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 Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:53 pm
Oh yeah - quick note, here. My own touch when it comes to Keyblade Masters:
They're omnilingual. It's not an instant ability though, or anything like that - hence why he wasn't able to understand Tarzan way back when he was starting out... Yeah, and there's some general glitches in the idea (then how did Donald and Goofy understand everyone in Mulan's world?), but just... go with it. lol. I have reasons for it all... somewhere. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 1:13 am
lol...nah...I can handle yaoi...been reading it for about 3 to 4 years now...so yeah... rolleyes sweatdrop
I'm just very emotional most of the time, and I don't know...that part about Sora and Riku trying to reach each other just struck a cord within me...heheh.... sweatdrop ninja
awwwww....it's so cute...KH1!Riku is comforting KH2!Sora....while KH1!Riku is being comforted by KH1!Sora....awwwww.... blaugh 4laugh
kawaii, ne!! xd
I must say, I'm addicted to your writing... biggrin 3nodding xd
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 9:48 am
Flatterer. *metaphysical blush* I'm not that good... And here's proof: I started the chapter over... AGAIN. Don't worry though, there's a good chance that scene will be integrated somewhere else in the story, and I think I've really got something here now! ...Plus, the idea of Sora falling on himself just kind of... cracks me up. You'll see. Here's the rough draft so far, formating disregarded:
"So... I guess this means that we won't be setting sail tomorrow, huh?"
Riku blinked and looked over at the Sora, the brunette's tone having been almost wistful. "Yeah... I guess so." His gaze shifted back to his previous focus - namely, Sora's look-alike. They had been able to get him back to the brunette's house with surprising ease. Riku, for one, had been expecting to at least run into some people on the way there, but for once it seemed his luck had decided to be on his side. ...He really, really hadn't been looking forward to explaining who the unconscious boy he was carrying was, nor why he was in said state. Even luckier, Sora's mom hadn't been home... and, if the note on the kitchen table was anything to go by, she wouldn't be back for a few hours.
At this stage in the game, secrecy definitely seemed like the best policy.
...Or maybe he was just paranoid.
Either way.
The point was they had gotten there without any real problems, Riku's back notwithstanding, and for the moment they could just sit down and think.
...Okay, so maybe it was more like they were sitting on the floor and just sort of staring, for the past several minutes, but that wasn't the point.
A soft groan drew the silver-head's attention like a gunshot, the 15 year old practically leaping over to the couch, Sora scrambling behind him.
"Is he waking up?!" The brunette's voice was hushed, but excited as he leaned over Riku's shoulder, anticipation clear on his face. "I don't know..." Sora pouted slightly at Riku's answer, leaning just a little farther and balancing on the balls of his feet to try and get a better look... "I think he might be - his breathing's less... uh... sleepy..." Riku suddenly straitened, not having any idea that Sora was essentially on top of him - no, almost over him... and then, Sora didn't move out of the way quite fast enough, and...
It was a moment Riku would always remember as being an ironic reminder of Sora's strange combination of clumsiness and luck that somehow always got him in (and sometimes out of) the weirdest situations.
Sora somehow pitched over Riku, stunning the silver-head beyond the point of reacting, and landing directly on his doppelganger in a rather painful-looking pile of limbs, his elbow jamming into the older boy's stomach. There was a strange moment in which nothing happened, almost as if time had ceased. Then...
"...Ow."
It needs some cleanup, and maybe some extention, but that's the first segment of chapter 2! Seriously this time! *cheers* Poor Sora, though. *snickers*
I'll admit, this situation was spawned out of my own experiences, so I know for a fact that when you land on someone like that, you sort of get this... muffled, pained, withdrawn sort of "ow" before they curl up in a ball. xd sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 2:56 pm
pfft...haha!! *left in a fit of giggles*...."Sora falling on himself".... lol rofl
that was a good start! Now hurry and finish the rest!!!!! xd
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 4:12 pm
*salutes and runs off to do so*
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 7:11 pm
Chapter excerpt preview!!!
The first thing Sora registered was, unfortunately, pain. The second was that it was far to clumsy to be an attack, the... whatever it was that had apparently landed on him shifting awkwardly, not unlike a person. And it was very, very lucky for whoever or whatever it was that had decided to semi-attack him in his sleep that the second had occurred to him so quickly, because a second later his combat instincts honed over years of being attacked would have kicked it. Then... they would have been kind of... screwed.
