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Posted: Sun Jan 13, 2019 7:16 pm
Name: Nataniel Khellasati [Nat-ah-nee-el Kel-ah-saw-tee]
Nickname: Generally just "Nat," but will respond (albeit halfheartedly) to most anything anyone wants to call him, including the likes of "Hey, you," and "Gae boi" among others.
Age: 23
Birthday: March 31st 1995
Sign: Aries
Gemstone: Aquamarine???
Blood Type: B+
Fav. Food: Cashews (and other nuts)
Hated Food: All red meat - He is a low-grade vegetarian, won't eat pork, beef, chicken, ect, but still loves eggs and cheeses!
School: Destiny City University (has an Associate of Science degree, and is currently technically ambling toward a BS in General Studies. He doesn't know it yet, but will be switching to Food Science in the near future)
Hobbies: Internet: As a general rule, Nataniel spends several hours a day on the internet for just about every purpose he needs. Order food? Internet. Favorite game (he loves Overwatch, Minecraft, Elder Scrolls, ect [I will need to research what PC games are, hrk])? Internet. Need money? Internet. Since he subsists almost entirely on student loans and scholarships, he's always looking for those "write an essay, win 100 bucks" contests, which he needs all he can get, since online impulse-buying is his greatest financial weakness.
Chinchilla: He has a pet chinchilla named Dusk that is the light of his life, sun in the sky, precious princess, tiny angel, spoiled rotten rodent. In lieu of actual human friends, he has Dusk, who he brings most places he thinks she will go unnoticed. Nat spends an exorbitant amount of time cooing over her and fulfilling all the needs a chinchilla could possibly have. His phone and computer are full of pictures of her. Though he is entirely disinterested in Facebook and Twitter, every now and then he posts pictures of Dusk there, so that his parents know he's alive.
Presentation: Though Nat is not outgoing, he has a sort of anxiety about how he presents himself to others, and as such, works very hard to look "good," both in the style department and in the physical upkeep department. He has a morning workout routine that can mostly be completed from his room, no machines required! But it also involves jogging at dawn. Thankfully, he has Dusk to motivate him. Otherwise, he spends almost all his extra money on impulse-buying clothes off the internet, which he "shouldn't have done, because he knows better, damn it. Why does he do this every time. It doesn't look good on him, anyway. What a waste. He shouldn't have done this."
Virtues: Meticulous: Nat isn't a half-assed kind of guy. If he is interested in something or likes something, he commits to it without question or hesitation and wants it done right and with his full attention and care. A lot of research went into chinchilla care and perfect ab-sculpting (oh, and school, obviously), and frankly, both are more work than fun, but Nat made that decision to go at it for all he's worth, and that's not something he can change lightly. Honesty plays a bit of a role in this as far as deep interpersonal relationships are concerned. He won't lie period to someone who is important to him, but if he doesn't feel any kind of bond or commitment toward someone, he will just say what comes naturally, truth or otherwise.
Intelligent: Though Nataniel is not the most motivated in regards to many of life's adventures, he does have a certain degree of intelligence that has allowed him to persevere this far in regards to his schooling. It should be noted that he is taking classes to just take classes at this point, and has no real goal in mind, but his excellent memory and above average problem-solving and critical-thinking skills have propelled him forward despite this. He isn't in the habit of losing those writing contests, you know.
Flaws: Defeatist: Nataniel has never felt that he was quite good enough. Good enough for what, you may ask. Well, it doesn't matter. Anything. Everything. He is just someone who can't be content with his 'best effort' in any area of his life. Feelings like: "he is a vegetarian because he dislikes the idea of something dying just because he wanted to eat it, without any other energy expended on his part. But the effort he's gone to to make that happen doesn't really mean anything, and doesn't really have an impact on anything else's life," and "though he may be a decent player in his online games, his teammates don't really need to rely on him and could just as easily continue on if he weren't around." Nat simply doesn't feel as though he is the best version of himself, and even though he tries to change that, it doesn't reflect on his mood. Somehow both compliments (he does try and look good!) and insults make him feel worse, as though he's being lied to (complimented) or outright chastised (insulted).
Reclusive: That passive certainty in his worthlessness has led Nat to have an anxiety around people, including his family, who he believes secretly judge and ridicule him. He tends to avoid face-to-face interaction with humans as much as possible by ordering pet care supplies, clothes, and food online, jogging early in the morning, and limiting most actively social interactions to the computer. He does attend physical classes (those are not web-based), but it's easy enough to keep his nose in his laptop. I would like to say that though he is generally unsociable, he isn't shy! He isn't a blusher, stammerer, or stutterer and is capable of carrying on a conversation, but it is a little of a strain on him and not something he does for enjoyment. He has a very minimal set of feelings, particularly empathy, and tends to come off quite flat. [He will be out and about for the purposes of RP!]
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Dark red. Does have slightly hooded eyes, and wears glasses.
Hair: Shaved on one side, layered and combed to his right. Light grassy green that shifts to brown at the tips. Not longer than to the top of his shoulder.
