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 Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:30 pm
The following are a couple of unfinished poems that I would like your insite on: twisted
Poem#1: I'm wondering in a cave of lust, trying to find my way to you. Traped in this forsaken land, my soul chained to your heart. Thoughts and fantasys of you corrupt my already corrupted mind. Blood from my heart's open sanity inscribes your names into my life.
Poem#2: Walking down the tunnel of darkness, hand in hand with my knight of lust. Seeing those green eyes makes me want you even more. Can't handle this, not doing anything. Flames of passion burst from our souls, filling our minds with only thoughts of each other. Our bodies being embrassed by the love for one another.
If you have any ideas what I could add on to them, please tell me!!!
Thankyou!!! twisted twisted twisted
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Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2006 3:46 pm
They are good but I know you could do beter, twisted
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Posted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:23 pm
I really don't know how to finish them.
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Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 6:58 pm
why dont you experiment with a bunch of different ways to finish them?
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Posted: Tue May 23, 2006 9:29 pm
i cant wait to read them finished.
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