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JellieBoba

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 31, 2013 8:43 am


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█Account Name: Intoxicated Apples
█RP Character Name: Raven Lynn McKenzie
█Nicknames:
+ Rae - General nickname for everyone to use.
+ Little Bird - this is more of a insult. Those who want to berate her call her this. Or tease her. Either way, she doesn't like it.
+ Rae Rae - DO NOT call her this. Unless you want punched in the face. She only let's those she's opened up to call her this. This is generally saved for those who have an affection towards her and she returns said affection.
█Age:
+ Actual age by years - 21
+ Physical age - 16
█Race: Human
█Guild or house Rank: [Do not edit until a guild or house has accepted you ]
User ImageRank:► Grunt
User ImageLeadership:► 0

█Height: 5 ft
█Weight: 110 Lbs
█Physical Description: A pale, thin androgynous figure. She's often confused for a MALE or YOUNG BOY. She generally has her hair spiked up and dye her bangs red. She has black eyes and her whole right arm is horribly burned. She wears whatever she can find and throw together(See the tektek) and doesn't care how others view her.
█Personality:
+ In front of strangers - She's extremely sassy and bland around others. She's extremely stubborn, bullheaded and doesn't put up with any s**t from anyone. Raven does not flirt, and doesn't really understand how a stranger would just openly flirt with her.
+ In front of friends and allies - Still super sassy. She's also still stubborn and bullheaded. But she's more open. Kind of friendly? But still guarded. She gets easily flustered and puffs out her cheeks at compliments.
+ In front of enemies - She's more...Ehhh... Cold? Distant? She can be super cruel, almost sadistic. She takes pride in taking out her enemies and opponents. She doesn't hold back, doesn't find a need to. If they start flirting or insulting her, she just get's more violent.
█Special Accessories:
█Biography/History: Unlike most. She had a family. Granted she was pushed aside by her mother's love for her niece moreso than her own. See. She was adopted. She was 'luckier' than most. But how does luck come into play when the woman who adopted you treats you like a hand me down? She grew up thinking she wasn't good enough, so instead, she found a way to take it out without really causing harm to those she cared about. She got into fighting in the streets. It was a little while later that she got into something she couldn't get out of. She took on someone who was at least three times her size. And in a fit of 'protecting' herself. She lit their a** on fire.

But it didn't go without damage. She burned her entire right arm from the fight, and even though her mother paid off to make sure she'd be ok. She was still shoved aside, for her normal, whiney, selfish little niece, even after discovering a gift that could potentially help. When she was 21, she was out. Leaving on to find her own path, without the golden child hindering her.
█Class:
User ImageSorcerer:► +2 to points to Fire for every 3 skill points dropped
█Skills:
+ Street Brawling - All her life she's been a trouble maker. Who'd surprised that she got into fighting in the streets? She's not perfect, but she's no chum either. She can cause plenty of bodily harm to others, and isn't afraid to if she's cornered.
█Abilities:
+ Supernatural sight and senses - She can see into the unknown. She can see spirits and sense them when they don't want to be seen, mainly. Only downside to it is she gets a migraine immediately. This hinders her in battle than anything else, but it can be useful out of battle.

█Elements:

User ImageFire:►

User ImageCoins:► 0

User ImageLevel:► 0
PostPosted: Sat Aug 31, 2013 9:14 am


User ImageHP:► ❖❖❖❖❖❖❖❖❖❖
( 100 HP total )

User ImageMana:► .۞۞۞۞۞
( 50 Mana total )

User ImageSpeed:► 0

User ImageLuck:► 0

User ImageTargeting:► 0

User ImageSpiritual Power:► 0

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 31, 2013 9:25 am


█Fire Vortex [ Attack]

Element: Fire
Weapon: Whip
Cast to cast:۞ ۞
Damage:❖❖
Side Effects: If NOT careful. As in, she just flings it around willy nilly, fire can and will fall and burn her and her allies. She has to be super focused to do this.
Bio: Her whip explodes in flames and she will twirl it into a circle motion until the fire starts to spread out in front of her like a vortex.

█Fire Dome [ Defense ] █►

Element: Fire
Weapon:
Cast to cast:۞۞۞
Damage able to buff from magic ❖❖❖
Damage able to buff from weapons
Side effects Gets kind of hot in that dome after awhile. She loses concentration after awhile. So it's generally only used to block attacks that last less than maybe five minutes.
Bio: She can raise her burned hand. Has to be the burned hand. And create a dome of fire surrounding her and ONE other person, said person better be able to withstand heat.

█Pyroganger [ Summons] █►

Element: Fire
Cast to cast:۞۞۞
Bio: Can create a copy of herself made of pure fire to aid her in battle.

Side Effects: Doesn't always listen
Damage able to buff from magic:
Damage able to buff from weapons:

Damage increase for magic:❖❖❖
Damage increase for weapons:

Summons HP:❖❖❖
Summons Mana:۞
Summons ability:۞۞

HP stored:
Mana stored:۞
PostPosted: Sat Aug 31, 2013 1:06 pm


Intoxicated Apples


Heya.

Overall it looks pretty good, I like what you've got here. Good handle on the abilities and I like how they're written. Only things of note:

I don't see any kind of weapon skills, but she's a self-described fighter. With the 15 points you have after choosing your element, you could put them into some weapon skills - I don't see anywhere you've used the remaining points. You could put some extra into hand to hand or other "street" weapons like clubs, daggers, etc. Or hold on to them if you want, but wanted to make sure you knew you had more points to spend :3 Unless you added something I didn't catch

The only other thing is the soul-senses. As just a human I would lean towards wanting some skill points put into the ability to "pay" for the special ability.

As always, it's Ohmarruoifdsa's call.

[quote="Ohhmaru-Concoo-Tanoweichi]
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 15, 2013 1:27 pm


approved ( sorry it toke so long )
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