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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 7:13 pm
Onamisaki [[Eh... I guess a god of death is okay, but he's really similar to the God of Fear. I mean the god of fear would greatly benefit from the deaths too, because the destruction of mankind would cause a massive panic if everyone were to start dying. So, Booksage could really use the God of Fear the same way, he could use the God of Death. ^_^ Ok, I'll be moving forward then! Toward the mining town.]] Wow...wait a sec, god? I wasn't really going for that, if he has to be that'll work. I just meant, y'know, him being a necromancer now, he an sorta sense death and the supernatural like a sixth sense. My guy, also, genuinely likes humanity, him being a part of it. I'd post but I got school tommorow, so It'll have to wait a bit.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 7:26 pm
((I'm a bit confused. xD What's happening with the other characters so far? Is there anyone I can bump into? o_O))
After helping the old lady pile up the boxes, Kimiko happily clapped her hands together to get rid of the dust that had been on the boxes she was carrying. "There. It's all done!", she said to herself. "Another step to repaying for my sins. The gods must be hap-"
She stopped as she realized that the gods wouldn't be happy. They had wanted to get rid of mankind, not help them. Sighing, She walked over to the elderly woman working at the counter to tell her that she was done.
"Oh, thank you! You're a very kind girl. Would you like an apple?", the shop keeper asked, picking an apple out of the fruit basket that was set on a table nearby.
"No thank you, it's alright. I should be going now," Kimiko said, smiling.
"No, I insist! Take it. You look like you're starving. So thin, you should definetly eat more."
Smiling nervously, Kimiko took the bright red apple from the woman's hand and said,"Thank you very much."
"You're welcome. Come visit me again some time, okay? I might need your help again," the woman said, walking to the back of the store.
Nodding, Kimiko turned and walked out of the store, munching on her apple. 'What should I do now...?'
((Gah, I find myself posting too long for no reason. xD More like I'm trying to stay active and actually bump into someone. >>; ))
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 7:58 pm
((My character, souurons character and Duckies were all in the village. We had an altercation that left me rnning to save an un-acted human and Izzy. Sourons and duckies characters were talking in the street of the village, but duckies character ran away. kaarii's character is left standing in the street in front of the bar, sorouns is actually at the end of the street because my character chased duckies there. But now me and Izzy are in the woods coming back to the town after gettinig rid of the other human.))
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 8:28 pm
Izzy sighed. "I don't know. I only have my pocket knife with me. It would probably be easier with my bow and arrow, but even then I still wouldn't know what I'd do." she looked ahead, deep in thought. 'If only there was some way I could get my quiver.' she thought. "The one thing I have to wonder is, if he.. or she was after my family, would they be trying to kill me too? ..and if so, would they wait at my house, thinking that I had nowhere else to go and that I'd have to come back sooner or later, or would they come out looking for me.." she thought out loud.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 8:44 pm
((No Book... You are a necromancer... the god of death thing is something different all together... we were trying to come up with some more gods for the story line.))
Ryn had ended up sitting on a roof top, thinking. He was upset that the girl would not listen to reason, and annoyed at himself for just letting her leave, when it was clear she would kill as soon as she got away. He sighed, and pushed himself from his perch, wondering vaguely where the elf had gotten to. He looked down on most of the rest of the town from his high perch, watching people wandering in the evenings light, searching for possible dangers to the populace.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 8:46 pm
He looked down at her again, his dark eyes reflecting the lights that illuminated a portion of the town. "Well, those are only question we will be able to answer once we arrive..." He said with a straight face. He wasn't intentionally being cold, he just knew that whatever they would be facing was a serious threat, at least to her.
He stopped in his tracks, something had shifted in the wood close to them, and was making an effort to keep itself concealed. Whispering to her, and crouched low to the ground he asked."Izzy, tell me, did you get a good look at it, before you left the house?" It was a rushed blur of words, but he was so close to the young girl that he was sure she had heard him.
"And one more thing, do you know how to use this.." He held his blade just below his knee, unsheathed it looked like a never ending hair thin piece of fine metal, an Elven made item, light as a feather but as deadly as the devil himself. Nothing in the Mortal Realm could break it, but that didn't mean it couldn't be stolen. "From the looks of things, we aren't going to have to make it to your home for a fight......"
She was going to kill whatever this was, and she could use his katana if she saw fit. He had other ways of defending himself, so the loss of a sword was a mere inconvenience.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 9:14 pm
Izzy's eyes changed instantly, from thoughtfulness, to a mixture of a blank expression, and pure hatered. And while her expressiion changed, her posture didn't. She stuck her hands in her pockets. "a got a glance, it was barely enough to see rough features. his clothes were tattered and torn, his hair was a tangled brown mess. and as for your sword, I could adapt, but I'd rather use my own weapon." her lips barely moved as she spoke, and her voice was quiet, but she was audible to those close enough. She pulled her hands from her pockets and places them behind her back. She had slipped her pocket knife in her sleeve and was ready to pullit out at the slightest threatening movement.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 9:41 pm
((Time to kick things up a notch... right Emeril? Emeril: "Bam!"))