He let out a muttered curse he had picked up from Cid as the fact that he had a pounding headache finally registered, making him half-wonder in the back of his mind if Jack Sparrow had somehow finally made good on his promise to "make Sora a man" by introducing him to the "wonders" of alchohol. Dear god. That thought alone made him wince internally. He, for one, had no interest in "becoming a man" if that was what it intailed. It made you act stupid(er) than usual, made your actions uncordinated and sloopy, caused you to make dumb mistakes, and gave you something called a hangover that (though he had never experienced one) he was pretty sure was veeeery unpleasent. All in all, it didn't sound like a great idea for someone like him (ie. someone constently attacked by just about everyone and everything... did the universe have some sort of grudge against him?) to try.
His eyes opened partially, his vision a little blurry and double as he reached out and grabbed the person who was on him by the scruff of their neck (technically, the back of their shirt... but whatever), making them make a strange half yelp-half squeeking noise that sounded vaugely familiar - go figure, and then he yanked them forward so they were practically nose to nose. His eyes widened somewhat as he finally registered the face he was looking at, staring for a moment and blinking a few times. Then he closed his eyes and let out a long groan, essentially picking up the boy with one hand, then kind of... half-throwing, half-dropping him off the couch. There was a muffled yelp, half pain, half suprise, and Sora rolled over, looking down at his younger self on the floor with a vaugely annoyed, tired expression.
"...Look, I'm really too tired to dream right now, so will you leave me alone please?"
He rolled back to face the back of the couch, curling up just slightly, muttering something about 'killing', 'goddam pirates', and 'wierd-a** dreams'... another heritage picked up from Cid, no-doubt.
Safe to say, he wasn't exactly in a fantastic mood at the moment.
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 7:18 pm
suki_hinote, I have to admit that your sig in part inspired this madness. xd Who doesn't love Jack Sparrow, ne? <- wishes they had put in the rum scene in KH2, but with Sora instead of Elezibeth
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 9:45 pm
Scathach13 suki_hinote, I have to admit that your sig in part inspired this madness. xd Who doesn't love Jack Sparrow, ne? <- wishes they had put in the rum scene in KH2, but with Sora instead of Elezibeth
wow...my sig. inspired you.... eek wow...I feel so special now....o_o....YAY!!!!!!!!!!! *happy dances* xd blaugh
I loved the Jack Sparrow and Cid inserts....they were hilarious!! xd biggrin
Keep up the awesome work!!! 4laugh blaugh
I LOVE JACK SPARROW!!!!!!!!! xd
and you can just call me "suki" or "hinote"... wink 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 1:37 pm
Update: Progress is moving along, albit slowly...
Suki: I accidently deleted your pm with the sample request - what did you want again? sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 11:33 am
Scathach13 Update: Progress is moving along, albit slowly... Suki: I accidently deleted your pm with the sample request - what did you want again? sweatdrop lol....anything you got...anything at all... biggrin ...but preferably nice yummy scenes including Riku and Sora...*cough*theonesyoucouldn'tputinthetopicscenes*cough*....yeah... that would be much appreciated!! Arigato, ne!!! xd Glad that the story's going along well, btw.... wink
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Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 6:46 pm
suki_hinote Scathach13 Update: Progress is moving along, albit slowly... Suki: I accidently deleted your pm with the sample request - what did you want again? sweatdrop lol....anything you got...anything at all... biggrin ...but preferably nice yummy scenes including Riku and Sora...*cough*theonesyoucouldn'tputinthetopicscenes*cough*....yeah... that would be much appreciated!! Arigato, ne!!! xd Glad that the story's going along well, btw.... wink Well, there's one I'd like to send you... Sora's a bit OOC in it, but I have a reason for it... ...somewhere... ^^" It's pretty big, though. And Gaia kills the formatting.
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Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 11:24 pm
Would you mind sending it to me too, Scat? I'd really like to read it. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 12:58 pm
It's the same scene you've read before - a little longer, but not by much. Would you still like me to send it?
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Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 1:23 pm
Which scene? You mean the Secret Spot one? Nah, it's okay. You don't have to send it. I thought that you had made a new one. sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 3:27 pm
A yaoi-one? Well... that's not entirely true. I did make a SoraxRoxas one, but... I don't think it's actually gonna make it into the story.
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