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 Posted: Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:40 am
That 'gut instinct' can apply to anyone, not just a hero. If this psyche bleeds out from other people, the best way is to get them to PM the little extra information.
You may need to just find a GM who's willing to share stuff with you. Or a GM who can easily convince other players to share important info with him, which he then shares with you. You should make it clear that you have this ability from the start, because then the players would be more willing to 'table-talk'
For instance, in my café here, I've PMed various folks with information that either they'd only know, or they should know but their player doesn't. That way they can play the character along with the background info.
I once fetched a precise sum of money from the Vortex for Naro the kitty. What he and I didn't say was that the money actually WAS what he had paid the lawyers (or was it the construction company). I wanted Wynaro to know that, but the Chaos Kitty wouldn't make anything but a vague connection, "hmm, tastes familiar". So when I reached into the vortex, I grabbed the money he had payed out, and gave it back to him. But I didn't want to share that info with the people of the café...
yet.
I guess that could be considered getting extra information.
In desktop RPs, meta-gaming (table talk) is considered to be somewhat cheating. But if your character has a sixth sense, then you could use the meta-gaming as the sixth sense. In fact some players actually find ways to include meta-game as a legit ability in-game. One of those legit abilities could be related to your ability you're asking me about.
I remember a D&D group that was at my college a couple years ago. They had a player/character who's main sense, was the meta-game. The character's name was Bob the Metagamer. He used knowledge that his adventuring party shouldn't have otherwise known to help them out of several situations. I never did hear if they finished that campaign or not.
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Posted: Wed Mar 24, 2010 2:32 pm
May I please get review(s) for my character profile for [Exercise/RP] Silent Voices as Worlds Collide? Username: Metalic_Noodles Character Name: Harriet Walters Character Species: Human Appearance: Short, dark brown hair, short enough to easily pass over her small shoulders hangs loosely from her head. Herr bangs are just an inch and a half shorter than the rest, framing her defined but soft face. She keeps it rather straight, but naturally it is lightly curly, and frizzy enough to get her cussing it out, which frankly doesn't take much. A low v-cut collar stops just before slowing cleavage. Her blouse is a plain patterned cotton, with a mostly dark blue appearance. Over that Harriet sports a tight, dark purple jacket, the neckline resting a little lower than that of her blouse. A wide belt, with a shiny grey buckle further highlights her curves. Hugging her hips is a pair of tight jeans that flare out starting gradually at her knees, but only easily noticeable about three quarters down her shin, hanging over her shoes. The jeans are a deep blue, with small marks, a thin and short mark from bleach, a drip stain from paint, and a couple of rips from wear and use. Her shoes resemble a mary jane with a thick 1" heel. Talents, skills, knowledge, and possible powers: She knows how to get her way, with manipulation if she must, but she prefers to be much more blunt. She took trombone lessons from when she was 5 until her senior year of high school. She has 29 years of formal schooling and life experience.
Personality: Harriet is quick to react, and cares little for any other options or judgments. She does consider consequences, but her actions rarely reflect this. History: Harriet grew up in a house as the only child with only her father. She lived in a middle-class suburb, went to a fairly good school district, and lived in a 3 bedroom house with the third bedroom as her playroom. In high school her blunt and brass nature didn't fit very well. As a result she found meaning in things other than popularity and pop culture. She chose her own books to read, music to listen to, and what grades were appropriate in what classes. She also learned to ignore anything she cared to, and perfected her manipulative skills. After she graduated, she continued to college where she received a BS in Business Management. She met her husband through work, they bought a house in a nice neighborhood. When the the worlds began to combined, her husband was on a business trip and she has been unable to contact him. Other: Likes knives. She created a holster to strap an oddly shaped dagger to her right forearm, something she normally waits until she leaves the house to wear.
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Posted: Wed Mar 24, 2010 10:29 pm
Hmm...
You have a solid description of how she looks. There are only a few major points from her history. This isn't necessarily bad. A muddy past can make for very good drama, and other content later on. But seeing how no one can talk anymore, that'll be difficult.
It' refreshing hearing someone ask about a fairly normal character, instead of all those magical demons, and such.
