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 Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 8:47 pm
Koklu_Boy WARNING This poem is kind of depressing and may be disturbing to ages 13 and under!!! "Boston Depression" You made me bleed, it's not very kind On my skin and on my mind Your verbal harm set off an alarm So I could only cut my arm The blade goes right into my skin It goes right through creating a sin No one know's why, no one know's where I fall on the ground with no one there My mom gives a knock on the door She walks in, only to see me on the floor But she dosn't care for my death For that she dumped my body and smoked some meath depressing yet good... 3nodding
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 10:55 pm
oooh, I gotta poem!!!
Dreams
Many nights I have this dream,
A meadow under the sun's soft beam.
It watches lovingly on everything
listening to sweet nature sing.
A small brown bird flies to it's nest
And a gentle breeze comes from the west
gently blowing through the grass,
the small pond seems to be of glass.
My back rests against a tree,
and my arm lays across my knee.
I see the little bee all covered in fuzz
as it does it's little 'buzz'.
A nearby river quickly flows,
And every part of me simply knows
That this is the place I want to be
Though only in dreams do it I see.
But all good times come to a close,
just like the wind that always blows,
and even though I'll miss the meadow bright
I know I'll be back again upon this night
What do you think? it sucks, right? oh well... meh, I forgot most of it so I had to make most of it up. It was a school assignment...
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QueenOfPuzzles Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue May 16, 2006 9:19 pm
No, it's not that bad.
Again I think you switched around on the rythym a bit in places, but it as good. ^^
And I may just be putting stresses on the wrong places too, so it may just be me.
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Posted: Wed May 17, 2006 6:10 pm
QueenOfPuzzles No, it's not that bad. Again I think you switched around on the rythym a bit in places, but it as good. ^^ And I may just be putting stresses on the wrong places too, so it may just be me. no, it's not you, it was me forgetting how on earth I wrote it in the first place and having to rewrite it in ten minutes...
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QueenOfPuzzles Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri May 19, 2006 4:57 pm
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Posted: Fri May 19, 2006 5:48 pm
I'll try to analyze these poems later. When school lets out. ^.^
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QueenOfPuzzles Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri May 19, 2006 6:18 pm
Grar!
Can't...comment...must...think of..SOMETHING...
...Hey...Wait a second. XD
I've got a post! XP *Sends* XD
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Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 2:13 pm
I really gotta remember all those poems I wrote... gah... too... much... work!...
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Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 2:47 pm
hmmm..uhhhh.....Oh, Run run run as fast as you can, Shotgun in hand, it's the gingerbread man! twisted Man I suck at poetry...
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Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 2:50 pm
I'm ok at it... but I don't really like it... too many rhymes...
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Posted: Wed May 24, 2006 10:32 pm
WHO WILL BUY?
"would you buy some red roses?"
remember to smile for the customer
" 2 dozen please...do I know you?"
i ask myself that question everyday
"I think so"
im living a lie
a grand act at best
my mind a fortress concealing happiness
a slave yearning to be free
a wink, a hug my cherade convincing
no emotions will slide down my cheek
for my eyes can be decieving
"how are you?"
an innocent inquery
it's second face snarling at me
"i'm fine"
but i know better
i'm selling my act
and you bought it.
((eh, i was feeling emo. xp i wanted to invent my own style of poetry, and this is what i came up with. mixing a conversation with thoughts in my head. i hope you like it))
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 6:17 pm
I like that roses things. Because it has flowers.. and... Oh no!!! I'm getting ...NISHISH!!!!No!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! crying
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 11:15 pm
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Posted: Sat May 27, 2006 9:24 am
Not sure.
You don't have to make poetry rhyme, Silent. ^^ There are plenty of unrhyming styles, especially ones people come up with themselves. I have several unrhymed although I usually like my own rhyming ones better. But it's whatever pleases you. ^^
And Kaen, I like the last two lines of your poem. ^^
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QueenOfPuzzles Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat May 27, 2006 11:59 am
I know that it doesn't have to rhyme, but this one originally did... so I wanted it to stay rhyming...
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