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PostPosted: Sun Apr 19, 2015 8:04 am


Name: Clair Armstrong

Nickname: Clair-bear (Only by his sister and people who want a beating)

Age: 25

Birthday: August 10

Sign: Leo

Gemstone: Peridot

Blood Type: A

Fav. Food: Anything Spicy

Hated Food: Fast Food

School: Works as a mechanic to support himself and his sister.

Hobbies:
Wrestling - Clair grew up watching professional wrestling. He was a big WWF/E fan and in high school he joined his school's wrestling team. Its always been a passion of his and he still watches WWE today, though he'll complain about how much worse it is now while watching it.

MMA - Clair's love of wrestling led him to get into MMA. He loves watching UFC fights. He fights in small time competition when he can and his goal is to one day get into the UFC.

Mythology (namely Norse) - Clair wasn't all that great at school but one topic that always interested him was Mythology. He especially loves Norse Mythology, and he even converted to Nordic Paganism in high school which caused some tensions with his family.

Military History -The other subject Clair was good at in school. Clair loves military history whether it's reading a book on the subject or watching a documentary about it. He prefers ancient military history but he does keep up with more modern history as well.

Virtues:
Loyal -- Clair is not the kind of person who flip-flops. Once he commits to something he doesn't tend to give up on it till he sees it through.

Protective -- For all that Clair can seem harsh or like an a**, he's a big softie around those he see's as vulnerable, especially kids. He raised his little sister on his own so he's really protective of her . He'll put himself in harms way if it means saving a innocent person. Clair won't fight someone he sees as defenseless whether that be because they are a kid or a teenager or they simply aren't a fighter. Even if faced with a teenager on the Negaverse side he would not fight them but instead would try to just send home since in his mind they have no business fighting in a life or death war.

Brave -- Clair doesn't scare easily. He'll gladly look death in face, and he would never shy away from a tough opponent.

Flaws:
Bloodthirsty -- Clair enjoys a good fight, perhaps a little to much. He gets enjoyment out of beating people up, and while he doesn't exactly go out looking for a fight on the street he will take a fight further than it needs to. If he meets someone he doesn't like he's often try to provoke a fight with them.

Short fuse -- Aside from kids, Clair has very little tolerance for people, or things, that annoy him. He's blown up at people plenty of times before and while he can be jokey he also tends to get angry at alot of things.

Draconian justice -- Clair very much agrees with old fashioned ideas of justice such as a thief having a hand chopped off when they steal. He believes that adults who do something wrong should be swiftly punished. He doesn't judge by the law but rather his own ethical system.



PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Scarlet, the same shape as in the reference pic for the color.

Hair: Red, Short and spiky

Face: Oval shaped.

Height: 7'1

Physique: Very muscular

Clothes: A black jacket with a white button-up shirt and black pants (like this)
PostPosted: Sun Apr 19, 2015 8:07 am


Knight Title: Campus Martius, Page of Mars

Challenge: "The gates are open, there is only war!”

Uniform: ELEMENTS TO THINK ABOUT FOR UNIFORM

PLEASE THINK OF YOUR PLANET THEME(S) BEFORE GOING INSANE~!

Top -- Basically this only bare chested at page stage save for the toga-like sash. without the helmet and armor.
Bottoms -- no pants just the red skirt from the pic
Gloves -- leather (sort of mma style) gloves
Belt -- A leather belt with bronze accents shaped like the mars symbol
Shoes -- Leather boots.
Shoulders -- none
Accessories -- cc
Weapon --
Page -- Leather mma style gloves with the mars symbol emblazoned on them, with a leather wrap around his right bicep

Squire -- This kind of finger armor (only made of bronze and with ruby accents where the blue dots are) on his right glove and the leather wrap turns to a bronze cuff and depicts a lion's head with ruby eyes and with the mars symbol on both sides of the head. (added onto the leather glove) (The finger armor can not be used to slash or gouge things)

Spell -- Campus holds his arm out towards his opponent and renders his judgement on those he sees as guilty, this manifests as a coil of fire, starting from the lion head on his arm cuff, envelops his arm he then fires it at his opponent which engulfs them in the fires of justice. (Effect: The fire does no physical damage but the person feels like they're actually on fire, channeling time 30 secs)

Knight -- something like the last one (Hephaisto) only with a lion head with ruby eyes and the mars symbol carved onto its forehead, where the human face is. (added onto the finger armor)

Spell -- Same description as above except the coil of fire now seems to have the face of a lion at the end of it (Effect: the opponent feels like they're being immolated, though there is no physical damage, channeling time 35 secs)
COLORS SHOULD BE DRAWN FROM YOUR PLANET'S PALETTE OR GRADIENT. DARK COLORS MAY BE INCLUDED BUT CANNOT DOMINATE!

