█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ CAND (CANDY) █*PARTNER(S) ▬ Azriel Dyna, Ora Demon born, Nayati Sanford █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Wilmina/Mina █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 4ft and 9in █WEIGHT ▬ 100lb
█HAIR ▬ Comes down to her knees in a braid. Is a pale yellow color. █CLOTHING ▬ Wears a black leotard that has a small diamond cut out over her cleavage. Wears baggy capri that stop at the middle of her shins and she wears thick boots. █ACCESSORIES ▬ A single anklet that jingles when she walks. █EYES ▬ Emerald green. █BUILD ▬ Small, and slim, but slightly muscled (Dancer body type). █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Curved, black horns on either side of her head
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫[list_ █ █Primary Talent ▬ Durability Fa unus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Hair is extremely thick and wool-like in quality making it difficult for weapons to pierce. █Other Talents ▬ Medic- She trained with some of the healers in her family to be a battle medic; Scavenger/Scout- She can find most things, involving survival like food, resources for shelter and such. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Endurance █Weakest Skill ▬ Speed █Other Skills ▬ Balance, Climbing, Singing
█LIKES █ ▬ Singing, Performing █ ▬ Her team, friends █ ▬ Bacon, Marshmallows █ ▬ Plush toys █ ▬ Wolf, Dragons █DISLIKES █ ▬ Arrogant people, bullies █ ▬ Anything with tough meat, spicy food. █ ▬ Swords █ ▬ (Animals) █ ▬ losing control of her emotions █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ A bit shy, but mature when with friends. But acts childish to irritate people she doesn't like. Has bipolar disorder. █Vernacular ▬ Quiet, and a bit mature and shy █Positive Traits ▬ She is Loyal, and protective. █Negative Traits ▬ Can be a bit airheaded at times when communicating with her emotions.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Born of Vale though raised on the trail it was easy to see Wilhelmina was not a normal child when she was young. She was born with a big case of bipolarity and it only became stronger the older she got. Her emotions and mood swings caused others to ostracize her and make jokes that she had a split personality in a way that isolated her from other kids. It became common to many children in the tribe she is from to call her by a different name whenever her mood changed. Mina’s family was a nomadic family that travelled all over the kingdom, never staying in one place for very long and mostly living off the land as they traveled, her family felt it safer to keep moving out of fear of grimm. It was normal to pick up others as they traveled that sought traveling companions. Mina learned her talent for singing and her desire to make others happy with her voice during one of such times. Like all young aspiring hero stories, tragedy struck. Mina’s tribe was attacked by a large beowulf pack that resulted in the death of many of her tribe and both grandparents along with the discovery of her Semblance. Mina and her family settled down after the incident giving her love for the spotlight of Idol hood a chance to grow. While in Vale, she started to do small talent shows or volunteering at charity events until people started to send requests for her to perform in other events and concerts. Because of this she began to move around the kingdoms Vale, and Atlas making her popularity grow until she became a full time Idol.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Hetal Petal █ ▬ Is a 4ft long war hammer thats turns into a sonic cannon.Each impact made by the hammer gets stored and can be use in close range 5ft concussive attacks using the hammer form or fully charge the kinetic energy to fire 1 ranged attack. Takes 10 hits to fully charge. █Melee Form ▬ Green, Gold, and Silver hammer that is 4ft tall █Ranged Form ▬ Sonic cannon that can hold the vibrations of impact in it to be released in a large shot that resembles the length and spread of a buck shotgun. A fully charged shot has a range of 50ft. █Other Form(s) ▬ (Additional Forms) █Ammo Type ▬ █ ▬ Range must be charged before it becomes usable.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Herbal Medic Pack (Made from things she gathers from the surrounding woods) █ ▬ Weather-resistant survival sack to hold items █ ▬ Sound recorder
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Idol's Embodiment █*AURA COLOR ▬ Green █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Mina is able to absorb the elements she comes into contact with. Touching an element, and using a small chant to focus, allows Mina to store the essence of the target for later use. When in effect Mina will gain the abilities of that element. Example: Mina can touch or hold an element and she would use a chant, that is specific to the element, to help her focus more to make her semblance work properly. Then the element would be absorbed into her body, giving her the abilities/properties of that element. Like earth, her body would harden and she would be able to take more hits for a certain amount of time, whilst still keeping her own skills. Semblance takes 3 posts to activate. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 5 posts and a maximum of 3 charges saved up. █*LEVEL 1▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 6 posts with 4 charges. █*LEVEL 2▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 7 posts with 5 charges. At this point she would no longer need the chant to help her focus on the element. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 8 posts and 6 charges █*DRAWBACKS ▬ 5 post cooldown and has to physically touch the element as a catalyst, for semblance to work.