It's a little tough for me to follow your description, as it was posted. I'll edit it to make it a bit more readable when I'm done with this post (please don't kill me). I only read the first two posts of the RP you're working on, and the only thing I can think of, is to describe her face better (and maybe her hands). Then you can describe nuances of her brows, and lips, and cheeks and such.
Posture is also an important part of showing body language, so don't forget to describe that as well. I'm not the best authority on body language because of my Autism. I'm only giving you facts people have shared with me about it. After that I don't really see how else to improve on what you have.
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Posted: Sun Mar 28, 2010 7:58 pm
People keep posting new topics for critiques. But no one is just coming to an already established thread. sad
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Posted: Tue Apr 06, 2010 11:57 am
I absolutely love this character and I just wanted to see what you guys thought of her. :]
This profile took f o r e v e r but overall I'm pretty proud of how it turned out.
In order to understand the storyline behind it fully please look here:
]http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=18603391 ✦ Eris ✦ ✧ Headmaster of Erebus ✧  ☽━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━☾ Y o u m a y properly c a l l m e. . . ✧ Eris Aglaia Nausikaa. The Witch of the Looking Glass A g e has no matter here. . . ✧ Twenty Six. G r e a t p o w e r comes w i t h beauty. . . ✧ The most beautiful creatures are the most deadly, and that truth holds for Eris. Most would describe her as an delicate beauty, someone whose looks could capture the heart of any unfortunate man. For her gaze is fierce, dazzling green eyes illuminating whatever unfortunate being falls within her line of sight. However, a stern look usually graces her emerald hues, the glare matching the frown that’s usually etched onto her painted lips. When a frown is not present on her plump lips it is usually due to the smug smirk that crawls onto her face. She dramatizes that feature, always sure to paint it a dark deep color, bringing attention to every little change in her expression.
Her pale smooth skin illustrates her as an ethereal beauty, a glow seeming to emanate from her very being. Her body is usually adorned with long flowing dress that trail around her body in a pool of soft fabric, the color white generally being her choice. She simply adores the way that elongated dresses cling to her curves, bringing attention to her more favorable assets. In her mind she is a Queen, and a Queen deserves the greatest gowns. Though she allows her mane to usually hang loose around her, the dark thick tresses a contrast to the paleness of her skin and the color palate of her wardrobe. Sometimes she’ll pin it up in a fashionable manner, only of course to bring more attention to what she considers to be flawless features.
The body of Eris is one envied by most women and wanted by most men. She stands at the not-so-grand height of five feet and five inches, though heels usually give her an extra boost of four additional inches. However, she fails to need height to give her a striking image as one could say that she was well—gifted when it came to certain womanly assets. Not only that, but she is vehemently adamant to keeping her body in flawless shape. To her image is one of the most important things, for her life is consumed by the image of both herself and others after all. . I was M o t h e r ' s favorite. . . ✧ Although Eris was the third born when it came to the legacy of Nyx she always believed herself to be the best, for in her eyes the world revolved around her. As a child she lived dutifully by the toddler’s creed, treating every material object as her own since she of course was better than the others. Her disgust for two of her siblings became evident as time drew on as she found both Harmonia and Hypnos to be both insulting and weak in comparison to the power that both she and Thanatos possessed. The bond that she and her eldest bond had formed fairly quickly considering the likeness between the two. From an early age she found herself in awe of him, him being both older and stronger than she at the beginning. Like herself, he had similar ideals, clinging onto the idea of personal self interest and superiority while Harmonia and Hypnos were more interested in helping others. How revolting.
It wasn’t until she started to grasp understanding of her unique abilities that she started to become more independent of her eldest brother, although that same admiration lingered nonetheless. However, she spent most of her time apart from her siblings, coaxing her powers while they played amongst themselves and acted as any child usually would. From an early age she understood that power was more important than fun, and that if she was to become the most powerful she needed to excel faster than the others. Unfortunately, due to the fact that she was the third born she found developing her powers quicker than the others difficult, but regardless she still pursued with determination. Jealously rested in her as she watched her siblings learn their abilities with ease, for she found hers to be more complex and complicated. There were no wings on her back or form for her to switch to—she had to discover an entire world that would be hers to manipulate.
