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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 10:53 am
Ok, so here's my frist finished short story. It's written like a Grimm Fairy Tale cuz I really like those stories...anways, it doesnt have a title cuz i can never think of them. but here goes:
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 11:01 am
There once was a girl who lived in a cottage in the woods with her parents. Her mother and father went into town early every morning. But today, they did not return. They girl, Anna, went out alont to search for them. She took only a piece of bread and a frock. There was but one road to town. 'Twas more a path than a road, for it was not paved. Rather it was marked by the beated down weeds upon which Anna's parents traversed. It was dark when she set out. She had gone only a short distance when she saw two bodies lying the the road. They were the bodie of her beloved parents, now dead. She could do nothing in the way of a funeral for she was a weak and feeble girl. Not strong enough to drag them the short distance to their home, nor to dig the graves. She fled home and wept. She wept for days. She did not eat or sleep. Which was just as well, for there was no food for her but the bread she had dropped by her parents' sides. After a time, she began to sew. There was little else to occupy her time and alas, she was left alone with no money or dowery. She sweed day and night. The most beautiful fugs, blankets, cloaks and any other imaginable thing. The fabric, mixed with her tears bid her well. Soon, there was a boy come to the cottage. He came of his father's wishes for he was the son of a merchant. His father was the sole trader with the girl's parents. They did business with no one else, for this man was very generous and gave them goods in plenty for their meager payments.
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 11:07 am
The boy saw also the bodies which by now had been ravaged by animals. But as he was kind like his father, he carried the corpses to the cottage and began to dig a grave. One large hole to lay them both in. The girl looked out upon the boy with interest for she had never seen another sould save for her dead mother and father. Yet, even though her curiosity was great, she did not stop her sweing. After a time, the boy came to the window and asked the girl to come out for he tought his work would please her. But she would not come. So the boy filled in the grave while poor Anna sat ever watching from the window of her humble cottage. From that day forth, the boy never failed to try to coax poor Anna into leaving the solidity of indoors. He always brought food for her, and had also taken to doing some of the chores such as bringing water from the well. He even planted a garden. But he was never allowed inside, and little Anna never set a foot outside. They did have long talks through the window. He made her laugh with his boyish anitics though he was no less than 15. Little Anna waited for him every day. But one day, he did not come. She stared at the path that had somehow taken her parents and was frightened it may have taken her dear friend as well.
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 11:14 am
She waited for three days and nights never leaving the window. This boy who was so important to her, who had made her happy once more...why did he not come? She wanted to cry out his name in hopes he would hear and come to her. Poor Anna made up her mind. As he was not coming to her, she must go to him. She gathered up some meat and bread for the boy always brought them in plenty. She packed a flask filled with water for she had no wine. She also packed vegetables and fruits which the boy had grown for her on her own land. Then she took out her 3 most wonderful dresses. She had sewn them herself from the most beautiful cloth. They boy had brought her much fabric as well, for he soon discovered her talent with needle and thread. Little Anna lay down to sleep for it was too latein the day to begin her journey. While she slept, a woman came to her. She thought at first a witch, and was afraid. But as the old one spoke kindly and seemed to know her she soon became calm. The woman spoke of a castle. The Castle of the Sun. Anna was to go to it and request to be made a servant. A lady in waiting to the princess. The princess was said to be greedy and selfish, but Anna was to be only kind. She was to give the princess her three dresses. At this poor Anna woke with a start. Her three most amazing dresses were to be given to a selfish pig of a princess?
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 11:20 am
She all but began to cry until she thought of the boy. The old woman had given no mention of the boy. Still, 'twas better to listen to the wise one. So she set off, traveling the world, forever searching for The Castle of the Sun. As she was so kind and beautiful, she always had shelter. But every day she thought of the boy. Almost a year later, she came upon the castle that she was meant to find. As the witch had commanded her to do so, Anna had packed up her gowns and wore a simple peasant's dress instead. When she approached the door it was opened without a sound. There stood Princess Ariona herself. Anna immediately fell to her knees. The spoiled princess look down on her with disgust. "If you please Your Majesty," poor Anna began, "I would like to be a lady in waiting." Ariona glared at her. "I have no use for you. Perhaps the kitchen is in need of another hand." Little Anna was about to protest when the Kind came in. "Ariona, you know very well you need a lady in waiting." Kind Mendan turned to Anna. "You will do quite nicely. I'll have a servant show you to your quarters."
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 11:20 am
As poor Anna followed a servant boy to her room she couldn't help but think how strange that had been. But soon enough, her thoughts drifted back to the boy where they remained. The servant boy opened the door to her room, bowed, and turned to walk away. But he caught her gaze. He held it for a few seconds, smiled, the turned and left. "How very strange this place is, indeed." Anna said to herself in the solitude of her room. Then she drifted off to sleep. The next morning, she remembered the dresses. She brought them to Princess Ariona at once. The instant Ariona caught sight of them she burst into tears. Poor Anna was frightened that she had upset the princess, but Ariona soon recovered and began telling a story. It was not a long story, and it went something like this...
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 12:13 pm
When I was young I would ride my favorite pony into the woods every day. One day, I saw these two peasants. A man and a woman. They were very kind to me and showed me the way back to this castle, for I had been lost. I offered them shelter here for they had no home. They refused it. The next day, I thought of them as I was riding. Then I saw a witch. I was repulsed by such a creature, though by nature I was a kind child. At my reaction to her, the witch read my thoughts about the couple. She said for my wickedness they would be cursed. That they would die in ten years. I wanted to warn them, but the witch would not allow it. She told me though, that one day a young maiden which would be their daughter would give to me such wonderful gowns as I could not imagine. So, I searched the kindom. I looked everywhere, but these dresses were not to be found. I became bitter because I could not find them. It has now been 12 years and you are that maiden. I am so terribley sorry aqbout my wikcedness, Little Anna.
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 12:16 pm
At that, poor Anna was the one to burst into tears. Then, the servant boy who had led her to her room the night before, came in. He did not adress the princess, but went directly to poor Anna for he was the boy who had come to her cottage each day for a year. He too, had been cisited by the wise old witch. Not in person, not in a dream, but he had seen her all the same. From that day on, Anna and William, which was the boy's name, were never seperated. Ariona gave Anna teh most beautiful of the three gowns to wear at her wedding. Little Anna chose Ariona as her maid of honor for she was not selfish after all. William and Anna were married and lived long, happy lives in the cottage where they first met.
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 12:18 pm
...ok thats it. The story told by Ariona is kind of dumb, but its the best i could think of to tie it all together. well..sort of. I didn't really think of any of this. It just kind of came out like that. I was actually really depressed and wanted to sleep, but this stupid story kept nagging me so i wrote it out. rolleyes anyways...any thoughts?
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 9:16 pm
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 9:51 pm
.. i read the first sentance go meh 3nodding from what i got outta what i read it was the little red riding hood and teh big bad wolf.. awesome sentance! sorry i have teh attention span of a nat (english teacher said that and he called me smart, and a dofus wink ) o yeah.. ( he believes in other deminsions and aliens... yup yup hes crazy)
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Posted: Fri Jun 16, 2006 9:25 am
lol sounds like a funny guy. kudos on yur heavy reading cool
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Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 12:41 pm
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Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 2:40 pm
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Posted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 8:03 am
You should try adding to the story, ya know? Make it longer put more plot twists and so on and you might really have something here.
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