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ CAND (CANDY) █*PARTNER(S) ▬ Azriel Dyna, Ora Demon born, Nayati Sanford █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Wilmina/Mina █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 4ft and 9in █WEIGHT ▬ 100lb
█HAIR ▬ Comes down to just below her butt in a braid. Is a pale yellow color. █CLOTHING ▬ Wears a black leotard that has a small diamond cut out over her cleavage. Wears baggy capri that stop at the middle of her shins and she wears thick boots. █ACCESSORIES ▬ A single anklet that jingles when she walks. █EYES ▬ Emerald green. █BUILD ▬ Small, and slim, but slightly muscled (Dancer body type). █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Curved, black horns on either side of her head
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫[list_ █ █Primary Talent ▬ Durability Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Due to slit pupils, she is able to see almost a full 360° around herself without turning her head. █Other Talents ▬ Medic, Signaler █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Parasomnia, after finding out she had such a thing her body became accustomed to it. So at such a time, if she fell asleep or was unconscious, her bipolarity in the form of other personas would take over her body. (An example would be, if she were to be in a fight, and was knocked unconscious, her subconscious could take control of her body, and continue to fight and interact outside her consciousness.) █Weakest Skill ▬ Stamina, due to her Parasomnia when it manifests, though her conscious mind is not awake her body lacks proper rest and as such makes her very tired physically. █Other Skills ▬ Balance, Climbing, Singing
█LIKES █ ▬ Singing, Performing █ ▬ Her team, friends █ ▬ Bacon, Marshmallows █ ▬ Plush toys █ ▬ Wolf, Dragons █DISLIKES █ ▬ Arrogant people, bullies █ ▬ Anything with tough meat, spicy food. █ ▬ Swords █ ▬ (Animals) █ ▬ losing control of her emotions █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ A bit shy, but mature when with friends. But acts childish to irritate people she doesn't like. █Vernacular ▬ Quiet, and a bit mature and shy █Positive Traits ▬ She is Loyal, and protective. █Negative Traits ▬ Can be a bit airheaded at times when communicating with her emotions.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Born of Vale though raised on the trail it was easy to see Wilhelmina was not a normal child when she was young. She was born with a big case of bipolarity and it only became stronger the older she got. Her emotions and mood swings caused others to ostracize her and make jokes that she had a split personality in a way that isolated her from other kids. It became common to many children in the tribe she is from to call her by a different name whenever her moods changed. Mina’s family was a nomadic family that travelled all over the kingdom, never staying in one place for very long and mostly living off the land as they traveled, her family felt it safer to keep moving out of fear of grimm. It was normal to pick up others as they traveled that sought traveling companions. Mina learned her talent for singing and her desire to make others happy with her voice during one of such times. Like all young aspiring hero stories, tragedy struck. Mina’s tribe was attacked by a Sea Feilong that resulted in the death of many of her tribe and both grandparents along with the discovery of her Semblance. Mina and her family settled down after the incident giving her love for the spotlight of Idol hood a chance to grow. While in Vale, she started to do small talent shows or volunteering at charity events until people started to send requests for her to perform in other events and concerts. Because of this she began to move around the kingdoms Vale, Vacuo, and Mistral making her popularity grow until she became a full time Idol.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Hetal Petal █ ▬ Is a 4ft long war hammer thats turns into a sonic cannon.Each impact made by the hammer gets stored and can be use in close range 5ft concussive attacks using the hammer form or fully charge the kinetic energy to fire 1 ranged . █Melee Form ▬ Green, Gold, and Silver hammer that is 4ft tall █Ranged Form ▬ Sonic cannon that can hold the vibrations of impact in it to be released in a large shot. █Other Form(s) ▬ (Additional Forms) █Ammo Type ▬ █ ▬ Range must be charged before it becomes usable.
█*NAME ▬ Idol's Embodiment █*AURA COLOR ▬ Green █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Mina is able to absorb the elements she comes into contact with. Touching an element, and using a small chant to focus, allows Mina to store the essence of the target for later use. When in effect Mina will gain the abilities of that element. Example: Mina can touch or hold an element, and must use a chant to help her focus more to make her semblance work properly. Then the element would be absorbed into her body, giving her the abilities/properties of that element. Like earth, her body would harden and she would be able to take more hits for a certain amount of time, whilst still keeping her own skills. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 5 posts and a maximum of 3 charges saved up. █*LEVEL 1▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 6 posts with 4 charges with small chant. █*LEVEL 2▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 7 posts with 5 charges and minus chant. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Mina is able to use her ability for 8 posts and 6 charges █*DRAWBACKS ▬ 3 post cooldown and has to physically touch the element as a catalysts, for semblance to work.
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Backstory: Just need be more grounded around Vale. Can be nomadic still and an Idol. Need keep in mind Atlas fell 6 years ago, Vacuo 16 years ago, and mistral 31 years ago. So for the idol part mostly be atlas and Vale for popularity. Also far as your nomadic group were they officially a tribe? Or noble family? The use of the seafeilong is kind of iffy. Just how strong it probably needs a bit presence to handle it and escape.