Prior to her discovery of the world behind the mirror Eris found herself delving into dark magic, manipulating the darkness to her pleasing. This ability served to her fancies almost immediately as she found joy in tainting the minds of her siblings (especially Harmonia) with the pain that she could inflict from darkness. Trickery became one of her strengths, and soon enough she found joy in the suffering of others. By the time she was in her early teens it was evident that she was quite the twisted and dark individual and when she discovered the extent of her abilities her pride only consumed her more.
The world behind the looking glass was something that Eris truly got to pioneer as she got to physically go within its depths. It all happened so quickly and if it hadn’t been for the fact that she was able to train her abilities following her visit there she likely would’ve attributed it all to just being a dream. However, she did go within the mirror, in fact she fell within the mirror. At first it had just been a matter of her seeing the glass as a liquid form of sorts, rippling before her eyes. Upon touching it the glass molded around her body, sucking her into it’s depths before she could tear away. The world she found was a Wonderland in her eyes, her thoughts alone bringing things to life. When she thought of dark things that was what she received. When she wished for weapons and destruction they were displayed before her. The world was perfect. For awhile she found herself stuck in such a place, until she found a way for her to create portals to escape from the utopia she had discovered. After that, she was giddy, hiding her discovery from her siblings so that she could learn more of her ability.
Training her ability was difficult at first, for there was no literature or anything of the sort that she could go use in order to study her abilities. She was alone, but she used her solidarity to coax her powers into the best they could be. Soon enough she found herself able to change the world prior to her entry, creating a world ready for her entry before she even arrived. Then, it wasn’t long before she found herself able to take things from that world and put it into the real one, and as soon as she discovered such a thing her pride only grew.
She had discovered one world to control, and now she felt as though she could conquer another.
Nyx’s death barely phased her at that point, considering the fact that she had already taken the steps to be independent. She didn’t need her siblings and she certainly didn’t need Nyx. She retreated to an underground complex, determined to become stronger so that she could win the war that had erupted between she and her siblings. Immediately, she began capturing students to do as she pleased—treating them all as her slaves in order to train them to be the best they could be. They served her, and she never failed to reiterate such a fact. However, regardless of the power that both she and her students possessed, Eris found herself struggling against the constant attacks she faced from her siblings. She was the one they attacked the most, and of course she told herself it was just due to the fact that they feared her more than the others. For quite some time she stood strong against their offenses, using her weaker students as buffers while the stronger ones made sure to strike back. However, once all three began attacking at once she found herself unable to hold up against the others and her stronghold soon fell.
Embarrassed and infuriated, Eris quickly ran away to seek refuge elsewhere, determined to create a fort for herself in a place where her siblings would be unable to attack her repeatedly. The place she retreated was far from the others, a place guarded by blizzard and snow. There she and her house built a tower, crystal composing its form. The crystal, having characteristics of mirrors, proved to amplify her abilities, giving her a watchful eye over the House of Erebus. Almost immediately, unrest and discomfort was seen amongst her students, many of them protesting against the conditions that she kept them in. However, Eris, as always, brushed off their complaints and instead of giving into their requests punished them for going against her. Some students she banished in her world of mirrors while others she secluded in the House.
From her tower she watches everyone and everything, using her abilities to walk amongst her students while still remaining perched within her crystal palace. Spontaneously she sends some of her students to attack the other houses, wishing only to remind the others of her power while she continues to train her army.
But one day—she knows she will control the rest, and when that day comes the unworthy will be cleansed of the world. Oh, how you w i s h you knew m e. . . ✧ In the eyes of Eris she is without a flaw. Narcissism at its best, she firmly believes that the world should revolve around her and therefore she seeks to control it. A smug grin is usually fixed upon her lips, a confident aura surrounding her at all times. She’s egotistical and doesn’t hesitate to tear down others in attempt to pursue her own self interest. Others don’t matter; all that matters is her and her power. Lies and deceit aren’t beneath her, and if anything she justifies her actions by believing that it is all for the greater good.
All she wants to do is make the world a better place—and who best to make the world better than the best person in the world?
She’s not eccentric. She’s not outgoing. She’s not caring. She’s not kind. She’s simply not that likable of a person. Instead, most would characterize her as a cold hard b***h—the type of person that is truly unbearable to be around. However, as her students, most don’t have a choice but to be in awe of her being as her power truly does provoke awe in others. A powerful determined woman, she knows how to get ahead, and those that can respect that respect her for it, although they may continue to hate her for how horrible a person that she is.
