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 Posted: Tue May 01, 2007 10:12 pm
Oh, lolz.
That could happen though.
"I wonder how I look... OMGZ A ZIT"
"I'm gonna go visit my son..."
"OMGWTFZ."
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 10:43 am
I might just have to add that somewhere LF.
- Chapter Three Added-
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 10:57 am
lol@Sauvie being a total badass. xd
AS IT SHOULD BE.
Keep it up. But never use 'kinda' in formal writing ever again.
Unless it's dialogue. However you spell that. Firefox is like NO. D<
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 11:11 am
Wow that was a stupid mistake on my part. Fixed.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 11:35 am
Sauvie = Badass, as Betman said that is how it should be.
Nice work on the second and third chapter, very good writing and you seem to know a lot more about future plot this time around, whatever thats worth(they are both great)
Also you are my hero for making Downed laid back and stupid xd
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 11:55 am
I like it so far. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story, even if i'm not in it. XD I've always been a sucker for battle scenes. 'Specially ones the kind that make you think about what will happen next.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 12:15 pm
@Sauvie - Glad you liked it, and no problem about Downed. You will definitly see a bit more stupidity. And yes I do have a much better grasp on the plot this time around.
@Mutsumi - ~edits you out of chapter four~ XD I am glad you like it so far.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 12:23 pm
Seaphron @Sauvie - Glad you liked it, and no problem about Downed. You will definitly see a bit more stupidity. And yes I do have a much better grasp on the plot this time around.
@Mutsumi - ~edits you out of chapter four~ XD I am glad you like it so far. and Seaphron moves up to #5 on my list of most awesome people ever
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 12:26 pm
Seaphron @Mutsumi - ~edits you out of chapter four~ XD I am glad you like it so far. You big meanie.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 1:37 pm
Not too bad Seaphron, but do I really have to be an evil b*****d?
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 2:06 pm
Echo1178 Not too bad Seaphron, but do I really have to be an evil b*****d?
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 2:16 pm
It was good. There were a few gramatically errors like using "too" instead of "to". But overall it was nice.
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 4:47 pm
Nice, In the Next Life is back! I chose a bad day (yesterday, that is) to not get on line. It definatly seems better done this time, like you know more about where it's going.
But what I don't get is why he would send people who weren't there before up against Echo to go infiltrate his castle?
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2007 4:50 pm
Awesome.
Great story.
Lolz, not 1 person who knew who Echo was.
Do the Zit bit.
D<
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Posted: Thu May 03, 2007 7:52 am
That's definantly what I act like. My personality spot-on. XD
Wait... ZOMG I'M IN A STORY!!! =O
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