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 Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 7:53 am
Hokay, so the rules say I need to make a thread of my stuff after being accepted, so here we are! In chronological order: So, my problem areas would be... okay, everything really, but I suppose basic body anatomy, facial anatomy, values and shading with pencil/ink are the issues that I want to focus on for the moment. I'll be posting more here soon! Not sure if I should be introducing myself here, but the basics: 20 years old, female, Aussie, graphic designer, been drawing 4~ish years, mainly anime, now trying to get more serious. Not planning on making a career out of this, although I wouldn't mind doing some illustration work on the side of my design work, since they complement each other fairly well. Deviant. Sketcher.
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 4:20 pm
I let you in because I like your attitude towards art. I appreciate that you are on the right track, and in the "journey of discovery" state of mind.
From a technical angle, I like how you operate color but I think your form needs work. More drawing from life (as I see you've been doing) should help you realise the three-dimentionality of your subjects.
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Dr. Valentine Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat May 27, 2006 1:20 pm
what he said.
i can't stop looking at your people with axels (i think that's what they're called?) for hips. really nice. and the omg guy.
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Posted: Sat May 27, 2006 7:39 pm
Thankyou... doctors xd I'm glad you see in enough potential in my attitude to let me in here. I'm working on the form thing, making progress very very slowly. The 'axel' thing is supposed to represent the bones of the hips - I've been going through one Loomis' books and that's how he teaches figure drawing, to start out with. I've found it very helpful 3nodding More actual art soon! EDIT: Okay, need some help here - this is my side of an art trade, and I'm not happy with it at all at the momet confused  It will eventually be her avatar dressed as a gothic lolita... but at the moment I'm not getting the cuteness and femininity that (I think?) is supposed to be associated with gothic lolita's. Her head, arms, legs and hips also annoy me. I could really use some red line action or just suggestions here sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun May 28, 2006 10:39 am
I think that her torso is too small maybe which makes her legs look shorter than they are...
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Posted: Thu Jun 01, 2006 3:40 pm
In that pic you've got relationship problems.
What I mean is that the hip/leg assembly is good, and the shoulder/arms/head assembly is good, but they don't go together right. I think that she needs a little more "hourglass" action; her midsection should be thin in contrast to her hips (it is) but also in contrast to her ribcage (which it isn't).
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Dr. Valentine Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Jun 02, 2006 7:27 am
I'm glad you're drawing a bit from life, even though it's all photographic reference (I think). That's how I learned to draw people when I was younger, I think it works pretty well and it's about time for a refresher.
Your anime is really stiff, though - kind of like you're trying to constrain expressions to set parameters and symbols, and you've overdone it, almost like clipart of anime drawn by someone who knows there's money in it for them, but doesn't really know anything about anime or manga itself (Have you seen those how-to-draw (insertanimethinghere)books at the bookstore?). Try to branch out more with your expressions. Get more... free? with it. Make the face while you're drawing it, it sounds stupid, but I find it helps.
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Posted: Fri Jun 02, 2006 12:02 pm
I like the placement/posing of her feet, it makes the pose very solid when it's done right
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Posted: Sat Jun 03, 2006 1:07 am
Thanks guys ^_^ I've gotten similar criticisms at other places I've posted this picture, so here's what I've done based on them: Still not happy with it, and I think I've brought up some new problems, as well as losing the solidity from her feet that I had before... gonna do some posing in the mirror and try get it right tomorrow. Iconoclast - I know what you mean, and I agree that expressions are a major problem for me. I never really got into the HTDM books, but yeah, a lot of my work has the 'generic cute girl smiling' expression and that's about it. I focussing on body anatomy at the moment but trying to do the odd portrait every now and then too. A new bookshop just opened in our city that has sooo many art books I've been wanting but couldn't find them anywhere. I swear, I could live in that bookshop xd
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2006 2:41 am
Okay, another update. This time with me posing in the mirror to get the legs right... although the legs now look a bit curvier than I intended because that's how my legs look! I'm fairly happy with it at this point, any other suggestions before I start on the clothing and hair?
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 2:59 am
The leg position look so much more feminine. You could still slim down her waistm hips and thighs to make her look less like a real person and more like a doll, it might help to achieve that lolita thing your trying to do. If you have to add a big skirt to this figure she might end up kinda bulky, even though she is already slim.
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Posted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 9:37 pm
Update! Good point ficklefiend - I slimmed down her legs a bit, and with the skirt quickly pencilled in it does definitely look more bulky than I imagined sweatdrop I'm working on the clothes now. And now for some chibis:
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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 5:28 am
It's looking promising though. Good shoes smile
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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 10:33 pm
It's a lovely picture, but it looks a bit too womanly for lolita. Lolitas are adolescent girls, and the one you've draw looks older than that. You might want to make her less curvy or something like that so that she looks less developed.
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Posted: Tue Jul 04, 2006 8:09 am
Alrighty, finally finished this a while ago and forgot to post it until now: I tried to take advice and make her a bit less curvy, although in the end its all covered up and its hard to tell! Also took a shot at this cross-hatching dealie, since usually after a rough sketch I usually do everything digitally and wanted to try something different. I won't be working on this piece anymore (I think I've reached the point of no-more-erasing in some places), but any comments or advice on shading this way would really really help for future works biggrin
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