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 Posted: Mon Dec 29, 2014 8:23 pm
Name: Rastin Morden (He's named after a Reaper character I have called Rastian, but much more based on another Gaia character with the same name. Morden is thanks to Drac and I have no idea what it means)
Rastian is a name I made up which has an equally made up meaning: "Keeper of Records".
I suppose for the sake of fun, Rastin could be a diminutive form for Rastian. However, because it's a shorter form of that name I'm going to give it the meaning "To Record" to separate the names.
Blood colour: #3A1063
Gender: Male
Symbol: A book with an etching of a scythe on it.
Personality:
Rastin's a private troll who prefers to keep to his house and home. He doesn't go out for many reasons and makes it a point that he won't be rushed out of his house if he absolutely has to leave, either. He's particular in many ways, espescially in how he keeps his things and will fly off the handle if even the smallest thing is out of place. In fact, Rastin has so many mood swings, it's consistent. You'll never know when he's happy, angry, or sad unless you're close enough to him, and that can prove to be a struggle on it's own due to the cloak he wears. It's something about his constant "poker face" that keeps you from knowing just what he's thinking. Was he just smiling at you or was that a scowl? Does he feel like taking a walk with you or would he rather smack you over the head with a stick? It makes you wonder just how little he needs to be offset, and it all honesty, it's not very much at all. Loud noises, being tugged or grabbed at the collar, bright flashing lights, all of these are things that will drive him off his rocker if he can't get away from them. In fact, even if the books on his bookshelf aren't all aligned properly, it can effect his mood for an hour if it isn't fixed.
Rastin likes his routine and does absolutely everything in his power to keep it. However, being of the dependable sort, he also keeps any promises he makes. Even if he's the most ornery banner maker of the bunch, he'll be there no matter the wind or weather, and he'll get his share of the project done right. Hell, he'll even spend time making revisions until he's assured that everything is perfect. Just don't expect sunshine and rainbows while he's working, or, really, at all. He's there to fulfill a need and work, not be your best friend and skip off into the sunset. That's idiotic. His robes aren't made for skipping anyway.
Rastin doesn't care and it's incredibly transparent. He doesn't bother to cover up his utter distaste and boredom around you, nor will he bother to cover it up around anyone else. Oh, so what if you're a troll of higher blood? So's he, do you want a medal? He didn't get a medal, just unwanted attention that seems to follow him everywhere. He can't fathom why anyone would spend their time fawning over themselves and making a fuss about their blood. It's ridiculous and over the top. All he wants to do is drink his tea, pet CatDad, and be left alone. If you can't deal with that, that's not his problem. It's yours.
However, just because Rastin's filled with apathy, it doesn't mean he's incapable of caring. He's just very particular about what he cares about, with a lot of stress on the very. A huge amount of the reason why he's so particular is because he doesn't like to be forced out of his comfort zone before he's ready. Much like a cat, he'll do anything to get away from someone who's persistent in "suggesting trips" and "short adventures", and will try his damn best to fit into a cabinet if he feels that it's the only safe place he has left. The best way to get him to consider something is to slowly get him used to the idea. Giving him books about the subject, talking about how much fun you've had with others, anything that's done in a calm, subtle manner will not only earn you respect in the long run, but it might just get him to go out and do the thing with you! Slow and steady gets you so much more with Rastin than grabbing him by the hood and dragging him through the woods will ever do.
Also in the realm of caring, Rastin has two major weak spots that can't be ignored. Small children and cute, fluffy animals. He will abandon everything to pet a puppy, chop down trees to rescue kittens, and lead a whole troop of children to safety, it's a huge wall in his defenses. He'll literally morph into the biggest sap in the face of something cute and melt all over the place. This can be easily, and even hilariously, exploited if you ever should figure it out. However, he wouldn't be above smacking you over the head if you lie about three kittens being stuck in a well just to get him out of the house. Kittens are super serious business. As for children, Rastin's got a slight "big brother" complex with the littlest babbins of the world. Kids around the ages of six and under get all the special attention and maybe, if they're super sweet, a hug or two. He's a big sucker for adorable kids.
At the end of it all, Rastin's a ball of emotion who just needs patience, minimal stimulation, and the occasional fluffy animal to keep him from teetering over the edge of sanity. You can't make friends with him if you want to drag him out of his comfort zone from day one, you need to take things easy and slow. In the long run, if you manage to keep that up and become his friend, it will pay off. You'll have someone loyal and hardworking on your side who won't give up on something until it's perfect. Sure, it may take some hard work of your own if you're not used to someone like him, but it's well worth the effort.