Faunus Trait: need be specified because vertical does differently than horizontal. Also for 360 degrees that would work if eyes were on side of her head. Most be able get is 180 degree vision.
For skills signaler and Medic need more explanation on them. What does Signaler allow her do exactly?
Strongest Skill ▬ Parasomnia - For this, you can have it as a nice personality trait but it shouldn't be a skill. You wouldn't really be able fight while in this state as that be more on extreme scale. You can however, change the skill to a more second wind type ability while the subconscious thing just be a personality trait/ quirk.
For The Weapon: Needs to say how many swings /hits it needs to charge up for the big blast it can release. Need a range unless vibrations are released on hit then need how far can knock someone back.
Semblance: "Mina can touch or hold an element, and must use a chant to help her focus more to make her semblance work properly." Is the chant specific?
How long does she have to touch/hold the element? What does she get from each element she touches? Personal opinion, 5 post cooldown sounds more fair
Also need a clarification how it works. Is it one charge and that charge lasts for 5 posts?
█ ▬ Medic Pack: is this Herbal? Is it Vale Tech quality? (curious,)
OKAY! Sorry for the wait, but I like to be comprehensive in my posts to help you fix things up!
Overall, I love this character, just so unique! I hope you find my suggestions helpful!
BACKGROUND ▬ CHECK!
Background looks good. Just note that since Atlas fell some years ago her idol portion of life in Atlas would have to have been her as a young child. You left it vague enough where it works and doesn't need any changing!
WEAPON BACKGROUND ▬ A Few Things Here!
I think this item needs a little more detail and I'd like to buff it actually. Make it stronger. So here is an idea for a rewrite:
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█ PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Hetal Petal █ ▬ Is a 4ft long war hammer that turns into a sonic cannon. Each impact made by the hammer gets stored as kinetic energy. Hetal Petal can be used in close range 5ft concussive attacks using the hammer form or shoot kinetic blasts using the stored energy from the melee attacks. These kinetic blasts do blunt/kinetic shockwave damage and can send enemies flying backwards.
Hetal Petal requires a minimum of two hits stored before she can fire a kinetic blast with 10ft of range (5ft per hit stored). Or she can hit additional times to store up more force up to a maximum of 10 hits/50ft.
For every one hit she stores up enough energy to extend her kinetic blast an additional 5ft. For example If she has 3 hits she can fire 15ft, if she has 10 hits she can fire a kinetic blast with a range of 50ft.
█ Melee Form ▬ Green, Gold, and Silver hammer that is 4ft tall █ Ranged Form ▬ Sonic cannon that can hold the kinetic energy of impact in it to be released in a large shot that resembles the length and spread of a buck shotgun. A fully charged shot has a range of 50ft. █ Other Form(s) ▬ None █ Ammo Type ▬ Kinetic Energy (Aura) █ ▬ Two hits minimum before she can use a kinetic blast. Maxes out at 10 hits or 50ft of range.
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The main things I did was take out mentions of sonic as sonic and kinetic blasts are sorta different. Kinetic matches more. Sorta just a raw energy/wind attack that sends enemies flying and afflicts blunt damage. I then buffed it a little so she can fire a lot more often but only requires two hits in order to fire. So there is some fun interplay of the mechanics. Let me know if you like this or not.
Possible Add-on: You do not need to do this, but you could add special effects when combined with dust. Like some of them may be obvious like fire dust can just augment kinetic blast with fire, but gravity dust or hardlight dust might have a different kind of effect. Like gravity could empower your hammer in such a way that when you hit someone with it it send them flying into air for their next post unable to get down till second post. And the kinetic blast could be used like a jump rocket to send you flying a large distance.
You don't need to specifies these per se, but it's something you can do now or later if you want.
SEMBLANCE ▬ This one needs the most work, mainly we need more details and I think we can buff this too!
Can you clarify on what exactly this charge is? Is it how many elements she has at hand she can utilize? I was a little confused by that.
Also, can she consume dust for semblance? If so, how does that affect her? It makes sense that she could.
What does each of the basic elements do when she uses it? A small description would be ideal. Like maybe, Water - Makes her slippery and more easily able to squeeze into small spaces, have attacks slide off of her, allows her to slide on almost any surface, etc. (May be stronger than this or weaker, just throwing out an idea).
Earth/Stone/Metal Fire Air? --- Dust Types?
You won't be limited to what you specify here, though we do want the basic elements specified. If you find a new element or dust type power you want added just let me or Deadly know before you do it and we will approve it then and there!
And instead of 3 posts to activate, I'd rather one post to channel/focus and be vulnerable, then on her next post her semblance activates SO it's faster, but leaves her vulnerable for a solid post. I think an overall buff with an appropriate drawback.
