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 Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 9:02 am
Post your Harry Potter Fanfiction here! I wrote one, although the whole "Neville thing" seems unlikely. Please read, and PM me if you think it's good! Thank you!
United As One
A brief Harry Potter Fan Fiction with a twist
By CrazyMuggleGirl
Harry Potter awoke from his doze with a jolt.
His scar wasn’t searing with pain (surprisingly) and it took him a few seconds to realize what had woken him.
Then he heard it.
A soft, slow thump thump noise was ascending the stairs leading to his bedroom at Privet Drive.
He sat up straight in his bed, listening intently. Who could possibly be in the house? He thought.
His aunt, uncle, and cousin were all out shopping, and they couldn’t possibly be home yet, for they had just left a few minutes ago.
Suddenly, there was a small knock on his door. He gasped quite audibly.
He was just seriously considering grabbing his wand and locking the door, remembering that the Death Eaters were still at large, when Neville Longbottom opened the door and peeked his round, anxious face at Harry.
“Hi, Harry.” He said uncertainly.
“Neville!” Harry exclaimed, thoroughly relieved that it wasn’t a Death Eater.
“What are you doing here? How did you get in? Is everything alright?” Harry asked, as Neville walked in the room, crossed over to Harry and sat down upon the bed.
“Well, you know how I could never do the Alohomora spell? Well I got inside just now because Hermione taught me the spell before summer began. And, to answer your other question, no, everything is NOT alright.” Neville sighed.
Harry immediately rounded on him.
“What’s happened? Is Ginny, Ron, Hermione and Luna safe?” He asked.
Neville sighed again and said “Yes, everyone is perfectly fine. I found out that you don’t have to kill You-Know-Who by yourself.
We BOTH have to do it.
Together.
The Prophecy is actually about You-Know-Who, me, and you.
And I’m going to help you kill Him, whether you need me or not,” Neville added hastily, as Harry had shown every sign of interrupting.
“How did you find this out?” Harry whispered. His throat had gone very dry.
“I destroyed the prophecy.” Neville said.
“It was hidden inside an unopened locket at Number Twelve, Grimmauld Place.
Remember how we simply just tossed it into the rubbish pile? Well, Hermione mended Sirius’ knife that had melted and we were able to locate the locket using a muggle metal detector. Turned out Kreacher stole it and buried it in his little nest. We managed to confiscate it while he wasn’t looking, though, and we pried it open with the knife.”
Neville finished.
“Brilliant!” Harry exclaimed.
Even though he was slightly ashamed of himself for forgetting all about the locket, he couldn’t help but feel pleased that he wasn’t necessarily The Chosen One after all.
He now realized that he had no other choice but to take Neville with him to find Voldemort, and he wouldn’t have it any other way.
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Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 8:48 pm
((I'm adding my own charachter.))
Harry sat on his Firebolt, watching a potential chaser. She was pretty good, and he had a feeling that she would be the person to take the position. The girl passed by and landed a few feet away. Her shots had been perfect, and she was amazing at dodging bludgers. Harry smiled at her and nodded. She came towards him, a questioning expression on her face. Before she could speak, Harry answered.
"That was pretty good, Kira, I think you're the new chaser."
Kira pumped her fist into the air, a happy smile on her face.
"Thanks, Harry! I've been practicing for a while."
Kira may have an easygoing attitude, but she held a secret that would kill anyone else. Her father had created a stone that could kill anyone you wanted to or bring people back to life. Voldemort wanted it badly, and she was entrusted with it. Kira was also in her own prophecy. If Harry lost, then she would join Voldemorts ranks, killing most of the world. If Harry one, then everyone that had been killed thanks to the killing curse would come back to life. That includes Lily and James Potter. Kira walked off, but stopped short when Harry called to her.
"Hey Kira, do you want to go to Hogsmede with me? I mean to Madame Puddifoots."
Kira turned aroud, an overjoyed grin on her face.
"You mean as a date? Sure!"
A date with the famous Harry Potter! She'd hit gold! Kira was in her dorm now, smiling happily. Her friends came in, giggling. "So he asked you, didn't he? It's all around the common room, though Ginny didn't look to happy about it." Kira glared at them all, they'd just ruined it. "Shut up, why'd you have to find out."
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 10:30 pm
 It's a pretty good start - though you have page returns in places where you don't need them, like after each of Neville's sentances in his little speach. Dramatic pauses can be made by breaking the quotes and making him fidget or having Harry notice some detail.
"Breaking quotes creates a dramatic pause for the reader," Sofia said, "wiithout bothering a character who is talking quickly."
Like that. My marbles...
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Posted: Tue Jan 16, 2007 4:37 pm
Neat. Does anyone have an idea for a fanfic? I cannot think of one momentarily; therefore, I need your help! I haven't written a HP fanfic in like, forever, so I can't think of any topic.
Mybe something about peas or pixie sticks...
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Posted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 3:58 pm
Skipping_Evil_Zebra Neat. Does anyone have an idea for a fanfic? I cannot think of one momentarily; therefore, I need your help! I haven't written a HP fanfic in like, forever, so I can't think of any topic. Mybe something about peas or pixie sticks... Fanfiction ideas can and should come from everywhere. I have a 7 chaptered beast on FF.net that originated from looking at a poster for the fourth movie. My advice: Try to think of something yourself. People tend to write better when they're passionate about the story.
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Posted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 4:48 am
All your entries are completely unliky and the whole "Kira" person is completely random.
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Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 12:02 pm
I liked the first one. I haven't read any Harry Potter for about two years, but reading this made me want to start reading them again.
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Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 8:28 pm
I agree with Wolfie Kid, now I kind of want to read HP again.
Well written, in my opinion, but the first one was a bit OOC. I don't think think that the Harry and Neville used language that eloquent. The next one was cute, but sounded a bit Mary-Sue... one = won.
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