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 Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 6:25 pm
Looking around me,
I don't know what it is,
but I don't feel like I belong.
It's hard to say,
but all of you I do care about,
so please don't deserte me,
I'm hurting too much.
I can see through your eyes,
see how pathetic I look,
and I understand your desertion.
I hope that this will come to pass,
as I hope to have friends,
who care for me and know me.
You make me feel left out,
but I don't think you do it on purpose;
so I am asking you please
look through my eyes.
Tell me what you see,
when you see me lying here bleeding.
Tell me what you think,
when you knew you could help me.
Tell me what you feel,
as I lie here dying in my blood.
I can't hold on much longer,
please tell me soon;
I see you slipping away,
and the pain pangs harder.
I saw you in trouble,
and came to help,
putting myself in danger as well.
I took the blade into my stomach,
as I know you wouldn't do for me;
I don't mind much,
because now I know
I lived for a purpose
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Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 9:12 pm
Wow, That sounds like romeo and juliet!!!
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Posted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 9:27 am
He he... Yep... Sounds like Romoeo and Juliet!!! blaugh
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Posted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 9:36 am
... no it doesn't.
But I really like it. It's sad but then it also has an air of truth to it. It's way cool! *Thinks of some of her own sad writings...* Anyway you did a way good job in writing it.
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Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 10:36 am
*wipes a tear from her eye* that was so kewl, i love it but *weeps* it reminds me of my current relationship. *sniffle* but good job
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Posted: Wed May 03, 2006 9:48 pm
thats the greatest poem i ever heard
crying
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Posted: Thu May 11, 2006 8:08 pm
Hate to be a Simon but that peom was.... eccentric (look it up) The way it was put, I think some parts should have been in other places.
My rating :8.5 heart I still like it.
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 11:01 am
Okay, This topic really needs to be moved. You weren't even supposed to post it anyway.
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 1:55 am
LOL! I know this is kinda slow... sweatdrop Anyway, i just wanted to say that poem was really, really good. T'was so sad! crying I would love to hear you read because that way it would come from your heart and there would be more depth than there is already.
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Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 6:26 am
Yeah, I can relate to that... why won't she come back?
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 12:43 pm
Since everyone is still reading it.... I'll leave it here for a while.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 8:13 pm
JetsuTH Hate to be a Simon but that peom was.... eccentric (look it up) The way it was put, I think some parts should have been in other places. My rating :8.5 heart I still like it. hey wat r u, the poem nazi? it was a perfect 10
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 11:27 pm
wow.....I am speachless.... eek .....fantasic
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Posted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 10:21 pm
JetsuTH Hate to be a Simon but that peom was.... eccentric (look it up) The way it was put, I think some parts should have been in other places. My rating :8.5 heart I still like it. A voice of reason! I agree~
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Posted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 10:34 pm
i could turn that into song & of course give you all the credit
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