Quick to anger and easily irritated, Eris never hesitates to lash out on somehow for provoking her. However, most would admit that she is the true manipulator considering that she has proven to be able to engender someone to like her just as easily as she can make them hate her. Sometimes—just sometimes—a sickeningly sweet smile will find its way upon her lips prior to the lies she’ll spew to get into the minds of others. Not only that, but with the aid of her abilities she treats others like her puppets and people like her slaves.
If asked if she had any form of soul or heart most would likely say no, for the only emotion that Eris ever allows the world to see is bitterness, determination, hatred, and a lust for power. Never do genuine kind words or actions escape her, and never has she ever wished to change that.
You h a v e learned to f e a r me. . . ✧ D A R K N E S S M A N I P U L A T I O N - The pure energy of darkness is at Eris’s disposal, and as one of the earliest abilities she discovered it is by far one of her most powerful. The abilities she has honed ranges from great variants some including more defensive approaches such as barriers while others harness offensive attacks to solidify dark energy into things such as bursts of energy, material weapons, and curses. Though most of the time she only resorts using her power over darkness when faced with an offensive assault being as the majority of the time she finds her abilities concerning mirrors to suffice.
T H E L O O K I N G G L A S S – The world beyond the mirrors is at Eris’s disposal and she can change and manipulate it as she sees fit. If she desires she can sentence someone to burn in a hell of fire while on the other hand she can create a lush beautiful paradise. However, the greatest benefit of her world is her ability to manipulate the life forms that exist within it in order to bring them to the world in which she now wishes to control. With this ability she controls demons, monsters, and the most frightening beasts in order to pursue her goals.
P O S S S E S S I O N – Many students claim that Eris can make you go mad and that is due to one of her more amusing abilities. For by utilizing the demons that she controls from her own world she possesses those in her student body that she feels either need to be rehabilitated or are powerful enough for her to utilize. To her great pleasure, being as her creatures are unlike those in the real world people fail to be able to cast them aside and resist them as they normally would. However, the possession fails to work for extended periods of time considering that it is tiring for her to control too many things from her world at once.
R E F L E C T I O N – A portal of sorts, mirrors allow Eris to move as she pleases from one place to another. This ability serves as a powerful defensive tactic as she can disappear into a world with limitless supplies whenever she has a mirror to escape through. Not only that, but she has found herself able to control her reflection along—casting her form out all over the island without actually having to leave from her tower.
O V E R S E E R – Over a great amount of time Eris mastered the ability to use one mirror to look through another. Being as an entire world stood between each portal at first she found it difficult to be able to peer through one mirror and out the other but she has mastered such ability, and therefore has littered mirrors all over her grand city. Occasionally, she also uses this ability to spy on her siblings and as much as they have tried it has been proven impossible to erase her presence completely, and with this presence she finds great joy in tormenting the minds of students in the other houses. . Got to e n j o y the little t h i n g s. . . ✧ Power.
Mischief.
Being in control.
Mirrors.
Herself. Keep y o u r f r i e n d s close. . . ✧ Friends? Me? Oh, it is absolutely adorable that you think that I—Eris—would possibly subject myself to the troublesome emotions that are paired with friendship. I guess I don’t mind Thanatos all that much, for he does understand the beauty of power. My pet is bearable as well.
Who is my pet you ask?
My attendant of course. I like anyone that adores me.. ...but your e n e m i e s closer. . . ✧ All of my siblings are revolting to an extent, Hynos and Harmonia being absolutely disgusting. They are both weak and useless, an abomination to the world. And Thanatos—he attacked me just like them. If he wants an Alliance with me he’ll have to swear his allegiance. My little P u p p e t e e r. . . ✧ Jessie my love
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Posted: Wed Apr 07, 2010 5:35 pm
Whoa, long post! I'll be back in a bit to type up my response. It might take me a bit longer, because the Right Aligned text is tougher for me to follow. The ragged left edges make it tough to keep track of where I am in the paragraphs.
As far as villains go, she IS perfect. But she's to perfect. There were very little, if any weaknesses in her profile. Even the most invulnerable villain has to have some kind of weakness. It would be interesting to see how she would interact with someone who actually liked her without her manipulations.
