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 Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 12:39 pm
Did I say... words?
What weapon am I carrying? Can I draw it again?
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 4:02 pm
You could've I'll go look. You will find out more about your weapon next chapter and you can draw it if you would like.
I added about a paragraph btw.
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 4:52 pm
The chapter was good. Though you should go through it a bit. I noticed quite a few grammatical errors. For example, in the first paragraph you put "the" instead of "than".
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 10:17 pm
Nice chapter Seaphron, very good, new characters messing up is always fun, glad to see a new chapter mrgreen
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 10:51 pm
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Posted: Fri May 11, 2007 9:45 am
I liked the chapter alot ,love the new members and stuff . More please. xd
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Posted: Sun May 13, 2007 7:53 pm
@Masamune - Thanks, and yeah my grammer is horrible. If you don't think much better if it I am going to use an editor from here on.
@Sauvie - Of course they are screwing up! My favorite part is Draken scares them.
@Betman - Yay! Maybe not what you expected.
@Godstone - As you have wished so you have been given...
...Chapter Five Added
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Posted: Mon May 14, 2007 4:15 am
Seaphron @Sauvie - Of course they are screwing up! My favorite part is Draken scares them. That was pretty awesome too. Why did I see that coming? xd , anyway, great chapter more characters the better and of course hearing the phrase the Blue b*****d is a little add on that is worth the read. Can't wait for more
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Posted: Mon May 14, 2007 11:28 am
I loved it . I like the way you have portrayed Item XD. Also Draken's weak weak response. Keep up the good work 3nodding
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Posted: Mon May 14, 2007 2:08 pm
*is still drawing*
Short chapter, but still good.
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2007 11:37 pm
@Sauvie - XD Here is your more.
@Godstone - Glad that you enjoyed that.
@Mutsumi - ~awaits seeing drawings even though I have never said your weapon I dont think~
Chapter Six Added
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2007 11:49 pm
My more is greatly appreciated thanks, great chapter Seaphron mrgreen
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 11:50 am
Yeah... I may or may not have forgotten to comment for the last (two?) chapter(s). Heh.
But I definatly have been liking In the Next Life. 3nodding
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 11:50 pm
I'm liking it, I just read it. I don't like how you talk about two characters and say "the other shot fireballs and flipped out crazily." though. I dunno, just a mini thing that very slightly annoys me when you use it sometimes.
Other than that, good work. Who is Caramel?
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Posted: Sun May 20, 2007 12:41 am
Meta_Fish I'm liking it, I just read it. I don't like how you talk about two characters and say "the other shot fireballs and flipped out crazily." though. I dunno, just a mini thing that very slightly annoys me when you use it sometimes. Other than that, good work. Who is Caramel? I think he ment Caramel Kisses
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