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 Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2013 5:31 pm
Name: Drystan Rhydderch
Nickname: Drys
Age: 27
Birthday: September 17
Sign: Virgo
Gemstone: Sapphire
Blood Type: AB-
Fav. Food: Welsh rarebit, Bara brith(sweet bread), Crempogau(welsh buttermilk pancakes)
Hated Food: Hummis
School: Graduated/Works at the local stable
Hobbies:
Horseback Riding: From a young age Drystan was taught how to ride horses. He likes to spend his time at the stable he works at. He teaches English style riding as well as training others in dressage and jumping.
Dressage & Jumping: While he trains children in dressage and jumping Drystan also takes part in competitions with his own horses. He has won a couple of these competitions and he has even taken to going and cheering on his students.
Reading: Drystan adores reading about the Arthurian legends. He also likes reading books that have to deal with dragons and magic. Anything that is mythical catches his attention right away. He is kind of a sucker for romance novels as well, since he is a bit of a romantic, and the story of Lancelot and Guinevere is one of his favorites. He likes to spend what time he isn’t working or riding horses at the library or in bookstores looking for the latest book.
Fencing: Going to a private boarding school in Wales, his home country, Drystan was a part of the fencing team. He doesn’t do this hobby as much as he use to, even though he is still interested in it and he does fence against a dummy to keep himself from getting rusty.
Virtues:
Loyal: Once you have become friends with Drystan he will make sure that you stay that way. He is very loyal to his friends and would gladly give the shirt off his back for anyone of them. He stands up for his friends no matter what and doesn't like to see anyone talk down to them. He will also follow any of his friends to the ends of the earth and back. While he is loyal, he is not loyal to a fault and will not be loyal to anyone who ha stabbed him in a back.
Modest: Drystan doesn't like to be recognized for many things that he has done well. He would rather it just be said and forgotten. He doesn't like to show off, nor does he like to take credit for a lot of things that he is going to do. Drystan also is modest when it comes to physical dress as well as his personality. A lot of people have remarked that Drystan's modesty makes it easy to get along with him and he doesn't take credit for something that everyone has done in a group. Although if someone takes credit for something that Drystan did, a lot of times he will let it slide unless it happens more then once and the same person does it. He will not normally confront them unless he actually doesn't like the person.
Flaws:
Chivalry: Drystan likes to think in a very old way of life. A romantic at heart, Drystan has taken the view of Chivalry as a part of his way of life. He doesn't like women to put themselves in danger and prefers to risk his own life before they do. He is a gentleman when it comes to women and this causes a bit of a problem when women don't want to be catered to or protected all the time. He doesn't think that women are weak but he believes that they are smaller and need to be protected. When Drystan is confronted by a woman who is determined to take care of herself he is out of his element. He does not change his view but he finds it hard to speak to the woman/girl and he often gets flustered because of it. He makes sure that he doesn't offend women, but he does do this from time to time even though he doesn't want too. People who encourage chivalry can sometimes make Drystan get a bit of a big head though he doesn't like to show it. He enjoys seeing himself as a knight in shining armor.
Over Confidant: Although Drystan doens't like for his talents to be recognized with fanfare, he does know how good he is, even if he doesn't boast about it. He takes on challenges that can be above his level but he doesn't believe it is because of where he thinks his own level is. This has caused him to take on fight that are too hard for him and he has even broken his leg from trying to get a horse over a jump that was too high.
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Dark green eyes that are a rounder almond shape. A very caring pair of eyes.
Hair: A light brown, close to dirty blond. His hair is a shaggy unkempt cut that is slightly longer in the back
Face: His face is oval in shape, he has high cheek bones that are prominent. He has no facial hair as he keeps it shaved.
Clothes: Drystan is normally dressed in a plain pair of jeans and a button down shirt. He also wears loafers.
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Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2013 5:32 pm
Knight Title: Dinas Emrys, Knight of Earth Challenge: “Y Ddraig Goch lend me your power” Uniform: ELEMENTS TO THINK ABOUT FOR UNIFORM PLEASE THINK OF YOUR PLANET THEME(S) BEFORE GOING INSANE~! Top – A high collared jerkin that has a simple white linen shirt underneath it. Like this Bottoms – Simple lace up leather pants. This Gloves – N/A Belt – A simple brown belt like thisShoes – This boot but in brown. Shoulders – A long flowing cape as a knight. Accessories – A simple cord necklace with a copper pendant that has runes upon it. Weapon – Page: A simple pair of leather bracers that has a dragon image engraved upon the leather. They are pretty much useless aside from able to block a few attacks and just looking stylish. Squire: The bracers have upgraded from just leather to a mixture of leather and steel. A little heavier but Dinas Emrys has grown strong enough to wield them. The dragon image is made of steel at this point. Magic: Dinas Emrys bracers cause an illusion that makes it appear as if his skin turns into the bark of an ancient oak tree. This allows him to weather some attacks though as the magic begins to dwindle the attacks will cause the bark to chip and brake away from his skin. It is channeled for only forty seconds. Knight: The bracers are completely made out of steel and the dragon image has become raised upon them. The horns upon the dragon make is so that they can be used hurt the opponent when he hits them with the braces. They are also able to block more attacks, better at blocking melee attacks then magical ones. Magic: The same as his squire stage but the magic has become stronger. His skin forms into an illusion of tough granite like rock, like the stones his wonder is made out of. It can now be channeled for sixty seconds. When the effect is running out attacks that are blocked cause the illusion of the stone chipping away from his flesh. Future Summons: Dinas Emrys summons is Y Ddraig Goch, the red dragon of Wales that was captured beneath the castle that is his wonder. The red dragon is not as large as he normally would be, only about the size of a Clydesdale, but he has a wing span of about twelve feet. The dragon is summoned to help shield and protect those Dinas Emrys is fighting with or who he is protecting. The dragon uses his wings to encompass those he is protecting, the leather helps to deflect attacks. His main color is a deep earthy brown with accents of dark emerald green and gold.
