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 Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2006 3:29 pm
' A request for chainletters 'is my little thread for re-written chainletters.
I am sure a lot of us have recieved chainletters in the past with really bad written stories inside, so on my spare time I edit the ones I find and make the chainletter story into a short story.
Warning: I never edit my work on Gaia. What stories you see here are uneditted and not revised.
It's a personal thing for me so yes, I have a lot of spelling errors, bare with it is all I ask.
This thread is for my chainletter stories only. When I begin writting other pieces of work I shall make a new thread. <3
Enjoy my writting.
Note: Please do not critique my chainletter stories, these are just leasure short stories that are not supposed to be polished and ready for publication by the top production company for writers.
Thanks,
Licks and Loves,
- Ms. Rii
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Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2006 3:30 pm
Man, I so wish I had the orginal chainletter to this, if you happen to have it give it to me please?
Alright, I am sure we've almost all got the chainletter of the girlfriend sleeping her boyfriend's best friend...right? If you didn't here is a summery.
Girl sleeps with boyfriend's best friend.
Boyfriend comes over to see them humping.
Girl and boy fight.
Boy throws a ring down at her feet since it was their anniversary.
Girl cries.
Boy dies by jumping off a bridge.
Here is my edit and may I say much more better of an edit. xD
"Hey hunny, I am headed off to your place right now." Daren said as he opened the door to his green pick up truck. Starting the car he began to pull out of the drive way of his work late that night for a romantic rondavue with his soon be fiance'.
"Uhm. I thought you were going to work late?" Kirsten's voice shook, her secret hidden in the other room watching television.
"Change in plans, my boss didn't need me for those extra grave yard shifts."
"Why can't you give me more warning? I really wasn't expecting you to come so late at night it's almost twelve a.m."
Daren frowned to himself as he made a left turn at a light, heading even closer to her house.
"Baby, I thought you would be happy to know I am coming to see you. It's our anniversary, we should spend it together. Besides, a late night dinner at home would be romantic. Please, let me see you."
Kristen sighed deeply, walking into the next room where the television was playing and made a hand motion to turn it down.
Daren's best friend Rob picked up the remote, pressing 'down' multipule times 'til silence filled the room.
Rob pulled Kristen down and began sucking on her neck gently as he wrapped his arms around her, a blanket wrapping around his waist, his fingers pulling at his shirt that she was wearing.
Kristen talked to Daren for a few minutes, telling him to come to her place in an hour.
Hanging up the phone she tossed it to the side, a devilish smile playing across her face...
Within moments after the phone call Daren put the spare key into the lock, silently unlocking Kirsten's door and stepping into the darkened house.
Making his way through the dark changing lights caught his eye. It was the television, following the light into the living room he saw two figures on the couch.
"Kristen, what the hell is going on?!" Kristen sat up in a fright, Rob rolling off the couch and onto the floor.
"Rob?! What the ********?!" Daren walked towards the both of them, not knowing what to do first, beat the s**t out of Rob or unleash hell on Kristen.
None of this made sense, questions flew into his mind, anger plusing through him he turned around and left the house.
Rob like a sly fox went into the bathroom and hid.
Kristen wrapped a blanket around herself and ran after Daren, screaming out his name in panic.
Daren had reached his truck by the time she caught up to him, tears streaming her face, her entire body shaking.
" I am so sorry. I couldn't help myself...we...we couldn't help it. I tried to tell you, but I couldn't break your heart. I was going to tell you after our anniversary...but...I don't know. Daren? Daren please say something."
Daren's body went ridged, gripping the handle to door he turned slightly, not being able to completely face this whoring tramp before him and through grinded teeth he replied, "Kristen, I love you so much. I am willing to die for you...I don't know what to say to you except you're nothing but a whore. A ******** whore."
Her cries became even louder as she stumbled towards him, grabbing his arm. His hands fumbled inside of his pockets for a minute, pulling out a small black velvet box with a small piece of paper sticking out from it.
"And to think..." A harsh, sarcastic laught came from his lips. "I thought you loved me back, silly me. I guess in the end, I came here to pay my whore."
Pushing her back he opened the door, slamming it shut behind him as he drove away with fast speed.
He wanted to get away from it all so quickly, just leave it behind...
Kristen scrambled for the box and paper, holding them both close to her.
She didn't want to open in, she didn't even want to read the paper...she knew what it all was.
Turning her head to another car's engine turning on she saw Rob's figure in his own car, driving off as well, flipping her off as she drove by her.
Three worlds were destroyed that night. . . One love. . . died.
The next morning Kristen awoke to a phone call by her bed side.
Daren's mother's voice cracked into the phone, "Kristen, sweety are you up?"
Kristen slowly turned over, her eyes cracking open to a warm stream light of sun as she brushed back her hair, pieces of the shattered night before quickly rushed into her head.
"Oh my god...Daren told you? I am so sorry, is he there? Please let me speak to him."
The mother chocked softly and said. " You can't."
"Please! You don't understand..."
"He is dead Kristen...I got the call an hour ago."
"What? I don't understand."
"I know this is going to be hard...but...he commited suicide."
"What...but how? This isn't making sense!"
"He jumped off the bridge. Remember the bridge you two had your first kiss?"
Of course she did, he took her there on their first date, it was odd at first, a bridge as a first date, but the view from the tippy top was amazing, as if you could touch moon or pluck a star right from the black sky itself.
"I am so sorry...I have to go." a click on the end rung in Kristen's ear.
Her fingers loosing grip of the phone she laid there for what seemed an eternity.