Strengths:
Dependable: Despite being a homebody, Rastin keeps his promises when he makes them, even if he'd rather be home instead. Yeah, yeah, he agreed to help you move boxes, he's gonna help, just don't sound so happy. UGH. Where's the tea? He'll want tea. Get him some TEA. Stupid boxes...
Systematic: Rastin gets things done, plain and simple. He'll never leave something unfinished, no matter his mood. He's also good at juggling multiple tasks at once, it's like he was born to multitask. He gets his work done by making lists and pairing up easier tasks with other similar tasks. If three things can be done in the same room in a particular order, it makes getting them done easier, and a little fun if you ask him.
Hard-working: Along with his diligence, Rastin gets things done well. He takes his time with his work and works hard, assuring that each and every thing he completes is the best he could do. From housework to personal projects, you can be assured that Rastin poured his heart and soul into it, even if it was a task he didn't want to take in the first place.
Clever: Rastin's very good at solving problems and finding innovative ways around things. From the simplest hook and line device to full-scale escape plans, you can always count on Rastin to think of something that might just work. And, even if it doesn't work the first time, he'll always go back to the drawing board, no matter how many tries it takes.
Flaws:
Moody: Rastin's a very fickle individual who goes through throngs of emotions at the drop of a hat. You'll never know for sure what sort of mode he's in until you talk to him, and that alone can be a struggle. His hood hides far more than his face.
Stubborn: Rastin's the sort who refuses to budge from his daily routine and usual comforts. No, he won't bother visiting your house for a party, nor will he go out of his way on a journey. He'd much rather be close to home where it's comfortable, warm, and quiet.
Obsessive: Rastin obsesses over little details in things and his daily rituals to the point where it's an annoyance to others. His books must go in that corner and be tilted just the way he wants them, and his cloak can't be tied from right to left at any cost, lest he have a conniption and dissolve into a billion pieces.
Apathetic: Rastin simply doesn't care about what much of the world has to offer him. So what if he's of high-blood? What has that ever gotten him but unwanted admiration? He doesn't care for your gifts, he doesn't need to be constantly fawned over, and he just doesn't care about what you have to say. You're not lower than he is, nonsense, everyone is equally irritating in his eyes. His apathy extends only to the social aspect of his life, not to his personal life. He'll always care about what he wants to do for himself and remain staunchly particular about caring about what others want him to do.
Weapon: A scythe, the metal is purple and the handle is black.
Appearance:
Hair: Black, Like this guy's hair. His hair is covered by his giant hood most of the time, but some fringe shows. Like thiiis
Horns: Standard colors; They're very small and are affixed to his forehead like tiny demon horns. The point turns downwards slightly, making a small hook-like shape. (It's highly likely that they will not grow very much at all as he gets older, too.)
Eyes/Expression: Standard with black pupils; Narrowed in a pensive gaze. (He's totally judging you, dude!)
Skin: Standard gray, no markings, scars, or special other things.
Clothing: Wears a huge, black, trailing monk's robe that is waaaay too big for him. The hood can literally be tugged over his face and chest. This is basically it. Shoes are always optional, in fact, he'd rather be barefoot. Outfit ref, ignore the boots and the necklace. (Note: The sleeves should cover his hands because of how oversized the outfit is)
Home: Rastin lives in the forest in a cabin hive. It's two floored with a cellar door around the back. He uses the cellar for storage, pretty much only if his house should ever have too many things in it. His respiteblock is on the second floor of the hive, while a nutritionblock, living room, and small library/work room sit on the bottom floor. The hive feels warm, cozy, and very open and organized.
Lusus: A gigantic cat creature with huge back muscles, copious amounts of fat, and a fluffy, squished in face (Think Persian). It's incredibly protective of Rastin and follows him everywhere, not that they really go many places, that is. The cat's pretty much the entire reason why Rastin doesn't travel further than the woods because it always barrels after him and picks him up by the scruff of his collar. Rastin is very attached to his Lusus, but is working hard on assuring that he won't die if he walks ten feet further than it would like.