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Posted: Mon Sep 16, 2013 5:15 pm
Hey Bastet, Kao here to do your critque! Lets see if we can get your boy stamped, shall we?
Civilian:
His hobbies look good to me, though the horseback riding and dressage and jumping could probably be combines and simple be called like All things Horses, or Horse Sport, or I don't lolz.
Virtues:
For modest, how does this make other's like him, want to be friends with him, be around him. I am curious how he would react to someone taking credit for something he did. Just a little clarification on the social aspect of this and you should be good.
Flaws:
For chivalry, I can definitely see how this could be a flaw. How does he react when he views are challenge, i.e. woman who are bigger and stronger than he is or women taking offence to his chivalry. How does encouragement of this flaw effect him?
Powered:
His squire magic is a bit confusing, the magic for a one time cast in generally 20 seconds. 10 concentrating and 10 not. The magic has to be channeled, so I'd suggest he be able to use it within his pool of magic. So if he has 30 total seconds a magic and he concentrated for 15 seconds, he'd still have 15 seconds of magic to use. Does that make sense?
The knight magic looks good I would suggest making both aspect last for the same about of time and noting that he has a total of 50 seconds of magic for the attack!
For the summons, just two things, summons cannot talk and a summons can be no larger than an average sized horse, so one story and a 40ft wing span won't work. Maybe a 12ft wing span, seems decent for a horse sized dragon?
Quote me when you are ready for another look!
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Posted: Mon Sep 16, 2013 8:14 pm
Hi there BastetAmun, and welcome to ItNotM! Kaori has you set for the thorough crit, but I wanted to let you know that Dinas Emrys has been claimed in our Past Lives board (basically, who Negaverse agents and corrupt senshi were before chaos). It's a relatively new concept, so it probably hasn't been linked much in our guides, but all of them are recorded on our handy-dandy Master Character List! I did a bit of digging for a replacement and found a few that might suit you (though by no means must you use them, of course): Llyn Dinas (involves an eagle), Castell Newydd Emlyn (wyvern/dragon!), and Tŷ Mawr Wybrnant (a pseudo dragon). My senshi, Nyx, is Gaelic inspired, so it was fun to poke around in Welsh culture for awhile!
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Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 6:13 am
As discussed privately, I will actually be changing Zippeite's past life wonder as soon as I know what I want to change him to, so Emrys should open up as a valid wonder shortly. :>
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Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 8:14 am
Cool beans! Very kind of you, Carneli. heart
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Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 9:35 am
Kaori_luv
Hey Bastet, Kao here to do your critque! Lets see if we can get your boy stamped, shall we?
Civilian:
His hobbies look good to me, though the horseback riding and dressage and jumping could probably be combines and simple be called like All things Horses, or Horse Sport, or I don't lolz.
Virtues:
For modest, how does this make other's like him, want to be friends with him, be around him. I am curious how he would react to someone taking credit for something he did. Just a little clarification on the social aspect of this and you should be good.
Flaws:
For chivalry, I can definitely see how this could be a flaw. How does he react when he views are challenge, i.e. woman who are bigger and stronger than he is or women taking offence to his chivalry. How does encouragement of this flaw effect him?
Powered:
His squire magic is a bit confusing, the magic for a one time cast in generally 20 seconds. 10 concentrating and 10 not. The magic has to be channeled, so I'd suggest he be able to use it within his pool of magic. So if he has 30 total seconds a magic and he concentrated for 15 seconds, he'd still have 15 seconds of magic to use. Does that make sense?
The knight magic looks good I would suggest making both aspect last for the same about of time and noting that he has a total of 50 seconds of magic for the attack!
For the summons, just two things, summons cannot talk and a summons can be no larger than an average sized horse, so one story and a 40ft wing span won't work. Maybe a 12ft wing span, seems decent for a horse sized dragon?
Quote me when you are ready for another look!
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Posted: Fri Sep 20, 2013 3:23 pm
For modest, I would say it doesn't need the sabotage note, its to flawish, just nix that and its fine.