Reese raised his right arm above his head, not bothering to look at the attacking radical Defender soldier from the lab. Before the soldier could even react, his arms would be severed from the mid forearm by Reese's retractable laser elbow blades. The soldier screamed in pain, only to have Reese lift from the ground by his rocket-propelled feet and crescent kick him in the face, burning it terribly, and melting his mouth shut. Reese landing gracefully after the kick, pointing his right index finger down at the soldier's head. The fingertip opened, revealing a small barrel, which then fired a bullet right between the soldier's eyes. Reese picked up the body and hurled it into a nearby alley. Thinking fast, he pressed a button upon his suit, which bent the light around him, thus rendering him invisible.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 9:48 pm
[[Oh dear goodness... I've only been gone a little over 5 hours!!! -It's cool... I see you guys got a bit confused, but I'm glad there was someone to help you out! Sorry, Book. I was actually answering Kind's ooc post beneath yours and answering yours at the same time. No worries. I know he's a necro! ^_^
lol, Kind, you're always spelling my name wrong. rofl Just say Saki and I'll understand it's me. xd I don't mind waiting. I understand you have a very advanced RP going on and that you need more people... so I guess, you can MENTION it here. No huge, stretchy advertisement. Just metion it in ooc and I'll be fine with it.]]
"Pet!?" Amati snarled, his fur standing on end. How dare he?!?! I am NO ONE'S PET! Sakeri let out a nervous laugh, patting the canine's head in audible thuds.
He wants to eat me? -Great, now I know he's crazy. She thought quietly to herself as she continued her innocent facade. How exactly do you deal with someone like him?
"Now, now, Amati," she said sweetly as she began pounding on his head. "Let's not get too, excited over name-calling." By this time the wolf had been pounded, half-dazed into the ground. Sakeri forced a large grin across her face as she turned to face the teen. Something was still puzzling her and she wanted answers, even if it was from a rather unstable source. She jerked unexpectedly at his proximity, twitching nervously as she moved away from him. I'm guess he doesn't exactly understand the term "boundaries." she stated sarcastically to herself. Sakeri moved to sit calmly on the grass, her knees folded stiffly beneath her.
"So..." she said tightly, her frame stiff as a board. "What exactly did you mean by Purifier?"
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 12:00 am
((As you wish, "Saki". Meh... you're username's just so hard to get used with... ANYWAY, I'd like to recruit some RPers for my recently opened Gundam Twilight RP. If you guys are interested, PM me and I'd gladly give you the link. >_> I don't like to advertise more than that or the mod that made the ADVERTISE HER ORELSE sticky might get mad... sweatdrop ))
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 12:25 am
[[lol, no worries. Even I had a hard time with that name. sweatdrop Yet, I have come to love it dearly. heart Anyhoo, good luck with your RP!!!!]]
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 12:45 am
Ohjiro decided to venture into town. As he traveled the street he observed many stores lined up side by side. On the corner there was a coffee house which seemed to be the only place open at the time on that street. There was a sign out front with a giant coffee cup and a graphic of steam coming out of it. He didn't feel like coffee and the other builds all were either old buildings with no business, apartments or closed. It was pretty obvious which builds were old and which ones were not. The elder structures were made with brick that was starting to flake onto the sidewalk in small amounts. It was a large sidewalk lined with street lamps and a bench. An old man in a tan hat and trench coat sat reading the paper as the street lamps came on. He looked up at the light as he saw it out of the corner of his eye then went back to reading his paper. Only two feet behind the bench the sidewalk ended and began the street. It was crowded, Taxi Cabs, Moving Vehicles, standard cars painted different colors. These cars while different in price and build all looked about the same. But maybe that was just because Ohjiro didn't have time to get a good look at them before they passed. He shrugged his shoulders then stuffed his hands in his jean pockets as he continued walking down the sidewalk. He stopped at a red light waiting till it turned green then stepped off the curb. HOOOOONKKK Hooonk, "someone had slammed on there horn a few times as he stepped off the curb. This person was obviously in a hurry and didn't want to wait for the light to turn. Now he was forced to wait as he sat there. Ohjiro walked in front of the group of cars as they stood there waiting for the light to change. So far, this day had been pretty dull.
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 8:12 am
Before Akito could ask anything else, the two creatures had dissappeared. She huffed and continued her stroll in town, the tugging sensation had disappeared. Perhaps that was the only conflict going on in town.
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 8:48 am
((What the crap? I log of for the day and when I come back there are four pages of posts. Craziness! For all those who are wondering if there is anyone for them to meet, my character is all alone now...))
The figure huddled in a corner, his eyes dare not look at the carnage he caused. Men, women, childred, he spared none. In a panic, he rocked himself back and forth, trying to block out the images in his head.
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 9:52 am
"Ah, so your are more confident then you had appeared to be. I'll draw him out into this clearing and then you may have at him." He replied with a wicked grin. He loved to play cat and mouse, ,but this time he would be neither, just the man in a white lab coat that set the trap to begin with, guiding the little mouse to it's inevitability. "Be ready." He whispered as soft as a summer breeze, and then he was gone from the clearing as the last syllable fell.
It didn't take long for the creature to come into view. And the impending darkness of the wood creeped around it's body helping it's tattered clothes to hide it's frame, but no matter, it would not stir something inside of Ninder to not see the enemies true form.
His blade sizzled in the darkness as it captured every bit of light upon it's smooth face. A pivot to the right, then down, and up again, and a trickle of blood accompanied by a loud angry cry filled the forest. The only sound now was of the beast. It was following him in toe as he ran directly for the clearing, and at the last moment Nendir jumped into the sky, grabbing a tree branch with his spare hand and flinging himself around it until he was perched like a black and white sparrow upon it.
He saw that whatever it was had caught sight of Izzy. But Nendir wasn't the least bit worried, but he stayed alert and ready to attack at the slightest mi-step in the struggle.
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