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 Posted: Sun Mar 24, 2013 9:29 am
 *** The civilian portion of this quest has already been stamped***
Senshi: Sailor Thyone, Corrupt Senshi of Hedonism
Challenge: Join the Party!
Attacks:
[Notes:
- Thyone's jewelry is made of weak gold, which includes the claw tip jewelry on her hands. It is purely decorative and if she happened to smack someone, it'd be like a normal ring was on her hand, not a slicing/blade attack.
- What behaviors the character engages in are entirely up to the player, as her attacks provide for interpretation of how a character behaves when intoxicated/frenzied]
Sailor Scout Attack: Maenad's Kiss!
Thyone blows a kiss toward her target, sending a shower of sparkling gold light/magic to envelop them with indulgent scents, flavors and, most importantly, pleasurable sensations. Much like being somewhat intoxicated at a really great party, this distracting attack hits her opponents with feel-good, often resulting in elevated moods, pleasure, and makes it hard to focus on aggression.
Kissing her target on the mouth boosts the effectiveness of this attack to super level for the first five seconds before fading back to regular strength.
Target: 1 per kiss
Duration: 15s
Uses: 3x per battle, unless otherwise established by ORP or Meta.
Super Sailor Scout Attack: Maenad's Ecstasy!
Thyone blows a kiss toward her target, sending a shower of sparkling gold light/magic to envelop them with indulgent scents, flavors and, most importantly, pleasurable sensations. The increased effectiveness now makes opponents feel drunk with pleasure, resulting in uncoordinated movement, elevated moods, and distractibility.
Kissing her target on the mouth boosts the effectiveness of this attack to eternal level for the first ten seconds before fading back to regular strength.
Target: 1 per kiss
Duration: 30s
Uses: 3x per battle, unless otherwise established by ORP or Meta.
Eternal Sailor Attack: Maenad's Frenzy!
Thyone tilts her head back to howl the name of her attack into the sky and get a real party started. Like the maenad's of greek mythology, this AoE attack inspires an ecstatic frenzy - leaving the location in utter chaos by putting all inhabitants under her influence which consists of wild behavior, loss of senses and complete intoxication. At its extreme, this behavior often escalates into aggression, and allies are unable to recognize one another, resulting in attacks amongst friends, family, and lovers.
Does not effect Thyone, nor those that she takes by the hand to soothe their frenzy.
Target: AoE, travels in 15 foot radius around Thyone
Duration: Affects revelers for one minute.
Uses: 1x per battle, unless otherwise established by ORP or Meta.
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Posted: Sun Mar 24, 2013 6:50 pm
Hey, Indu! Congratulations on Thyone; I love her colors!
I'll try to keep things quick, so apologies for my wordiness!
Her first attack looks good to me, though arousal in the description [and her following attacks] makes me a bit hesitant. Even Ganymede, Senshi of Lust does not specifically mention arousal or sexual behavior in his attacks, and for a PG-13 shop, I think it would be more appropriate to leave that part of the attacks vague. Regarding the blowing a kiss vs direct kiss, how much effectiveness would be boosted if she gave a direct kiss? And does the kiss have to be on the lips, or does any skin contact work? I'm somewhat iffy on the duration for this attack; I think 15-20 seconds would be a more comfortable time limit for a basic senshi [if her attack has the potential to last for a minute of battle].
For her super attack, I'd like a little clarification on 'drunk'; I'm assuming this is drunk on alcohol, in which case I'm not sure that a few of the effects accurately mimic inebriation via alcohol. As a depressant, copious amounts of alcohol would cause decreased moods, energy and arousal. Because this is the opposite of the attack's desired effects (and hedonism in general), I'd like to recommend that opponents stay tipsy, but might instead get more drunk on the pleasure? Such as, they derive more pleasure from the "indulgent scents, flavors and, most importantly, pleasurable sensations" surrounding them, which could then justifiably cause the sensations you listed? Additionally, I think this attack lasts for too long; if she used her attack three times in a battle, her magic would last for a little over two minutes. Compared to other super senshi, this is long time—especially depending on the severity of drunkenness/distraction they are going through. I think somewhere between twenty and thirty seconds per kiss might be a little more fair.
Her eternal attack looks good to me, with the exception that a 25 foot radius seems very large—especially since the attack goes where she goes. If the attack is going to move with her, I don't think the radius should extend to more than ten feet. She's got a minute to chase down anyone that tries to run, and I think the length of the attack should compensate for a somewhat smaller radius.
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Posted: Sun Mar 24, 2013 7:05 pm
Thanks for the crit, Kyu! I am still working out the kinks on this whole "magic user" thing. I'm far more comfortable with weapons!
In general:
Sunny, if I remember accurately, didn't want her senshi to reference sexuality, despite his sphere. It was actually her choice, though there was no issue with it from the moderator side of things. Hedonism is often a fairly sexual thing, and the frenzied orgies of Bacchus certainly were. Though I consider a reference to arousal as PG-13 as all the romance RPs and violence in the shop, I can definitely tweak the language to indicate pleasure, rather than arousal/sexual behavior directly.
Basic - I'll cut the duration to 15, for sure! I was thinking about the effects themselves, which are minor at that stage and don't actually hurt them, hence why I went with a longer one. What do you think would be fair for the increase in effectiveness? I was going to leave that up to the opposing player, but perhaps a boost to almost super level, for the first 5 seconds? Like a BAM of energy. The kiss would have to be on the lips.
Super - I did meant it to be drunk off pleasure, and can make that more clear. Dropping duration to thirty seconds, definitely. Added a blurb about the direct kiss, as well.
Eternal - I'm definitely cool with shorting the radius up. The goal was to create a sort of hedonistic orgy, capable of surrounding a large number of people, but I agree that a radius of, say, 15 feet, would work just as well, considering it moves?
EDIT: Made appropriate changes, let me know what you think. Also because the player in the RP I'm in asked about them, I made a note about her jewelry.
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Posted: Sun Mar 24, 2013 10:15 pm
All right, well that answers my next question; thank you for clearing up the jewelry thing! The changes all look good to me, so I'm dropping a trial stamp. Thanks for your patience!
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Posted: Mon Mar 25, 2013 6:39 am
Looks pretty good to me, I've just got one question before I stamp.
In her eternal you mention allies that she maintains a physical connection with being immune. I'm assuming that means any ally she holds hands with while the attack is under way, yes? Does it have to be held hands (limiting to two) or could allies just be touching her in some way (two holding hands, two with a hand on each shoulder, etc etc)? Also does she have to be holding their hand when the attack starts or can she approach an allie that is suffering the consequences of the attack and calm them by taking their hand?
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Posted: Mon Mar 25, 2013 6:59 am
Good question, Iris!
The intention is that she can soothe them from their frenzy, yes! I made a small adjustment to the attack to reflect that, and also remove the ambiguous term "allies".
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Posted: Mon Mar 25, 2013 7:13 am
Thanks for the clarification, sounds good to me!
You're ACCEPTED
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