Otherwise, it's a very well thought out profile. I couldn't find much to dislike about the history, background, etc. It's rare to see such character development in a profile. It's refreshing to see such devotion to a character build. Kudos to you, Madame Jessie.
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Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 5:40 pm
That was beautiful Jessie!
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Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 9:10 pm
Thank you, Lillian. :3 I thoroughly enjoyed making her. Yea. The whole weakness thing was an issue, but thankfully I was able to sort some things out in my mind and planned some weaknesses for her. But yea, part of her main issues are the fact that she tends to try to control more than she can handle and her more obvious lack of morals. Ah, I actually have another character who I love more than her that I made of the same rp. I'll post him here just for funsies. You can still tell me what you think of course. XD He's like my favorite character ever. ◆ Fear ◆ ◆ “My, you look t a s t y .” ◆  ☽━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━━☾ H e h, I think this is my true n a m e. . . ◇. Damien Ackart. Fear. I t seems so l o n g ago. . . ◆ Twenty-two. It m a t t e r s so l i t t l e. . . ◆ In his true form it is not an exaggeration to claim that Fear is quite the foreboding creature. Pale grey skin covers his body, a bony spiky spine protruding from his back. Horns grace his head while his bright iridescent yellow eyes give off a eerie glow. Claws stretch from his hands which are both gangly and bony like the rest of his body. Sharp teeth align his mouth that compliment the bloodthirsty snarl that finds it’s way onto his face.
However, thanks to his assimilation into the real world, there has been a dramatic change in his appearance. Now, in the case of being separated from Icelus for too long his body begins to shift to it’s original form, the demon in him taking over, but for the most part he is able to avoid his more frightening form.
During his entire life his appearance has been characterized by a long lanky body, blood red eyes, and a twisted grin. In his younger years he was obviously a bit more deranged in his appearance, still carrying a few more of the traits of being the monster that he truly is. However, as time as dragged it, it has become obvious that his appearance has assimilated with that of the real world far more. In fact, if one was attracted to the twisted type, one might even claim that he was attractive.
That blood curdling gaze of his still remains, his red eyes always containing that eerie look within him. His tresses are a shade of dark brown, flecks of red and ash present in his fairly long hair that frames his face. His features can be categorized as small yet dramatic, allowing him to have a sort of porcelain like innocence about his appearance. He stands at roughly 6 feet, his lanky figure lacking any significant muscle. Though don’t be fooled he is rather strong. The appearance he has taken on is simply an adaptation to the real world, his true strength lies within him, not in his fake form. I h a r d l y remember h o m e. . . ◆ There is no good in Icelus. There is only evil there. In a world behind the mirrors the horror of the real world is captured, reflected, and emphasized. Each creature that lies beyond the looking glass is the personification of the evil in one’s soul, their counterpart existing on the other side of the glass. However, prior to the arrival of Eris none in Icelus knew of that harsh reality, for in their eyes they were the real ones. Evil was all that existed. The terrain was a harsh one, a dark sky plagued the entire world while a barren landscape riddled the scenery. Any civilization that existed took the form of large towering buildings, encased in darkness and full of horrific creatures.
Fear was one of them.
The embodiment of the evil of the Vampire by the name of Damien Ackart, Fear was born in the realm of the mirrors. There no family exists, no love, no community. So like all others he trudged on through life utterly alone. A twisted looking creature he mostly sought solitude and caves and places engulfed in pure darkness. The only time he would emerge from his fortresses would be to feed on the soul’s of others, freeing their evil bodies of the blood like substance that ran through them. However, in Icelus there is no blood. Every creature there is destined a life of eternity, for evil never dies. So, the Vampires of the world starved for a substance they could never find, doomed to a hunger that would never be satisfied.
But when Eris arrived everything changed.
One of the dark towers, a portal that was in close proximity to the place where Fear called home, came to life, the empty door swirling with fire and life. Confused and curious, Fear crept to the new stimulus, eager to see if this new arrival would cure his unbearable thirst. What he found was undeniably beautiful in his eyes, a creature unlike one that he had ever seen before. She was a pale beauty, ethereal and inviting. Her appearance was unlike the dark horrific creatures that littered the world he knew and because of that he found herself drawn to her. Upon stumbling upon her she posed questions immediately, questioning him of where she was, and in reply all he could ask was where she was from.