The cat calls itself Chester, but Rastin will refer to it as "CatDad." CatDad, though masculine in appearance, has never given itself a gender. However, CatDad allows Rastin to call them whatever he'd like, which is why CatDad is called CatDad. They can be referred to by any gender pronoun, they don't have a preference.
Power: None, he just waves his scythe around like that old guy down the road does his cane. 8U "GET OFF MY LAWN!"
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Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2015 5:26 pm
Alright! Crit time!
First off, how do Rastin’s mood swings manifest if it’s simultaneously difficult to tell what he’s feeling? The phrasing seems to imply that he’ll display emotions he’s not actually feeling? Or is it more that he goes from being cheerful to being annoyed at the drop of a hat? Are his emotions intense, or just scattered? Are his mood swings something he tries to control at all, or does he just go with the flow? How do Rastin’s emotions affect his actions? You mention Rastin having “conniptions” later in the application, so I’m curious what that looks like and how frequent they are.
I’m really liking Rastin’s attitude towards the hemospectrum. It’s not the standard superiority complex, but still totally smacks of “highblood privilege” in how he doesn’t see blood color as being an important issue. Does he have an opinion on how the hemospectrum has shaped society—good, bad, necessary evil, etc.? Since he clearly doesn’t think very well of self-important highbloods, is he sympathetic at all to lowbloods?
As for Rastin’s strengths, dependable and diligent seem to be covering the same skill, in that Rastin’s a hard worker who gets jobs done. Meanwhile, his meticulous strength covers that fact that he gets jobs done well. Perhaps to further differentiate his diligence strength you could rename it and elaborate more about Rastin’s ability to multitask. Maybe call it “organized” or “systematic?” To that end, how is Rastin’s ability to improvise—or does his ability to multitask stem more from careful preplanning than working on the fly?
I already asked my questions regarding Rastin’s moods, so I’ll move on to his other flaws. How does his stubbornness interfere with Rastin’s life? He enjoys staying at home, so stubbornly staying put doesn’t seem to bother him much. I can see how it would bother his friends, but in what ways does his stubbornness make Rastin’s life harder?
The same goes for Rastin’s apathy flaw. How does it impact his nightly life? He doesn’t seem keen on making friends, so it doesn’t appear to influence him socially in a meaningful way. If anything it seems to make his being a shut-in a more pleasant experience. It also highlights Rastin’s lack of hobbies. What kind of stuff does he do all night in his home?
And finally, imagining a child Rastin in the full-length robes is hilarious. Is there a particular reason he chooses to wear them?
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Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2015 6:09 pm
YESS I am so excited for this! 8D
Let me start this off by saying that the way I write profiles might seem a little odd. I tend to approach profiles with humor and try to allow my character to "shout" who they are and how they feel. So, when I wrote "conniption" it was meant to be expressed in the sense of having a temper tantrum or a fit of emotion, not an actual physical seizure. I just wanted to get that across before I went on. ouo
Rastin is notorious for flipping is moods, so, yes, he can go from happy to "I want to bury you all in shallow graves, you're so irritating" with little irritation or prompting. He is incredibly unapologetic about this and couldn't care less if anyone gets upset with him for it. (So, yes, he refuses to try to control his temper, he really doesn't care) His emotions are VERY intense, but they aren't without a reason, at least in his mind. Like, something that is of little irritation to other trolls could be the most annoying thing in the world to him, which can easily change his mood.
The hemospectrum, in his eyes, is a ridiculous thing that isn't really nessescary, but it's not within his place (or, to put it bluntly, his realm of giving a damn) to try and change it. In all honesty, Rastin doesn't care what blood type you are, he defines you based on your personality alone. If you irritate him, he won't like you, regardless of blood color. The same goes for trolls of his own blood. Do you think you're the best thing since sliced bread because you happened to hatch with purple blood? OH, whooptie skippy dee doo! He's no more thrilled with you than he would be with a broken toaster. Everyone has the equal chance to be annoying in his eyes, and that's really the only discrimination he has. Everyone is annoying until proven not-annoying.
I changed the diligence trait to systematic. However, I'm not exactly seeing how dependable can be the same as diligence. XD Diligence would apply to his task list and the act of getting it done, while dependable is the knowledge, mostly to others around him, that even if he won't be the happiest worker, he won't desert you if he's made a promise to help you out. That's how I see the difference.