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 10, 2016 9:23 pm


Hi Aure, His civilian side looks like a very good start and I think with some more clarification on his traits, I can get a better picture of how each one works. In particular the ones that stand out to me are Protective (of kids) + Bloodthirsty.

While I can see what the traits mean to him, Why is being protective of kids a virtue for him? What other parts of his life does it effect? If he saw kids in war what would he do?

Vice versa, the negaverse is filled with teenagers (kids), so when does he stop looking at age? Will he beat a young negaverse agent??

I think just a couple more sentences in each one will give me a clearer picture of him as a character.

For his powered side, the only thing I have is that the name Aedes Janus cannot be used due to it being named for a Senshi! Aedes, when translated only means house, and really conflicts with the Already Senshi Janus.

I can go out and search some wonder names if you'd like for Mars if you have a theme you were sticking too?

Let me know what you think and I'll be back around after you do!



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PostPosted: Sun Jan 10, 2016 10:08 pm


Pixie Nyxie

Hey Nyx, I changed the name and tried to elaborate on the traits you mentioned a bit more. Let me know if I still need to explain more about them or change anything else

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 10, 2016 10:23 pm


Nope that's all I needed! Thank you for the elaboration! Here's a stamp for you and a GM will be by to finish up!

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PostPosted: Tue Jan 12, 2016 1:17 pm


Hey, Aure!

Holy cow, your guy is a giant! Most of his profile looks like it's ready for a stamp, so I have just a few things I want to look over!

For his civilian side, there's just a few things! Usually the more fleshed out the traits are, the easier it is for people to get an idea for what kind of character it is (and it also helps inspire different things to RP!). Sometimes it gives a better idea of the character if you talk about why a trait can be considered a virtue or a flaw (such as how others would see it as being a positive trait or negative one and how the traits positively or negatively impact his life). None of those necessarily need to be changed, but I just wanted to throw it out there in case it helped you flesh out any future quests or revisions! While almost everything is fine, I did want to look at a few of his traits:

For virtues and flaws, these are supposed to be traits that are applicable in a wide variety of settings, but I feel like 'Protective of kids' is a little too specific and isn't a trait that can come across in all situations. It would definitely fit our criteria if the trait was' protective' and if you added a sentence of two about how he might be protective of those closest to him, or those he feels are most vulnerable—and then you can keep the part about how he is especially protective of children! But I feel like changing the trait to 'protective' specifically might open a lot more doors and hopefully wouldn’t affect your ability to play this character how you envisioned!

For his powered side, most of this looks good too! One thing I noticed was his squire weapon; while it is fine for him to get armor that mimics that shape, as a Knight he would not be allowed to have a weapon that is bladed or too sharp—and those look like they could do a lot of damage! The design can stay the same as long as you specify somewhere that the weapon cannot be used to slash or gouge others.

The Knight stage weapon looks good (as long as the finger armor is not sharp/lethal/has the same restrictions as his squire weapon!), and I love that design!

The last thing I wanted to go over is his magic! While Sailor Mars has the ability to use fire in her magic, Fire is not a power theme of Mars, sorry! You can keep the fire for added affect, however the magic will need to be tweaked to incorporate one of the power themes of the planet (Judgment, War, Spirit). I think you could easily reword the magic to include any of these elements to make it work! For example, 'the fires of war rage through him and his opponent; this will manifest in the form of a fiery vortex he can channel for up to 30 seconds. His opponent will feel as though they are being burned alive, but will suffer no real damage and the pain will subside when he isn't channeling.' Or, the burning could be based on him delivering judgment to them, or to reflect on the spirit of battle. Ultimately you can still have your desired affect as long as you are also referencing any of the Mars power themes!

I am sorry for the wall of text! You have a great profile and I am excited to get it stamped, so please quote me if you have any questions, comments or make any changes and I'll be back as soon as possible!


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PostPosted: Tue Jan 12, 2016 9:20 pm


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Hey Kyu,
I think I fixed the issue with his trait, though let me know if I need to change it more. and I'll try to be a bit more descriptive with future quests.

I added a caveat to the weapon description that it can't be used to slash or gouge others, and when I actually get him I'll make the same note in his journal.

I'm not sure if I properly fixed the magic description to fit the themes so let me know if that still needs to be fixed.

Thanks
PostPosted: Thu Jan 14, 2016 10:04 am


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That works for me! Thanks so much! <3

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