From then on she revealed a new world to him and in return he showed a new world to her. Eris was her name, and from the moment he met her she was like the family he never had to him. However, the first time he was introduced to the real world he was horrified from what he saw. There was so much innocence and it proved to be absolutely disgusting. Unlike Eris, who had darkness in her heart, the innocence of the world was characterized by people that desired good and happiness for others. All he wanted to do was corrupt everyone. It wasn’t long before he discovered he could do just that, for he found that when looking upon someone not only did he see their face but he could see their darkness, their weakness, their fears. The darkness in their souls was reflected into his own just like it would have been back home.
And soon enough he realized that he could control it.
The first time he manipulated fear it came as quite the surprise to him for back home he never had honed such an ability. Back at home there was no fear, no weakness. Everyone embraced the darkness and accepted it as their fate. But in this new world there was so much to play with—so many lives to destroy. With Eris by his side he stumbled upon someone who lived on the island, and upon seeing their greatest phobias he found that they soon came to life. The first time he attempted using his abilities it consisted of small things, such as conjuring up spiders and various other frightening creatures. However, will further practice he found that he could control greater fears---he could rip people of their powers when they feared weakness, and remove them of their live if they feared death.
Giddy at his ability he used it constantly, only retreating back to his world when he felt the tire of being gone for too long overtaking him. It wasn’t long before his lust for blood took over as well, him having come across someone who feared the bodily liquid. Surrounded in a pool of blood he got to taste it for the first time and from that moment it was revealed to him that that was what he had thirsted for all along. After that moment the thirst only became greater, though unlike most Vampires he wasn’t satisfied with merely drinking it. No, he had to play with his victim, corrupt them, make them his.
As time drew on Eris thankfully catered to his needs as once she established the house of Erebus she fed him students for him to corrupt so that she could properly manipulate them. Not only that, but she allowed him to travel to the other Houses where he could prey upon the innocence of all the students there. For the most part he crept amongst the shadows of the other houses unnoticed, usually slipping through the mirrors of student’s rooms and proceeding with his torturous routines there.
Though it wasn’t until he was granted a 'student' that Fear truly became ecstatic, for now he had someone that was his pet. Immediately, he corrupted his innocent little student through bringing her to Icelus. There he revealed to her the world of darkness, letting her indulge in all the pleasures there. As a gift he presented her with a small stuffed animal from his own childhood, which like everything else in Icelus was corrupted with evil. Though to him it was a heartfelt gift, and soon after the relationship between the two blossomed.
Now he seeks to do whatever Eris pleases, which generally involves him going to the other houses and playing tricks while she remains perched in her crystal tower. Though now, having Exstella at his side, he has a partner in crime and the two of them always stick together.
A l l I know. . . ◆ Erebus L e a r n to fear me or l o v e me. . . ◆ Oh, you wish to know what am I like, my pet? Most think I’m rather traumatizing, but I believe that I can be quite the endearing personality. Are you afraid of me, my love? Oh, I might appear to be scary, but I will take good care of you. I take good care of all my little pets. I just like to have fun.
Why are you so afraid of fun?
I like games. Games are simply so much fun. Especially when they end with a tasty treat. I simply love when my pets feed me. My games are not twisted, please don’t insinuate such insane things. My games are fun, and I can turn anything into a game. I simply adore tying up my little pets and watching them struggle. Ah, that frightens you, does it? But it is so invigorating. Don’t worry, I won’t hurt you. I’ll only make you scream.
Oh, I didn’t mean it like that. Although maybe I should. You humans and your bodies are simply so delightful and inviting, and most of you can’t stop me. But even if you could, you wouldn’t want to~
Some point at me and say I’m evil. Such a delightful word I take pride in. What is so wrong with this evil you people accuse me of being? All of you are evil, for all I am is what you try to hide. I just love to expose those horrible truths you hold deep inside of you. It is so amusing when you hypocritical pets are forced to face what you find to be so horrible and revolting. I will corrupt all of you, for I love to corrupt. Other students say I’m as conniving as Eris—which is truly an enchanting idea. I love to manipulate. I love to tear your soul apart from the inside out.
So tell me, m y p e t, are you afraid of me?
