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 Posted: Mon Aug 05, 2013 9:58 pm
 -- I shouldn't but alas here I am. This is gunna be an upgrade quest to my civilian character that's left. Bela KissHoping maybe this'll give me something a little more interesting to do with her.
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Posted: Mon Aug 05, 2013 10:03 pm
Knight Title: Odainsaker Page of Cosmos Challenge: It's a crucial part of the story. Uniform:Okay so what I'm thinking atm is kind of a mishmash of some stuff I found that I like + whatever else the artists would like to do to the design to make it look pretty. I may sketch the basic outfit so it makes more sense if this doesn't make much sense at all.
I want a dress that's flowy and see-through - like this (It's PG-13 I promise) with a belt in a somewhat similar fashion but decorated with stars and in a gold color (it's a modesty belt really) and jeweled(?) gold bikini bottoms. I'd like the sleeves from the lady in this picture with gold starry accents on the cuffs. Then from this girl I'd like the ruffly looking top to cover the chest area with starry accents. The sleeves from the previous picture go under and a little bit above the part that drapes on the arms.
Then sparkle desu and accessorize it up beyond that however you please. The see through dress I'd like to be white I think.... With the ruffly top having the cosmos color to it (maybe pastel rainbowish? Or some color that is cosmos related that isn't used often.) WeaponPage: Reed Practice Arrows with blunt Star shaped heads
At this stage Odain's Arrow's have a mostly blunt star shaped arrow heads, basically everything's rounded off instead of sharp and pointy; and it's nothing more than a reed training/practice arrows that can break pretty easy. Odain can throw the arrows, bonk someone on the head with them or shoot them using her Bow.
Squire: Bamboo Arrows with Star Shaped Heads
At this stage Odain's Arrow's have a vaguely pointed star shaped arrow heads, basically everything's slightly rounded off instead of sharp and pointy; at this level she has bamboo arrows that can still break but not as easily as the reed arrows. Odain can throw the arrows, bonk someone on the head with them or shoot them using her Bow.
-Magic: Odain can aim her arrow up into the air and shoot her arrow. At this point it looks like a shooting star/firework flying into the air, when it reaches a midpoint the arrow bursts into a bright blinding light that covers a radius of 15 foot. With in this radius anyone in the 10 foot radius of the light burst are temporarily blinded; anyone further than 10 foot range from temporary blindness* to seeing stars for a short time after the light burst. Vision starts to slowly come back after the burst of light has ended and is fully back with in 10 seconds** from the end of the light burst. (The Light burst at it's longest can last 30 seconds. Or Odain can choose to break it up in shorter bursts depending on her need.
*Temporary blindness is considered if the target(s) aren't wearing eye protection such as sun glasses - if sun glasses are worn effects are lessened
**10 seconds: is the longest recovery time if a character was closest to the light burst.
Knight: Wooden Arrows with Star Shaped Heads
At this stage Odain's Arrow's have somewhat pointy star shaped arrow heads; at this level she has light weight wooden arrows that still have a small chance of breaking but not as easily as the reed or bamboo arrows. Odain can throw the arrows, bonk someone on the head with them or shoot them using her bow.
-Magic: Odain can aim her arrow up into the air and shoot her arrow. At this point it looks like a shooting star/firework flying into the air, when it reaches a midpoint the arrow bursts into a bright blinding light that covers a radius of 15 foot. With in this radius members of Chaos in the 10 foot radius of the light burst are temporarily blinded; anyone further than 10 foot range from temporary blindness* to seeing stars for a short time after the light burst. Vision starts to slowly come back after the burst of light has ended and is fully back with in 10 seconds** from the end of the light burst. (The Light burst at it's longest can last 30 seconds. Or Odain can choose to break it up in shorter bursts depending on her need.
*Temporary blindness is considered if the target(s) aren't wearing eye protection such as sun glasses - if sun glasses are worn effects are lessened
**10 seconds: is the longest recovery time if a character was closest to the light burst.
Bow
Odain's attacks require the use of a bow, so while her weapons are the arrows Odain's bow is sort of an accessory, it has no physical properties other than that which she holds and cannot be used to hit anyone or other wise attempt to damage them. It appears cloud like and ethereal, sans the grip which when she's not using it, wears it as a belt buckle that looks like a shooting star. SummonType: Ice Phoenix
Description A phoenix the color of crystal, when light hits the phoenix just right it creates prisms of color. (Aka it's a pretty bird)
Magic Odain can summon her phoenix to take damage for her, when it's severely damaged the phoenix crumples into a pile of ash and can once again take damage if needed.
