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 Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 7:49 am
 ♪♫Riku Tensai - Rikudou Sennin♪♫
♪♫ Shinobi Lands ♪♫
okay I am in but could I be crew so I can work?
it would be simple to use avatar wiki for locations you know
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 8:02 am
von thats what i've used, but I want some original places to
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 8:10 am
♪♫Riku Tensai - Rikudou Sennin♪♫
♪♫ Shinobi Lands ♪♫
well damn
I will try to get on that after I finish something up
this bloodline will take a lot out of me
considering I want it to be deadly but fair
everyone will soon fear dragons
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 8:12 am
lol Von I made a dragon summon but it is in the mod forum I need to work on it somemore
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 8:21 am
♪♫Riku Tensai - Rikudou Sennin♪♫
♪♫ Shinobi Lands ♪♫
My bloodline will surpass that surely
ive made dragoon summons before and people love it
so a bloodline will top it for sure
Once I start something I can't stop
and I like it to start that way
keeps me busy with what I like
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:00 am
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:24 am
.___.
Itonami made an EXTREMELY good, and smart post in the 'Dimensional Fighting Area'...o:
I think thats enough to show that he DESERVES that eye.. He SERIOUSLY went all Ninja up Kakashi's a**..o__O
I think I'm gonna have him perform the 'Lightning Blade', and destroy everything around him, then fall into the mist... I'LL CONGRADULATE HIM, THEN DYE SO HE CAN GET HIS EYE IMPLANT..?!
[In my book, he did pretty damn good through the fight...x3]
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:33 am
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:33 am
yeah let him win the only problem in the post is the bad grammer XD
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:39 am
Enh.. He did a good job, so I'm thinking he gets it... :3
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:43 am
yeah he did let him have the shringan, i was just pointing out his grammer XD
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:48 am
____ ¦¦¦ ☼ ☼ ☼ -I - Fѳяενεя504-I-☼ ☼ ☼ ¦¦¦ ____  • Shinobi Yochi - Itonami Senju • -----
Thank you Kuuri.
And Mirrors tell me about the bad grammar so I don't make that same mistake again please .:I Go By The Name Of Itonami Senju - Otogakure:.
.:Many Flowers will bloom over the Horizon :.
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:50 am
I'll re post it here and highlight in bold the areas
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 9:55 am
____ ¦¦¦ ☼ ☼ ☼ -I - Fѳяενεя504-I-☼ ☼ ☼ ¦¦¦ ____ • Shinobi Yochi - Itonami Senju • -----Sweet thank you I gotta say I did pretty good for a genin going against a Jounin like Kakashi .:I Go By The Name Of Itonami Senju - Otogakure:.
.:Many Flowers will bloom over the Horizon :.
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Posted: Sat Feb 21, 2009 10:04 am
Your Version After the mist went in the area Itonami smiled as he makes a tiger handseal. Afterward he noticed something but he couldn't see it.He gets kicked in the face hard by the four clones flying up the mist. He looks up with one eye and he sees Kakashi and probably the real one because of the lightning element. Kakashi grabs him sending electrical shocks. He grunts a little bit as they was about to fly down into the mist. But suddenly there was a laugh as He quickly moves his arms around Kakashi in a bear hug motion also. Itonami's body turned brown and it harden. Then there was a laugh around the area it echoed."First objective completed."
Objective? What was Itonami saying? That seal he made in the mist was a wood clone. He pops out of the tree that fell down earlier and he makes his handseals."Now release my seeds."Itonami's seeds started to bloom around the mist. It was red roses. He then encloses his fist and the roses turns into a thick vine and shot upwards. The seeds that was not surrounding Itonami shot up on the sides. The vines that shot up pierced through the four kakashi clones and more started to go up. There was a total of 500 seeds that was sprinkled around the area. Nearly 75 was surrounding Itonami. If the Four Kakashi's gotten hit there was 71 more flying upwards very fast and since he is aerial bound this attack will be extremely hard to dodge. Also the vines from the side as well was coming straight towards Kakashi.
Mean while in the air they was flying down at a fast rate. The wood clone of Itonami exploded since it couldn't take so much lightning. The explsion released wooded needles that pierced Kakashi's body. This will also stop him from trying to evade the attack which is about to piece him in a matter of seconds because the vines was flying up faster than they was flying down."Also this wasn't ordinary mist as well." The purple mist was really a poison that can enter Kakashi's body from breathing and from the pores in his body that includes the open areas. His wrist his side of his face, the ankles. If the poison got in(which it probably did since it already surrounded you) Kakashi will be feeling his arms going numb and his legs. Then the poison will continue as it flows in the blood stream damaging his organs making him unable to move right.
The real Itonami smiles as his cursed seal started to glow. A vine like pattern started to move all around his body. His third objective can be completed if Kakashi survives which he will probably not. Re Worked Version After the mist went in the area Itonami smiled as he made a tiger handseal. Afterwards he noticed something but he couldn't see it. He gets kicked in the face hard by the four clones flying up the mist. He looks up with one eye and he sees Kakashi and probably the real one because of the lightning element. Kakashi grabs him sending electrical shocks. He grunts a little bit as they are about to fly down into the mist. But suddenly there was a laugh as He quickly moves his arms around Kakashi in a bear hug motion also. Itonami's body turned brown and it harden. Then there was a laugh around the area it echoed."First objective completed."
Objective? What was Itonami saying? The seal he had made in the mist was a wood clone. He pops out of the tree that fell down earlier, he makes his handseals. "Now release my seeds." Itonami's seeds started to bloom around the mist. It was red roses. He then enclosed his fist and the roses turns into a thick vine and shot upwards. The seeds that was not surrounding Itonami shot up on the sides. The vines that shot up pierced through the four kakashi clones and more started to go up. There was a total of 500 seeds that was sprinkled around the area. Nearly 75 was surrounding Itonami. If the Four Kakashi's had gotten hit there would be 71 more flying upwards very fast and since he was aerial bound this attack would be extremely hard to dodge. Also the vines from the side were coming aswell straight towards Kakashi.
Mean while in the air they were flying down at a fast rate. The wood clone of Itonami exploded since it couldn't take so much lightning. The explsion released wooded needles that pierced Kakashi's body. This would also stop him from trying to evade the attack which is was about to piece him in a matter of seconds because the vines were flying up faster than they [were flying down. Also this wasn't ordinary mist as well. The purple mist was really a poison that could enter Kakashi's body from breathing and from the pores in his body that included the open areas. His wrist his side of his face, the ankles. If the poison got in, which it probably did since it was already surrounded him. Kakashi wouldbe feeling his arms going numb and his legs. Then the poison would continue as it flowed in the blood stream damaging his organs making him unable to move right.
The real Itonami smiled as his cursed seal started to glow. A vine like pattern started to move all around his body. His third objective can be completed if Kakashi survives which he probably wouldn't. It may be alot of reading, but its worth it to see how to improve. The problems were really just the fact you kept changing from 1st person to thrid person.
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