cashier said "thank you" as he grabbed his cereal and walked out of the store. rofl i love how it has nothing to do with ninja XD. pass sorry I didn't realize we had to use our character in a ninja situation.
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Posted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 8:30 pm
OMG Its A Squirrel onixdragon OMG Its A Squirrel My characters name is: KC KC walked into the grocery store casually as he does every Sunday and gave a slight wave to the cashier as he said "hello". He continued walking into the store looking through the many aisles. Then he found the aisle he was looking and started walking down it. As he was walking through the aisle he started to look for the Fruit Loops that he went there for but as he continued down the aisle he couldn't help but glance at the beautiful blond haired woman looking through all the different kinds of cereal their was. But then he realized he could miss his cereal he was looking for and went back to looking through the aisle. Near the end of the aisle he finally found the Fruit Loops he went there for, so he grabbed the box and started heading toward the cashier. When he got to the cashier he set down the box and from previous purchases he got out the exact amount from his wallet and handed it to the cashier. The cashier said "thank you" as he grabbed his cereal and walked out of the store. rofl i love how it has nothing to do with ninja XD. pass sorry I didn't realize we had to use our character in a ninja situation. oh you don't. i like when people don't use the same old insert name here attacks a shadowy figure. stare . it boring and anyone can do it. mixing it up shows versatility. xd
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Posted: Fri Jul 03, 2009 11:50 pm
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 8:13 pm
Aoi lied on his bed gazing up at the white-washed ceiling. "I wonder when I'll acctualy get to do somthing." He said aloud, to no one in particular. Nothing happened. That was okay, he didn't expect some random person to jump out of no where and give him an assignment. Three sharp knocks hit his door. He sat up slowly wondering if this was just his imagination. As if to answer him the person knocked again. Sighing he sat up and wandered over to the door. As he unlocked the door a women threw the door open, walked over to Aoi's couch and deposited herself on it. "Hello again, Aoi." She said non-schalantly. "Ready?" She asked. "No have no idea." Replied Aoi.
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 8:39 pm
Aoi Rakurai Aoi lied on his bed gazing up at the white-washed ceiling. "I wonder when I'll acctualy get to do somthing." He said aloud, to no one in particular. Nothing happened. That was okay, he didn't expect some random person to jump out of no where and give him an assignment. Three sharp knocks hit his door. He sat up slowly wondering if this was just his imagination. As if to answer him the person knocked again. Sighing he sat up and wandered over to the door. As he unlocked the door a women threw the door open, walked over to Aoi's couch and deposited herself on it. "Hello again, Aoi." She said non-schalantly. "Ready?" She asked. "No have no idea." Replied Aoi. lol good aside from a few spelling errors. pass
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 8:45 pm
onixdragon Aoi Rakurai Aoi lied on his bed gazing up at the white-washed ceiling. "I wonder when I'll acctualy get to do somthing." He said aloud, to no one in particular. Nothing happened. That was okay, he didn't expect some random person to jump out of no where and give him an assignment. Three sharp knocks hit his door. He sat up slowly wondering if this was just his imagination. As if to answer him the person knocked again. Sighing he sat up and wandered over to the door. As he unlocked the door a women threw the door open, walked over to Aoi's couch and deposited herself on it. "Hello again, Aoi." She said non-schalantly. "Ready?" She asked. "No have no idea." Replied Aoi. lol good aside from a few spelling errors. pass
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 9:27 pm
Aoi Rakurai onixdragon Aoi Rakurai Aoi lied on his bed gazing up at the white-washed ceiling. "I wonder when I'll acctualy get to do somthing." He said aloud, to no one in particular. Nothing happened. That was okay, he didn't expect some random person to jump out of no where and give him an assignment. Three sharp knocks hit his door. He sat up slowly wondering if this was just his imagination. As if to answer him the person knocked again. Sighing he sat up and wandered over to the door. As he unlocked the door a women threw the door open, walked over to Aoi's couch and deposited herself on it. "Hello again, Aoi." She said non-schalantly. "Ready?" She asked. "No have no idea." Replied Aoi. lol good aside from a few spelling errors. pass well you can decide what village you want to join (you can join more than one so no pressure). heres a link to the village thread and tips on asking to join a village http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?page=1&t=2545469#54180758http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=7128077
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