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 Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 4:51 pm
well, for a story i have yet to name, the prologe starts with a prophecy. it took me half and hour to come up with it!!!!! so i'm posting it here, and feel free to post critique, no matter how harsh ^^ i won't mind ^^
The time of dark will come upon
The hall where evil ne’er gone
Though poison spreads, as this will do
To other lands, the old and new
A girl with powers yet unknown
Who travels where the wind has blown
Will finally rest and still her pace
And two young men she’ll slowly face
She’ll claim them both as years go by
With hunter watching closely nigh
The first born low and risen high
The second born to royalty
High king’s son, though not true son
Will need an inner battle won
For revenge is what he’ll blindly seek
Followed by a shadow meek
This sickly one will hold a chain
Forged from anger, hate and pain
For it binds secrets of the past
Destroy the chain will be his task
The dark will lose, or it will win
The wheel of fate will quickly spin
The lies and truth will all unite
And light and dark will clash and fight
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 12:05 pm
*Stares at the words* Wow! I WANT TO KNOW THE STORY! That'll make a great prolog, it captures the attion of the reader right away.
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Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2007 10:04 am
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Posted: Fri Mar 16, 2007 8:38 pm
When will you start the story?
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Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 7:51 am
I want to read more...WOW...it's really...i would TOTALLY LOVE to read your story! domokun
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Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 12:04 pm
very creative. Just vague enough to leave the author all the freedom they need to write the actual plot. quite unique.
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 7:03 pm
no you can not use my prophecy evil
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2007 10:45 am
XQueen.of.ThievesX no you can not use my prophecy evil jokeing mrgreen . i would rather have to shred my brain makeing my oun prophecy then work around some on elses stuff doing that would be demeaning to me as a writer.
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Posted: Tue May 01, 2007 3:48 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 8:21 pm
Excellent! It grabs you fro the very beginning. Id love to read the story. And id probably have a hell of a time trying to make out the prophecy as i went burning_eyes .
I love the way you use the rhyme scheme, and how it give alot of foreshadowing without revealing much. You really set things up nicely here, let me know as your story progresses, id love to read it!
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