As for his ability to improvise, I'd say it's because he's able to get things organized quickly in his mind and effectively "see" a way to solve something, even if the world is falling apart around him. His ability to organize his thoughts helps him multitask, too. "What is the most important thing?" "Can I do this and this thing at the same time?" It's all about organization of things rather than following a preset plan. If there is a plan, great, he'll follow it, but if not, he'll do his best to organize things in a way he can figure things out.
Socially, Rastin's stubbornness hinders his ability to enjoy spontaneous things. He doesn't enjoy surprises because of his lack of experience away from his routine, making breaks in his routine foreign, awkward, and, well, daunting. He doesn't enjoy not having any idea what's going on, and if there's an occasion where he can't organize the situation in a familiar way, he'll get very upset. He likes his familiarity and gets uncomfortable when it's disrupted too much for his liking, which is why he's stubborn.
It impacts him because he just doesn't care about the world around him. I don't really understand what you're trying to say here. XD I mean, it's a flaw because he doesn't care about what the world could have to offer him. He could do so many things, espescially because of his blood status, but the fact of the matter is that, while he could do those things, he just doesn't care about them. Who needs a life of adventure when you have books? Who needs jewelry and shopping when you could make your own clothes? It's all a bunch of nonsense to him and he doesn't need, want, or care for any of it.
Rastin has a few hobbies. He loves to read and will read literally anything. He also likes to make things, like clothes, furniture, and other household objects. He also likes to sew. He's very much into art and literature.
Rastin once read a book that had trolls who wore huge robes and he decided he wanted to wear them, too. He likes them for their warmth, ease, and will use them like blankets and sleeping bags. The pure black robe he wears is one he made himself with fabric that CatDat fetched for him. It's soft, cozy, and has a ton of inner pockets. |3
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Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2015 8:04 pm
Oh yeah, I totally got the tone of the application. I just wanted to confirm that Rastin is indeed throwing actual temper tantrums when he gets worked up. That said, how physical would you say his fits get? Like, kicking-and-screaming-child tantrums, or saying-mean-things tantrums, or like, actually, aggressively violent tantrums? Also considering how persnickety Rastin is, what is he like when he likes someone? Does he treat people dubbed “friends” differently, or is everyone equally likely to end up on the “irritating” list if they’re not careful? Diligence, at least the way I’m reading it, is more about being dependable with regards to the work that you do, whereas systematic is more descriptive of in what ways Rastin is dependable. It’s sort of a given that if Rastin is dependable by nature, that he’d be a steadfast worker. I see now, however, that the point you’re trying to make with his dependable strength is that he’s loyal in addition to being diligent, which I hadn’t picked up on. When it comes to being reliable, what motivates Rastin to help others out when he normally doesn’t give a damn? So for Rastin’s stubbornness, you’re saying it keeps him from taking risks? That can work well, however it’s not working as a flaw right now, mostly due to Rastin’s apathy. The flaws in these applications need to actively and regularly be detrimental to the character’s ability to succeed. As it stands now, Rastin’s apathy leads to him being perfectly content with his life. It’s a fine trait for him to have, but his apathy isn’t preventing him from achieving anything because he doesn’t want to achieve anything. As such, his stubbornness isn’t getting in his way either because he’s stubbornly staying put where he’s content. Primarily, Rastin is able to get away with such an attitude because he’s a highblood and most social issues either don’t apply to him, or would only affect him in the positive. That sort of “not my problem” attitude can be really compelling! But only if the character is forced to confront it and the issues such a mindset would bring. Not caring about whether or not he owns luxury items is one thing, but would Rastin go so far as to forget to do something like feed himself? Would he avoid dealing with uncomfortable issues until they became huge problems? Would he willing throw people under the bus if it made his life easier? As a final note (for this post at least ;P), RP is the lifeblood of this shop. When it comes to the application process, it’s important for trolls to have a reason to go out and interact with other characters. Under what circumstances would Rastin leave his hive and venture out into society—whether of his own volition or not?
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Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2015 8:41 pm
Rastin's temper tantrums are a combination of screaming-saying-mean things and knocking things over. He'd never try to hurt someone else, and if he does, it's because he neglected to think of where something would land when he threw it or flipped it over. Think of him as the kind of person who screams, stomps about, grumbles, and may resort to flipping a table or knocking things off of a counter top. Scary, but not an inherent danger to others.
