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Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 11:08 am
iMama Harkles
I'll make the edits to the history for her father. And I'll start AS, too. For the Technology Kenjutsu, I'm referring to the techniques I'm going to create strictly from my technology. I have a large list of things already planned out and need to put through the customs threads. The Kugutsu I wanted to include because I'm using weapons that can be combined into puppets and I wanted her specialties strictly to lie in the technologies that she makes, meaning she is proficient with the weapons, armors, and puppets, that are all the same items, but have different forms. As for the container, she is wearing cloth sleeves on her forearms that she hides wires inside of. That container is strictly for the wires only.
I'd recommend making a suggestion for a technology creation type similar to jutsu crafter instead of trying to get the bonus through that one and/or your talent. Likewise Ability Type wouldn't really work for increasing the power of technology. If you're making special skills entirely for use with this tech, I'd recommend either making a style for it, or taking both the recommended "Engineer" type, and jutsu crafter with a dedication to whatever the technique's primary attribute will be. I suspect they'll fall mainly under kenjutsu, being that they're apparently using "Weapons".
Think I'll actually just go ahead and make that type later and see what the crew think of it. I like the idea.
As for the containers, if they're just sleeves holding wire, I'd suggest making them a lot smaller. A hundred feet of basic wire in the real world wraps up into a reel about four cubic inches, and ninja wire is even smaller and more flexible than that. You could easily fit the amount you described in a cuff.
All characters except possibly the council are required to carry the village insignia. I mean, sure, as an academy student you probably don't have yours yet, but it's best to fill it out as a placeholder.
I'd prefer if you had the full descriptions of your benefits rather than just the (Bonus description) bit. Some of them have more of the important stuff in the description than in the brackets. You also only get your first benefit at genin rank. Academy students don't get one yet.
You can use your starting cash to buy any equipment you want to start out with. It's a good idea to do so, because some things won't be available in the village for some time due to lack of supply. Not jutsu though. Academy students get their jutsu from the academy.
Its a place holder for now, I'm not sure what to make her personality, so I'm leaving it in blank for now and as I progress I'll develop it seeing as I'm unsure of how she would behave as a child.
What Village Insignia can I even put?
Depending on what isn't available I'd know what I would buy, but I'm working off the premise that she's brand new to the academy, so that's why I didn't buy anything.
Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 11:34 am
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iMama Harkles
I'll make the edits to the history for her father. And I'll start AS, too. For the Technology Kenjutsu, I'm referring to the techniques I'm going to create strictly from my technology. I have a large list of things already planned out and need to put through the customs threads. The Kugutsu I wanted to include because I'm using weapons that can be combined into puppets and I wanted her specialties strictly to lie in the technologies that she makes, meaning she is proficient with the weapons, armors, and puppets, that are all the same items, but have different forms. As for the container, she is wearing cloth sleeves on her forearms that she hides wires inside of. That container is strictly for the wires only.
I'd recommend making a suggestion for a technology creation type similar to jutsu crafter instead of trying to get the bonus through that one and/or your talent. Likewise Ability Type wouldn't really work for increasing the power of technology. If you're making special skills entirely for use with this tech, I'd recommend either making a style for it, or taking both the recommended "Engineer" type, and jutsu crafter with a dedication to whatever the technique's primary attribute will be. I suspect they'll fall mainly under kenjutsu, being that they're apparently using "Weapons".
Think I'll actually just go ahead and make that type later and see what the crew think of it. I like the idea.
As for the containers, if they're just sleeves holding wire, I'd suggest making them a lot smaller. A hundred feet of basic wire in the real world wraps up into a reel about four cubic inches, and ninja wire is even smaller and more flexible than that. You could easily fit the amount you described in a cuff.
I see. Well I'll go ahead and do some revisions tonight on the profile after I finish work, possibly beforehand. As for the container, it is listed simply that units are in the form of one cubic foot. Would be able to use a cubic six inches to make bicep cuffs on each arm, equaling one cubic foot unit and therefore I pay for the single unit and split the container unit to each arm?
I see. Well I'll go ahead and do some revisions tonight on the profile after I finish work, possibly beforehand. As for the container, it is listed simply that units are in the form of one cubic foot. Would be able to use a cubic six inches to make bicep cuffs on each arm, equaling one cubic foot unit and therefore I pay for the single unit and split the container unit to each arm?
The price given is per cubic foot. You could make it any size you like so long as the price is scaled accordingly.
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What Village Insignia can I even put?
Depending on what isn't available I'd know what I would buy, but I'm working off the premise that she's brand new to the academy, so that's why I didn't buy anything.
We haven't settled on what the insignia actually will be yet. The slot though it just like the "Headband Design" slot on the old formats. It could be a headband, a pin, a belt buckle, a tattoo, or whatever.