I a m no w e a p o n. . . ◆ F E A R – Being a creature from Icelus, Fear has the ability to peer into the soul’s of other as all of the evil and darkness in them is reflected upon him. Through this he is able to determine the weakness and fears of his match and then can proceed to manipulate them. This usually takes form in his manipulation of fear (which is where his name originated). With his power he is able to take whatever phobia consumes an individual and can then control it. He can cause hordes or spiders to appear, or change a setting to the top of the highest building. The opportunities are limitless as it is all up to the fears concealed within the others heart.
I C E L U S – Like Eris, Fear has the ability to travel to the mirror world known formally known as Icelus (being as that is where he is from). Upon entering this world he gets a surge of power, the darkness within it giving him quite the boost. Not only that, but it gives him the opportunity to travel through the gates to other mirrors in the real world, which is the source of many trickeries and proves to be a wonderful defensive mechanism.
N I G H T M A R E – The powers of darkness that exist in Icelus are far different than the real world being as the world itself is darkness. Because of that, Fear’s control of it proves to be especially powerful. Eris would hate having to admit such a fact, but he was the source of a lot of her training when she first began her adventures in Icelus. T h e s e make me. . . ◆ Darkness.
Blood.
My pets. Oh, h o w you think I love you. . . ◆ I will always adore my dear Eris. She made me who I am today, and although she may not be my pet I will always crave her.
Exstella is my true darling however, as she fulfills all of my desires. Such an innocent little thing at first she was so much fun to corrupt, and I love her for it. ... I will K I L L you someday . . . ◆ How could I hate anyone when everyone is so tasty~? I n v i s i b l e force. . . ◆ Jessie my love.
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 10:47 pm
You like villainous beings, don't you?
Again, it's a good profile, but I really don't like evil as much as you seem to. Sorry if I can't sound more constructive. I do however have a challenge for you. I want to see as detailed of a profile on a good person. And I'm not talking anti-heros, who have some dark secrets.
I want a profile where you give as much goodness to your character, as you did darkness to Fear. It's merely a challenge, and you don't need to take it on. But it would be interesting to see the results.
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Posted: Sat Apr 17, 2010 10:22 pm
Righty-o! After returning from the great beyond, I would like a bit of critique on me character.  Pretend its a guy. Not that hard. Edit: I feel I should note that he DOES dress like that. Name:Alyss Madigan. Age:Usually I keep him around 15-17. Abilities: Astral Projection, that is, he can make an intangible, invisible version of himself that hovers around. When used, his body goes limp and is useless until he returns. He has no idea how or why it works and doesn't even know how to use it, it just happens from time to time. Sexuality: Questionable. Notes: Typically he is played as a child. HE has the body and mind of a teenager, but the maturity of a child. He has been known to lie but can never explain why he lies. He is roughly 5'6'' without the ears and 7'2'' with the ears. That's the basic idea of my character. Any suggestions or critiques are welcomed biggrin
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Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 12:22 pm
Holy s**t, it's a Jessie.
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Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 2:46 pm
That's right guys, I went there. Star WarsJust a note, this droid is supposed to be on par in strength and abilities with a jedi.
(By the way the skeleton isn't 100% mine, I modified one my friend crafted for the same RP.)General Information
Full Droid ID: 3XD-N6K
Original ID: 3B3-1594
Nick Name: 3XD,3X, or XD
Age: Activated for the first time in 22 BBY(Before the Battle of Yavin)
Race: heavily modified Advanced B1 Battle Droid
Planet of Birth: Manufactured on Geonosis
Faction: None Yet
Rank: None Yet
Bio: Activated as a standard Advanced B1 Battle Droid, 3B3-1594 was designated as a guard for one of the many Lucrehulk-class Core Ships that were fleeing Geonosis towards the end of The Battle of Geonosis. This specific ship was crippled severely just before escaping the atmosphere of Geonosis. In an at attempt to flee many of the more advanced droids were simply quickly loaded onto ships that then fled from the core ship. Many of the droids on board though scrambled for escape pods. He managed to find one and along with a few other droids managed to escape the crashing CIS ship. The escape pod was shot off course though and sent flaming and spiraling out of control. The crash decimated all the other droids and very badly wounded him. He managed to struggle his way out of the flaming escape pod but quickly collapsed once outside. A Geonosian scientist who had been searching for droids that were mostly intact (the ones fallen in battle almost always ended up in broken pieces) recovered him and using numerous parts from other advanced B1 models and tech that seemed impossible he managed to create the unthinkable.