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Posted: Thu Aug 08, 2013 12:15 pm
/looms over thread
---- I may attempt to do some rough sketches soon.
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Posted: Sun Aug 18, 2013 10:45 pm
Hi LP! I'm gonna do my best to help you get Odiansaker all stamped up <3 Firstly, WOO NORSE NAMES. 8D Secondly - as is, I don't think the cloud bow can really be considered part of her "weapon." It's clearly magical, so I don't think she can have it at Page stage! As to it preventing her from having extra magic - I'm a little torn, here. However - if you have blunt arrowheads, you could, in fact, simply give her a bow and arrow weapon under the new rules (and have the bow have sort of a cloudy/ethereal/Cosmos-y look to it!) The magic in and of itself looks fine to me, it's jsut the question of the bow. I think her Summon looks just fine though!
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Posted: Mon Aug 19, 2013 5:26 pm
Songstress Kitsune Hi LP! I'm gonna do my best to help you get Odiansaker all stamped up <3 Firstly, WOO NORSE NAMES. 8D Secondly - as is, I don't think the cloud bow can really be considered part of her "weapon." It's clearly magical, so I don't think she can have it at Page stage! As to it preventing her from having extra magic - I'm a little torn, here. However - if you have blunt arrowheads, you could, in fact, simply give her a bow and arrow weapon under the new rules (and have the bow have sort of a cloudy/ethereal/Cosmos-y look to it!) The magic in and of itself looks fine to me, it's jsut the question of the bow. I think her Summon looks just fine though! Okay! =D I think I have it fixed, if I need to reword it better or didn't fix something right lemme know. ^-^ I basically fixed it so she had a bow instead of a bow ~*~*~magically~*~*~ show up for page stage.
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Posted: Mon Aug 19, 2013 8:14 pm
Looks okay to me! I'm going to hand you off to the GMs <3
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Posted: Tue Aug 20, 2013 6:10 pm
Hey, LP! I think this is a neat quest! I have a few comments about her weapon and magic, but her summons look good to me!
For her weapon(s), which item is actually the one that is channeling her magic? Most knights are typically only allowed one weapon (so in this case it would be either the bow or the arrow and not both). I feel like, based on the description of her attacks, it's the arrow/s that are actually channeling her magic, so I feel like for her first stage it might be best if she just started with the bamboo arrows (or maybe combine bow and arrow into one weapon? Maybe she has a bow and arrow and the arrow is tethered with a 10ft-ish rope to the bow so they are connected and technically one weapon?)
For her squire, I think it depends on which item is actually channeling the magic; if it is the arrow, I feel like if she wants to shoot it she could 'summon' the bow for when she is attacking—or, if you wanted the bow in her art, maybe a similar weapon as the one I pitched before, where the arrow is attached to the bow. Maybe by a magical string or something that would allow her to shoot the arrow and then when she was done channeling her magic yank it back to her bow?
Also for her magic at this stage, because knights have a pool of magic and not attacks the same as senshi, is her pool only about 10-15 seconds? At this stage I think it would be totally fair for her magic to last for 30 seconds (and she can use as much or as little of her magic at one time and when she stops casting it, the target sees stars?).
For her knight stage, the pointy star shaped arrow heads might be a bit of a problem since this might constitute as sharp or bladed (or if she is shooting it from her bow, because of the point it might damage like a normal pointed arrow) so I tihnk instead it should still be at least slightly blunted so it isn't able to pierce the skin. Upgrading the material to make it so it no longer breaks would be totally fine, though! (Also I think attaching her arrow to her bow with a similar string as what I proposed in squire stage would help to make it one weapon without making anything too complicated, but it's up to you!)
Unfortunately due to the changes in the knight magic though, she can no longer have a second attack and instead her squire magic " is now greatly enhanced with a larger magic pool than previous," so she could have an increased effect and duration for her magic pool. Alternatively, if you like the magic you have written for her knight stage more, you could tweak it to work for her squire magic and then just give it that upgrade for knight stage?
Let me know what you prefer or have in mind; if you have any questions or make any changes feel free to give me a quote and I'll be back asap!
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Posted: Thu Sep 19, 2013 12:48 pm
Kyu I think I fixed everything that needed to be fixed; do I need to repost for a mod since it's been soo long?
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Posted: Thu Sep 19, 2013 5:57 pm
Nope! Quoting me works perfectly! <3
And, everything seems to be in order and checks out to me, so I'm going to drop a stamp! Good luck getting her!
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