We're currently operating under the premise that the village has been recruiting people who want to be ninjas and bringing them in. Chances are said people have had some sort of life outside of the village previously in which they have obtained some equipment, or just that they bought some equipment before coming along. It would make perfect sense for your character to have gotten at least a few things before coming in. Otherwise you might have to wait awhile for a chance to get some of the less easily obtained things.
Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 4:37 pm
TheAppleStar
I just dislike when a profile format uses Japanese AND English terms with no point whatsoever. Such as using Suiton, Fuuton, Katon etc and yet Medical is simply Medical and Null Elemental referred to as simply Universal. It's irritating to see. But, seeing as you dislike it so much, everything will be changed to English terms then.
I have a C rank custom poison that knocks out 40S off that. My math isn't incorrect. I didn't see an area for 'customs' on the profile. The Poison is in my workshop area.
Everything you've brought up is now fixed how you like it.
One Change: Medicine Creation has been traded for another C rank medical jutsu.
We don't actually have any real requirements on whether you use English or Japanese. We just don't have anywhere that officially refers to either of those by the names you chose, so to prevent potential confusion or just oddness it's better to use the terms we do have.
All customs will need to be rejudged, particularly poisons since we only recently completed a system for them. They probably won't be priced the same as jutsu either, and will in fact most likely be priced individually. If we include "Learning" them, or even just buying recipes, they'd probably get their own section in the jutsu segment, like elements and subtypes. I'll admit I hadn't thought of that when I did up the profile. If we don't include learning them though, you wouldn't have to pay anything to be able to use it, just buy the ingredients. (Basically, for now, just keep the money.)
I'll check the profile again in a bit. Let me know in the chat or here or something when you edit the money, if you haven't already.
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Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 4:54 pm
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If we include "Learning" them, or even just buying recipes, they'd probably get their own section in the jutsu segment, like elements and subtypes. I'll admit I hadn't thought of that when I did up the profile. If we don't include learning them though, you wouldn't have to pay anything to be able to use it, just buy the ingredients. (Basically, for now, just keep the money.)
This confused me. I read it 4 times and I still don't understand what you are saying. Either I'm tired and stupid because I didn't understand any of it. Please explain more simply.
Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 5:02 pm
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If we include "Learning" them, or even just buying recipes, they'd probably get their own section in the jutsu segment, like elements and subtypes. I'll admit I hadn't thought of that when I did up the profile. If we don't include learning them though, you wouldn't have to pay anything to be able to use it, just buy the ingredients. (Basically, for now, just keep the money.)
This confused me. I read it 4 times and I still don't understand what you are saying. Either I'm tired and stupid because I didn't understand any of it. Please explain more simply.
If you have to learn them they'll go under jutsu. If not, you'll just have to buy/find the ingredients to make them. Either way, for the moment, you don't need to pay for it because it doesn't yet exist.
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Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 5:52 pm
These are custom Poisons. I understand I have to get them looked at again, but when they are finished there, then what? Are you saying I have to learn them then or just the ingredients when I make the poison?
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Posted: Fri Nov 01, 2013 6:39 pm
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These are custom Poisons. I understand I have to get them looked at again, but when they are finished there, then what? Are you saying I have to learn them then or just the ingredients when I make the poison?
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Well, yes. One or the other of those. If we require recipes, part of judging the custom will be assigning it a price. And, of course, any necessary special ingredients.
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Posted: Sat Nov 02, 2013 8:45 am
iMama Harkles
Currently, "Puppetry" only exists as two universal Ninjutsu, and the creativity of the puppeteer.
Chakura no Ito [Thread of Chakra] Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu | Supplementary Range: 30 Feet Prerequisites: Kabenobori Description: Literally an extension of the Kabenobori technique, the user creates a long thread of chakra from their fingertip, which they can then maneuver and control at will. The string itself is intangible, though visible to all in the color of the user's chakra. The end of the string however, can be attached to an object, which can then be moved about by maneuvering the thread. The thread is able to withstand strength equal to the user's ninjutsu power as related to universal ninjutsu, but will break if it is forced any harder. However, the actual strength an object can be pulled with is equal to the user's strength, just as if they were pulling with a rope. The strings can also be used to lift objects into the air, and maneuver them about in that way, so long as the user is strong enough to do so.
Up to ten threads can be created simultaneously, one per fingertip. (Assuming the user does not have more nor less than ten fingers.) Chakra can be channeled through the strings, to activate any chakra activated object attached to the end, such as seals or chakra based technology. Each string costs one chakra point to create, and one to maintain every third post. This jutsu does not require seals nor incantation.
