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 Posted: Thu Feb 20, 2014 6:26 pm
Name: Anna Jónsi (Pronounced with a 'y'. Yone - zee)
Nickname: Ann, at times but prefers Anna
Age: 20
Birthday: January 4th
Sign: Capricorn
Gemstone: Garnet
Blood Type: B+
Fav. Food: Rye Bread
Hated Food: Most Fruits, particularly cantaloupe.
School: Sovereign Heights Preparatory School
Hobbies:
Horseback riding - The strength. The power. It’s the rush of the wind whipping through your hair and adrenaline that takes over you body. To Anna it a unique and wonderful feeling that is well getting up extra early to go and ride before school. It puts her in a better place, she might even still be smiling when she gets to school. When she is out riding it’s just her horse and her out in nature. It’s a wonder how she can even bring herself to stop. She could probably ride forever with her valiant steed!
Collecting Antiques - Mine. Old. Shiny. Mine. She browse antique and trinket shop. The things she winds up spending her money on are horses and tiny swords. It’s like she is working on some miniature little battleground scene. She would collect bigger stuff but her apartment would allow her to have full sets of armor…. Oh but that would be cool. u .u She’s draw to objects from norse mythology as well. Her great grandmother is from Iceland, so it must just be heritage... (AND TOTALLY NOT A MAGICAL GIRL VIKING. 8I)
Bird watching - This is something she would neeeeeever admit. It’s not even that embarrassing, but still not something she would like to talk about. Anna is one of those people that like to carry around binoculars and put check marks next to the birds, in the books, that she’s seen. She by all means is no ‘bird expert.’ She couldn't spit out an essay about their migrations patterns or anything. She can only member the little facts underneath each picture of the birds. She really loves things that fly. Now if only she could get a flying horse…. not that would be really cool.
Virtues:
Focused - Intense and ready to go. Once she has a goal in mind, nothing can break her from it. Anna kind of has a one track mind when it comes to getting the task done. She just like the feeling of accomplishing something and doing so in a timely manner. If it’s a group project, she would carry the whole team on her back to get the job done. She is just in the zone!
Courageous - She would gladly be the first to run into battle…. or even dodge ball. Anna is not an idiot she just has the will. Courage is just as natural as it’s counterpart fear but something in her just gives her that step to be bold. It’s a think later and let adrenaline take over. She has a thing for adrenaline, perhaps she should pursue stunt doubling or jumping out of airplanes.
Loyal - She could very well be a leader, but she doesn’t really see herself as one. Anna has a strong-will to be the second in command. The one who has to do all the brute work, while someone tells her what needs to be done next. To the people she respects, probably more so woman, she would stand by them until the end. (She believes that woman are stronger and better leaders all around. Though with that said she wouldn't disobey a man's orders.) Anna would be a good guard dog . Strong, sturdy and does as it’s told and she’s fine with that.
Flaws:
Distant - Calm and quiet giant, she comes off as cold and distant. She is not mean. She just usually doesn’t show al lot of interest in people. Touching is something she finds very off putting, particularly hugging and jumping all over each other. It’s very strange and puts her in an almost awkward position. She probably would push someone away if they randomly hugged her.
Lack of faith in others - You can’t do it. Move out of the way and just let her do it. It’s hard for her to sit there and watch someone do something she knows she could do (whether she could do it better or not, doesn’t matter.) Anna likes the goal to get done and if someone is in the way…. she might have to pick them up and move them. She will be as gentle as possible, but being moved out of the way usually bruises some egos.
Unforgiving - She already doesn’t have much faith in others, but if one of them were to mess up or even fail at whatever task they were trying to accomplish… She will forever be disappointed in them. Anna will usually avoid or even turn a nose to them, depending on what they did. They would have to save her out of a burning building or something and even then she would really just be upset that she couldn’t get herself out of the situation!
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Narrow, pale blue eyes.
Hair: Tussled, usually with a soft wave to her hair. Braids on either side of her head leading to a messy bun.
Face: Very fair skin, no markings or blemishes and an oval face.
Clothes: A big sweater with a fun pattern, cut off shorts, black thigh high tights and a cool pair of boots. If not that her school uniform!
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Posted: Thu Feb 20, 2014 6:27 pm
Senshi: Sailor Vales, Senshi of the Valkyrie.
Challenge: “The true epic has yet to be written!”
Fuku Colour:
Main Color: Dark Blue
Secondary Color: Silver
Fuku: 
Attacks:
Sailor Scout Attack: Valkyrie Light
Lifting her right arm to the sky with an outstretched hand as if collecting the the light from above. Her segmented rings appear to have a faint white glow around it. She then clenches her hand into a tight fist, and a small orb of light starts to form a small circle shield. It is about the size of a large dinner plate. It's made of a soft glowing light and is see through, but does block most physical attacks if she can react fast enough. It will usually break after each attack, but whether or not it's hit the shield will disappear in about 30 secs. They can be quickly regenerated and used 3 times.
Super Sailor Scout Attack: Valkyrie Might
Lifting her right arm to the sky with an outstretched hand as if collecting the the light from above. Her segmented rings appear to have a faint white glow around it. She then clenches her hand into a tight fist, and an orb of light starts to form a medium sized shield. It is about the size of her torso. It's made of a soft glowing light, but is starting to look much more stable. It defend a fair amount of physical attacks even if she can't react fast enough. It will usually break after a few heavy attack, but whether or not it's hit the shield will disappear in 1 to 2 minutes. It can be regenerated and used 3 times.
