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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 8:42 am

Tombstone Tales

Take me to the graveyard
Lay me on the mound
Find a perfect place for me
To lie upon the ground

Take me to the graveyard
Down next to the bone
And maybe you’ll convince me
That I am not alone

Take me to the graveyard
I love looking at the stones
You know that underneath them
Lie the skulls and bones

Take me to the graveyard
For, though I am not dead
It reminds me our immortality
Could at any moment end

Take me to the graveyard
That is where I’ll live
Take me to the graveyard
That is all you have to give.

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Long time no see! I bet y'all have already forgotten me. Anyways, I know this one sounds morbid, but it was written with the best intentions. Enjoy, and review, please.

Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 10:29 am

It is not morbid. In the summer when I need a long walk I stometimes take a trip to the cemetary. I love to examine the tombstones and guess where they went, what kind of person they were, and how they might have died.

As for the poem, it did get the point across, but for my personal taste it lacked something....soul. It is alright as it is, but try adding some more spice and heart. 3nodding wink

God bless <3

Mel

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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 7:57 pm

I liked it. It didn't seem to have any of those freaky subliminal messages, had nothing to do with sex, and rhymed well. 10/10.

3nodding Welcome back!

Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 1:46 pm

Vesica_of_Deus

It is not morbid. In the summer when I need a long walk I stometimes take a trip to the cemetary. I love to examine the tombstones and guess where they went, what kind of person they were, and how they might have died.

As for the poem, it did get the point across, but for my personal taste it lacked something....soul. It is alright as it is, but try adding some more spice and heart. 3nodding wink

God bless <3

Mel

I know exactly how you feel! That's what I was trying to get out! Everytime I try to tell someone about my secret love for cemetaries, they start to think I'm goth. I like puzzling out stories about the occupants of the graveyard, and it's always so peaceful and quiet.

You never hear stories of haunted graveyards, do you? I didn't think so.

Sorry for the lack of soul! Blame school. sweatdrop

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