She turned her head to the pillow next to her, the box and paper where she left it hours before.
Not fully being conscience she grabbed them both, opening the box she saw her birthstone ring, with a gold band.
Tears once again covered her cheeks, her fingers fumbling to open the paper as small words unraveled.
To my beautiful, most amazing girl...My Kristen.
I could tell you I love you every morning, day and night [which I intend on doing].
I could tell you I will give you the sun, moon and stars. [Which I will do.].
And I could promise you I would never leave you [which is my promise.]
But these are meer words and like you've told me over our time together that actions always speak louder than words.
And for this anneversary I wanted to finally prove to you my intentions and promises by giving you, a piece of me, a piece of my heart and a symbol of my love and a reminder to you that I am yours, forever and always.
...I love you. Will you marry me?
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Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2006 3:31 pm
Clicking the 'seek' button on the radio Kelsey flips through the radio station, landing on her favorite station.
"That was a lot of fun tonight Jack, thanks for taking me."
"Anytime Kels. You deserve it, after what your ex did, dumpin' you and all you deserve a night out with a good friend."
Kelsey smiled, she could always trust Jack, no matter what.
he was always there for her when she needed him.
They had known each other since th 3rd grade when some boy was trying to look up her skirt Jack was there to defend her.
She had never been the one to fight or be assertive, so having a friend like Jack was all too good.
For awhile now she suspected him to have a crush on her which made her uneasy because she could never see him in that way...boyfriend and girlfriend.
Plus, he has been dating her other friend Karen for 6 months now, still, the look he gave her when they were alone was enough to make her wonder all the same.
"Thank you..." Kelsey said, her lips curving into a smile as she turned to face him.
Jack looked at her, watching the moonlight catch her face, making it glow.
"You are so beautiful tonight. You've always been beautiful." His hand momentarily left the steering wheel to caress her face.
Blushing Kelsey turned away giggling.
"Karen is so lucky to have you!" She straightened her skirt to cover her knees as she caught him looking at her legs.
He shrugged effortlessly. " I don't love her Kelsey."
Startled she frowned. "Why not? You talked about her for like 2 months before you dated."
"Yeah, I know, but that was to cover up my true feelings about someone else..."
Her stomach knotted, her mind was thinking, 'not now Jack...please don't say me...please don't say Kelsey.'
"You Kelsey....I want you, I love you. I've loved you since the 3rd grade and for all of these years I've sat quitely hoping you would come to me."
She looked out the window, just wanting to drop the conversation.
She was not in the mood to discuss love since she had just had her heart broken by someone she thought loved her.
"Jack, please...I don't want to talk about this." He ran his hand lightly over her theigh, giving a soft squeeze.
She slapped his hand away.
"Kelsey, I know you love me too. It's why you dated Mark, to make me notice you even more. Those cute outfits, smiles and playful times together, I knew it was all for me..and now..here we are, finally alone. Tell me you love me Kelsey."
" I don't love you Jack, you're my best friend, you're like a brother to me! I never knew you did and I thought I could just be myself around you."
He laughed in a sarcastic manner. Taking a turn into a parking lot.
It was the same mall they were at earlier, just now, at the far end with the entire lot empty.
The only thing giving them light was the street lamps.
"Jack...Why are we stopping?" Kelsey had her hand on the seat belt buckle, ready to make a dash for it if she needed to.
His hand grabbed her wrist and pulled her closer to him.
"I won't let you leave this car until you prove to me how much you love." His other hand grazed down her side feeling her curves and now trembling body.
"Do not tremble Kelsey, I am not going to hurt you. I just want to show you how much I love you."
He leaned in, giving her a kiss, his tongue slipping into her mouth ever so teasingly.
Pulling away Kelsey freed her wrist and slapped him across the face.
"Jack you are scaring me, stop it. I want to go home right now."
"Just tell me you love me..." He persisted.
"No. I don't love you. Now take me home!" Anger rose in her voice, along with fear. She wanted out she was affraid to know what was going to come next.
He unhooked his seat belt, crawling ontop of her in a quick motion, his fingers already working on her own seat belt.
Screaming Kelsey began to kick him, lifting her knee up into his groin in a sharp movement, slapping his chest.
"Get off of me Jack! No, stop it! Get off!" He keeled over for a moment, finally unhooking her belt too, in a struggle of hands and legs he moved her into the back of the car, his weight lessons were finally paying off as he got her into the back effortlessly.
"Baby I love you. Stop fighting." His voice was calm, yet semi-strained due to her constant fighting.
He didn't want to hurt her, just to make love to her.
So, he pinned her down, her arms above her head as he worked with their clothes.
He kept whisepering soft words into her ear as she began to cry begging him to stop.
On the outside the car began to shake as cries dissappaited into the night's air.
He dropped her off at her place, giving her a kiss on her forehead before driving away.
The next few days turned into weeks, then months after the incodent.
Her period had been late for two months now and she didn't understand why, except for the one night.
She hadn't seen Jack around for awhile and everything at school seemed normal.
Going to the nurse complaining of problems she directed her to a clinic.
She was allowed a walk-in after school to get an exam.
The entire school day she sat there, in a blank state of mind wondering what was going on with her body.
If she was pregnant.
Finally school was over and she took the bus to the clinic, the doctor gave her an exam and told her to come back within 2 weeks.
Well, the two weeks came up and the results were back, the docot sat her down and told her congradulations, your almost 3 months pregnant.
After discussing her options and abortion was out she was to face her parents and Jack.
- To be contined.-
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