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 Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:17 am
Nn. Done.
Now I really can't sleep. -Overtired-
;n;
Ike Len Ka~? Hehe.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:17 am
That's absolutely hilarious. And cute. But that's what Len usually is... xD
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:19 am
Aw, I'm sorry Kellybelly! D: I didn't mean to!
Yes, Len. He's adorable. =w= And my age. >.>
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:21 am
Hehe... that's amusing. =w=
Looks like Jing's gone for the night...
I'm not going to have very much sleep tonight... =w=
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:23 am
Not your fault, hon. -Nods, slumps over her shoulder- Nn..
LLLen~
.. DAMN, now I have Imitation Black stuck in my heaaad.
And baw, poor Eno. =/
And now I'm going to bed. Night. Again. >__>
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:43 am
Nighty Kelbel. ^^
[/ Got chapter up on FF ] Ne, Eno? Did you like my story? Or were you uninterested?
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:50 am
I'll check it out shortly, Silent... just got out of the shower.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:51 am
Oh, no. I meant when you read the first chapter. If you didn't like the first don't bother reading it, I don't want to bore you. xD That's what I meant.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:52 am
I already read the first chapter, remember? I said it was a good introduction and you got all the characters perfectly. *reading second now*
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:55 am
[/ Face-palm ] I know you read--- Never mind. xD Tell me what you think and how high you assume I was when writing this. Pff.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:00 am
Yes, I wanted more after reading the first.
The second one's just as good good; a bit more disjointed but that's partly the "high" thing. xD
As far as that goes, I'd say you were just high enough to make something like Fran in a lolita outfit (which was hilarious, btw)... can't give any more specific than that. Once again, good representation of the Varia, though Mammon being an uke doesn't seem likely when I recall the ring arc. He was in charge when talking to Bel, and Bel knew it.
So 4.5/5 stars, 9/10, whatever rating of equal height.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:04 am
. . . YOU THINK MAMMON COULD SEME BEL? xD I think that would be wrong. Pff. xD
Thankies though. ^^ I needed some criticism. [/ Nods ]
The Lolita was for my own amusement . . . And an idea I mentioned to Kellybelly. I liked the froggy undies. >.> xD
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:11 am
The froggie undies were the crowning piece of this chapter. xDD
You're welcome...
I can see it going either way; but I think from their dialogue in the actual manga Mammon was better than Bel, and could outdo him. Anywhere. I think he's one of those seme's hiding behind a cute face. He certainly doesn't act like an uke.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:16 am
[/ Cough ] Neither does Hibari. [/ Cough ]
As soon as I wrote it, I think the thought that came into my head was, "Should he have a matching bra?" xD But I didn't want to completely destroy Fran's appearance.
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Posted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 1:25 am
It would have been funny... no, ridiculously hilarious... but it probably would have ruined Fran.
Yeah, but Hibari actually LOST to Muku. And... Tsuna technically. And Dino. Mammon? Nope. He seemed in control until he came up against Muku, who's basically the ultimate seme in the Reborn world... not Byaku because Byaku's a b*****d.
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