The way he treats his "friends" is very different than how he'd treat other people. He actually does care for people who manage to get off the default annoying list because they've put in the effort of getting to know him from the bottom up, and that means something to him. They've spent enough time hanging around him that he's gotten used to them and it's like "Okay, yeah, you're not as irritating as I thought you'd be. Don't expect a medal or anything, but if something attacks you, don't be shocked when you blink and it's suddenly dead, because I'm going to kick it's butt."
Basically, friends are "You know not to do the things that annoy me, so, good for you." However, if they make a mistake they're not instantly put back on the annoying pile. It's if they deliberately continue being annoying that they earn their way back onto the list.
You're really helping me think here, which is awesome, so thank you. This is something I wasn't really thinking about, but now that I have, it really to do with the relationship situation. I mean, he likes to work and he likes keeping busy, so helping someone he likes with their work is kind of a win-win. In Rastin's case, to be dependable, you first need to have an established relationship.
BUT, the only loophole I have with that is in the case of animals and really young trolls. Like, I see him being far more understanding of small children and keen on helping them out because they're just kids and they have no idea about the world. Animals, too. He likes small, fluffy animals and helping them is something he'd do without reason. If you're older than him and just being stupid then you're on your own. XD
So, it's easier for friends, small children, and fluffy animals to get his help than it is for someone his age or older.
Not risks, it's much more limited than that. He will stray from familiarity to the point where it limits his options socially. He wants to stay close to home where things are the same and gets overloaded by new stimuli very easily. It's an aversion to new experiences, not just taking risks. Think of someone who's very picky who refuses to eat certain things or go certain places even if they've never been there or eaten them before. That's his sort of stubbornness on a basic level. It keeps him from trying new things and experiencing the world.
I'm not saying that his stubbornness won't change as he gets older, it's actually likely that this trait will change with rp. He'll meet more people and gain a broader perspective and comfort zone as he ages. But, as a child, he's absolutely unsettled by the idea of moving further than he's comfortable.
Okay, maybe apathy is a bad trait to have, I don't know. What I'm trying to convey is that he's so "stuck in neutral" that he doesn't budge for anyone. His comfort will never be more important than someone else. That's why I think it's detrimental. Everything he does needs to end with him feeling 100% comfortable or it's an absolute disaster. XD;
Rastin cares about himself FIRST. I suppose one of his flaws should be changed to selfish, then. He'll feed himself first, make himself happy first, it's his natural order of things. I see him as the sort of person who would buy something for someone else just to shut them up or make them leave him alone. He's a constant ME, ME, ME, but in the form of "I don't care about what you have to say or do, just shut up and go." He never actually says "I am the first priority", it's something he ensures for himself.
However, he'd much rather figure out another way to deal with someone before hurting them. So, no, he'd never throw someone under a bus or deliberately hurt them unless they tried to hurt him. (Or CatDad)
LOL, Rastin will leave his hive when he needs something, that's pretty much it as it stands right now. When he starts to make friends and realize that there are people out there that aren't horribly irritating, then he'll have more reasons to leave. CatDad will be like a giant shadow, though, and constantly try to drag him away. CatDad doesn't like to leave the house either. XD
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Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2015 10:57 pm
I’m totally seeing my mental picture of Rastin come into focus. He’s being revealed to be a much “nicer” person than I’d initially anticipated. It sounds like he respects people who make an effort, which sounds like it’ll be a good buffer to maintain his introversion without being a total shut-in. And just the slightest hint of tsundere. ;DHmm. I’m trying to think of a short-and-sweet way to sum up what you’re trying to say about Rastin’s apathy. If I’m reading everything correctly, I’d probably describe him as… self-involved? He seems to put a great deal of time and effort into maintaining his own comfort level to the point of brushing aside the problems and concerns of those around him—even if not intentionally. It sounds like if he’s made consciously aware that a friend needs his help, he’ll lend a hand, but it also sounds like other people’s wants and needs aren’t something he thinks about on his own without prompting. He’s strikes me as being selfish, but not in an actively malicious kind of way.
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Posted: Mon Jan 12, 2015 12:13 am
Tsundere is actually accurate. emotion_awesome
That's basically what I'm trying to say. His needs are first and foremost, but he can and will find others to care about. He doesn't want to hurt anyone but won't allow anyone to force him away from what he's used to. He'll do those things on his own time and when he feels he's ready. The more you push him to leave his comfort zone, the less he'll appreciate your company, but if you can wiggle your way through the cracks, per say, and hang around long enough, you'll find it a lot easier to suggest something new to him. He needs to be eased out of his little box, not shoved.
