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 Posted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 9:42 am
Hello homosapiens. lol
Just like a television show is being posted for opinions for the writer, I am posting my book idea for some real critism. Sorry, but I don't trust friends, family and the fiance to be honest to the extreme.
The way this works is that my mind pictures everything as an anime. I am trying to become more creative by reading other writers of the same genre. Okay, so here goes.
Andora, she’s my protagonist. She’s the token high school drop out Latina with a family that doesn’t care for her, with the exception of her older brother Emilio. That is, of course, until she finds him dead in an alley. She swears to find the murderer and make him/her pay dearly. From the shadow comes a vampire who offers to give her the strength and power she needs to achieve her goals.
So, Andora, a vampire seeking revenge, journeys through the world following tracked that vanished decades ago. She meets some interesting people along the way; some whom she chooses to help, and some she chooses to kill. I want this story to unravel slowly, but also weave in with the plot for my big bad. There will be lots of supernatural entities throughout the book (werewolves, mages, vampires, etc). But I currently have writer’s block. I have written about four chapters, which I refuse to re-read because I always find something wrong when I edit my work.
So, basically, I guess I am requesting for someone or a few of you to read it over, give me input and motivate me to end my writing sloth.
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Posted: Fri Jan 12, 2007 5:49 am
the "token high school drop out latina"
wow.
i'm now kinda embarrassed to know you hail from the same ancestors as i do.
all that aside- i assume you've created an anne-rice type of vampire, as opposed to a whedon vamp?
and are you also reading up on your criminology, or are you just going to write, oh she came upon a clue. and give no exact details.
cuz if you're writing a cartoon about a vampire, you're going to need some reality and obvious truths to balance it out.
and i would highly suggest that if you ever pitch this to those who would be in charge, you drop the "token" part.
cuz that's just degrading and embarrassing.
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Posted: Fri Jan 12, 2007 9:43 am
cry but...but...she has the brother.... cry
Nah! I get what you mean. I just worded it wrong. I should probably word it differently. More to the sense of, once she became a vampire, her mission was to find her brother’s killer. Everything else became secondary.
I want the realism from Anne Rice, but I don’t want her to be my only resource for my book. I am also familiar with White Wolf’s Vampire: The Masquerade, which also holds lots of realism, and I am getting to know a bit of Laurell K. Hamilton. Andora is street smart, but that’s about it for now.
Clues, I want them to make sense and not just to be “oh lookie here” type thing.
The first chapter is more of what happened the night her brother died. I have yet to connect each chapter with the whole reason why she became a vampire. The second chapter jumps about twenty years into present time, which tells us that she is still a fairly young vampire since others live for hundreds of years. She is being chased by someone, whom I keep vague and plan to fully introduce later. I want the readers to know as much as Andora knows. So, if she doesn’t know who or what is chasing her, neither does the reader. The third chapter goes into her little buddy a bit. It’s more of a person whom she promised to protect, but know little as to why. This chapter also journeys her need to feed. Chapter four goes into her history with her little buddy a bit more. The next chapter should either go into more detail about their history and why Andora promised to protect her, or I should do another confrontation with the chaser from chapter two.
I guess I have these good ideas, but have problem figuring out how to put them down on paper and stop them from floating in my head until I forget.
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Posted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 3:11 pm
Well it sounds interesting, but keep in mind that u dont make carbon copies of ur fave authors, or inspiration. I wrote a short story and someone read it, and the told me my chara was just like Lestat, but a girl, and went on to point out the similarities between them I didn't even notice I did.
Basic plot is over done as well. Vamp, full of revenge, try and mix it up a little.
Find a vamp lore that works for you. Mix and match diff lores and see what u can come up with. Read as much as possible, and take bits from diff authors to make your work something new. Make some stuff up yourself
Good Luck
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Posted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 6:35 pm
Thanks, I appreciate it. I have an idea. Right now, the revenge thing is what is going to lure her to the what is actually going to unfold in my story.
Right now, I am trying to read up on other vampire stories and other styles to make sure my style is my own and not mimicing someone elses. I will try not to base my idea on something I read or heard of, but it is hard to do.
I have the habit of picturing it like an anime episode and not like an actual novel. I think that is where some of my choppiness is coming from, really.
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