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 Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:09 pm
alliballi52 Umm, Hi! I never finished my lesson. ((We critique you. Finish the exercise so I can see if your improving. We will tell you what you need to work on then you will try it one more time.))
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:17 pm
Snake311 alliballi52 Is anybody going to help me or grade me! ((We will give you the situation. Lets try a new one.)) You are in a rush when your car breaks down in the middle of the road. Go! Okay Me-OHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Why does happen to me my cousin is getting married- Matt-My mom is calling but I can'tget a single- Me-Oh somebody please help! Matt-Man I'm suppossed to be the best man! Me-My Cousin wanted me to be there so much!- So.
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:21 pm
alliballi52 Snake311 alliballi52 Is anybody going to help me or grade me! ((We will give you the situation. Lets try a new one.)) You are in a rush when your car breaks down in the middle of the road. Go! Okay Me- OHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Why does happen to me my cousin is getting married- Matt-My mom is calling but I can'tget a single- Me-Oh somebody please help! Matt-Man I'm suppossed to be the best man! Me-My Cousin wanted me to be there so much!- So. ((....ok, first. We want to stick to one person. Second is punctuation and spelling errors. Also some typos. I put them in bold so you can see. I also want more description. Tell me about the car, the road, and about the cars around you. It was also hard to understand.))
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:21 pm
Snake311 alliballi52 Snake311 alliballi52 Is anybody going to help me or grade me! ((We will give you the situation. Lets try a new one.)) You are in a rush when your car breaks down in the middle of the road. Go! Okay Me- OHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Why does happen to me my cousin is getting married- Matt-My mom is calling but I can'tget a single- Me-Oh somebody please help! Matt-Man I'm suppossed to be the best man! Me-My Cousin wanted me to be there so much!- So. ((....ok, first. We want to stick to one person. Second is punctuation and spelling errors. Also some typos. I put them in bold so you can see. I also want more description. Tell me about the car, the road, and about the cars around you.)) ((who does that remind me of...?))
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:22 pm
ChaosGodCloud Snake311 alliballi52 Snake311 alliballi52 Is anybody going to help me or grade me! ((We will give you the situation. Lets try a new one.)) You are in a rush when your car breaks down in the middle of the road. Go! Okay Me- OHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Why does happen to me my cousin is getting married- Matt-My mom is calling but I can'tget a single- Me-Oh somebody please help! Matt-Man I'm suppossed to be the best man! Me-My Cousin wanted me to be there so much!- So. ((....ok, first. We want to stick to one person. Second is punctuation and spelling errors. Also some typos. I put them in bold so you can see. I also want more description. Tell me about the car, the road, and about the cars around you.)) ((who does that remind me of...?)) ((Kitty I know. Kitty's pore role playing skills gave me the idea.))
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:29 pm
((I have to go. Mabey ChaosGodCloud would continue to teach you. He might not though.....if not lets continue tomorrow.))
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:31 pm
Alright I will try again!-
-Oh my gosh my cars has gum in the oil pump! I have to get to prom my friend Molly is waiting for me! She has to sing and, she needs me to be there! I'm the only one that she sings in front of. I convinced her that she could do it! I promised! Please god be nice and let a taxi drive by!...-
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:39 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 4:35 am
alliballi52 Alright I will try again!- -Oh my gosh my car has gum in the oil pump! I have to get to prom, my friend Molly is waiting for me! She has to sing, and she needs me to be there! I'm the only one that she sings in front of. I convinced her that she could do it! I promised! Please God be nice and let a taxi drive by!...- ((Ok, when you are talking put it in "I am talking" type format.. Other than that It is good, but I see a few errors and they are in bold.)) Before you could finish that sentence, a yellow taxi drives by. It stops as soon as it gets to you, and you're broken down car. The driver, a small man, rolls down his window, and asks you for directions to get to the prom.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 3:17 pm
Hello, I am alliballi52's friend in real life and on gaia and I know a bit about RPing But I am not that great yet so if you can teach me I would be honord. And also I might not be on all the time because internet is not yet hooked up and I am am on the Librery computer so I hope you understand.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 5:06 pm
[Anime_Ace] Hello, I am alliballi52's friend in real life and on gaia and I know a bit about RPing But I am not that great yet so if you can teach me I would be honord. And also I might not be on all the time because internet is not yet hooked up and I am am on the Librery computer so I hope you understand. It would be a Honor, Just PM me and we shal begin
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 11:37 am
Could you please tutor me redface ????
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 11:52 am
RP_is_me Could you please tutor me redface ???? Sure lets start with an exercise. ((Your car breaks down in the middle of the free way and your late to a meeting.))
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 11:59 am
"Aw man. If I don't get to that meeting soon, I'll get fired for sure." Yuki was agitated.
She took out her cellphone and saw it was dead.
"Even better, I can't call a cab." she said looking at the time.
"Well, I guess I should start walking. I at least have an hour to find a payphone." she said as she locked up her car and began to walk back toward a gas station.
((how was that?))
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