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 Posted: Sun May 06, 2007 12:29 pm
I'm back!! Anyone feeling a light weight battle? I haven't spit a word since my last thing here, so it'll be crappy quality. But the vets know im not TOTAL trash....
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Posted: Sun May 06, 2007 9:44 pm
SJC^Superslacker^ I'm back!! Anyone feeling a light weight battle? I haven't spit a word since my last thing here, so it'll be crappy quality. But the vets know im not TOTAL trash.... I ACCEPT 10 BARS MAX 5 BARS MIN R.H RULES U DROP FIRST
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 3:52 pm
Look at that, first sentance and he's star-struck,
'cause he drag racin' a ferrari, but he's only a dump truck.
Tryna step to me just goes to prove he's a ******** we'll rumble, and I'll leave him on the streets, dead and gone without no luck.
That's what he'd need, luck, to even come close to me,
my verses just depress him and hes like "or not to be."*
But then again, who'll blame him? Not those who remember my past,
This punck p***y aint my first kill, and he certainly aint my last.
I can shorten of my lines,
kick it down to terza rima**,
but they stand strong as pines,
while his crumple, and call FEMA.
I prolly lost some a y'all with this part,
just know I'm a H-bomb and he's hiroshima.
Than means he was doomed to be vaporized from the start,
but that he knew, deep in his tell-tale heart***.
*the end of a quote from hamlet in which hamlet contemplates suicide. The half od the quote that is in favor of suicide.
**poetry with the rhyme scheme ABA BCB ... The middle of the preceding verse is the first and last. This means that I'm comfortable kicking it down to a much less "battle oriented" style, therefore insulting his ability to insult me.
*** an Edgar Allan Poe work underscored by insanity. Insinuates his insanity for accepting my challenge.
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 7:01 pm
I'm one of the best at keystles, what b***h is next
About to put feet-in-your-verse how I stomp-your-text
If you're not the party type, I'll be storming-with-silence
About to 'crash-this-rave', So just call me-a-virus
You LACKIN'-THE-WORDS, ******** with me, you'll get PACKED-IN-A-HEARSE
Only reason you got hot lines is cause you stole HALF-OF-A-VERSE
Superslacker look at ya self mane, ur career is a "dazasta"
You got skills to be a college nerd, not a damn rapper
see ur first mistake of the day was trying to return
scratch that, ur first mistake was u bein thought of, then it was u being born
or was it when ur mom was in labor and her tissue was gettin torn
but fucc it, ur mom p***y like my dirty clothes, it already been worn
i'm sorry if ur slow-a** is dumb and ur just not getting-it
but here , I'll make it easy, take ur a** back into Retirment
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 7:10 pm
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 7:18 pm
The intellectual is back yo Loc he got you very clever on your part slacker I liked how you switched up the rhyme scheme at the end that was hot Loc it seemed as if you were intimidated and came surprisingly weak
VOTE: Superslacker
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 1:21 pm
Durrtyboi The intellectual is back yo Loc he got you very clever on your part slacker I liked how you switched up the rhyme scheme at the end that was hot Loc it seemed as if you were intimidated and came surprisingly weak VOTE: Superslacker Psyche. Locc came with the punches...Intellectual lyrics are good, put if they dont pack a punch, then they don't belong in battles. When I vote, I pretend that I'm at a freestlye battle at the corner store around my way, So if a person spits more like Slacker it's like... confused But Locc was more suited for a battle. Vis a Vis Vote: Locc
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 2:17 pm
[1-1] Tie
If i remember correctly that was one of my big problems... I tend to get really complicated - cause that's how I really talk. Had some problem with beeing TOO up there...
I liked loc's verse, even though the second line (feet-in-you-verse) is sorta sketchy, because my verse doesn't have meter...
Feet is the rhythmic unit that makes up meter. Iamb, Trohee, Dactyl, Anapest. (just fyi)
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 4:43 pm
SilverSpyder Durrtyboi The intellectual is back yo Loc he got you very clever on your part slacker I liked how you switched up the rhyme scheme at the end that was hot Loc it seemed as if you were intimidated and came surprisingly weak VOTE: Superslacker Psyche. Locc came with the punches...Intellectual lyrics are good, put if they dont pack a punch, then they don't belong in battles. When I vote, I pretend that I'm at a freestlye battle at the corner store around my way, So if a person spits more like Slacker it's like... confused But Locc was more suited for a battle. Vis a Vis Vote: LoccSpyder you can't look at it that way because this is not a battle at the corner store round the way this is not even audio its text
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 5:00 pm
I have to Vote for Locc, it was a pretty even match though.
Locc had some really nice lines up in there, and the just strung together so beautifully.
VOTE: Locc
And Sup Supercra...i mean slacker lol jk. xd
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 5:23 pm
[2-1] Loc
I even do rap like that when we have "on the corner" stuff. In my experience most rappers will be torn between counering my insinuation of there stupidity, and just cracking skulls low-IQ style. So then I get a half-assed low IQ rap trying to look like a complex one. And it all falls apart from there.
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 6:14 pm
i think thats all i am a punchline battler..i need too even it out but lately ive been on punchlinez
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 6:46 pm
Killer Loc i think thats all i am a punchline battler..i need too even it out but lately ive been on punchlinez
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 6:47 pm
ya boy Killer came hard again, but superslacker did aight too. but I think Killer got this one.
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Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 10:31 pm
i agree with what SilverSpyder said. if it's not strong, it's not strong. whether your rhyming intellectually, or with a vocabulary you learned in the 4th grade.
Loc's was more entertaining. punches, made me crack a smile, and creativity. i vote for Loc.
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