The Geonosian had managed to create an elite commando with amazing athletic and acrobatic abilities as well as energy pulse generators that allowed him to blast objects that were quite heavy clear across the room, as well as reverse the pulse to pull them swiftly towards him. Also, his visuals had been upgraded to give him a tactical HUD equal to that of the clone commandos. The genius had also managed to install numerous expensive (although most likely illegally obtained) survival, combat, situation assessment, and reaction time upgrades. The greatest of all of these improvements though was that the Geonosian had used an easy hacking program to free him from CIS control. He could take command of himself now.
He spent a little over five standard galactic years with the scientist. Receiving upgrades on the programs that made him unique and numerous other improvements as well as testing his new abilities by training in the canyons of Geonosia. Receiving better guns and equipment every now and then he became pleased with his life with the Geonosian scientist. Until one day the old male insect announced to him that he was complete and that he would now begin creating other droids like him on a larger scale. Calculating the results of such an ambitious endeavor, 3B3-1594 immediately realized that this would mean in only a decade he would become another number in an army. Overcoming the minor obedience programs that had been installed into his now superior mind he, without hesitation, killed the scientist. He did not want to do so but he could not let himself become just another soldier again. He made sure the kill was quick, as the old insect deserved that at the very least.
Gathering every last bit of equipment he needed and taking the Geonosian’s ship he left the lab. Changing all the codes to his old ID, he locked every door and every computer in the lab. About a month later he had maintenance work done on him so that he could choose a new ID. While he changed everything else about it, he found himself unable to remove the first 3 from his name. So he had one small smooth line drawn through his ID designation on his back to show it had been cancelled and under it he had 3XD-N6K labeled. He also had the new name replace his old in his mind so he would now recognize his name as 3XD-N6K and 3B3-1594 as an old and outdated name.
Appearance
Hair Color: N/A (droids don’t have hair)
Eye Color: (eyes are shaped like small slits) Blue when docile, red when hostile or cautious
Armor Color: Base color is a grayish silver, secondary color (two stripes on the central chest piece) is a dark red. Knee, elbow, neck, and areas in-between shoulder and collar are all black.
Height: 6’8
Build: standard Advanced B1 Battle Droid shape and build
Clothing: N/A (droids don’t wear clothes)
Description: He looks like a Advanced B1 Battle Droid but the body armor itself has been improved by replacing the standard armor with improved, much more durable, and much sturdier armor. His exterior appears to be mostly the same as a regular with the exception of a few modifications that are somewhat visible. On the interior he has become heavily modified though. (See bio for details)
Weapon Information
Weapon Type: Modified DLT20A
Weapon Range: Medium to Long Range
Weapon Description/Appearance: 3XD has modified this weapon’s firing modes and range to switch between semi-automatic fire for medium range and a single shot fire for long range. (In single shot mode the gun has to cool down for a few seconds after each shot.)
Droid Abilites
[~]Outward Energy Pulse (similar to Force Push)
[~]Inward Energy Pulse (similar to Force Pull)
[~]Advanced Acrobatics (similar to Force Acrobatics, such as Force Jump, etc etc)
[~]Advanced Sensory Units (similar to jedi sense)
Ship
Ship Name: N/A (XD has no ship)
Ship Appearance:N/A
Ship Modifications: N/A
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Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 6:58 pm
The Star Wars universe always intrigues me. Your droid's abilities are not unheard of in the expanded universe. As a matter of fact, The Apprentice, from Force Unleashed frequently trained with a droid that was equipped with pulsars and servo's that made him have similar abilities to various Known jedi of the time. He would even take on a holographic appearance of whichever jedi he was currently imitating.
Your droid is already more interesting than that one, because you gave him a back-story. Whether he's a bad guy or a good guy, an audience is more emotionally drawn to someone with history. Good Job.
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Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 7:09 pm
Thank you. :]
And yeah I just remembered that that one droid from Star Wars the Force Unleashed (can't remember his name) could do that. That game was so fun. I wanted to incorporate the idea of a jedi-like droid without having to sacrifice a blaster rifle.
Anything I could improve or expand upon?
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