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 Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:36 am
Great Chapter! I enjoyed it alot! Nice work Betman!
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:41 am
I need hardcore criticism, guys. I'm tired of 'THIS IS GREAT!' and stuff. I want someone to be mean. crying
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:44 am
It sucked it was terrible.... (any better?You did good be happy about that. Plus I am reading this in the middle of school!)
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:48 am
xd Not like that, Seaphron. I want to know what I'm donig really wrong, if you guys can find anything.
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 12:12 pm
Your story is so funny. I love the comedy. xd Though why wouldn't Forsaken Swordsmen just control RAIN and lead them to their doom?
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 12:14 pm
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 12:16 pm
Damn you Betman.
It was good, but you could have explained how Masamune managed to sneak and get Koosei a little better, I feel you let te dwindle a bit too much which could be a good or bad thing, you could be just leaving it to our imaginations. confused
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 10:42 pm
I agree with Zen's minor gripe there, but good GOD was that funny. Just the simple fact that Ganondorf justifies the existence of weapons that shouldn't be by saying "This is MY story, so go shove it up your a**." rofl xd
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:50 pm
Well, I just didn't wanna write that part. So, yeah. n_n But yeah, Allwing. That was my favorite part of this chapter. It was a reference back to the guns. >_>
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Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 10:05 pm
Chapter Fourteen - Promises Made.
As if you can't figure out what's coming up later.
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Posted: Sun Nov 12, 2006 7:42 am
Good Chapter! I like being a jackass! rofl
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Posted: Sun Nov 12, 2006 9:52 am
I predict that Zen with try to save Koosei himself.
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Posted: Sun Nov 12, 2006 2:15 pm
Masamune 5.0 I predict that Zen with try to save Koosei himself.
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Posted: Sun Nov 12, 2006 8:30 pm
Great chapter Betman, wondering how this is going to turn out for Koosei and Zen?
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Posted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 6:34 pm
Chapter Fifteen - Defiance
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