Chakura no Mienai Ito [Invisible Thread of Chakra] Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu | Supplementary Range: 10 Feet Prerequisites: Chakura no Ito Description: Used in tandem with Chakura no Ito, this jutsu is applied to threads created by the former. Threads enhanced by this jutsu become invisible to the naked eye, requiring extrasensory perception to spot. This is useful in that the user can then attach strings to objects or people without being noticed, and then use them for sneak attacks. Unfortunately the extra focus needed to maintain this effect shortens the maximum range to ten feet, as well as increasing the rate of chakra expenditure to one point every second post, instead of third, as well as two points to activate the technique per string..
This jutsu can be activated with a single one handed seal, but does not require an incantation. Because of the necessary hand seal, it can only be applied to one hand, or five threads at a time.
You're free to make custom jutsu for use with puppets if you like. I simply recommended the kenjutsu because you stated your puppets would be used as weapons, which implied a relation to kenjutsu. The actual control of puppets via chakra strings is ninjutsu.
Posted: Sat Nov 02, 2013 3:07 pm
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Currently, "Puppetry" only exists as two universal Ninjutsu, and the creativity of the puppeteer.
Chakura no Ito [Thread of Chakra] Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu | Supplementary Range: 30 Feet Prerequisites: Kabenobori Description: Literally an extension of the Kabenobori technique, the user creates a long thread of chakra from their fingertip, which they can then maneuver and control at will. The string itself is intangible, though visible to all in the color of the user's chakra. The end of the string however, can be attached to an object, which can then be moved about by maneuvering the thread. The thread is able to withstand strength equal to the user's ninjutsu power as related to universal ninjutsu, but will break if it is forced any harder. However, the actual strength an object can be pulled with is equal to the user's strength, just as if they were pulling with a rope. The strings can also be used to lift objects into the air, and maneuver them about in that way, so long as the user is strong enough to do so.
Up to ten threads can be created simultaneously, one per fingertip. (Assuming the user does not have more nor less than ten fingers.) Chakra can be channeled through the strings, to activate any chakra activated object attached to the end, such as seals or chakra based technology. Each string costs one chakra point to create, and one to maintain every third post. This jutsu does not require seals nor incantation.
Chakura no Mienai Ito [Invisible Thread of Chakra] Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu | Supplementary Range: 10 Feet Prerequisites: Chakura no Ito Description: Used in tandem with Chakura no Ito, this jutsu is applied to threads created by the former. Threads enhanced by this jutsu become invisible to the naked eye, requiring extrasensory perception to spot. This is useful in that the user can then attach strings to objects or people without being noticed, and then use them for sneak attacks. Unfortunately the extra focus needed to maintain this effect shortens the maximum range to ten feet, as well as increasing the rate of chakra expenditure to one point every second post, instead of third, as well as two points to activate the technique per string..
This jutsu can be activated with a single one handed seal, but does not require an incantation. Because of the necessary hand seal, it can only be applied to one hand, or five threads at a time.
You're free to make custom jutsu for use with puppets if you like. I simply recommended the kenjutsu because you stated your puppets would be used as weapons, which implied a relation to kenjutsu. The actual control of puppets via chakra strings is ninjutsu.
Awesome. Well, with all that being said, then I'd like to see what can be done about my first piece of custom tech whenever possible at someone's convenience. No rush. Just want to test the waters on the tech customs thread asap.
Sword (Katana): [1] - [this katana rest upon shins right hip]
Shuriken: [20] - there are 10 in each Shuriken holster
kunai: [2] - there are 1 in each kunai holster
Shuriken holster - this holster is upon shins right hip under his katana
Shuriken holster - this holster is upon shins left hip
kinai holster - this holster is strapped to shins right thy.
kunai holster - this holster is strapped to shins left thy
Item Name: [<# of item>]
The inventory section is designed to account for items in containers. You'll notice the format has one "Default" container listed, with a couple of slots under it. You still have that one in the quoted segment. Anything in that container is actually meant to be added to those slots. The top section is for loose items, such as the sword, that aren't in containers. So, properly, your items would be listed as...
Katana [Sword]: [1] - [Right Hip]
Shuriken Holster - [Right Hip] Shuriken: [10]
Shuriken Holster - [Left Hip] Shuriken: [10]
Kunai Holster - [Right Thigh] Kunai: [1]
Kunai Holster - [Left Thigh] Kunai: [1]
Also, when you edit your profile, please post it in a post on it's own. Took me awhile to actually find it in the quote in your post. Just posting again and quoting me is easier for me to work with in any case than a post saying edited.
Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2013 11:15 am
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His right eye is extremely sensitive to light so while he would only see vague outlines and shapes in a lit area, he can see just fine in poor lighting. The eyepatch is really just dark fabric to reduce the amount of light that enters his eye. While he can see out of it, it's more akin to having the perceptive abilities of a really nearsighted individual so shapes lose definition the farther they are.
And I forgot Medical was counted as an element. Everything else has been edited.
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Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2013 11:35 am
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I didn't see anyone else in the clan so I figured that made me clan head. How does that work in here? Is that at a certain rank or do I have to apply for it?
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