Face: A bit of a long face. Long, straight nose. It should be noted that he has very dark, deep warm brown skin! Thin eyebrows. Full lips. He should be notably (though not overly, think like... any of those superhero movie actors) muscled from regimented and meticulous physical upkeep.
Clothes: He's really into those kind of dumb ring-scarf deals (infinity scarf?) with the little frayed bits of string hanging off the edges. Generally wears dark clothes with pops of color. He is a tiny little bit of a fashionista, but is a little too ashamed to go full bold. Has a piercing in the bottom left of his lip and two in left ear.
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2019 9:15 am
Not so much a critique as some questions to consider —
What urges Nataniel out of the house? Written into his hobbies are multitudinous ways to avoid physical interaction, and coupled with his reclusive flaw, it seems he will not be outside much. This is not necessarily a problem, but it does beg the question of how RP interaction will go with him. Will most/all RPs be online chats between Nataniel and others? Mainly school-based stuff? Is he frequently dragged out of the household by an NPC to be social?
Secondarily, his hobbies read as mostly solitary. Again, not a problem, but it does underline the need to consider how he interfaces with others.
You have him listed as 24 and going to DCU just to take classes. Does he have an undergrad degree? Is he considering pursuing a master's or other program at DCU? Most schools won't allow a student to draw on government financial aid if they're not actively pursuing a degree (master's, certificate, etc). In that case, is he working off his student loans while also pursuing scholarships to continue taking classes? Is anyone in his life urging him to take classes or are they purely for intellectual stimulation?
As part of his Meticulous virtue, specifically the honesty part, would he divulge any alias identity to someone he considers important to him? This may have repercussions if he ever becomes a knight or Negaverse agent. Again, not a bad thing, just food for thought.
And a small thing I noticed: his two virtues tend to wander topically. Implied in them are a third flaw (laziness from not the most motivated and no real goal in mind) and a third virtue (socially aware, evidence from roughly half the profile). I would argue meticulous could be rebranded as committed.
Good luck in getting critted and stamped! I hope this small bit will be of use to you in the future!
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, 2019 10:19 am
Nat is open to online chat RPs and school RPs of course, and he does go out every morning to keep up with his fitness. In addition, he’ll still need to go out shopping for any number of things he might need or maybe he Uber’s to school because he’s late or some nonsense. Though he’s not actively looking for reasons to be out, I figure there’s enough to be gained from just happenstance that he probably doesn’t have to plan to or want to meet new people for it to happen. I am tossing around the thought of a younger dorm mate or two, but haven’t really settled 100% into the idea yet. He does have an Associate of Science degree, and is teeeechnically persuing a Bachelor’s in General Studies. He’s a full time student who sort of fills his hours with hodgepodge classes that weren’t necessarily recommended or needed for his degree. He doesn’t work (and is opposed to the idea that he should), and his parents are very actively encouraging him to just “get any damn degree.” They mean well and aren’t opposed to helping Nat when he needs it, but he’s not really into the idea of relying on them and prefers to stick to his current methods of making money. I did think about him potentially telling someone, and I think it basically boils down to how specifically the question is asked of him. Since he isn’t open naturally, I don’t think he’d just blab about it, and would need to be asked a pretty point-blank question about identity by someone very close to him. It is possible, but it’s also extremely unlikely. Interestingly enough, when I first wrote that trait, it started out as “dedicated!” But in the end, I liked the connotations of meticulous more. It lends itself to him being someone with a specific, methodical way of doing things (he’s routine-based) and leaves it room to not be dedicated to all aspects of his life, as you pointed out! I certainly would consider him lazy in some regards and did think about putting it as it’s own flaw, but I figured it was implied enough and perhaps not something so prominent for me to consider a base trait. Thank you for the questions and your time in reading him over! <3
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Posted: Wed Feb 13, 2019 12:03 pm
Hey Indigo! Welcome to the shop!
Nat looks like a very sweet character (poor anxious guy!) and I like what you've come up with him. Since you're new to the shop, I'm just adding a reminder here (just in case you weren't aware) that if you wanted to power up Nat at a later point in time, he'd only be eligible for Knighthood or Negahood, as we have an awakening cap on senshi (they can't awaken if they're 21 or over!). If you're already well aware, just ignore me <3
But yes!! He looks good to me, so please have a stamp!

A GM will be by shortly for their review <3
((And if you ever need any help with determining what PC games he might be into, please feel free to hit me up! My husband is a notorious gamer and I used to be pretty savvy myself. No pressure, though!))
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Posted: Wed Feb 13, 2019 6:20 pm
I’ll definitely have to hit you up on that computer game thing! XD And thanks for the stamp! I think he’ll definitely go Nega, so no problems there. <3
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Posted: Fri Feb 22, 2019 9:03 am
Hey Indigo! Nat looks great, though it still boggles me that people born in 1995 are so old now...I don't know where time is going, seriously. Congrats on getting him and enjoy your STAMP! He seems like a very interesting character! 8D Welcome to Moonshop!
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