Eternal Sailor Attack: Valhalla Strike
Lifting both of her arms to the sky with an outstretched hand as if collecting the the light from above. Her body appears to have growing white glow around it, too the point it stings the eyes to look at. She looks like a true valkyrie warrior, with large wings and more armor like shapes covering body. Even the wings on her tiara seem larger with the light that covers it. The light armor is just an illusion and cannot protect her from attacks. Clenching her hand into a tight fist, an orb of light starts to form a large shield. It's easily covers from her chest down to her shins. It looks like it's made out of metal, but still glows. Something like this. It will defend most physical attacks even if she can't react fast enough. It would take a heavy blow to break it, but whether or not it's hit the shield will disappear in 3 to 5 minutes. She doesn't move very fast with her giant shield, but she often use it for attacking with broad heavy attacks. Whether she has her shield or not she still packs a punch with her glowing segmented rings on her fist.
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Posted: Thu Feb 20, 2014 6:28 pm
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Posted: Wed Feb 26, 2014 3:40 pm
Hey Yasha! Congrats on your contest win~ Just a few things and Anna will be ready to go!
ON THE CIVILIAN SIDE:
I think you have some typos under "Bird Watching" since you say she could spit out an essay but the other half of your sentence seems to contradict that? Also, you have the short phrase "she's seen" - was that meant to be part of the first sentence, or its' own thought?
For her "Loyal" virtue, is there a reason Anna is more likely to be loyal to
women than men? It seems slipped into the virtue without much of an explanation.
For her "Unforgiving" flaw, are there any was she expresses her dissapointment? Is she even less likely to trust people with things, does she tend to stop associating with them? Basically, are there ways this is shown to other people so they might dislike her for it?
ON THE POWERED SIDE:
Her concept as-is doesn't quite work - White Moon senshi bodices must be white, and Vales cannot have any actual armor, since that is reserved for Knights and Negas only! She can have something like it but not exactly it - but I'm sure you're already working with your artist on that!
Right now, I'm not seeing a direct connection between Vales's sphere and her attacks - however, that could easily be worked into the visuals. Just basically draw Valkyries directly into her attacks, somehow, since right now it's sort of a generic "stun."
Quote me once you've made changes, or if you need any clarifications, and I'll be back to give her another look<3
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2014 1:22 pm
Thank you, and another big thanks for working with me through this. : D @Birdwatch: Yup, oops. I think it's fixed. @Loyal: Mmmn, I hope I was able to explain that right? I just want to put across the strong female who respects other females, as Valkyrie seem to do that. @Unforgiving: Made her a little less likeable to fix that too. :] @Attacks: So I hope adding the description about the horse is okay. I hope it being a Pegasus looking thing on the last attack is okay too. If not I understand.
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2014 1:55 pm
Unfortunately, while there is a connection between Valkyries and pegasi/horses, looking at those attacks I would think "Senshi of Equines/Pegasi" before I thought "Valkyries," and that would be rather unfair to someone questing those spheres!
My suggestion is that while Vales is attacking, she perhaps briefly appears as a valkyrie to her opponent? No actual battle effect, but visually as she's casting she appears to be a winged, heavily-armored, spear-wielding battlemaiden?
Also, could you perhaps be a bit more descriptive about how it "stuns"? Like, is it paralyzing, or does it just make perceptions difficult/make the person dizzy, or something else?
If it's less than full paralysis/can't attack at all, (i.e. only makes the person dizzy/disoriented but not fully incapable of defending themself) it could also last longer than ten seconds, I think!
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Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2014 6:34 pm
I hate to quote you without actually doing any changes, but do you think it would be okay to have the light surrounding her (making her look more like a Valkyrie) to have the shield be able to protect her. Instead of a stun maybe just be able to defend herself with this light shield? Not sure if I'm stepping to far into Knight territories with that. xD
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Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2014 7:16 pm
Summoning up a shield would work, I think! That's certainly not a Knights-only thing. So that would be a possibility :>
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Posted: Thu Mar 27, 2014 10:24 am
Updated my attacks, not sure if the last one is different enough but it's moving in a better direction I think. Just wanted to see what you think! : ]
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Posted: Thu Mar 27, 2014 10:29 am
Okay~ For all her attacks, I think it'd be much better to have a time limit on how long the shields last - and for her basic, ten uses is way too many; we don't really allow more than three. For her Eternal, I need usage limits - and there seems to be a lot going on, but if I'm reading it correctly, she takes on the appearance of a Valkyrie and summons a heavy shield? If so, that's fine! Just need a time for how long the attack lasts!
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Posted: Thu Mar 27, 2014 11:29 am
Mmmn, so I think I fixed some of the times issues. Yeah the last attack is confusing, but not sure really how to order it better. I took out the part that made her armor it's own thing. So I think that might help it, but yeah that is what I'm going for. xD
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Posted: Thu Mar 27, 2014 12:01 pm
Thank you for adding times, but the ones you have set are too long, I'm sorry! ICly, battles last about five minutes - and for the attacks you've written up, I'd suggest 25 to 30 seconds at Basic/Super and 35 to 40 at Eternal? Please set a hard limit, however, not a range of times!
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