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((Man, i'm on my first graded test and Lenair has done at least six))

Jack

Length and Pacing: Your length is probably around average. But for me, that post is something i would post every day. I wonder, did you put alot of thinking into your battle? Or were you being a lazy bum? For me, being a former fanfic writer, its either average or slightly below average.

Grammar: I caught a few grammatical errors. I agree with Lenair about the lack of capitalization and the lack of a periods, and punctuation marks at the end of the sentence. I found it funny that you mispelled Jack's name wrong. Heh.

Personality:Other than the grammer and the length, you did pretty well with the personality. I liked how you kept him thinking about how he should attack the monster. That brought me into the battle.

Use of Environment: Let me see, nope, i don't see any descriptions of the arean than you saying its an arena. No duh! Maybe if you described more of the field then it would be more exciting.

Details: You lacked in details, i was kind of depressed when the monster died so suddenly and how your character only used at least two attacks. The monster was probably the only thing that was described throughly. I didn't even capture a picture of your character in my imagination. Poo.

All in all, this was quite average

4/8 *claps*

Yay!! Your first test Sakura! Very well graded too. 3nodding

A. This has been stated on the FRONT page. You only need a 1. But as you go on, if you have one star, you'll need a 2 at least. If you have two stars, you'll need a 3 at least. Etc., etc.

B. No problem. ^_^

C. I await that test, at least... if I am to be a judge again.

Zero (Kin)

Length and Pacing: Nothing wrong in this category at all, the length was very pleasing, not at all long-winded. Heh, I enjoyed reading it. It didn't bore me, and you paced quite nicely between attacks and shifts, especially when it came to the changes within the field. Heh, for a while, this almost reminded me of Terminator, since the robot was thought to have gone down, but it came back with a chainsaw.

Grammar: No grammatical errors, though it is interesting that you would use "up ward" instead of "upward" and "down ward" instead of "downward". Nothing wrong with that. Almost reminds me of a few older novels though, since such spacing was common in the past. As well as an added "u" to certain words... resulting in "colour" instead of "color". Though, I feel I recalled seeing "alot", but I'm not sure at the moment. Could have been there, but that's only a tiny error. Anyway, I commend you for your superb grammar. ^_^

Personality: Zero is a very secretive person in general, so this fit with him perfectly, though he appeared maybe somewhat egotistical. Mainly towards the end, as his first concern was upon defeating the robot, and not his own well-being. I thought that was cute. Nothing wrong in this category, I thought that you evenly incorporated a good amount of thought and speech. And he spoke pretty clearly with his actions, and the tossing of his hair. Heh, this could have reminded me of Kikaider for some reason... I just pictured him resembling one of the characters.

Use of environment: From beginning to end, you excelled here. You described the field rather nicely, when it was but a metallic room. And you did grandly when you described the changes that the room made. You added a nice touch by stating that the forest was growing and living, it felt ominous to me. Maybe only one sentence had left me slightly befuddled, but that was it. I think... when you described his ascent with the metal towards the ceiling at one point, that's what had caused me to reread the statement more than once. But that's fine. You danced with the environment quite nicely, using it for when the robot fell twice, using it when Zero sprung his kunais into action, etc. So, good job.

Details: There was no problem when it came to details, you excelled here as well, giving us a fair glimpse of Zero, the dome's fluctuations, and the robot. Still, one can wonder what had happened as the resounding message was cut off, earlier in the post (from the speakers). Heh, my mind is still ruminating over that. But anyway, really good job here, you didn't fail to draw me in with your vivid descriptions.

You did really well, I congratulate you for a job well done.

8/8

Front page has been updated. Time for me to start judging. ::Gets on reading glasses:: XP

Yay, I've been graded twice... 5.5 so far... well, I was hoping for better... but I guess I don't get. to decide... do I? The puking thing was... well, yeah... actually happened to me... I puked before a test... it sucked... so I linked my char to my personal experience. I hate the sand in the shoes thing too. I'll do better next time though, I'm sure.

Miki

Length and Pacing:This was a pretty great length if you asked me. If you ever saw my test, i think mine was a bit too long and i went over board. But your length was fine since you used small font.

Grammar: I didn't really see any grammer, maybe small ones but nothing more.

Personality: I loved his personality, i think Miki would be a challenge for Oliver when it comes to girls. XD! I loved the part when he cletched his violin because he was scared. Most of the time when i read boy posts when they fight the're all like "I'm tough-grrrrr!" some thing like that. I respect you!

Use of Environment: I was kind of lost. For a moment i thought you said it was a metal dome, but then i thought your charcter was fighting outside at night or something. *shrugs*

Details:I loved the Pixie idea. That gave you points. I loved how she had a knife and stabbed your palm. Great. For some reason the pixie reminded me of Tinkerbell from Peter Pan. Man, Pixies can be soo festy.

Overall, i give you 6/8 *claps*