Powered:
Sorry, but I'd forgotten themes and was reminded. At presence his attacks do not fit the themes of an Earth Knight, which are honor, virtue and nature. The attacks most have something to do with one of the themes. The knight uniform, must be composed of colors from the knight swatch/gradient in the knight thread.
I can link you all the knight information threads for reference if you would like.
Also, summons can not talk. Your summons would not be giving advice and/or bickering with your character. They basically just do what you say.
For his attacks maybe he is rejuvenated by his virtue but I don't think the dragon aspect you work. Though if you wanted to keep concept of the aspect, you could certainly use like a mountain, they are very tough and whether most things, even using trees to give him the toughness of tree back/wood.
Also you have 50 minutes for his knight attack, which I think is a typo, even still with two uses at 50 seconds this is too long, thats 1 minute and 40 seconds of magic. I'd not go above 60 seconds of magic total.
Quote me when you are ready for another look!
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Posted: Wed Sep 25, 2013 1:06 pm
Another Adult! YAY!!!! We need more of them!
(Why are all the adults Earth Knights?)
Definitely have this guy meet Shalott!
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Posted: Wed Oct 16, 2013 11:35 am
Kaori_luv
For modest, I would say it doesn't need the sabotage note, its to flawish, just nix that and its fine.
Powered:
Sorry, but I'd forgotten themes and was reminded. At presence his attacks do not fit the themes of an Earth Knight, which are honor, virtue and nature. The attacks most have something to do with one of the themes. The knight uniform, must be composed of colors from the knight swatch/gradient in the knight thread.
I can link you all the knight information threads for reference if you would like.
Also, summons can not talk. Your summons would not be giving advice and/or bickering with your character. They basically just do what you say.
For his attacks maybe he is rejuvenated by his virtue but I don't think the dragon aspect you work. Though if you wanted to keep concept of the aspect, you could certainly use like a mountain, they are very tough and whether most things, even using trees to give him the toughness of tree back/wood.
Also you have 50 minutes for his knight attack, which I think is a typo, even still with two uses at 50 seconds this is too long, thats 1 minute and 40 seconds of magic. I'd not go above 60 seconds of magic total.
Quote me when you are ready for another look!
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Posted: Mon Nov 18, 2013 3:45 pm
BastetAmun I'm sorry too, things happened. RL, my laptop died. Doing this on an ipad isn't easy but I got my desktop working a decent speed finally.
First thing is that I suggest the squire magic be one use for 40 seconds. Knights have a time magic pool, it not so much how many times they can use it as more how long. Because of what his magic does it better to just say he can use it for up to 40 secs. Also for his knight magic, just once for 60 secs is best, 120sec of magic is to much.
As for the bark and the stone, not sure if you are saying his skin takes on the appearance of bark or granite during the attack and it appears to break away, or if its just a momentary illusion at the beginning of the attack. If you could clarify that would be lovely.
Also if you like, its not necessary, but if you like your dragon can have an offensive attack. If not can the dragon act as a shield, maybe with his wings, or maybe breath a flame shield? I'm not sure it would be able to just summon a shield.
His summons will still need to be posted for approval in the summons approval thread in the accepted quest forum even after stamping.
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Posted: Sat Feb 07, 2015 8:07 am
Kaori_luv You are very close, just a few small things and then I can stamp your boy <3
First thing is that I suggest the squire magic be one use for 40 seconds. Knights have a time magic pool, it not so much how many times they can use it as more how long. Because of what his magic does it better to just say he can use it for up to 40 secs. Also for his knight magic, just once for 60 secs is best, 120sec of magic is to much.
As for the bark and the stone, not sure if you are saying his skin takes on the appearance of bark or granite during the attack and it appears to break away, or if its just a momentary illusion at the beginning of the attack. If you could clarify that would be lovely.
Also if you like, its not necessary, but if you like your dragon can have an offensive attack. If not can the dragon act as a shield, maybe with his wings, or maybe breath a flame shield? I'm not sure it would be able to just summon a shield.
His summons will still need to be posted for approval in the summons approval thread in the accepted quest forum even after stamping.
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Posted: Mon Apr 06, 2015 11:35 am
He is nearly there, just two small things.
For his attack, he skin cannot turn into bark or stone, it has to be an illusion. The magic can make his skin appear to viewer as bark or stone and chip away with hits as you want, but it must be an illusion.
Also with the magic pool, its not really a once per battle thing, unless its instant effect magic, which his is not. Not many knights have instant effect magic. So its they can use up to 40-60 secs of magic. Meaning if they use less than that they could use the magic again for the remainder of time.
Basically, Knight Silk concentrates and uses his magic for 25 secs of his 60 secs but his concentration is broken, he still has 35 secs of magic to use.
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Posted: Wed Apr 08, 2015 11:45 am
Hope I've fixed it, I think I did what you said to do.
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Posted: Thu Apr 09, 2015 9:11 am
I don't mean to seem/be knit picky, but the wording is kind of important for knight magic. Just a small change, to say it can be channeled for up to ... instead of it last for.
After that you will have a stamp and will be good to go! biggrin
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