His apathy is directly connected to his stubbornness because, once he declares he doesn't care for something, it's hell to try to change his mind. The more you egg him on, the less he'll want to try and the less he'll care about it. It becomes more of an aversion the more it's pushed upon him. This is why bringing up the idea slowly and, I suppose, "covertly", is needed to get him to change his mind. It needs comfort and trust before it can even be discussed.
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Posted: Mon Jan 12, 2015 12:46 am
He's so aggressively dedicated to not caring. :B Do other people's emotions make him uncomfortable? And I suppose to further define Rastin's caring boundaries: does his desire to avoid excessive force and unnecessarily hurting people come from a place of empathy or does he just not want to cause a stir? Also, the way you have to make something sound like Rastin's idea in order to get him to do something is such a cat behavior, oh my god. Rastin is sounding pretty dang good! If you can incorporate the stuff we've talked about into his app, I'd be happy to take a look over it in full.
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Posted: Mon Jan 12, 2015 12:58 am
If they're overly excitable, he gets nervous, which makes him angry. 8U; SO, yes. People being overly touchy or excited or loud, that can get to him easily. Whining, too. However, if someone were crying, he'd be inclined to figure out why first, then be grumpy later if necessary. (I.E. If it annoyed him)
I'd like to say he doesn't want to cause a stir, but it's far more placed on a moral value than it will ever be empathy. He just, doesn't like to hurt people. It doesn't seem needed to him. Violence, to Rastin, is treated simply as "weird", "uncouth", and "something I can't see myself doing unless it's an absolute." So, he can put on an act to scare you off, but it's all an act until someone tries to sock him in the gut. Then, he'll freely give you a smack or two back.
He's being raised by a giant fat cat, it works. 8U
I'll do my best! XD Going back and editing is always the hardest part for me to do, so it might take me a bit. However, I'll quote you the soonest I'm done! Thank you so much for your help so far! <3333
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Posted: Sun Jan 18, 2015 8:54 pm
I added three paragraphs to his personality! I hope that those cover the things we discussed! 8D
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Posted: Sun Jan 18, 2015 9:27 pm
"In fact, Rastin has so many mood swings, it's consistent. You'll never know when he's happy, angry, or sad unless you're close enough to him, and that can prove to be a struggle on it's own due to the cloak he wears. Was he just smiling at you or was that a scowl? The world may never know."
I'm a little confused on this. Is it hard to tell his emotional status because his mood changes so frequently or does he guard his emotions? Also what kind of things trigger his mood swings? Is he just dramatically affected by every single tiny last thing?
"He's there to fulfill a need and work, not be your best friend and skip off into the sunset. That's idiotic. His robes aren't made for skipping anyway."
Quality!
"Rastin doesn't care and it's incredibly transparent. He doesn't bother to cover up his utter distaste and boredom around you, nor will he bother to cover it up around anyone else. Oh, so what if you're a troll of higher blood?"
Considering that Rastin is near the top of the food chain (metaphorically speaking) it seems a little strange that you address those of higher blood when he is more likely to encounter those of lower blood! While I think this is still relevant, I would add something in regards to how he feels about those on the lower end of the spectrum.
"Also in the realm of caring, Rastin has two major weak spots that can't be ignored. Small children and cute, fluffy animals."
Does Rastin have this affinity for children as a child himself?
"Systematic"
Your current description makes him sound more like a completionist. Does he have a particular method for organising how he goes about his tasks?
"Meticulous"
This reads more like hard-working to me. Meticulous implies having attention for detail.
"Apathy"
I'm curious if Rastin's apathy carries through to pursuing his own goals rather than just societal disinterest.
These are mostly a lot of little things. I think Rastin is looking great. I think really the only section I'd like to see more out of is his home. Does he live out in the depths of the forest or out on the fringes? Does he have a quaint cabin or a run-down shack? It doesn't need a whole lot, just a brief blurb for the feel of it.
Finally, does Chester have a gender? I noticed that it is called CatDad but uses a neutral pronoun.
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Posted: Sun Jan 18, 2015 10:10 pm
Edited! Let me know if you see anything else! ouo
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Posted: Mon Jan 19, 2015 9:11 pm
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